simardownn
Dec 30, 2010
Undergraduate / "My cozy blue chair" my Notre Dame Essay and my Rochester essay [10]
Sorry, I didn't mention this before but I am confused as to how you are trying to use the word clandestine. Maybe you meant: Clandestinely hidden among the maze of bookshelves, I find my niche.
Walking through the cozy school library , the sun has yet to rise as I head directly towards my favorite nookYou already said you were walking why mention it again?consisting of a haggard looking blue bean bag chair and a mildly uncomfortable blue gaming chair. There, seated against the emergency exit, the one that continuously blows the cold winter air;,I contemplate my successes, failures, and what I hope my future triumphs to be . I think you could let the leaders learn that you are going to tak about your succeses and failure as you say succes, failure... Here, you can add something like. my thoughts consume me. With this brevity, you can add another one of your thoughts later on. I was victorious in my last tennis match, success. It was a doubles match.Don't state this after the fact you have already mentioned the success part I have yet to paint all of my bedroom walls, failure, but it makes an excellent accent wallSame as above you alredy mentioned it was a failure. Gazing upward, I ponder the newly released novels shelved above me in the young adult fiction domain-then, however, another shiver causesmakes me to question why I consistently forget to wear a coat!.
With more of the stuff cut out, you can add another thoughtful example. I LOOVED the way you introduced you ending w/ the exit door! It really connected!
Sorry, I didn't mention this before but I am confused as to how you are trying to use the word clandestine. Maybe you meant: Clandestinely hidden among the maze of bookshelves, I find my niche.
Walking through the cozy school library , the sun has yet to rise as I head directly towards my favorite nookYou already said you were walking why mention it again?consisting of a haggard looking blue bean bag chair and a mildly uncomfortable blue gaming chair. There, seated against the emergency exit, the one that continuously blows the cold winter air
With more of the stuff cut out, you can add another thoughtful example. I LOOVED the way you introduced you ending w/ the exit door! It really connected!