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Oct 3, 2010
Undergraduate / Given your desired major and why- Prison Ministry [4]
Talk about attention-grabber! The first paragraph has great imagery, but a bit confusing...did you want this in second person? (Second person would be addressing the reader. "You open your lunchbox and discover that you have forgotten your apple" is second person because is about "you")
This makes it seem as if the tired, the poor, the huddled masses don't need assistance...you seem a bit cold to their plight here. Maybe if you write something like "When people think of Christian Ministry, they think of traveling to third world countries to feed the hungry and poor, to heal the sick, to provide for the homeless; however, they tend to overlook the difficulties of another segment of society--prison inmates. "
That's great..
Who deserves a chance for forgiveness and who does not? God has given us all thousands of chances to come back to Him, but we have all failed Him thousands of times.
The incarcerated arecaged on the other side of the eight inches of concrete wall , but we are all similarly captivesof our own iniquities.
Christian Education and Ministry can help meto open the doorsof the hearts of these men and women.
The world can look down on these people, but it is my honor to be their voice and their friend.
Welcome to the land of unimaginable despair
Talk about attention-grabber! The first paragraph has great imagery, but a bit confusing...did you want this in second person? (Second person would be addressing the reader. "You open your lunchbox and discover that you have forgotten your apple" is second person because is about "you")
People seem to overlook the places that need humans' fellowship the most.
This makes it seem as if the tired, the poor, the huddled masses don't need assistance...you seem a bit cold to their plight here. Maybe if you write something like "When people think of Christian Ministry, they think of traveling to third world countries to feed the hungry and poor, to heal the sick, to provide for the homeless; however, they tend to overlook the difficulties of another segment of society--prison inmates. "
It is easy to love your neighbors but hard enoughto just be in the same room as your enemies.
That's great..
Who deserves a chance for forgiveness and who does not? God has given us all thousands of chances to come back to Him, but we have all failed Him thousands of times.
The incarcerated are
Christian Education and Ministry can help me
The world can look down on these people, but it is my honor to be their voice and their friend.