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Posts by rahmat248
Name: rahmat kuniawan
Joined: Mar 31, 2016
Last Post: Apr 7, 2016
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From: Indonesia
School: university of makassar

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rahmat248   
Apr 7, 2016
Writing Feedback / Information about wages for healthcare professionals in four different countries [2]

A breakdown of information of wages for healthcare professionals in four different countries is depicted in table. Overall, it can be seen that, doctors receive more wages than nurses. In this case, while country D provides the highest salary for healthcare professionals, the opposite was seen in country A.

To begin, country D and country c as a destination countries which receive healthcare professionals from abroad. give high wages to their own healthcare professionals, country D offers $ 3,420 for nurse and $ 10,200 for doctor, it is by far the highest wages for medical personnel, while, country C provides $ 2,900 and $5.500 for its medical personnel.

In contrast, as a source countries which supply healthcare professionals to other countries, country B and country A give a low salary for their medical personnel. Country B provides $ 350 for nurse and $ 700 for doctor, compared to country A with only $35 and $64 for salary of healthcare professional, making this country as the lowest wages for medical personnel.




rahmat248   
Apr 6, 2016
Writing Feedback / Leisure time among different age groups - elderly people rarely undertake any sports or exercises [4]

The bar graph illustrate about uses of leisure time among different age groups and is measured in minutes per weekend day. Overall, it can be seen that, sports and exercise is the popular activities in leisure time undertake by people in 20-65 years old.

People in age of 20-65 spend their leisure time for sport and exercise 120 minutes per weekend and it is the highest activity. However, in age 66+, people only undertake sports and exercise 20 minutes per weekend. Furthermore, computer become favorite activity for teenager. It is done by people in 75 minutes per weekend. In contrast, for people in the age of 20-65 and 66+, computer not really interesting activity for them.

Turning to reading, it become favorite activities for old people. they spend 60 minutes per weekend for reading. Interestingly, reading is spent by teenager only 5 minutes per weekend and it is the lowest activity that people in age of 13-19 doing.
rahmat248   
Apr 4, 2016
Writing Feedback / People needs to change their daily routine, habits, because obesity is now a major global epidemic. [NEW]

Obesity is now a mayor global epidemic. what can be done to tackle this increasingly common problem ?

Nowadays, there are several diseases that attack commonly. One of disease is overweight which has been global epidemic in society. Some ways can help community to reduce the increase of obesity such as manage food and undertake several exercise.

First step to decrease the figure of overweight is organize sort of daily food. This is because food is source of health and disease, what people eat can make them health or sick. For instance, quality of health between people who routine to eat healthy food and people who always consume junk food or unsaturated fat food are different. Hence, making list of healthy food will help to grow their healthy everyday.

Secondly, do some exercise since sport can burn fat in human body and this will increase immune system immediately. For example, life.health.com shows that running approximately 20 minutes can relieve 2000 calorie and make body be fresh. All in all, human will be spared from obesity id they apply sport routine in their lives.

To conclude, the best measures to reduce impact overweight in society are applying healthy life like healthy food and do several exercises in human routine. Where possible, people should be optimistic to apply healthy lives.
rahmat248   
Apr 2, 2016
Writing Feedback / The cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete - diagram [3]

The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

the diagrams present the cement making process and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Overall, while cement production process consists of three phases, crushing, mixing and packaging; the production of concrete materials is divided into two steps, pouring and mixing.

Firstly, limestone and clay are mixed by machine, before the powder came into rolling process, it must turned into mixer. Next, the heat material are grinded by a particular device. this results in high-qualified cement and it is then packed in the last phases. Secondly, this process mixes several materials such as, 15 % cement, 10% water, 25% sand, and 50% gravel. Having been operated for particular length of time, the device will produce a mixed substance and it is ready to use in constructing and concrete materials.




rahmat248   
Apr 2, 2016
Writing Feedback / The internet... More useful or more useless? IELTS WRITING TASK 2 [5]

In contrast, the Internet can change habitual of citizen. This is because all of things just do without too many moves . Consequently, it affected them to be unhealthy person. Afterwards, obesity man can be seen everywhere and for the number, it has rose than before. So that, the person's laziness becomes usual things if they could have facility in their activities.
rahmat248   
Apr 2, 2016
Writing Feedback / Public interest should be handled by the authorized officials - it needs much more money. [2]

All education and healthcare should be funded by government and free for everyone to what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Public interest has become main priority sector in every country and this should be handle by the authorized official and free for society. This essay would agree with this nation as it needs much more money and is the predominant factor improving human welfare.

It is argued that education and health will consume more budget. This is because they cover a great number of people and facilities needed are accounted in huge numbers. For example, one report from timelines.com revealing UK has to spend 24,000 pounds to donate both sectors in every year. This indicates that to accommodate those fields, it requires a measurable amount of income.

another reason is those sectors as primary factor in enhancement quality lives. This is because good quality of education and health can encourage improving quality of community welfare. For instance, Ahmad Priadi As minister of domestic in Indonesia say that quality of society in a country seen from the quality level of education and health. As s result, education and healthcare are essential part in increasing quality lives.

To sum up, this writing is likely to agree with this argue sence public necessary needs much more donation and it is the major factor for quality of community.
rahmat248   
Apr 1, 2016
Writing Feedback / Tourism can give bad impacts for local culture and environment. There are several ways to reduce it. [2]

Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to.
How true is the statement ? what can tourists do to reduce the harmful effect of tourism on local culture and environment ?


Nowadays, traveling to other countries has become more popular. This leads to some negative impact suffered by locals. this essay will claim one of predominant reasons causing this phenomenon is a new paradigm brought by tourist and the viable solution to overcome this pressing issue is that travel makers should obey the rule and adjust with the local value.

Tourism is know to affect the preservation of local culture and it has some negative impacts since traveler bring their culture into country that they visited. For instance, in INDONESIA, teenagers are influenced by western culture leads to the young generation forget their original culture which they have. As s result, there are several traditional culture threatened forgotten in the future. All in all, tourism can influence and it can intimidate preservation of the local culture.

However, there are some measures can tourists do for decrease bad impact. Firstly, traveler should keep their attitude when arrive in tourism place as the habitual in other places is probably different. Secondly, tourists must know about custom rule and obey it because it is important to help them adapt in new environment. The last, they have to know about the illegally place as not all place can attended. Finally, the tourists can decrease negative effects of tourism to other countries.

To sum up, while tourism can give bad impacts for local culture and environment. There are several ways to reduce it. where possible, tourism can improve the popularity of local culture as it does not change from the original culture.
rahmat248   
Apr 1, 2016
Writing Feedback / The proper age of children to enrol formal education [2]

Some people think wisely that kids should enroll formal education at early age because it is the perfect stage to develop their knowledge. However, others argue ...

The majority of people sure that children have to get formal education in school at early age since in this age, the children can develop their ability of think. However, others argue ...
rahmat248   
Apr 1, 2016
Writing Feedback / Issue price of stuff about the which are relatively inexpensive [3]

Nowadays in society costumer goods is relatively cheap, do you think the advantage out weight the disadvantages ?

These days, shopping has became popular among societies, stuff is cheap enough in community costumer, even though there are some drawback of cheap price like extravagant shopping habits. I am more likely to believe that cheap price of stuff will more increased national economy as the money circulation is faster.

It is argue that, majority of people sometimes cannot range their expenditure. This is because the cheap price of the goods make them forgotten about the primary needs and secondary needs. For instance, people interested to buy every stuff for kitchen without realizing that there are several goods were not important. As a result, shopping habits of society become extravagant. Finally, it give bad impact to society finance.

On the other hand, the advantage of cheap price will increase national economy because it will encourage people to buy more. For example, economy level in china showed a dramatic increase after official gives cheap price for all stuffs. Therefore, the majority of people are able to meet their needs without many consideration toward the price. All in all, cheap price can help government to improved the quality of economy and the community can meet their needs.

To conclude, although cheap price causes extravagant habits in society. I would believe that affordable price can escalate economy level. where possible, the cheap price is best way to improve economy stabilization.
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