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"How do you express your inner world" - help with UNC Chapel Hill essay? [4]
Just like howusing glasses helps you see the world around you, seeing through the camera lens helps you see the world inside of you.I didn't know why liked taking such random pictures; I had never thought about it.They are tangible memories, moments of frozen time, and visual story- tellers that can be more thought provoking than Socrates. -this sentence seems a bit bunched up so i say give room for it to breathe and flower.
Example: They are tangible memories, they are moments of frozen time; they are visual story-tellers and more thought-provoking than Socrates himself. If you don't like it, its alright. Still the sentence bugs me
You know thatThe oncoming traffic is just beyond those lines.For the first version (which I like better), try to keep the subject as yourself. I read through it and changed the we and us to about you. Check it:
I looked into the lens, and a new world was on the other side. I knew I was still in the same place, but it felt like a
sort of parallel universe. This world had a different feel to it. Finding the perfect angle, I snapped a shot of this parallel universe and lowered the camera. Suddenly, I was
back in a familiar place
again . Everything was back to normal. I didn't know why liked taking such random pictures
; I had never thought about it. It just grew on me. Before, I'd snap photos of pretty sunsets and flowers, but something inside of me wanted to delve deeper, and I discovered that photography was much more than what was in the picture.
They say A picture is worth a thousand words. It's also worth a million emotions and a billion thoughts. Photos have a depth that's greater than
we I can imaginecan be imagined . They are tangible memories, moments of frozen time, and visual story- tellers that can be more thought provoking than Socrates. A picture is the strange line between the inner world, and the world around
us me. When I take a picture of a street, it's not just pavement. This road has meaning. Imagine how many people have walked on this road, how many lives
have this road been a part of? What if
a life was takensomeone died on this road? Now, look at those two double solid lines. These two lines guide
your my life. Without them, how would
you I function? They tell
you me, don't cross us and
you I listen;
You I know
that oncoming traffic is
just beyond those lines.
You see, photography is how I
am able to express what is going on in my mind. I can take pictures of the world around me and somehow, the camera lens captures something greater
than what is before you . Just like how
using glasses helps
you see the world around you, seeing through the camera lens helps you see the world inside of you.
You say photos guide you; expand on that.
Alright. I like the creativity. Can you read my transfer paper and help me out? Thanks