Undergraduate / 'Everybody has a place' - stanford What matters to you prompt [9]

I reaaaly need help I am over the character list by like 400 but I feel that everything as important(haha no pun intended)I need to know what to edit or delete. I appreciate any help but I mainly need to edit stylistic errors and gramatical ones. >_<

What matters to me most? It is a difficult question to answer because it is like picking one child over the other. I feel so passionate about almost everything that when faced to choose I think I might implode form the tension. That is why the most important things to me are the one that are all encompassing. Everything that we perceive as being important is derived from the people around us. The president himself is only important to us if we let him to be. To me this is why I feel that individualism is being left out in our world's growing pop culture.

The media idols we see on television supposedly promote individualism but in reality only foster actions that are approved by everyone else. They tell us to care about our appearances and to donate to charities by dialing a phone number. Not that any of these are necessarily bad but they damage our abilities as free thinkers. Appearances are there to please the public and donations are the easy way out to supposedly helping. These are solutions that are given to us without our input.

We need to be able to give our own input as to promote advancement. Back in the day everyone who kept a garden had to pluck weeds and cut the grass manually because that was just the way things were done. If it was not for Edwin Budding stepping out of society's mold, everyone would be doing things the old fashioned way.

Like I said before, everything and everybody matters. Some may say that is not true, that saying, "everyone is special is the same as saying nobody is." Everyone has the skill to become great so everyone is special, but it is those who look within themselves and master their skills that come on top. Personally I find this to be true because I grew up being a poor immigrant kid in a barrio where I was not expected to amount to much. Now I am at the top percent of my class and everyone expects me to turn out on top. It frustrates me to see that others believe that they are worthless and let themselves believe that due to their economic status in society. They feel as if they are shackled by being labeled as a lower class citizen which is why I feel that I need to find my sense of individualism by helping others with theirs. I want to contribute to their education as to keep something as pretentious as money from having them leave their mark on the world.

Undergraduate / 'to study law while hanging upside down' - Stanford's Roommate essay [14]

well this my first draft so its likely to be erroneous. Please be brutal and correct my stylistic and gramatical errors. Any help is appreciated.

To My Future Roomie:
You will find that upon unpacking that I am a perfectly normal individual. In my bags you will find a mimosa pudica, wind-up toy parts, and some cans of Mexican hominy. Aside from the fact that they are completely unrelated you will see that they are perfectly normal. I will probably spend my free time cross pollinating plants hoping to create a helpful hybrid plant or building an automatic window cleaner but like I said it's nothing out of the ordinary.

Just like the next guy I am going to study law while hanging upside down from the roof and disinfecting the walls with my very own cleaning elixir I have made with my hybrid plants. I am just a normal average Joe who occasionally catalogs the breeds of stray animals. Do not worry though its not like I am going to let the stray animals eat in the kitchen while I analyze their fur samples...I'll have them stay on your side of the room as to keep them from messing with my hybrid plants. I know that from one average Joe to another, keeping our genetically modified organisms safe is our priority.

Speaking of which have you seen my collection of modified potatoes? Well, recently I have been looking into them to see if their taste really differs from normal potatoes so I have been making various foods including them. I think you will notice that the jelly fish genes in the potatoes create a distinct taste don't you think? Well besides the fact that these potatoes now GLOW in the dark I think they help average Joes such as our selves as they are resistant to pests (mainly our neighbors sneaking in for free food).

Besides all my, "normal" hobbies, I think that you will like having me as your roommate. I am very organized and keep everything to a schedule. Every hour on the hour you'll hear my duck alarm, "Quack" when its time for me to get something done but really- who needs an alarm when I am the only quack we need. From my breeding glowing substances to making "Jetson" themed contraptions I am sure I'll keep you entertained.