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Name: Almajid
Joined: Sep 15, 2016
Last Post: Sep 17, 2016
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School: Indonesia University of Education

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ALMAJID06   
Sep 17, 2016
Writing Feedback / The information about two different ways of collecting water for further use [4]

First, there is an ( there are several) equipments (Wrong spelling) which are basket made of bamboo
Then the rope is hold (use held because passive) by two peoples (people is plural) so do not use s at then end word (better use two persons)

After those peoplesare positioned properly the assemblance of transference can be started ( Pay Attention S+V+CON+S+V+)
It method called rope and bucket ? what do you mean? ( this method can be helped by rope and bucket)
ALMAJID06   
Sep 17, 2016
Writing Feedback / The talent from the children must supported for people around them [2]

he said big interesting for education ( in one sentence you should not put two adjective in one position because it forbid if adj+adj without noun.

hardly because education it is mean education effectively to the future ( your sentence is not coherence in each sentence.
The talent from better use preposition of) the children must supported (modal+V1) for people around them.
We had to followed (similar modal + V1)
We had to followed them to for (you should not use two prepositions) respect each other
ALMAJID06   
Sep 17, 2016
Writing Feedback / West Java aims for grand opening ceremony [3]

he is ( better if u write use has because your writing tell about something that has happened) already to answer question which was inflict the problem. (

in the last week there are (thre were because past) many obstacles for example
ALMAJID06   
Sep 16, 2016
Writing Feedback / The 'peaceful' Pacific Ocean, however not without typhoons, earthquakes and hurricanes [2]

The Pacific Ocean
The pacific ocean is one of earth, has large body of the water which locate in south of the equator and was called by someone known as portuguese explorer ferdinand magellan who found a pacific peaceful (peaceful ocean) and

he begins his journey from the Straits of Magellan to the Philippines. It is not appropriate it's name " the island of the "peaceful ocean" because those often happen typhoons, earthquake and hurricanes. several countries which is border with ocean peaceful such as japan, china and tasman often suffer worried that it make border of ocean peaceful. in last part of something it's name not matching that the situation is very threats for countries border.
ALMAJID06   
Sep 15, 2016
Writing Feedback / Bill Gates believes, that there are not problems in this world, that cannot be solved [3]

Summary of TED video, is the title "Malaria and Education"

In that video bill gates explain two problems about disease, caused by mosquito and education. These need the role of stakeholder like government, scientist, thinkers, communicators to do right thing for this problem. There Are not problems, cannot be solved that he believe, optimism that all of stakeholder should pay attention to serious problem.

We can see the case which has happened in past time that several people die because of disease which is spread by mosquito.These can be cured whoever, get such disease malaria by good treating like consuming quinine or quinine derivatives. Hence, the rate of death can be decrease where those can bring out good effect. Besides, we need also good education which recently experienced slightly bad, exactly in its human resource development.

The role of teacher is more important to complete education of own purpose so that those claimed to work professionally. The Good education will support the country which has it. It is not only those which make education better but also we need the other factor to support it like financial, facilities, high quality teacher and stakeholder, want hard work to cause vision and mission can be reached. Finally, we need solid cooperation to finish everything, is useful for education.
ALMAJID06   
Sep 15, 2016
Writing Feedback / The table and the bar chart below give information about travelling to work in Houston, Texas. [2]

The table depicts the proportion of transport to people who work in that city, Texas, where those commonly get to the place by car, cycle, taking walk, train and bus, while the bar chart illustrates some ways of transport with different using of CO2 emissions and is measured by kilograms.

It can be seen that the number of methods which is be used by the person who goes to a place by using transport or taking walk. Mostly some travelers use car to do work at 48%, while the last rank experienced by usage cycle, while, the people who has been older using bus or train nearly at 47 years old. Then, the young people like more to walk than using transportation with mostly 39 years old.

Otherwise, the type of transport release different CO2 emissions, except usage bike or walk. The highest CO2 emissions happen for private car which can get more 0.30 kilograms per head each kilometer. Furthermore, using car with passengers takes in the second place less-more 0.08 kilograms to each person. The last, one is using public transport with slight number.

Clearly, the people who drive by themselves is not only the highest proportion, but that causes the most the people living in particular country. The visitors are infrequently taking motorcycle or walk to work.



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ALMAJID06   
Sep 15, 2016
Writing Feedback / Summary of Article, the title is "A Musician Creates an Americana Soundtrack for the Colorado River" [2]

This is interested article, tell music which content about environment, it is distinctive music because this always comment and tell nature which experience exploitation more over reforestation. This music is from a group band, has 4 members, indie genre folk and also focus to local environmental issues. They started to spread their nice song in London and oxford. Recently, they create a song, inspired by the Colorado River where they have purpose to inform nice place to listeners.

Now, that plan is turning into action. This September, the group will embark on Confluence, a three-week trip designed to bring attention to environmental issues affecting national parks in the Colorado River Basin.

They have strong beliefs that if we can suggest and give a critical suggestion, has purpose to develop and look after that river. Besides, those obtain inspiration to create music when they visited some place specially in creating sound track for Colorado River as well as those got it from the people which stay around that place.

After they had visited the number of places, they want explore the other place such as Grand Canyon National Park, Arches National Park, Canyon lands National Park, the proposed Bears Ears National Monument to interview some stake holder who joined in that activity that musician have target to making the next song, has different sound before.
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