Research Papers / Agbado, an outskirts of Lagos [2]

Prompt: describe the environment you're raise, community, house, family etc and how it contributed to who you're.

Did I answered the prompt? Any error?

Agbado Ijaiye, a community commonly referred to as an outskirts of Lagos. The community has limited resources, no accessible public library, no well funded public school and academics enhancing programs. My school is either with no well equipped laboratory, no library for students to have access to academics materials and there is no reading room for students to study during leisure time.

Speeches / English language status in your country and note making for students good academics performance [2]

I am trying to improve my discuss/explain skills. While trying these are what I came up with. Any review/suggestion/how to improve/error?

Topic: explain the reason for the high status the English language has enjoyed in your country.
In this era of globalisation, where most parts of the world use English as a medium of communication and international relationship. My country like every other countries do not want to be left out of this rapid globalisation and transformation. My country wants to have a say in the world global market where English is widely regarded.

In conclusion, English has been enjoying high status in my country because it is our adopted language and it well regarded through the world.

Topic: note making/taking is a prerequisite for a good academics performance of students in tertiary institution.
Human brain is capable of holding slightest information but when information are not noted it becomes waste. In a tertiary institution atmosphere where lecturers dictate information, students end up assimilating little of the information being passed. Making note would give the students the opportunity to discover information that were mistakenly omitted by the lecturer or the ones they missed while the lecturer was dictating.

Making note gives opportunity to better review, further review and create a better atmosphere for study.

-E. Adeyemi

Undergraduate / My effectiveness of time management [5]

Please is this essay okay?

Prompt: Tell us more about one of the activities you listed above, explaining what your goals were, what you did to pursue them, the results achieved, and what you learned in the process. (maximum 200 words)

Being one of the two students that were asked to represent our school in Junior Engineers and Technicians (JET) competition hosted by Lagos state ministry ministry of education. My goal was to promote the name of my school and set standards for the eminent and current students as it was towards my high school graduation. In pursuing this goal, I backed up the representation call with studying, usual night reading and practising of questions to broaden my knowledge.

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Scholarship / Education, a tool for altering change. [5]

Vangiespen, here is the new thread. I hope this one goes a long a way in answering the prompt. I changed the font of the key words I used in prompt.

Prompt: Story- write on a topic that is Important you and reflects who you are.

*- Here is a new introductory paragraph, I intend writing "Education" as a topic that is important to me and reflects who I am (Someone that wants to make tangible change through education)

*- I left second paragraph because this is a scholarship and other essays didn't provide space to express my financial background and need for a financial support.

*- conclusive paragraph, I try to describe how education reflects who I am. Good? What do you feel?

I believe that education is a tool Africa needs to alter tangible change, economical and technological. From elementary school, I always thought education is just going to school, learning and graduating. But as I am getting matured, I came to realised that education transcends the classroom and graduation. I now know that education is a tool, a tool used by great men to alter change. So, if I happen to describe myself. I will simply say "education craver" I have been craving for education right from my childhood, even when I don't know its true definition. Recounting the boundless struggles, rigors and challenges that bound my dreams of acquiring education, I am always motivated to strive and do more.

Fourteen year ago when my father lost his job and my mother was unemployed. Things were so difficult that my siblings and I, had no hope of acquiring formal education, so we were homeschooled. But my mother, who didn't had the opportunity to went to school and don't wants her children to encounter same problems she encountered, she had to ventured into selling of plucked mangoes on the street and combing working as a domestic worker in wealthy people's home, to enrolled us into free public school where I completed my elementary and secondary education.

Having father who doesn't have a degree to search for job nor have materials properties to give to his children. But he thought of education as the best legacy he can give to us, to sustain us throughout our lives, with this urge he joined a group of market workers just to support our education and make ends meet. Fortunately, his perseverance paid off when someone introduced him to cab work, where he works as a cab driver and makes cash delivery daily.

Apart from how education has shaped my intelligence and competency. After graduation from high school, the vision of acquiring tertiary education looks blur but I recounted how my parents used to tell us that their lack of education limited their effort in live. I stood positive and started working as a sales person to put up savings for my own educational needs and helping my family with our immediate needs. Initially I planned to work for many years to put up funds for my education, figuring out perfect balance between work and academics by engaging in tutoring in my leisure time, thereby renewing my academic stands. But I now believe that God made me found the X scholarship as a way of compensating my perseverance.

All these rigors and orientations have shaped my overall sense of future direction, influence my hope for the future and it has made me realised how education is important to me, my community, my country and a Africa as a whole and how it will make me stands as the pinnacle of hope for my community, Nigeria and Africa as a whole, to alter significant changes technological, economical and empower me to liberate my community from influx poverty. Education, an important tool to me.

Undergraduate / Discovery of my potential. Luckily my practice hits perfection, after the third term I was promoted. [12]

Hello, please help me with check this out. Did my essay answer the prompt? Any grammar error? This is a first draft. Thanks

Prompt: tell us about an event in school or out side, that gave you a rethink or change or perspective, what impact has this had on you?

I sat down in an empty class with my first term report in my hands. My mind was clouded with darkness and the thought that ran through my was "why am I in science class". As I couldn't resist the thought of failing mathematics, a subject I must passed before I could be promoted. I stood, kept my report under my uniform and walked toward the door, I headed home hiding my report from other students.

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Undergraduate / Rewards of my continued efforts [5]

Hi, any help on grammar error? Or awkward sentences? Thanks

prompt: How I responded to a significant challenge I encountered and what I learned in the process.

As I walked up the stage, my legs felt cramped, as if my legs had a case of acute arthritis, all because of a challenging tools display, but in order to satisfy my guts, that I was scheduled to present the technical drawing tools to students on the assembly ground. I ignored all the eyes on me and the fear in my mind, I started delivering the speech with my voice trembling and hands shaking.

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