Writing Feedback / Should children be educated during their free time? [2]

IELTS W2

Some people think the children's free time must include educational activities otherwise they will waste their time.
What is your opinion?

Some members of the community argue that children should be educated even in their free time. I tend to agree with this point of view. In my opinion, childhood is the most important stage of human development, during which the child learns virtually from everything - be it text books or games.

According to scientists, children have to be taught almost all the time, because the childhood is the time when the most significant processes in their lives occur.

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Writing Feedback / To look after the elderly - responsibility of families or the government? [2]

IELTS WRITING 2:

People are now living longer than ever before and many old people are unable to look after themselves. Some people believe that it is responsibility of families to look after the elderly, while others say governments should provide retirement homes for them where they can be looked after properly. DISCUSS.

There are a lot of discussion on how to keep elderly people under supervision. While some people suggest that the government is responsible for keeping an eye on them, others argue these are their families that should support old people.

In many countries, it is believed that the families of the elderly are morally obliged to look after old people if they could financially afford it. For example, in Russia, if people who live above subsistence level accommodate their parents in retirement homes, they are considered to show disrespect for their progenitors.

Writing Feedback / More parents start concerning about the possible negative effects of the computers on their children [3]

Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children.
Do you agree or disagree?

A computer has recently become an indispensable part of modern people's lives. As it more encroaches on our children's time, more parents start concerning about the possible negative effects of the device. I agree with those who argue that a computer has a number of negative impacts on our offsprings; however, I do not think that their number outweighs the number of positive effects.

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Writing Feedback / //IELTS-1// the table and charts below - destination and employment of UK graduates [2]

The table and charts below provide information about the destinations and employment of UK first degree holders.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The breakdown illustrates the employment rate and the wage range of people after they finished their Bachelor's degrees. The percentage of employed and not employed graduates is reported in the table, while the salaries of those employed are presented in the pie charts.

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Writing Feedback / Car ownership, public transport and environment protection - Ielts2 [2]

Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use.
What are your views?

With the enormous spread of private cars, people find themselves in front of a sensitive problem: should car ownership be restricted? From my perspective, the efforts to control the use of car will face reasonable obstacles; however the control needs to be assumed, at least partly.

Admittedly, it is impossible to completely change people's driving habits. Today, a car is something on which citizens rely heavily. First, it is simply the most comfortable and versatile private vehicle. In contrast with buses and subway trains, which go only to scheduled places and at a scheduled time, a car provides accessibility to a large amount of destinations and opportunity to be independent from the schedule. Furthermore, when it comes to trips between cities, driving private car turns out to be less expensive than using the services of public transportation.

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Writing Feedback / Ageing population worldwide in 2000 and predictions for 2050. IELTS-1 [2]

The chart below gives information about the ageing population worldwide in 2000 and makes predictions for 2050
Summaries the information below by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates figures regarding the change of the percentage of population aged 60 and over between 2000 and 2050.

Overall, the number of elderly people is expected to grow in all parts of the world, with the world total's index rising from 10 per cent to over 20 per cent. It is noticeable that while the pattern is similar in all continents, the degree of change varies.

A closer look at the data reveals that Europe, North America and Oceania contain the biggest percentages of elderly people, with the figures ranging from 20 to 13 per cent respectively. Predictions show that the continents will remain its leading positions in the future: in Europe, North America and Oceania those percentages will climb up to 35%, 27%, and 24% accordingly. In this respect, Latin America, Asia, and Africa have the least proportions of population aged 60 and over. While the percentages of the leading countries are above 10%, Asia, Africa, and Latin America have not exceeded this mark.

However, those three parts of the world are expected to present the most dramatic changes in the figures. It is predicted that by 2050, the figures will increase almost threehold in Asia and Latin America; in Africa, they will more than double.

Although there is a clear upward trend in this age group all around the world, ageing citizens are expected to make up less than half of the population in the next 50 years.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS - governments subsidize museums, theaters and other arts, and it concerns many people. [3]

Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Today, the fact that governments subsidize museums, theaters and other arts concerns many people. One may hear indignant public claiming that authorities should stop such investments completely and redirect those money on public needs. As for me, I find such exclamations a bit simplistic and suggest that this problem is complex and multi-dimensional.

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Writing Feedback / People perceive change in different ways. Is it always for the better or not? Is vital for our lives [4]

Some people prefer to spend lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is true that people perceive change in different ways. Some members of the community believe that change is always for the better, while others think otherwise.

Those who are in favor of change may argue that it poses a possibility for a particular person to improve themselves, both mentally and socially. From the mental perspective, changes relating to traveling and receiving education help people broaden their minds and accumulate new knowledge of a particular area. As for the social perspective - it is empathy for others that he or she may acquire after suffering changes in his or her private life, because it is known that those who experienced various changes in relationships with their families or acquaintances may then better understand other people's feelings. This way, change improves not only person's mental, but also social and private aspect.

In contrast, those who avoid changes point out the difficulties to readapt to them that many people experience. For instance, some large companies, Finnair for example, practice giving professional psychological and medicine support to those employees who were sacked due to companies' structural changes. Apparently, such policies infer that a spate of people may suffer from the difficulty to accustom to the changes and find their new way in life. In addition, it can be pointed out that changes regarding private affairs not always make a person better. For many people such changes simply cause a nervous breakdown, and, again, may jeopardize their health, since psychological aspect of a person is tightly connected to his or her general well-being.

In conclusion,I tend to partly agree with those who welcome change. Although I do not support the idea that it it is always a good thing, I admit that trying to avoid change is useless, since it is an indispensable part of our lives. For this reason, those who react to change positively and focus their efforts on taking advantage of it end up being in a better condition than those who are passive about it.