Undergraduate / I will never feel lonely; Why Carleton ? [3]

hello guys! i'm applying to Carleton now. Please help with my why essay!!! I feel hard to detect its grammatical errors or contextual coherency etc.. I'll help you back before long!!

Why are you interested in Carleton College? （250 word limit）
Carleton is the only liberal arts college that I apply to. Besides its close-knit student body and top teaching quality, Carleton steps further by offering abundant course choices and hands-on opportunities that I yearn for. Different from schools in big cities, it has an advanced emphasis on sustainability and close relationships with neighbors in Northfield. I believe that I would gain both the best liberal arts education and social engagement here.

My interest in economics started from my parents' electronic components wholesale shop, and was deepened when I could explained their perfectly competitive market with microeconomic modelings. I wish to explore the organization of firms and their social impact at Carleton.The three-term schedule grants me a strong focus on both entrepreneurship and other interdisciplinary areas such as behavioral economics and neuroscience. I became interested in the interrelation between social background and economy after visiting financial agencies in my Hong Kong internship, and the Seminar in Cambridge program seems the ideal opportunity to explore the contemporary British economy and examine theories in real-world applications.

Community is also an important part of me. The Lighten Up garage sale of ACT resonates with my passion for volunteerism, because I will contribute to the sustainable life in Northfield while also observe how local nonprofit agencies operate. Even far away from home, I will never feel lonely. I'm here to challenge with other aspirants, so why not fly a frisbee instead of basketball, and try a broomball game when the Bald Spot is covered with snow?

Undergraduate / Economics interest + how to pursue at USC--USC supplement [5]

Hello guys~I'm rushing to the application deadline on 15th January, and I'll appreciate all your advice on how to make this draft more persuasive and coherent!!! Good luck with all your applications~~

Describe your academic interests and how you plan to pursue them at USC. Please feel free to address your first- and second-choice major selections. (250 words limit)

My fascination with economics originated from my parents' electronic components wholesale company. Their acuteness of attracting customers and deciding which mobile phone models to sell always sparked my curiosity. When I studied AP Microeconomics, I was excited to explain the apparently simple buy-and-sell activity with cost and revenue curves in perfectly competitive markets. Their striving to explore the latest products helped prevent them from becoming a price acceptor controlled by supply and demand. Learning economic modeling has cultivated me to analyze the backgrounds and influences of business organizations.

When I read about behavioral economics, I thought of my irrational anticipation as I mocked trading in bullion market. Behavioral economics' approach to disprove that we were ideally rational introduced me to the human aspects of economics. In order to understand the decision-making process inlaid in economic activities, I hope to pursue the Consumer Behavior minor and gain a holistic understanding of the factors that deviate us from being economic men.

Before furthering these interests at Dornsife, I should first transition into a researcher by attending a First-Year Investigation course. Starting from the broad exploration of Core Curriculum, I look forward to applying new understanding of western culture and society to my international trade related electives. The Los Angeles Behavioral Economics Lab will be my second classroom to hone my ability to test behavioral hypotheses. In addition, I will join the Joint Educational Project to observe local agencies and apply organizational theories. In general, I find USC's diverse campus the best place to gain a comprehensive and international perspective.

Undergraduate / 'Rise attracts me with its copious research devotion...' The happiest students - Why Rice [6]

Here's my Why rice essay, please tell me how to be more persuasive with my contents. Any suggestion is deeply appreciated! Happy new year's eve!!

What motivated you to apply to Rice University? (200 word limit)

Rice attracts me with its copious research devotion coupled with close student-faculty connection. Designing in groups at the wonderful Oshman Engineering Design Kitchen right on the intro course enables me to quickly engage with peers. I will also establish lifelong friendship with professors when we collaborate in accessible research centers.

Besides engineering, I'm also interested in commercializing technology to solve social problems such as brain injury. Rice's current efforts to encourage flexible distribution allows me to explore Economics and Neuroscience. The track of Natural Science and Engineering in Neuroscience Program will definitely help establish a strong focus. Although not located in the heart of Houston, Rice is close enough that I can witness real-world problems in technological startups through Center of Civic Engagement.

Surrounded by the "happiest students" throughout the world, I will immediately feel at home, because in my specific College I will be welcomed to share its spirits in O-Week, participate in intramural basketball, and throw water balloon at the Founder's Court. I believe all these opportunities will prepare me to become an owl at Rice, possessing unconventional wisdom, and soaring through the universe of challenges.

Undergraduate / "It immediately excites me..." Business Institutions Program - Why Northwestern? [3]

It's my final draft, and please help me with the fluency and the contents please~It's due in two days, any help will be appreciated! thanks:)

What are the unique qualities of Northwestern - and of the specific undergraduate school to which you are applying - that make you want to attend the University? In what ways do you hope to take advantage of the qualities you have identified?(250 limit)

It immediately excites me when i imagine sitting on the lawn beside Lake Michigan and discussing with my study groups. Northwestern students seems to stimulate a desire for knowledge everywhere. I will admire the artistic genre of Gothic and modernistic architecture when I walk along the tree-lined and reflective campus, not to mention peers with diverse backgrounds and accessible advisers in first-year seminar to research with. It's the best combination of liberal arts education and abundant opportunities, with an emphasis on people's connection. These are all I admire as an international student.

I plan to major in Economics at Northwestern. Only with the quarter system can I explore courses like psychology, biology and even in McCormick Engineering School, and finally design my best curriculum combination. After I witnessed the operations of my parents' electronic components company, I became interested in technology market and its social background. The Weinberg College's Business Institutions Program can best complement my focus by analyzing different organizational approaches. Having acquired interdisciplinary theories in the first two years, I wish to join the Chicago Field Studies Program to apply them in workplace and discuss in seminars with other aspirants.

Life at Northwestern is full of collaboration and shared enthusiasm. I can organize an intramural basketball team, be a vocalist in Purple Haze or even plan for one of the largest student-run Dance Marathon. Where else could I find such an ideal pathway to grow both academically and personally?