Undergraduate / Achieving academic success, revolutionary research, studying in Paris - Why UChicago? [10]

The prompt
How does the University of Chicago, as you know it now, satisfy your desire for a particular kind of learning, community, and future? Please address with some specificity your own wishes and how they relate to Chicago.

My response

Coasting down the highway, eager to reach my destination, I began my excursion from Atlanta to Hyde Park. 710 miles separated me from University of Chicago's beautiful snow covered, suburban campus. At last, on the second day of my journey, I arrived in Chicago's metropolitan area and upon spotting the famous museums and attractions I was jolted from my haze of worn cement and white lines. "Yes!" I exclaimed, while fishing through my bag for directions to navigate the unfamiliar streets of Chicago. Eventually, I reached Hyde Park-Maroon territory. As a high school junior, one individual among a mass of prospective students, I only hoped to learn about the curriculum offered at University of Chicago; however, I found so much more. By the end of my visit, I resolved to spend my next four years wearing maroon while exploring my passion for Political Science and Psychology in the Social Sciences division of The College.

During the information session, I discovered that UChicago operates under a ten week calendar system-the quarter system. A medium for autonomy, the quarter system, not only solidified my interest in pursuing a double major, but also set University of Chicago apart during my college search. I loved everything about University of Chicago-from the core curriculum, small class sizes, theological seminary, and Regenstein Library to the house system with resident masters. Moreover, with the flexibility offered at UChicago, I knew I could flourish, be innovative, and fuel my creativity.

Whereas the tour seized my attention, the campus traditions such as scav hunt, summer breeze, estroand testo fest, Super Secular Secret Santa, and dance marathon, compelled me to want to participate, or even initiate my own tradition. As I browsed the shelves of co-op bookstore, I pictured myself as a UChicago undergraduate achieving academic success, engaging in revolutionary research, studying abroad in Paris with the social sciences program, living in Max P, avoiding the seal in the Reynolds Club like the plague, joining the Society for Creative Anachronism, and ice skating for the first time. I imagined myself following the progression of the Cobb Gate Gargoyles; I imagined myself as a Maroon.

I don't really like this essay so any comments with be great. This is due in a few hours so please feel free to be harsh and tell me if I need to add or take something away. As always I will read your essay in return. Thank you

Undergraduate / Great academic and social community--Why BU [5]

The Prompt
Given what you know about Boston University, what do you hope to accomplish as an undergraduate here? Please respond in an essay of no more than 500 words.

My Response

"Boston University is a great academic and social community." This is one of the many things I have discovered about the global institution that is BU. In searching for an extraordinary college, I found BU. With over 250 programs and majors, I can examine multiple fields before choosing among the various internship opportunities offered to satisfy any career track.

As a Boston University undergraduate I want to exploit the BU Advantage. Located in the metropolitan city of Boston, BU will provide me with a place to grow, educate my inquiring mind, interact with a diverse range of people, and be unique. I aspire to be a member of the BU community. I want to discover new things and take on new interests. I want to personalize my Boston University degree by double majoring in the College of Arts and Sciences, not only pursuing my passion for medicine and Political Science, but also learning how to play the piano.

BU turns students into professionals. As doctors turn sick patients into healthy ones, Boston University turns student's passions into a career. I want to be that doctor, the one performing an exploratory surgery to find a tumor, the one who follows a patient through sickness and health. As a result, upon graduating college I wish to pursue graduate school and eventually enter the workforce with a career in medicine. I believe that Boston University can prepare for success with their emphasis on a liberal arts curriculum. With a diverse background in core subjects such as humanities and math, I can receive a holistic education while still focusing on my academic discipline.

As a Boston University undergraduate I imagine myself achieving academic success, engaging in revolutionary research, living in Warren Towers, fueling my creativity through the Travel Writing in Australia program, and participating in the Washington Internship Program experiencing politics firsthand. I want to bask in the sun of the BU beach while reading an intriguing novel as well as catch "the T" to immerse myself in Boston's culture. I want to take a walk through the Boston Commons and catch a weekend performance in the basement of the George Sherman student union, play intramural sports, drift along the lazy river, and attend hockey games.

College is a medium through which student can turn themselves into what they want to be. I hope to be a Boston University student; I want to be a Terrier.

Any comments are welcome and appreciated. Do you think I should add anything, take anything out, or expand on anything? As always I am willing to edit anyone's essay in return. Thank You.

Undergraduate / "Women are still not equal to men" - Why Wellesley short [4]

The Prompt
'When choosing a college, you are choosing an intellectual community and a place where you believe that you can live, learn, and flourish. To this end, the Board of Admission is interested in knowing your reasons for applying to Wellesley College and how Wellesley will help you to realize your personal and academic goals.'

My response
Tethered to the world by the chains of history, women are still engaged in a struggle to obtain equality that is effortlessly given to men. We are immersed in a culture where women are no longer required to tread ten steps behind a man, nonetheless, I want more. I want to sing myself hoarse during Step-Singing, I want to browse the shelves of the campus library, and I want bask in the sun on the Severance Green.

Tethered to the world by the chains of history, women are still engaged in a struggle to obtain societal positions that are effortlessly given to men. We may live in a culture where women are no longer required to tread ten steps behind a man, but progress still needs to be made. Clair Babrowski, retired Executive Vice President of Toys 'R' Us, once said, "We picture men in leadership roles. As a woman you already have this hurdle to overcome." As a woman interested in pursuing a career field dominated by men, I believe Wellesley College can help me overcome these hurdles and provide me with the foundation necessary for success. Wellesley cultivates leaders, and I intend to be one.

Wellesley College has an unparalleled academic and social community that transforms students into professionals and individual passions into a career. With the flexibility of a liberal arts curriculum, at Wellesley I can flourish, be innovative, and fulfill my educational desires. At Wellesley, I want to sing myself hoarse during Step-Singing, I want to browse the shelves of the campus library, and I want bask in the sun on the Severance Green. Wellesley gives students a voice and with the small class sizes, my voice will be heard. The college's dedication to service and leadership will prepare me for post graduate life, by providing me with a holistic education, while also allowing me to focus on my academic disciplines of International Relations and Political Science. Additionally, Wellesley will provide me with a place to be unique, to grow, to educate my inquiring mind, and to interact with a diverse body of people. As a Wellesley student, I can picture myself achieving academic success, studying abroad, engaging in revolutionary research, living in Tower Court, and participating in the Wellesley in Washington Internship Program. Furthermore, with the exchange program and the city of Boston located only miles away, there are no limits to a Wellesley education.

College is a medium through which students can turn themselves into what they want to be. I aspire to be a member of the Wellesley community; I want to be a Wellesley Woman. Moreover, I want to live by the Wellesley motto "Non Ministrari sed Ministrare-Not to be ministered unto, but to minister"

Any feedback would be great as this is due today and I will read your essay in return. Do you think I should add more because I feel like I should. Be mean please

Undergraduate / Emory College why Emory. "The wise heart seeks knowledge" [3]

The Prompt
Many students decide to apply to Emory College based on our size, location, reputation, and yes, the weather. Besides these valid reasons for making Emory College a possible college choice, why is Emory College a particularly good match for you?

Emory College has an unparalleled academic and social community that transforms students into professionals and individual passions into a career. I know that at Emory University I can flourish, be innovative, and fulfill my educational desires.

I first stumbled upon Emory as a timid third grader; my stepfather worked at Emory Hospital and was admitted as a patient there after he had an aneurysm. One afternoon, tired of being pent up in the hospital for days, my Uncle approached my sister and me saying, "We were going on an adventure." This mysterious adventure led us to the urban campus of Emory University and after walking through the Haygood-Hopkins Memorial Gateway, I knew Emory was where I wanted to attend college.

Now, years later I still aspire to be an Emory Eagle. I want to visit different booths on Wonderful Wednesday, I want to browse the shelves of the Robert W. Woodruff library, and I want participate in Cultural Beats. Emory will provide me with a place to grow, educate my inquiring mind, and interact with a diverse body of people. As an Emory student, I see myself achieving academic success, engaging in revolutionary research, training to become an EMT-Intermediate, and participating in the Emory European Politics Program. At Emory College I can pursue my academic disciplines of Political Science and Psychology without limits.

College is a medium through which students can turn themselves into what they want to be. I aspire to be a member of the Emory community. Moreover, I want to live by the Emory motto, "Cor Prudentis Possidebit Scientiam" or "The wise heart seeks knowledge." My heart desires the knowledge acquired through an Emory education.

Any help is appreciated as this is due tomorrow and I am willing to read your essays in return. Also this is over the word limit so any cuts are also welcome. Thank you in advance and be harsh.

Undergraduate / I want to be a leader. Why Oxford essay [5]

1. Describe your specific interest in beginning your Emory career at Oxford College and how you think our liberal arts intensive education is a good match for you.

Oxford College cultivates leaders, and I intend to be one. Moreover, the college's dedication to service and leadership will prepare me for post undergraduate life and future endeavors.

By beginning my undergraduate study at Oxford, I will be afforded a comfortable transition from my small high school to the close knit community of Oxford College. With the multitude of opportunities offered at Oxford, I will be able to pursue my various interests such as writing an article for The Spokesman, participating in Theory- Practice/Service Learning (TPSL), or rock climbing on the quad.

Oxford gives students a voice and with the small class sizes, my voice will be heard. Similarly, with the flexible liberal arts curriculum offered at Oxford College, I will receive a holistic education, taking interesting courses such as Human Nature in Politics from the Feminine Perspective encompassing both my academic interests of Political Science and Psychology.

I have always been told that, "the consequences of choices lie in the future," and that the framework of our future is constructed by our actions now. Therefore, I am making a decision about my future by choosing to be a leader and by choosing to apply to Oxford College. I am designating my future because with an Oxford education, I know I will obtain the foundation necessary for success. At Oxford I will become a change agent.

Undergraduate / "a history that began in rural Mississippi" - Michigan short culture essay [3]

Rural Mississippi

Tethered to the world by the chains of history; I covet the stories of my ancestors. I am defined by my community, by my ethnicity, and by my history, but I am also defined by unique identity.

My family history began in Sharon, Mississippi where my great-great grandmother Minerva Mae Davis married Reggie Caleb Porter and later made a home with their nine children: Phillip, Eldridge, Reggie Jr., Lloyd, Minnie, John, Coleman, Robert, and Maudell. Reggie Sr., a railroad worker, died in a train accident and Minerva Mae died of kidney failure after sitting in a hospital waiting room for two days. She was denied treatment because of her ethnicity, constantly being shoved down the waiting list every time a Caucasian walked through the door. Eventually, Minerva Mae acquiesced to her fate and returned home where she died in her sleep. Therefore, after the death of her parents, Minnie, the oldest took over the care of her younger siblings.

This story is the foundation of my heritage, a history that began in rural Mississippi, but now, occupies a multitude of different geographies. I am a member of the Minerva May Davis family, her community. A community that now encompasses different religions, education levels, and incomes.

I am among the two hundred proud individuals that attends the family reunion each Fourth of July, sporting the uniform brightly colored family t-shirt. Moreover, I sit perched among the family tree as the granddaughter of Reggie Jr., the second youngest child of Reggie Sr. and Minerva Mae.

I feel like this is missing something and needs work so any comments are greatly appreciated and I will read your essay in return. Thank you

Undergraduate / Why Michigan? Political Science and Psychology [4]

Describe the unique qualities that attract you to the specific undergraduate College or School (including preferred admission and dual degree programs) to which you are applying at the University of Michigan.

As I matured, I was perpetually asked, "What do you want to be when you grow up?" Despite the monotony of the question, I always enthusiastically set about describing my desired career path. As to be expected, my response varied frequently over the years, but I now aspire to be a doctor with a law degree. Subsequently, I believe the University of Michigan is the perfect place to implement my personalized career path, majoring in Political Science and Psychology in The College of Literature, Science, and the Arts.

I am drawn to The College of Literature, Science, and the Arts at U-M because of its liberal arts curriculum. As my career endeavors have changed countless times in the past, at U-M, I do not have to be wary of a newly acquired academic interest. Additionally, with the offering of Michigan Learning Communities, I would belong to a smaller community within the larger University of Michigan community. Therefore, in a MLC, I would be connected with students and professors who share my interests. Nonetheless, with academic advisors, learning centers, Project Outreach, and ADVICE Online there are no limits to a University of Michigan education.

As a renowned research institution, U-M is my quintessential academic and social community and as an undergraduate, I want to be a part of the "Michigan Difference." U-M turns students into professionals and individual passions into a career; therefore, I know that Michigan can prepare me for future success. Furthermore, as a University of Michigan LSA undergraduate I can fulfill my educational interests, participate in revolutionary research, and study abroad. University of Michigan will provide me with a place to grow, learn, interact with a diverse group of individuals, and be unique. Similarly, as an LSA undergraduate, I imagine myself browsing the well-stocked shelves of the one of the world's largest library systems, as well as, playing intramural sports.

College is a medium through which students can turn themselves into what they want to be. I aspire to be a member of the extensive University of Michigan LSA community; I want to be a Wolverine.

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