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AzizZ   
Nov 24, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Poverty and luxuries of America' - community essay issue [12]

Yes I did change what i thought were fragments and i added more detail to it so how it is now? what does it need?Is there any fragments still? if so where are they? help please i am not to good in english it's my second language
AzizZ   
Nov 23, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Poverty and luxuries of America' - community essay issue [12]

rayray
Hey i did some changes as u said and to clarify what i am trying to write about, is about an issue in my community do you think i am in the right path?

Mahatma Gandhi once said,"Poverty is the worst form of violence." He wanted to raise awareness for the struggles of poverty.Millions are suffering to this day, from this heartbreaking epidemic. Poverty is a crucial issue affecting my community in many ways: kids wearing torn clothes, students cannot pursue their education after highschool, and have to do anything from lifting cases for others or delivering products for others just to earn a couple cents . Putting an end to poverty should be the top priority of everyone in our present day.

I still remember the struggles I faced as a child . My parents struggled to keep food on table. My father was a handy man paid well below minimum wage , and my mother was a housewife so she really cannot help financially . i recall night where i would go to sleep hungry because there was no food.This was not only my situation but it was a common situation in my whole nighborhood which it suffers from. Unfortunatly many if them they still in that situation of poverty and they do not have enough even for a meal.

I immigrated from Morocco to America a couple of years ago and i am now living in the luxuries of America.Advanced technology and the variety of services. Everything is available for all people with different financial circumstances and social classes.I am not rich but i am doing fine. I am able to presue my dream of getting a college degree but as for my brothers and friends back home,they are not as fortunate as me due to their situation of having no money or support.

It always amused me when i see people throw away even the smallest thing such as a pencil when the eraser or the lead ran out because i had one pencil per semester and if i lost it i would have to borrow it from my brothers or friends i think from my experience i learned to treat the little things i posses with alot of respect. Also when the start of the school year you would encounter all the student in their new clothes , all happy due to that is the only time in the year that our parent buy us a new clothes. Lately Aljazerra reported that " The king Muhammed 6 of Morocco sent aid to the Palestian people, to help them in their cause." i am not against that but come on your people are struglen not even for couple day , they are really in need so you should put them in your priority aid list before you think of others

Poverty is a big issue that we suffer from We should find a very urgent solution or we will not progress and our brothers, sisters and kill die of hunger and they will hit a dead end in their education.
AzizZ   
Nov 23, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'Global challenges' - Countries should not isolate themselves [2]

bayron

Nowadays there are different methods of governing countries. Some countries use the method of isolation instead of co- operation with other countries. However, lets discuss why the engagements between countries are such important.

Firstly, there are several global challenges like Global Worming, economy crises and etc., which can not be regulated by each country separately. Actually this kind of global problems must be confronted by the entire world.

Secondly , international air transportation network based on close co- operation of countries. So isolation policy of one country may destroy the transportation activity and will impacted the economy of other countries .

Finally , there are many starving countries in the world. Mentioned countries because of their geographical and social conditions are not able to manage even daily meal problem without other countries support. According to humanity principals of UN " developed countries must help and not isolate the poor countries."

In conclusion we can refer to a popular saying that one swallow cannot make summer. So one country cannot survive and has success alone.
AzizZ   
Nov 23, 2012
Undergraduate / Adobe Essay, something I did that mad me stand out [2]

Everyone has a unique personality, a talent with interest and life- surviving skills to stand out from the crowd. Personally, I feel fortunate to have theopportunitiesopportunity to experience and explore this colorful life with my passionate interest and my own belief

AzizZ   
Nov 23, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Poverty and luxuries of America' - community essay issue [12]

Thank you for revising my essay and about your question if the essay is finished no i still need to break it apart to three body paragraph and close it wotj a conclusion any help on that ill apreciate it i suck in english
AzizZ   
Nov 22, 2012
Student Talk / I AM TIRED OF LEANING. [5]

Because thats the only way people could make diffrence in their personalities
AzizZ   
Nov 22, 2012
Student Talk / The aim of life [56]

Hi Ahmad.
I see that you are very good in english i need your revising whati wrote about poverty please do thank you in advance
AzizZ   
Nov 22, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Poverty and luxuries of America' - community essay issue [12]

I want to write about poverty and how people still suffers from it either back in my country or here in Los Angeles where i live at this is so far what i wrote any correction or addition please do help me

Mahatma Gandhi once said,"Poverty is the worst form of violence" he wanted to raise awarnes for the struggles of poverty. Millions are suffering to this day, from the heartbreaking epidemic. poverty is something that is affecting many country in the world. Putting an end to poverty should be the top priority of everyone in our present day.

I moved to America couple years ago and i am living in the luxuries of America.Advanced technology to an execes of resources that are available. I am not rich but i am ok , i am able to go to school but my brothers and friends can't i still remmeber the struggles i faced as a child. My parents strugles to keep food on table. Father was a handy man paid well below minimum wage , my mother wasn't working. i recall night where i would go to sleep hungry because there was no food. It always amused me when i see peoply throw even the smallest thing such as a pencil when the eraser or the lead ran out because i had one pencil per semester and if i lost it i would have to borrow it from my brothers or friends i think from my experience i learned to treat the little thingd i posses with respect
AzizZ   
Nov 22, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Poverty and luxuries of America' - community essay issue [12]

My instructer assigned us to write about an issue that the community suffer from or worry about. I wrote about homelessness by she refuse to take it .she said i have to write about something very close to me like problems with my neighbors ( the drink or something ) i am big time confused i dont know what to write about. Any suggestions please do i need to turn in this paper its the last chance i have to get my points

Thank you

And Happy ThanksGiving
AzizZ   
Nov 19, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Homelessness, a social problem' - Issues in community essay [9]

This is so far what i wrote please any suggests if the essay is complete or need any gramatically or detail changed
THank you in advance

One of the major problems that a community suffers from is homelessness, which It's a condition of people who lack regular access to housing. According to the institute for the study of Homelessness and Poverty at Weingart Center, an estimated 254,000 men, women and children experience homelessness in Los Angeles County during some part of the year and approximately 82,000 people are homeless on any given night, and is caused by several factors such as mental illness, drug abuse, physical or sexual abuse, and simply not having enough money

People who have complex life issues related to mental illness and of substance use are the most common people who tend to be homeless. Serious mental illnesses, some caused from substance abuse can disrupt people's ability to carry out essential aspects of daily life, such as a job, self care and household management. Mental illnesses may also prevent people from forming and maintaining stable relationships or cause people to misinterpret others' guidance and react in an angry manner. This often results in pushing away caregivers, family, and friends who may be the force keeping that person from becoming homeless.

Also Abuse and assault seem to be silent features of homeless. Studies have consistently found, in the histories of both individuals and families who are homeless, high rates of physical and sexual abuse in childhood, frequent foster care and other out of-home placements, and a variety of other family disruptions. Those constantly getting assaulted by their families may choose to run away and seek refuge in the streets rather than accept a life of daily beatings and rapes.

Finally, the most important reason why people become homeless could be due to the unavailability of affordable housing for low income people. This fact shows that people tend to become homeless out of unavoidable situations. There are people who do have work but they earn too little to pay for rent, electricity, water, and other housing expenses. If a person loses his job, then they obviously have no way to pay for anything at all.

All in all, homelessness is a growing issue and requires a social action to overcome the unfairness that those people suffer from. Either by building affordable housing units to low income people they can afford. Protecting children and women from the abuse they may get exposed to, if so trying to help and guide them in the right path. Lastly help our community by having program that help addicted people to overcome their addiction and help the mental illness people by having affordable health care programs
AzizZ   
Nov 18, 2012
Writing Feedback / Description of a friend - The genius [7]

Salam Alaikon A khay
I Have only one suggesten in the intrudoction you shift from I to You and in what I know it's confusion so try to nuse the same subject

and allah almo3in
AzizZ   
Nov 17, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Homelessness, a social problem' - Issues in community essay [9]

My instructor assigned us to write about an issue that the community suffer from or worry about. Any suggestions how to start an essay about this topic or ideas.

Hey Everyone

I Have this paper due tomorrow and so far what I have this( Essay Below) please any help in organizing it and adding any detail and if there is any grammar error please help revise thank you in advance

Homelessness , a social problem that my community suffers from. It's a condition of people who lack regular access to housing and that comes back

to several factor as mental illness or abuse of drugs, sexually or physically abuse, and for simply been poor.

People who have complex life issues related to mental illness and of substance use are the most common people who tend to be homeless first because they can't hold a study job so they can't afford paying rent

The other reason that led to homelessness is the sexually and physically abuse that people suffers from in their own families, their own houses, maybe from the father, the mom , the wife and people who tend to encounter in those situation are especially among teenagers and women so their only escape from that neglecting is to run away from home and sick refuge in the streets where they can feel free

Finally, the most important reasons why people become homeless could be due to the unavailability of affordable housing unit for low income people. This fact show that people who do become homeless is because if a unavoidable situation. Those are people who do have work but they just can't find the one that pays enough to cope with the housing payment and its expenses .Or sometimes people lose their job and can't pay mortgages or rents no more so they end up living in the street and these causes cannot be prevented .

All in all, homelessness is a growing issue and requires a social action to overcome the unfairness that those people suffer from. Either by building affordable housing units to low income people, they would afford. Protection our children and women from the abuse they may get exposed to, if so trying to help and guide them in the right path. Lastly help our community by having program that help addicted people to overcome their addiction and help the mental illness people by affording a health care program.
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