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Name: Tri Nhan
Joined: Aug 28, 2020
Last Post: Sep 2, 2020
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From: Viet Nam
School: Bach Khoa University

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Tri Nhan   
Sep 2, 2020
Writing Feedback / Youthful population versus Aging population [4]

I think it is too complicated to perform in a real test, you should pay more attention to ideas. I think that you should opt for simple ideas but good words, what I mean here is that "good word" not "academic words".
Tri Nhan   
Sep 1, 2020
Writing Feedback / In the diagram - the life cycle of the honey bee that grows up and reproduces through various steps [2]

the life cycle of the honey bee



The given diagram illustrates the life cycle of the honey bee that grows up and reproduces through various steps.

Overall, six main steps are involved in the given process, beginning with a female bee laying one or two eggs every three days and ending with becoming mature bees, which takes around five weeks to complete.

At the first step in the given cycle, female bees lay one or two eggs every three days, and these eggs are put in a nest. At the subsequent step, the eggs are hatched to become nymphs within ten days. At the next step in the given diagram, these nymphs molt three times to become larger with the body color changing that makes them become immature bees for sixteen days. After that, these immature bees spend four days growing up to become mature bees. At the final step in the given process, these mature bees reproduce eggs, and the cycle starts over again.




Tri Nhan   
Sep 1, 2020
Writing Feedback / The number completed projects [4]

Statistics of Asian projects



The number completed projects, projects under construction, and Inventory/Pipeline projects on the Mekong River in different countries.

The bar chart shows information on the number of projects with 03 statuses, namely completed projects, under-construction projects, and Inventory/Pipeline projects, in 5 countries that are China, Thailand, Vietnam, Lao PDR, and Cambodia.

Overall, the number of under-construction projects is lowest, while that of Inventory/Pipeline projects is highest.

In terms of under-construction projects, the figure for Lao PDR highest, at 64, 63 projects higher than that for Cambodia. Meanwhile, there is no disparity in the figures for China, Thailand, and Vietnam, at 0.

According to Inventory/Pipeline projects, the number of projects in Lao PDR is approximately five times as high as that in Cambodia, at 301 and 66 respectively, wheres the figures for Thailand and Vietnam are lowest, at 0.

Regarding the number of completed projects, Lao PDR ranks first, at 65, followed by Vietnam and China, at 16 and 11 respectively. Besides, there is a significant difference between Cambodia and Thailand, at 2 for the former and 11 for the latter.




Tri Nhan   
Sep 1, 2020
Writing Feedback / The dark side of globalization should not be ignored [4]

I have a sense of being confused when I read your essay. You should pay attention to the structure of the essay, one idea should have three sentences that include a topic sentence, a supporting idea, and a conclusion, which makes your essay easier to absorb. Furthermore, I think you should narrow down your essay, it is too long to perform in the test room.
Tri Nhan   
Aug 29, 2020
Writing Feedback / The three pie charts show information on how three countries deal with waste products [4]

WRITE A SUMMARY INFORMATION



The three pie charts show information on how three countries, namely the Republic of Korea, Sweden, and the UK, can tackle waste products.
Overall, recycling waste products is widely used in the Republic of Korea, while burying waste products underground is widely used in the UK and Sweden.

In terms of the Republic of Korea, the percentage of recycling waste products is largest, at 69%, while the figures for burying waste products and incineration are smaller by a margin of 47% and 60% respectively.

Regarding Sweden, the percentage of burying waste products accounted for over a half, at 55%. Meanwhile, the figure for incineration is responsible for a merely proportion of 20%, 5% lower than that for recycling waste products.

According to the UK, the proportion of burying waste products is highest, at 82%, while the figures for chemical treatment and dumping at sea are lower by a margin of 74%. Besides, the figure for incineration is lowest, at 2%.




Tri Nhan   
Aug 29, 2020
Writing Feedback / The advances in air travel are focused only for the upper class [2]

TOPIC:
The advances in air travel are focused only for the upper class and this seems to have left others with no benefit.

Do you agree or disagree?



It is sometimes debated that advances in air travel only bring benefits to the upper class, and this industry tends to ignore the benefits of others. While I agree with this statement, I believe that the advances in air travel can help poor people.

On the one hand, the advances in air travel lead to drawbacks for poor people. Firstly, the aviation industry is associated with the tiredness of low-income people. To be more specific, poor people who want to go to an airplane have to queue, while rich people can gain support from airplane companies with a private path for VIP guests. Therefore, this trend helps rich people to save a lot of time and energy. Secondly, the aviation industry plays a key role in protecting the health of rich people. Nowadays, the outbreak of the COVID-19 pandemic rapidly has spread all over the world, and rich people tend to use private jets to avoid contact with this dangerous disease. In contrast, poor people tend to travel by low-cost flights, which is more likely to suffer from the COVID-19 virus.

On the other hand, advances in air travel bring benefits to poor people. Apparently, using aviation services has positive impacts on saving time for low-income people. Undoubtedly, commuting by airplane can be considered the safest and fastest way in the world, and airline companies pay attention to cutting ticket fares to hook low-income people. Therefore, low-income people can take advantage of this trend to travel by planes, which helps them to save a lot of time.

In conclusion, air travel is responsible for the drawbacks of poor people; however, this development also results in benefits for them.

P/S: Please give me some advice, thanks in advance!
Tri Nhan   
Aug 29, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 1: bar chart about top ten countries in electricity consumption [5]

I think. Firstly, you should more pay attention to spelling "kWh". Secondly, you are missing an article with "similar amount of data", a comma after "however". This taks requires comparision, so you should apply more structures to compare figures that aims to diversify your structures.
Tri Nhan   
Aug 28, 2020
Writing Feedback / SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT CULTURAL TRADITIONS MAY BE DESTROYED WHEN THEY ARE USED AS MONEY-MAKING [4]

using traditional culture to hook the attention of travelers



It is sometimes debated that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions that are aimed at tourists. While I agree that this phenomenon is coupled with disadvantages, I believe that it is more likely to be associated with advantages.

On the one hand, using cultural traditions to hook travelers can bring some benefits. Firstly, it is beneficial for people who rely on traditional culture for a living. For example, in Vietnam, the Dong Ho painting village is the heritage of the country; however, this traditional culture is on the verge of disappearance because dwellers cannot find enough money to make ends meet. Thus, travelers who come to this village can spend money buying paintings, which helps residents to overcome poverty. Secondly, the development of the tourism industry plays a key role in solving the unemployment problem in many countries. Specifically, this development creates many job opportunities that are linked with the tourism industry, such as tour guides and hotel staff. Thus, taking advantage of this development helps local governments to reduce the rate of joblessness.

On the other hand, using cultural traditions to attract tourists can lead to drawbacks. Inevitably, the development of the tourism industry is associated with the deterioration of young people about the awareness of traditional culture. To be more specific, travelers can bring their cultures, such as action movies and fashion trends, to tourist destinations. Thus, young people who absorb this novelty can ignore the cultural identity of their countries.

In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against using traditional culture to hook the attention of travelers, but I believe that this trend still has positive impacts.

P/s: Please give me some good advice
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