Writing Feedback / I saw an adorable girl smiled at me. God.. she was Pimchanok Luevisadpaibul, Nam. Narrative writing. [3]

Thanks Thailand, I met Nam

Three years ago, I wrote some words said I do want to meet you, Nam. It was an unbelieveable thing, but it was a simply memorable one. What did I ?

Yes, if you are a Thai movie lover, you must have known this popular movie Crazy Little Thing Called Love. I watched it and it growth my feeling to an extreme curiousness. It was an amazing movie ever! I decided to go to Thailand after a week watching that movie. My friends thought that I was a crazy boy and just wasted the time.

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Writing Feedback / I wish... I knew Goa Gala-Gala. My narrative essay about a secret place. [5]

Hello everyone... this is my narrative essay. I wrote this as the topics given. One of them is about secret place.
If you are in a free time, would you like please help my work to be corrected in a correct way? Thank you guys.

I wish...I knew Goa Gala-Gala

Summary: To this day, when people asked me about the most unforgettable experience I have, I would response it happily. It brings my memory back to an astonishing holiday in an amazing Island.

I had a plan to spend my holiday. I still didn't know yet where I should go. One day, I met Fernan in one of Public Libraries. He is my archeology friend. We had a good conversation. During the conversation, I told him that I didn't have any idea yet to where I should spend my holiday. Then he gave me a guided book. But he just wrote the name of suggested place without telling me where the exact address of it. On July 6, 2014. Finally, I went to the south east part of Bali Island called Nusa Lembongan as what Fernan wrote it on. I arrived in that place safely. I just used the guided book given. In there, I did not see anything that show signals of a kind of captivated place. Suddenly, I saw an old man sat down under a big tree. He was alone. Because of the dark situation, I got afraid that something bad would happen. But, I kept my positive thinking and mustered my courage up to close that old man. A few spaces from him, he turned his head and looked at me by saying "what are you doing here?" I tried to answer him, "I..I..want to go to a captivated place in here. My friend said I will find one. But..." He quickly interrupted me "Don't be afraid child, I let you show something." "what is it?where.." I said haltingly. "Are you deaf? Just follow me!" he said a bit loud. With no thinking longer, I stepped my feet and followed him. It took a few seconds to reach a place that looked like strange and hidden. He took the grasses off from the entrance door so I could see it clear. A cave? I thought. He capably guided me to come inside. It was so dark and deep. I felt stunned. There was a bedroom, a kitchen, a bathroom, a living room, a well, and a meditation room separated to each other. It looked so unbelievable! The old man said "This underground house was built by my grandfather 11 years ago. I hope your visit would break the secret image. I will be not lonely anymore if others come after this." I was touched of his saying and hugged him. "I definitely will!" I smiled while wiping tears in my corner eyes.

After that day, I kept remember him who had been a part of my life. This will not be forgotten ever!

Letters / Memo to all employers on openness to any ideas for shop improvement [4]

Here is my memo text I made:

MEMO
Date : March 17, 2015
To : All the employees
From : Andrew White, Manager Yummy Sandwich
Regarding : Open for any ideas to shop improvement
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Writing Feedback / My Thrilling Birth Day Surprise in Royal Boutique - simple narrative essay [2]

My Thrilling Birth Day Surprise

My unforgettable experience happened in my birth day surprise several months ago in Royal Boutique. It all came on December 20th, 2014. All activities I joined were almost in that place for a competition called Teruna Teruni Bali. On the quarantine day, my friends who were my competitors and I gathered in a Royal Boutique's meeting room for discussing the preparation that we should do. I lost my competition t-shirt and the committee took it as a small matter as I forgot it easily.

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