Writing Feedback / The motive of adults continue their study (IELTS task 1) [3]

The bar chart reveals the motive of the adult choose themselves to continue their study and it is measured by percentage, and the pie chart illustrates the percentage of tuition costs should be funded. Overall, it can be seen that the main reason why adults decide to continue their study because they are interested with the subject. It also can be noticeable that the higher education cost should be funded by individual.

The majority of reason why people decide to study is interested with the course at 40%. In contrast, at 9%, meeting people become the last choice of people to take their study. Beside interested with the subject, gaining qualification and being helpful for the future job get the second and the third reasons of people determine to acquire knowledge.

According the pie chart, people having determined for the further education think that 40 percent of this cost should be shared by individuals who enroll to study. By contrast, taxpayer is as the lowest with 25%.

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Writing Feedback / TASK 1: the number of students gaining English language teacher training qualification [2]

The table reveals that the total number of students who gained the teacher of language English qualification in the United Kingdom in two academic years between 2007-2008 and 2008-2009 with two different qualifications. Overall it can be seen that, in both years, there remained stable in 2007-2008 and 2008-2009 roughly 32,937 students. In any case, there was a slight decrease in the proportion of male gaining English language training qualifications in the final period.

Between 2007 and 2008, the number of female who qualified student almost 3 times as much as male students which is 23,842 student. In this period, most of the students qualified with TEFL than Cambridge UCLES CELTA or other degrees which was accounted 24,446 students.

In the next period, from 2008 to 2009, the total of students who qualified for English language teacher was slow increased by 32,945 students and it was followed by increasing of the female by 24,324 students. By contrast, the male student decreased of 0,7% and this period TEFL remained popular qualification which was taken by the students and only 26,2% of them were male

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Writing Feedback / The proportion of family average expenses in two different countries for 2010 [2]

The pie chart reveal that the proportion of average expenses of household in two different countries in 2010. Overall, it could be seen that both Malaysia and Japan had similar pattern which were food, housing and also other goods and services were three main expenses. In any case, in both countries, the smallest percentage of expenditures was on health care.

In Japan, the largest number of Japanese' expenditures was to pay other goods and services in 29 percent. It was 3% as much as the percentage of Malaysia' other goods and services and it was followed of spending money to buy some foods at 24%. However, buying housing become the least of expenditure.

According to the pie chart, in Malaysia the highest rate of expenditure was on housing at 34%, whereas housing of Japan accounted for 21%. Similar with Japan, the spending of food came in second place in Malaysia at 27%, it was higher 2% than Japan. By contrast ,the smallest percentage of household spend was buying housing.

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Writing Feedback / The proportion of students passing their high school competency exams - TASK 1 [2]

A breakdown of the proportion of the high school competency exams-passing students broken down into seven subject and by gender spanning between 2010 and 2011. Overall, it can be seen that the higher students who succeed in competency exams was computer science and represented by male students. Surprisingly, all of the subjects witnessed that the females' student was higher than males' student except Geography subject.

According to the bar chart, both female and male students have a similar pattern which was in computer science, mathematics, also foreign language, including French, German, and Spanish. All of them experienced more than 40 percent. In foreign language and mathematics, boy and girl students were almost equivalent, which was approximately 47%.

Moving to a more detailed analysis this was very different in chemistry subject, as seen, girl students stood at 30.2% and it was twice as much as boys student passing their test. In physic subject, it experienced that girls was 2.1% higher than boys. The solely subject which men' results were better than women was Geography with a pass rate 30.4 percent which was around 10.3% higher than the women.

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Writing Feedback / The proportion of the notebook computer manufactures with 6 different brands [3]

The table reveals that the market share proportion of the notebook computer market in the world was broken down into six brand companies and others, between the years of 2006 and 2007. Overall, it can be seen, during both years, that HP still led to the highest number of the computer market share and became the market leader.

According to the data, in 2006, Dell increased from 16.6% to 20.2% . It is in stark contrast to another, Acer experienced a slight fall by 0.9 percent in the following years. The other small companies which had less than 10 percent were Toshiba, Lenovo, and Fujitsu-Siemens both of years. Toshiba's market share rose slightly into 7.3%, while Fujitsu-Siemens was a plunged into 2.3% and it was the lowest number of notebook market share.

Another notebook manufacture accounted for 22.8 percent in 2006, and it became the second rate of market share after mentioning HP. In any case, the other notebook companies decreased up to 19.3% of computer sales in 2007. Moreover, it came to be the runner-up-leader of market share after HP and Dell.

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Writing Feedback / TASK 2: Nowadays, the children depend on the computers. Is it good? [NEW]

School children are becoming far too dependent on computers. This is having an alarming effect on reading and writing skills. Teachers need to avoid using computers in the classroom at all costs and go back to teaching basic study skills.

Do you agree or disagree?

These days, the existence of advanced technology has totally changed our approach to study in order that it deteriorate pupil' skill to read and write. Although this extent is true in some cases, I would utterly disagree in case the way of study back to bygone manner which use basic study skills.

There is disadvantage when students have computers to study. Using computers jeopardize learner' writing skills since it can automatically check spelling word. For instance, in recent years young people manage to finish their homework with using computers instead of in their own write. The youngest depend on it to finish their assignment and the writing skill become worse. As seen, the modern technologies make student's school more convenient to use, in any case they may decrease their passion to write and read.

By contrast, like a double-edged sword, there are merit effects on the utilization of computers. They can broaden their horizon with computers connecting the internet. The students get not only knowledge from inside but also outside school. What is more, books are now published online as well as in print. So, if they have not enough money to buy book, schoolchild can use computer to read e-book freely. Moreover writing with using computers is not totally wrong, using it can improve their writing becoming advanced. They can upload their blog and all of people can read it and give whatever comment they want.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that student may have opportunity to use computers to help them obtain knowledge. It is imperative that teacher have several ways for helping student understand with the subject. Where possibly, they can use modern way without abandoning traditional way.