Writing Feedback / Free time on my smartphone - Writing task 2: Direct question [2]

Many people, nowadays, spend a large part of their free time on a smartphone.

What do you think are the reasons for this?
Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

A large number of people use mobile phones whenever they are free. I believe that friends' influence and need to connect with others are two primary causes for using phones in free time, and it is a negative development because this activity badly affects a person's health.

One of the two reasons people use phones excessively can be peer influence. In other words, when a person encounters his friends using phone for various activities, such as video games or watching movies, he also tend to do the same. For example, it was reported in a study conducted by the Ministry of Health in India in 2012, that 73% of the teenagers use mobiles under the influence of their companions.

Another cause is that people try to create new relations via smartphones. These devices contain countless applications, websites and other algorithms by which new friends can be made easily. As a result of such helpful features, phones help people in formulating new bonds and keep in touch with old ones. Facebook would be an excellent illustration. This app allows people to connect with each other and make new friends just on one click.

On the other hand, I feel that it is a negative advancement as it indirectly affects a person's well-being. Due to watching a screen all the time, people who use phones do not feel motivated to perform any physical tasks. This results in turning them obese or overweight later on. Furthermore, concentrating excessively the phone screen also lead to poor eyesight or, even worse, eye-related issues. For instance, every doctor suggests that human eyes should avoid too much focus on anything, because it can damage the cornia and retina present in them. Apart from that, it is scientifically profound that smartphones discharge radiation signals that are harmful for a human mind. For all these reasons, I think it is not beneficial.

To conclude, many people like to use smartphones in their free time to form friendships easily and due to an influence by their peers. However, in my opinion, excessive usage of phone poses a threat on the health of a person, thus it is a negative development.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing task 1 - Museum Maps [4]

Museum Maps analysis

The plans demostrate the changes made to a museum's ground floor from 1990 to 2010. In general, the museum has undergone many transformations with an addition of some new facilities and renovation of the old ones, and there were also relocations of a few sections.

In 1990, there was a Local History Room just on the right of the entrance that was unchanged in 2010, but the entrance was widened in 2010. On the left of the entrance, a museum office was situated with a reception counter right in front of it. However, in 2010, this reception counter was moved just to the right of the office.

Natural History Room's position remained unchanged that was just above the museum office. The Gift shop had been rebuilt and expanded in the year 2010, which also include a Café in it. Although there was no lift in the museum in 1990, one was installed in 2010 just between the Café and the Natural History Room. In addition to that, the Archeology gallary was converted into children's interactive zone and poster display area. In 1990, there was a statue near stairs, which had been moved to the centre of the museum in 2010.

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Writing Feedback / The percentages of four recycled materials, namely paper, glass, aluminium and plastic [3]

the proportion of four different materials that were recycled

The graph depicts the percentages of four recycled materials, namely paper, glass, aluminium and plastic, in a country between 1982 and 2010. Overall, it can be seen that paper and glass were recycled the most, but the rate of recycling rose steadily during the period. Whereas aluminium cans' recycling increased considerably, recycled plastic was almost same and the lowest of all.

Paper and cardboard's recycling started with about 65% in 1982, which, after some fluctuations, grew slowly to 80% in 1994. Thereafter, a continuous drop was seen in the paper recycled, at almost 2% in every four years. Meanwhile, half (50%) of the total glass containers produced were being cycled in 1982. Although this recycling hit a low of 40% in 1990, the proportion of recycled glass grew gradually to 60% during 1990-2010.

In context to aluminium cans, the recycling process began at just 5% in 1986, but it went up noticeably high at nearly 45% in 2010. The growth rate was about 5% every four years until 2002 and 10% for the subsequent period. Plastics, however, witnessed a minimal rise of only around 7% over the 20-year period starting from 1990 [it was approximately 2% and 9% in 1990 and 2010, respectively].

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Writing Feedback / The charts below show the proportion of expenditure by students, on average, at one university [4]

The charts below show the proportion of expenditure by students, on average, at one university, in 2000 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts depict the average spending on various activities by students at a university for the year 2000 and 2010.

In general, it can be seen that the expenses on food and drink, and utilities were the highest for both the given years, while students spent the least on holidays for both years. Beside that, expenditure for some sections increased whereas others were equal or declined.

Food and drink was the largest part of the overall expenditure in 2000 and remained the same in 2010 too. Students spent just below one-fifths (17%) of their total expenses on sports and cultural activities in 2000, which was also unvaried in 2010. Meanwhile, only 5% of the total spending was on holidays in 2000 as well as in 2010 by university students.

Students spent around 8% and 21% on transport and utilities, respectively, in the year 2000, which rose considerably by 1% and 6% in 2010. The expenses incurred on eating out were only 4% in 2000, the lowest for the year; however, it doubled in the 10-year period and stood at 8% in 2010. Expenditure on clothing by students, on the other hand, dropped significantly from 16% in 2000 to just 5% in 2010.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 The chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media [2]

The chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media in one country in 2013, 2015 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart depicts the proportion of people receiving news via various broadcasting channels in a country for 2013, 2015 and 2017. In general, people accessing information through radio and the Internet increased considerably, while television and printed media faced a noticable drop in their veiwers during the period given.

The percentage of people getting news on internet and radio was almost the same in the year 2013, at about 32%. In the case of radio, a small decline of audience in 2015 was noticed, but eventually it witnessed an upward trend in 2017, concluding at around 36%. Internet news readers, however, rose nearly 8% in 2015, and the same reached to just under 70% in 2017.

Television and Newspaper were approximately four-fifths (80%) and two-fifths (42%) of the number of total people in 2013. There was a constant fall in the proportion of newspaper readers, as it fell down to 30% in 2015 and it further dropped to 22% in 2017. Television viewers decreased by roughly 15% in 2015, whereas a growth of 5% was visible in 2017. Television audience ended as same as of internet in 2017 (70%).

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