Writing Feedback / TOEFL; Clothing may influence the way people behave [2]

Promt: People behave differently when they wear diffrent clothes. Do you agree or disagree that different clothes influence the way people behave?

Clothing may influence the way people behave. People behave grandly while wearing tails, while the same person act boisterously when wearing jeans and tee-shirt. But this doesn't mean that the attire has changed his personality or psychological status as an individual. So, I think people behave differently when dressed in different types of clothing for the following reasons.

Different events require different style of dressing. Like a formal dinner require one to wear a suit, a meeting needs dressing in a day coat, while on a night out with friends a jeans is suitable. Similarly, on a Halloween party it is important to wear a costume, neither a suit nor jeans will do. These events don't only call for specific dresses but also for specific behaviors which are integrated with the dresses. Politely restrained behavior in a dinner suit whereas business-like in a day coat at a meeting is considered appropriate. The behavior determines ones understanding of different forms of dressing, and an individual with an in born style can carry all the dresses with perfection.

In addition to that, clothing is a representation of one's personality, culture and social status. As it can convey so many messages, it is considered very important to build characters in movies, television as well as in books. Merryl Streep, looked like a dedicated cook in "Julia and Julie" and like a boorish fashion magazine editor in "Devil wears parade". Such distinction in characters was part due to her influential acting and part due to the irksome work of her stylist and designer. So, clothing can be used as means of representing oneself as a different person.

Summing up, different people may wear similar clothes but they will behave differently. The dress represents an event which requires a specific attitude. However, the way an individual carries a dress is exclusive to him- or herself. Attire may also represent a character or culture, and it is deemed suitable to behave accordingly to make it look realistic.

Writing Feedback / GRE essay: Laws restrict but not eradicate wrongdoings. [3]

It is possible to pass laws that control or place limits on people's behavior, but legislation cannot reform human nature. Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts and minds."

(I want to know if the same essay fits for the following prompt as well: Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system because moral behavior cannot be legislated.") looking forward to your feedback :)

Laws are developed to discipline the society so that every individual can live in peace and harmony without any insecurities and fears. To maintain such a control, rules are formulated to prevent all offenses, and punishments are devised for every social and personal transgression so that crimes once done may not be repeated by the criminal as well as the other citizens. An acute system like this is enough to keep people from all kinds of crimes and wrongdoings; however, if this was true there wouldn't have been such a high crime rate as we see today. This does not mean that the Legal system is futile as it may limit the occurrence of the crimes, but it has simply not been able to modify the criminal mode of thinking, the deep desire of committing a crime and criminal immortality which ultimately leads to it.

Human being is the most intricate creature in this world. Right from the time that he is a baby, he tries to do as he pleases; when asked not to do so he gets intrigued and eventually does it any ways. In such instances the child is scolded while in certain severe cases punishment ensues, which most certainly intimidates the child and prevents him from repeating such a behavior. But does the reproof eliminate the desire to do it again? Does the punishment transform the nature of that child from a brat to an angel? I don't think so. A rule may restrict the child but may not reform him, because it has only disciplined him not instilled the sealtered his mischievous nature. The criminal who is tried by law may be fined, or imprisoned or punished but all of these attempts neither ameliorate the individuals nor the society, as depicted by the recurrence of offences by the same offender as well as many others.

In the legal system similar punishments are given for similar offences, for example, all murderers are either imprisoned for life or hanged to death; the crime is undoubtedly the same but the motive may be varying, it may be greed, or vengeance or passion. On the other hand it can be a murder caused while defending one's self against a thug, which could not be proved because of lack of proper evidence or one committed by a mentally aberrant individual who was influenced by a book or that executed due to someone's venomous provocations. Dealing with all of them in a fashion alike is not justified, moreover, it may not prevent many others who are about to commit a murder due to lust or envy or blackmail or hatred. Actually the desire and ability of misdemeanor is imbedded in human nature, the first step towards an offense is the idea or yearning that emerges in the mind and heart respectively and if it is pacified then and there, there will be a strong chance that the final step may never happen. To that possible the legal system should operated in conjugation with facilitative organizations to prevent occurrence of crime as well as recidivism. Criminon is an international, non-profitable organization which utilizes the works of author and humanitarian L. Ron Hubbard to instill self respect and integrity in in-mates, ex-offenders and high risk individual and helps them become an advantageous individual of the society by teaching life skills and providing vocational education, and so far it has helped thousands of individuals around the world. In addition to that, the society should also play its part, by bringing up children with an understanding of goodness, by accepting every individual regardless of the social or financial status and by appreciating the attempts of ex-convicts to improve themselves.

To thwart a crime the state of the mind and heart of the individual should be explored to determine the core cause which perpetuated the crime and deal with it in an exclusive manner which epitomize crime as an act that brings affliction and turmoil to the society and also symbolizes the downfall of humanity not only for the convict but also for general public. Law should be a system of restriction, punishments as well as rehabilitation, only then it will help transform human immorality which in turn will facilitate the development of a peaceful novel society.

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Writing Feedback / 'It was a crisp October morning'; Innovation needs one thought, one person. [3]

"It is always an individual who is the impetus for innovation; the details may be worked out by a team, but true innovation results from the enterprise and unique perception of an individual."

It was a crisp October morning; Faiqa and I were sitting in the lecture theater discussing themes for designing the stage for the Senior Farewell party. "Same old boring ideas, we need to think out of the box", Faiqa exclaimed. I closed my eyes and tried thinking of a new idea, a theme never done in the University. "Eureka!" I said animatedly, "How about a stage back drop with the front of a car protruding out of it?" This would be exciting and fun and absolutely never done before!" Faiqa was all exhilaration, so I felt a bit confident but we had to discuss it with the entire organizing committee to reach a final decision. As expected most of the members were skeptical on the ground "We are Pharmacists not Artists, how can we pull it off?" they said, while a few were only concerned about the fact that a lot of ornaments were already purchased and we didn't have enough money to shop for materials all over again. Ready for opposition, I started advocating my point of view, "The seniors are going off to their practical lives and what can be a more stylish way then to send them in a sports car with the slogan that says "Your off to bumpy road, so best of luck", don't you think?", a few nods in the crowd urged me to continue spiritedly," and think of the appreciation we'll receive if we do something innovative, flowers and balloons are so dated". After a bit of persuasion, almost all of them agreed and the responsibility to design the stage fell on my feeble shoulders. From that very day I started making designs and devising techniques to materialize them in a way that wouldn't exceed the budget. I can proudly say that all the people in the team worked relentless along with me, even smoothed out a few creases in my plans. Finally, on the morning of the party when the structure of a car, made out of fabric, ply wood and paper, was erected at the back of the stage all of us were beaming. I was applauded for conceiving such an idea and bringing it to life; in my heart I knew that if there had been nobody with the vision to believe in my plans, with the credence to work on them persistently and the imagination to improve and enhance them, all of it could have never been created. So, I stood on stage that evening as the innovator but not as a sole achiever, as it was the achievement of the entire team which was orchestrated by me.

Innovation is a brainchild of an individual, which is executed by the combined efforts of a team, constituting of people who contribute their expertise. There are various elements to be acquired, different components to be engineered, distinct aspects to be merged and a wide range of hurdles to be triumphed over; all of this can't be accomplish by an individual. So every creation is a product of team work, but it is initiated by an individual's idea which in turn stimulates the entire team.

Through out time, many people have come up with innovations which have changed the phase of history. Henry Ford incorporated "Ford's Motors" with the vision to construct cars for the great multitude, in 1906 he offered the T-model which heralds the beginning of the Motor age; the car evolve from being a luxury to a common mode of transportation. But the acclaim of revolutionizing the mode of transportation can not be awarded exclusively to Ford, but coming up with such an innovative concept which brought about this revolution can, most certainly, be credited to his name

Imran Khan, an eminent cricketer turned politician, came up with the ingenious idea of constructing a state of the art Cancer Hospital in Pakistan in memory of his late mother, although the designing and execution of the master plan was overseen by Dr. Nuasherwaan, but it was his wisdom and perception that enabled his to bring together such an intelligent team of people who could bring his ideas to life. And thus Shauket Kanum memorial Cancer hospital and research center was established which is providing top notch medical care to cancer patients from Pakistan and from around the world.

An individual with vision, intuition, urge, dynamic ideas as well the capability to put all the pieces together in an appropriate fashion is essential for the creation of novelty, such an individual is a leader, a true perpetuator of innovation. As Steve Jobs, the co founder of Apple, once said: "Innovation distinguishes a leader from a follower", an innovative thought, just fully put.

Writing Feedback / Originality is an identity. Every idea generated in this world is as original as its originator. [2]

"Originality does not mean thinking something that was never thought before; it means putting old ideas together in new ways." Can anybody give me a few more examples in accordance with this prompt. thanks

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Every idea in this world gives birth to numerous new ideas yet all of them are unique & absolutely original. It's like a seed that is planted in the soil, nurtured by water and manure, all working together to give birth to a plant which bears leaves, buds, flowers and fruit on its many branches; all are ideas generated by pre-existing ideas yet entirely different in form, constituents and applications from that of their parents and all of them are created to fullfill an exclusive need which the parents couldn't. So, old ideas serve as raw materials fow new ones, as Oxygen and Hydrogen for Water; and the product is as original and indispensable as it's precursors.

What can be a more old idea then this world around us which serves as an abyss of ideas leading to many new and extraordinary ones. Nature is the very essence to originate Art, illustrated by beautiful masterpieces; Wordsworth' "Daffodil" was enthused by the sight of them along the Glencoyne bay, Monet's "Cliff at Dieppe" was inspired by the Normandy Coast and Fashion designer Washington Robert's autumn line is engendered by beach rocks. Similarly, history has also provided a fair share of ideas to Artists to create pieces which are etched in time. Like the idea of Da Vinci's "The Last Supper" is taken from the Christian history which in turn inspired Selvador Deli to create "The Sacrament of the last supper". Existing ideas gave way to new ones but none can be accused of being an imitation, as old ideas serve as a creative stimulus.

Ideas depict the needs and views of a specific time, with enhancement of minds the ideas are also tailored to fulfill the needs of the current scenario. Technology is a major example, the journey of creation of a modern day computer ways back to the 16th century Abacus which was improved year after year to give birth to an IMac and Pentium which fulfill our present day needs. A computer is a product of extrapolation of old concepts; it is enhanced by coupling various pre-existing ones. Concept of optics led to the invention of cathode rays and Silicone chips led to the development of a processor. The fusion of these novel inventions resulted in the development of the computer which is far more pertinent to today's requiremnets as it's predecessors.

All ideas are fashioned from the ones already available; by joining the knowledge of two distinct aspects a new and previously unknown element can be created which may be far more profitable and advantageous. Amoxicilline and clavulanic acid are two antibiotic, when used individually they show limited bacterial spectrum; however, when combined together in 1977/78 to form Co-amoxiclave(patent name :Augmentin) the efficacy of the product was greatly enhanced. An ice cream cone is another example, Ernest A. Hemwi wrapped a waffle around ice cream and the ice cream cone was born which appeared far more exciting as well as hygenic as it put an end to sticky fingers. In today's time such innovations are much in demand as the companies are facing the impact of globalization, technology and knowledge revolution, inability to generate new financial resources, maturity of environmental hazards as well as climate changes.

is as original as its originator.
Originality is an identity. A product or notion or idea is said to have an exclusive identity if it describes itself in an approach and manner that can be done by none of its antecedents or contemporaries or descendents, such an idea is truly original. In every field of life old ideas serve as a precursors for new, it is way of advancement, modernization and improvement of life. Thus every idea generated in this world, whether inspired, extrapolated, articulated or innovated from an old idea is as original as its originator.

Writing Feedback / New idea always faces contradiction desipte its reasonalbilty [4]

"Important truths begin as outrageous, or at least uncomfortable, attacks upon the accepted wisdom of the time."

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A new idea or thought may not always be welcomed most delightfully; it is bound to be rebuffed, or worse, face severe opposition & abasement. However, such retaliation has never stood in the way of the emergence of new ideas which, many a times, proved to be stupendous contributions for the society.

People don't entertain new thoughts because they are most comfortably adapted to the old ones which, in many cases, are handed down from generation to generation. Religion is a major example, Moses in Egypt, Jesus in Palestine & Muhammad (Salallho Waalihe wasalum) in Arabia all encountered hostile resistance when they came forth with the message of God. Either it was comfort or holding on the costumes of their ancestors, they opposed the message of truth, honesty, respect, equality, sacrifice & a restoration of the true monotheist faith. But truth finally triumphed & today numerous individuals have found spiritual solace in the preaching of these prophets.

Religion enlightens the minds & hearts of the believers but many a times it has also stood in the way of innovative ideas. The Heliocentric model proposed by Nicolas Copernicus stating the Sun is in the center of the universe around which all celestial objects including the earth revolves, encountered relentless opposition by the Catholic Church as it appeared to contradict the biblical reference that "the earth if firmly established, it can not be moved". This theory was vehemently banned & Galileo who attempted to support it on the bases of his own research was accused of heresy, forced to recant & charged to spend the last 20 years of his life in house arrest. But the later studies of this subject proved that heliocentric theory is creditable; today it is considered as the epiphany of modern science. As for Galileo, numerous attempts by the Vatican to make up for the viciousness directed towards him. In 1939 Pope Pius XII described him as "the most audacious hero of research" & in March 2008 his statue was erected in the walls of the Vatican to propose his complete re habilitation.

Women are always considered as the care taker of the family without thinking that they may also feel the need to dwell on their interests, talents & intellects. Elizabeth Blackwell is the first woman to graduate from medical school in 1849; she was admitted in Geneva Medical College, Geneva, New York considering that this is some ones idea of a practical joke. Today her medical papers are considered to be highly beneficial & her exemplary life has encouraged many women to do greatly. If Elizabeth Blackwell & many others had suppressed their vocational callings a void would have been created in the fields of science, art, philosophy, literature & sport.

Wars & fundamentalist rulers have also been the source of suppressing the growth of ideas. The press has always been the weakest target to gagging, closure or becoming the mouth piece of the rulers, as observed in Afghanistan during the Taliban reign. The first amendment in the Constitution of United State of America in 1987 is the beacon of freedom of expression for the western world along with the statement of the French national assembly in 1989:

"The free expression of opinion and thoughts is the precious right of man; every citizen may speak write & print free"
Such statements are a welcome note that new innovative ideas may not be treated with such vigorous retribution but still it will have to prove itself laudable to be embraced with open arms.

People are well accustomed to the dogma of their time & a new idea is usually considered as a vicious attack on them; with the advent of reasoning the dogmas also modify but probably don't receive an immediate acceptance. Mark Twin said that "The man with a new idea is always a crank, until the idea succeeds". This saying fits well for all the people who had the gift to think beyond the assumed concrete norms of the time.

If Galileo had yielded in the face of dissent a door to the new world of astronomical discoveries would never have opened to us, but if it were not him there would have been another man of reason, courage & immense patience, there would have been some other hero. People who had the courage to be the first to stand against the social beliefs had to face stern antagonism but those who stood strong paved the way for millions to make an astounding future, a wonderful today.