Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Should people take their families with them to other countries. [NEW]

Topic:

Many people work in other countries these days. They also take their families with them.

Give your opinion about the situation. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

It is a popular trend that people immigrate to other nations and bring along their family members. While this trend has several drawbacks, I believe that the overall benefits are more significant.

Admittedly, there are two main difficulties children might experience when they first move to a country. Firstly, it is the culture gap and language barriers that hold them back from making new friends. In the light of these obstacles, children, especially introverted ones, tend to avoid interacting with other people, and thus, they are likely to suffer from loneliness and melancholy. Secondly, children's education will be interrupted if they have to move to a new country. Not only because the school's bureaucracy takes time, but because parents also have to deal with a lot of paperwork, which could take up to months, in order for their children to migrate with them.

Despite the availability of the arguments mentioned above, I believe that the benefits of moving to a new country with a whole family far outweigh the drawbacks. The main objective of living in family units instead of separating as individuals is to take care of each other. Children need to have parents around to share and guide them through life's struggles while having children alongside means greater companionship for expatriates' parents. Apart from that, in many cases, people work in developed countries where educational systems outperform that of their motherland. It is obvious that their children will get a finer education or even be able to secure a seat in some prestigious university of that country.

In conclusion, although children might have to deal with some immediate problems at first, I believe the long-term benefits of bringing their families with them to other countries outweigh the disadvantages.

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Should mobile phone is banned like smoking [3]

Topic: The use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking.

Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phone should be banned like smoking. To what extent?

Some people believe that using mobile phones is equally harmful to society as smoking and it is, therefore, also expected to be banned. From my perspective, I am in complete disagreement with this opinion as now will be discussed.

Firstly, it is prejudiced that people compare the use of mobile phones equivalently antisocial as smoking. Since phone and tobacco are two distinctively different entities, which exist for different purposes, the comparison between them is unreasonable. Tobacco has long been proving to be detrimental to not only the smoker themselves but also the health of society at large. The use of mobile phones, admittedly, has some drawbacks, but it does not dangerous or threatens the life of anybody. For example, some critics might point out that the excessive use of smartphones is attributable to myopia, or the noise of cell phones might be an annoyance to the surrounding people. These problems, however, can be easily curbed by limiting the time on screen, or turning on the silent mode when in public areas.

Secondly, while it makes sense why tobacco should be prohibited for its deadly effect, phones have numerous benefits to our life. Ever since the introduction of mobile phones, it has revolutionized the way we communicate and how we live to the point that everybody needs a phone to work or study today. Most jobs require employees to be either available by phone, for example, doctors and police officers, or to use their phones throughout the day, as is common with businessmen and lawyers. Mobile phones even become more necessary in times of pandemic such as the Covid-19 when everybody is required to work and study from home.

In conclusion, I content that mobile phones, unlike tobacco, have insignificant drawbacks to our society. In contrast, its enormous benefits make the idea of banning phones sounds far-fetched.

Writing Feedback / Repeating bad habits despite the fact that these habits could be detrimental for the health [2]

IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Topic - health

Topic: Scientists tell us some activities are good for health and others are bad. Despite knowing that millions of people continue doing unhealthy activities. What are the causes and what are the solutions?

Answer:
It is true that many people keep repeating bad habits despite the fact that these habits could be detrimental to their health. While there are various reasons for this, the government can solve this problem by adjusting the law and promoting healthy activities.

The reasons why people adopt unhealthy habits are largely due to lack of time and the availability of technological devices. Firstly, the fast pace of modern life, which requires people to spend more time at work than in the past, sets a limit to the time spending on pleasurable activities. A prominent example of this argument is that many people these days have chosen fast food as a solution for their limited time in spite of all the health warnings from nutritionists. Secondly, technology is also attributed to the sedentary lifestyle of modern people. It is the convenience of digital entertainment such as video games or social networks that discourages people from engaging in outdoor activities.

Sticking to these harmful habits for a long time would lead to health deterioration. It is, therefore, urgent that the government take action to tackle this problem in the first place. The simplest measure is to impose heavy tax on unhealthy products including fast food, alcohol and tobacco whilst lifting that of organic food to encourage healthy eating patterns. Apart from that, the government can encourage citizens to get more exercise by placing sports facilities in populated areas or co-operate with educational institutions and organizations to hold more physical activities.

In conclusion, unhealthy activities are attributable to the lack of time and the utility of electrical gadgets. It rests with the government to remedy the problem.

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Will libraries be relevant in the future? [2]

Topic: Students today can easily access information online, so libraries are no longer necessary.

Do you agree or disagree?

The advancement of technology in recent decades has digitalized almost every human activity. In the light of this, many argue that libraries are outdated, and therefore, unfit for the demanding needs of the modern world. While I agree that the Internet is a powerful tool when it comes to information provision, I believe that libraries have their own importance in providing resources.

Admittedly, there are several reasons why people are in favor of searching information online over the traditional method of going to libraries. Firstly, in terms of time efficiency, the Internet allows us to access information at any time when it is convenient while libraries are only open for a certain number of hours a day and several days a week. People can also save a huge amount of time traveling as everything now is just one click away with the availability of online searching tools. Furthermore, the Internet is a reservoir of knowledge that is greater than any physical library, and it is getting updated every second. Therefore, to those who just need to get information in the fastest and easiest way, the Internet should be enough.

However, I believe that physical libraries still have special features that online sources can never replace. One of the key objectives of libraries is that it provides spaces which are specialized for studying. Particularly, every library has an academic environment with a quiet ambiance and less distraction to encourage deep concentration. This explains why many students still go to libraries to prepare for exams these days. In addition, people can always rest assured with the accuracy of the information they collected from libraries as books before being displaced in there have undergone strict processes of censoring by the ministry of education, and thus, it can be used officially for academic purposes or even scientific research.

In conclusion, although there are more and more alternative ways to attain information in this days and ages, I contend that libraries will still exist in the future for its unique value.