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Posts by karissa_a16
Joined: Dec 26, 2011
Last Post: Dec 31, 2011
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karissa_a16   
Dec 29, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Quit, you will be better without it' - running common app essay [3]

the whole music metaphor is reaaaaaaaally cliche. Sorry. What if you recounted an important race your parents didn't attend and how it shaped you? That might be better. Please check out my NYU essay. Good luck!
karissa_a16   
Dec 29, 2011
Undergraduate / WHY DUKE?? Management and Market Program + Civic Engagement [7]

By taking courses like MMS 180: Entrepreneurial Opportunities & Finance, SOC 126: The Challenges of Development, and SOC 145: Nations, Regions & the Global Economy

cutting that helps it flow better. I don't think it's redundant because they all relate to what you described in your essay in different ways.
karissa_a16   
Dec 30, 2011
Undergraduate / Commonapp- Picking My Eyebrows [16]

Okay, so this is my fourth try at my common app essay because I felt that all of my previous attempts really weren't... me. So here goes. Please be brutally honest!!!!

As I am writing this essay, I am also picking at my eyebrows (note that I say picking, not pulling out; my eyebrows are still intact). My habit may not particularly constructive, but there is something about the feeling of a tiny hair in between my thumb and index finger that I cannot seem to get enough of. It is a rather soothing practice that has gotten me through some stressful times in my life. No matter how many friends and acquaintances come and go, my eyebrows and fingers are always at my disposal. In addition, picking helps me focus on the task at hand. It has definitely helped me get through all nighters, SAT's, and homework, among other things.

As much as I enjoy picking, I feel alone in my odd habit at times. There are no posters that state "If you pick your eyebrows, you are in good company," and my family likes to make fun of me when I am in the middle of a good pick. They cannot comprehend the bliss that my habit brings me, and I do not expect them or anyone else to understand. Nonetheless, I will continue to pick my eyebrows because I do not see any legitimate reason to stop. I have come to embrace this strange quirk of mine despite the naysayers. After all, my habit is one of the few things that is completely and uniquely my own, since, as far as I know, I am the only picker in the world.

If picking has taught me anything, it's that the small, personal things that make each individual unique are the foundation of diversity, not necessarily race or socioeconomic status. When it comes down to it, people are very similar to each other, no matter how much we try to stand out. I consider a group of people to be diverse when each person has distinct peculiarities, ranging from the somewhat normal to the completely strange. I, for example, am an identical twin who knows how to knit, hates beef jerky with a passion, and loves to pick her brows. As much as I appreciate ethnic diversity, I also admire personal variety. Interesting stories transcend societal barriers and make for very exciting friendships and acquaintances. In college, I envision students with radically different backgrounds, oddities, likes, and dislikes coming together and appreciating each other for the little, seemingly insignificant things that make us unique.

If variety be the spice of life, pick on.
karissa_a16   
Dec 30, 2011
Undergraduate / Notre-Dame Supp: "The Unexplored"/"Moral Radiance" [7]

I like the second one. I think you should focus a little more on notre dame specifically, but don't put in fluff just for the sake of length. it is a personals statement afterall. Please read mine! Thanks!
karissa_a16   
Dec 30, 2011
Undergraduate / UVa supplement - Engineering Essay "Glass Bridge" [2]

you have a cool idea with the glass floor thing. I don't really know anything about engineering, but I would definitely use that bridge if it existed haha. I think that you shouldn't focus on the park part at all because it's kind of irrelevant. there's a lot of irrelevant material in the beginning of your essay. Please read my common app one. Thanks!
karissa_a16   
Dec 30, 2011
Undergraduate / Commonapp- Picking My Eyebrows [16]

@Jasononwenu: A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your personal background, describe an experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community, or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you.
karissa_a16   
Dec 30, 2011
Undergraduate / 'like the bridge in the guitar' - Why Conncoll? [4]

I think you should expand on the small school thing. some of the diction gets repetitive, though. Please check out my common app one. Thanks!
karissa_a16   
Dec 30, 2011
Undergraduate / UVa Supplement - World I come from "Neighbors" [3]

Your writing style comes off as kind of juvenile to me. You have a good concept here but you need to find a different way of writing about it. Please check out my common app one. Thanks!
karissa_a16   
Dec 30, 2011
Undergraduate / 'the Kimmel center' - WHY NYU? Supplement [8]

I think you could substitute columbia or any other school into this essay and it would still make sense. I think you should focus on the portal schools because that's something NYU prides themself on. If you can go over this essay and you cant substitute another school, then it will be great. Please check out my common app one. Thanks!
karissa_a16   
Dec 31, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Hispanic culture / Medicine / Jewish Men' - NYU Supplement [5]

Okay. Your second and third ones are reaaaaaaaaaaally inappropriate. I think you tried to put some humor in there but it definitely did not work! They were really funny from a teenage standpoint, but an AO would probably not be so accepting (no pun intended). Your first one has a good concept, but you need to execute it better. Sorry :/ Please check out my common app one. Thanks!

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