Writing Feedback / Summary 7: Hula Dancing in Hawaiian Culture [5]

Hawaii is a group of islands which be located in the Pacific Ocean. Hula Dance has been part of Hawaiian culture and its styles have changed over time. Hawaiian mythology includes the stories Hula Dance. In fact, Hula Dance is an ancient tradition that it is impossible to say where or when it first appeared. It performed near of an altar in honor of Hawaiian gods. There were many changes to Hawaiian society after Captain James Cook's visited. King David Kalakaua is credited with reviving Hula Dance in the late nineteenth century. Hawaiian cultural festival was established to attract more tourists. This festival organized competition Hula Dances, Hula Kahiko is known as an Ancient Hula Dance and Hula Auana is known as a Modern Hula Dance. Currently, Hula Dance has attracted the interest of people from outside the Hawaii islands, and many Hula Dance school can be found in many parts of the world.

Writing Feedback / TED Talk Summary 1: Grit - The Power of Passion and Perseverance - Angela Lee Duckworth [3]

Intelligence Quotient (IQ) was not the only difference between the best and the worst students. In education, the one thing is known to measure best is IQ. In all those very different contexts, one characteristic emerged as a significant predictor of success and it was not social intelligence, not good looks, physical health, and not IQ. It was grit. The Grit is passion and perseverance for very long-term goals. The grit is sticking with your future and working really hard to make that future a reality. The grit is living life like it's marathon, not a sprint. A talent does not make our gritty. The grit is usually unrelated or even inversely related to a measure of talent. When kids read and learn about the brain and how it changes and grows in response to a challenge, they are much more likely to persevere when they fail because they do not believe that failure is a permanent condition. Finally, growing mindset is a great idea for building grit.

Writing Feedback / Conventional cars, which use gasoline, are highly polluted, they are now less desirable [3]

Summary 6: Electric Cars Around the Globe

Conventional cars, which use gasoline are highly polluted, are now beginning to less desirable. The oil price rises, the reserves of irreplaceable oil are consumed, and exhaust fumes hamper life in urban are factors that make electric cars becoming more attractive. Lately, in Europe and in Asia, electric cars have grown in popularity. Electric recharging stations were built in many cities, and the government of China has offered monetary incentives to the electric car companies and people who purchase the electric cars. More recently, the auto companies in North America improve the sophisticated electric cars which can travel 300 miles on a single charge and accelerate from 0 to 60 mph in 3.7 seconds. They are marketing electric cars in Europe, as commuter cars. The design of many of this car is innovative: some are made of light materials and have only two seats. The electric cars will help to reduce carbon emissions and environmentally friendly.

Writing Feedback / The public transportation is very important for people in metropolis. Major Subways of Europe [3]

Summary 5: Major Subways of Europe

The public transportation is very important for people in metropolitan cities. Rapid population growth has an impact on increasing the volume of vehicles and pedestrians, which can cause very serious problems. The subway is the right solution to get out of them. Three of the biggest and busiest subway in Europe are in London, Paris, and Moscow. In 1863, London's Underground, the first subway, was opened. It used "cut and cover" method meaning the streets were dug up, the track was laid, a tunnel was built, and everything was buried. Paris started designing subway system in 1900. It was not opened until the World's Fair and Olympics were held. whereas London's subway was famous for the sophistication of its construction, the subway in Paris was famous for its beauty. The subway's stations are decorated with mosaics, sculptures, paintings, and innovative doors and walls. The Moscow Metro, based on the design of the London Tube, was opened in 1935. When Stalin was in command, he used the stations as showcases of Russian art, culture, and engineering. The Moscow underground railways were even used as a military headquarter during World War II.

Writing Feedback / The ancient circus was introduced at the time of the Roman Empire. [3]

IELTS Writing Task 1 History of the Circus

The ancient circus was introduced at the time of the Roman Empire. The circus Maximus, which was founded in Rome, mostly showing popular spectator sport, chariot race. It also showed gladiator and exhibited the exotic animals. The venue of circus Maximus was built with wood, but Roman Empire renovated it become huge marble stadium that could accommodate more than 200.000 people. The monarchs of Europe had court jesters, whom combined the talents of jugglers, mimes, and clowns.

During sixteenth century, Philip Astley, who was a skilled riding on horseback, founded the first modern circus. He performed in France at the request of Louis XV after he popular in London. He included clowns, acrobats, parade of trained animals, and slapstick humor for develop his circus. In the seventeenth century, the businessman from America, Joshua Brown, was a success to build a circus business. Currently, the variation of Brown's circus many adopted by the other circuses.