Writing Feedback / British and Australian laws - to access to the past criminal record of the defendant? [2]

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Topic:
Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant's past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused of the crime.

Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that a jury should be given all the past facts before they reach their decision about the case.

Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer.
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The British and Australian laws provide for the judgment of criminal case that the jury has not the access to the past criminal record of the defendant. Thus, for protecting who is being accused of a crime.

On the other hand, some people believe that this practice should be changed because the jury has to know the past of the suspect for judging him during a trial. In this essay I will explain both of these view of point.

For some people the jury must be aware of several factors such as the environmental in which the defendant grew, the reason that led him to make a crime or other crimes, if he committed them.

All of this is helpful for the jury to have a summary table and thus they reach a correct decision about the case. It is important for ensure at the community that these person do not commit again a crime.

On the other hand, the jury have a duty to judge a present crime of the defendant and not his past crimes.
From my point of view, this depend on the kind of charge. For example, if the defendant is charged of murder, the jury should aware of his past criminal record. For example when the jury have to judge a man who has already killed in past.

In conclusion, I agree with the first point of view because the jury have to decide the present crime of the suspect, from my point of view they should have the chance to know the past criminal record only for special cases.

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Writing Feedback / Describe table - companies advertising expediture IELTS task1 [5]

The table below shows a breakdown of companies advertising expenditure in different media sectors in three countries (Australia, South Korea and Brazil). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

write al least 150 words.

The table shows us the advertising expenditure in three different countries namely Australia, South Korea and Brazil.

Tv is the sector with the most expenditure for all the three countries. Australia and Korea invest the same percentage of resources into this means of communication, while Brazil invests nearly twice as much.

Expenditure of Newspaper and radio for Australia and Korea are similar with an average of 22%. Unlike Brazil which spends less money in this two sectors, the percentage of spending in these two sectors is around 15% .

The expenditure of the other systems of communication are different for the three countries. The 30% of the total expenditure of Australia is directed to Internet, Sponsorship and Direct Mail, respectively 15% for the first and 8% for the last two.

Unlike Korea where the 30% of total expenditure are divided respectively in 12% to the both sponsorship and Direct Mail sectors and only 6% to Internet.
Brazile divide the 9% of all spending in these three categories, with only 1% to Direct Mail, 3% to Internet and 5% to sponsorship.

In conclusion the amount of total spent is divided essentially in the first four categories, except Brazil which spend more than half of total expenditure in TV sector.

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Writing Feedback / 'all men are equal before the law' - fixed punishments for each type of crime? [10]

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TOPIC: Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, think that the circumstance of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should be taken into account when making decision on the punishment.

Discuss both sides and give your own opinions?
250 words

Generally it is claimed that punishments should be specific for every single crime. Instead, other people think that during the decision of the punishment the benches should take into account when someone committed a crime. I believe that both of these views are correct.

Firstly, we have to remember that all men are equal before the law and someone, whoever he is, have to judge for his felony.
The sentences are different depending on the crimes. For example, a man who burgled an house goes to jail for three years. Obviously, the judgment will be different for a man who killed someone and his imprisonment will be longer than the first. Because the law have to guarantee our safety and that this man do not commit this crime again.

On the other hand, people argue that benches should consider the motivation when a crime is committed.
For, example, imagining a women who is attacked. She get aggressor with blunt instrument during the scuffle. The assailant die on site.
The benches should take into account the circumstances of this crime. The woman is not a criminal and her intention in that moment was to defend herself.

In conclusion, I believe that both of these views should be considered by benches during the verdict. The law is equal for everyone and the judgment should correspond to the crime with exceptions for particular circumstances.

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Writing Feedback / 'one and only one' - some people are born with certain talents [3]

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports and music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
(250 words)

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[b]Many people believe that someone are born with a special talent, a "gift", for example in a particularly field such as art.

Many people believe that someone are born with a natural talent, a gift, for a particular fields such as art, music or sport and that they have a duty to improve it. Others, instead, think that anyone can acquire some skills and become throughout their life an artist, a musician or something they want.

For understand the first view, I ask to myself : Can I think about Paris without the masterpiece of Leonardo? Certainly not! We can't imagine our world without important artists, musician or scientist that have changed our world. If it be so, our conception of world would have been totally different.

On the other hand, other people think that any child can improve their skills to become an artist or musician or what they want. I think it is possible only with a great dedication and work. For my experience I can say that it is very difficult. I learned to draw when I was fourteen.

When I attended high school, I dedicated five years to improve my drawings. I wasn't able to draw something with my only imagination. I copied other designs of the great artists such as Botticelli, Raffaelo, Michelangelo. But when I stayed in front of my white canvas I wasn't able to paint something that was only mine. I learned to draw, but I do not have that touch of one who has a great talent.

In conclusion, I think that talent is one and only one, but it is so rare and moreover, it should be developed by persons who own it. Despite that, anyone can learn to become a great artist with a work consistently and full dedication.

Writing Feedback / Describe a diagram that shows the enviromentl issues raised by a product [2]

Describe a diagram that shows the environmental issues raised by a product over its life cycle.

The diagram shows us the environment emission increased by the production of industry chain.
We can see a different steps into the chain.
Planning and design the consumer goods is the first step. After that ...

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Writing Feedback / Describe a music video or a concert has made an impression on you. [3]

Describe a music video or a concert has made an impression on you.
You should say:
which kind of music it was and who performed it.
wht it was like musically
what it was like visually
and explain why you liked or disliked it.

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This is the part 2 on IELTS exam, particularly the ORAL EXAM ( I've to speak for 4-5 minutes). I wrote my answer but I don't know if it is good! So, I thought to write it here. If you are so kind to correct it, I'll be grateful for this!!!

" I've decided to speak about an italian singer and when I went to one of his concert in September 2010.
He's one of the most popular singer in Italy, R.Z.
His music is generally defined Light Music.
When I went to the concert in September I had appreciated the orchestra on the stage. It was a joy for my ears!
Moreover, his concert was a pleasure for eyes! The scenary was so beautiful and the structure was so impressive! And furthermore he worn so amazing clothes with a colourful feathers!

He's an icon of transgressive besides a great poet !!! I love him!
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Writing Feedback / It's neither possible nor desirable to do the same job throughout work lives - IELTS [4]

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Thanks a lot in advance!
Ilaria

IELTS EXAM WRITING TASK 2:
STATEMENT:
"These days is neither possible nor desirable for most people to stay in the same job throughout their working lives.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?"
Write at least 250 words.

my essay:

Nowadays it is unlikely for plain folks to endure forever the first job and broadly during their working lives.I totally agree with this statement for various reasons.

Whereas in the past it was possible to start working in young age, today this is nearly impossible. For example, in Italy for youth that have studied at the university it is "normal" to begin working around twenty six, twenty seven years.

A long period of student life is dedicated to the study and this is the reason why many young people begin to work later.
During the period of University odd jobs are many times the only solution for students.
I remember when I was at my first years at the university and I tried to work at the same time of it. It was hard!

Moreover, nowadays the employment contracts are generally in short-term. Seldom you have the chance to carry on the first job for many years. Only long afterwards, after work years, a company decide to hire someone, because for them it is more easier to exploit and to underpay a young boy than hire a skilled person.

On the other hand I think that when someone find a jobs with a long-term contract and today it is an utopia, hopefully it will be for the whole life.

In conclusion, I would say that nowadays it is difficult but not impossible for many people to stay in the same job throughout our working lives, especially in Italy. As often as not it is not our choose but a decision imposed.

Writing Feedback / "Countries of residence of overseas students in Australia" graph for ielts [6]

The graph show four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia.

Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant"

write al least 150 words.

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The chart shows the trend of the numeber of foreign students in Australia between 1982 and 2000. The students' places of origin are four countries: Indonesia, Hong Kong, Malaysia and Singapore.

We can see that overall trend of coutries had in two decades a stedy increse. It is interesting to see that the number of overseas students in Malaysia was around 10.000 of people in the first decade.

Instead the number of Chinese students sharply rose from 1.000 to 10.000.
In the last decade the number of students of this country was more higher than the students of other three.

The trend of Indonesian student gradually incresed from 1987 to 1996 when reached a high point of 19.000 of people in 1997.

Number of students who come from Singapore remained constant for the first eight years. Afterwards, the number of students quickly rose in 1990 but in the overall the amount of people was the lowest regard all countries.

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Writing Feedback / It's good that government taxes the flights, especially in the period of holiday [5]

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I'm trying to improve my writing but I need yours help!
Thank you in advance!
Ilaria

WRITING TASK: "Air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise, pollution and airport construction. One reason for this is the growth low-cost passenger flights, often to holiday destinations.

Some people say that governments should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily.
Do you agree or disagree?

Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

write at least 250 words.

I agree with the statement that government should be try to reduce air traffic with more heavy taxes.
The reason is noise and pollution that airplanes produced and consequently the demanding of airport construction.
Thinking at people who lived near the airports. They live in the noise all the time! I think it is terrible to tolerate!
Moreover, there are a lot of pollution near them. It is dangerous, especially for the children and toddler.
In the long run it may cause breathing diseases or something else.
Solutions could be the reducing of air traffic in specific days of the week or specific hours of the days . Instead another solution could be the air flights in alternative day of the week. Otherwise, the government could hike taxes of the flights especially for the holidays or weekends. Certainly like this more people will discourage to travel or to buy tickets for holiday!

However, this is a problem especially for working people that have to travel. Many times these people use airplanes because they are means of transport faster than car or train.

Moreover we have to consider that airplane is a mean of transport that allows us to visit other countries and for the overseas countries it is sole mean.

In conclusion, I would say that is very important that government taxes the flights, especially in the period of holiday .
It is necessary to reduce air traffic, pollution and noise but it is also necessary assure for working people the possibility to use the air flights.

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Writing Feedback / Media info advantages and disadvantages: comics, books, radio, TV, film, theater [4]

Essay:
Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. state which you consider to be the most effective.
. comics
. books
. radio
. television
. film
. theatre

Give reasons for you answer and include any relavant example from you own knoledge or experience.
Write al least 250 words.

Please help me to review and modify my below essay.
Thank you very much for your help in advance.

My essay:
There are many different types of media for communicating information about our culture or others. The most effective form of media in my point of view are fundamentally three: radio, television and films. We have to consider the advantages and disadvantages of these kinds of media.

The radio informs us about the news of the world. It is a good way of information for example for people who work everyday for a long time and use a car o general means of transport. These kinds of people generally don't have the time to watch TV news on television.

Moreover, radio is a good means of entertainment. In fact, we can listen to music or simply radio shows.
For example, every Thursday evening I listen to my friend on the communal channel radio with a program about rock music. It is nice!
Unfortunately, the radio is only voices without images. This is a disadvantage. We mustn't forget the importance of the impression of images.

TV is another important means of communication. It informs us about general news: politics, economy and society.
We are many times influenced by TV because there are many advertisements about everything and sometimes we are involuntarily obligated to watch some channels.
For example, the TV shows in Italy many times don't represent the population or their interests.
Thinking about the three channels of Mediaset that are owned by our President. The question is: Can this channel represent real life without limitations?
Moreover, we have to consider the kinds of programs such as reality. In my point of view these types of programs are not educative.

Films, instead, are great forms of art and I think that they have only advantages. Films tell us a story or event in history or simply a comedy. It is a good way to stay with our family or friends.

In conclusion, I think that the most important and the most effective kind of media is television. It should be more popular educative and informative than it currently is in Italy.