Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] need for land kept in natural condition or developed for housing, industry? [4]

Land plays a vital role in every country. It's where people live and work the entire life as well as the habitat for various animals. Although some people want more of it to develop industry and housing because they pay particular attention to economy and amenities, others want to keep the land in its natural condition. In my view, there is more need for land to be left in natural condition in my country for two important reasons.

First of all, the people in my country are suffering the air pollution because there are more land to be used for manufacturing industry. The government built a lot of skyscrapers and allowed countless factories to be established. Consequently, the waste from these factories caused harm to the environment and there is not enough fresh air for people to breathe. For example, I live in the populous industrial Ho Chi Minh city in Vietnam. There are a plethora of high buildings and factories in here. A sugar production firm failed to manage its waste and polluted a river in the city altogether. In addition, there is always traffic jam during the rush hour in the city. I get frustrated every time I go out because of the traffic and the harmful smoke from the vehicles. Moreover, I want to break loose from this polluted crowded city but I don't know where to go to enjoy fresh air because there are limited places for me to come to. As you can see, my country needs nothing but more land in natural condition for a clean environment.

Secondly, deforestation is growing in popularity to have more land for industry and housing in my country. As a result, we are likely to suffer the bad consequences of the flood because there are not enough trees to hinder the flood. For instance, in Lam Dong, a province in Vietnam, where there used to be numerous trees, they cut down more and more trees to sell and used the land to build more houses and develop the industry. Unfortunately, last year, a flood happened and killed a large number of people as well as damaged most of factories. This tragic experience taught me that land is necessary to grow trees with the aim of protecting people from natural disasters.

To sum up, there is a growing need for more land to be left in natural conditions in my country. The reason is that the residents in my country are suffering not only the polluted air but also the natural disasters because of lack of land. People should conserve more land if they want to have a healthy living environment for themselves as well as their future generations.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL; you have enough money to purchase a house or a business. Which one you buy? [5]

Both a house and a business play a vital role in our lives. They all are indispensable and help show their owner's social status. Although some people love to purchase a business when they have enough money because they desire to make as much money as possible, others tend to buy their own house first. In my view, purchasing a house is my preference if I have enough money for two important reasons.

First of all, a stable and safe house is believed to be the driving force behind a person's success. There is a Vietnamese saying that says that only after you have your own house, you easily prosper and become successful. It is equivalent to the English proverb which states "the rolling stone gathers no moss". For example, my mother managed to buy a house 3 years ago. Before then, we had to rent it and it was not a beautiful house. Every time it rained, the ceiling leaked. After my mother purchased it from the previous owner, she had it fixed and upgraded it into three- floor house. She began to buy numerous pieces of furniture to decorate her new house. It is more comfortable living in this big house. So, we are happy all the time and like spending more time together in this house. Moreover, after purchasing the new house, she didn't need to think much of the rent and focused most of her time on her work. As a result, she got promoted. She now has both a beautiful house and a thriving career. As you can see, owning a house lays the foundation for a thriving career and a happy life.

The second reason why I prefer buying a house first is that it facilitates my dream lifestyle . I like to go home and enjoy time with my family after a hard day. It is the way to refresh myself in this stressful life. I love my family and I want to provide them with a big house to live in. For instance, when I was in high school, after a hard day studying, I loved to go home right away to have dinner with my parents. We often talked about the events happening to every members that day. It was such a cozy family atmosphere. After having dinner, we spent time together in the living room watching TV. I find the life worth living when I can spend time with my parents in the house. Although I may encounter challenging problems and issues at school, my parents always offer me some plausible solutions to those problems when we have dinner together at home. Indeed, a house is indispensable for maintaining my desired lifestyle.

To sum up, I would rather purchase a house than a business. Not only does a house lay a foundation for my success but also it helps me live an enjoyable life and have a good relationship with my family. Everyone should have a big and comfortable house to live in and enjoy life as much as possible.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL; Some people treat their pets as members of their family. Is it good or not? [4]

Pets play a vital part in our lives. They live with us in the same house and sometimes protect us from dangers. Although some people act cruel to their pets because they just regard these pets as normal animals, a great majority of people have close relationships with their pets such as birds, cats and other animals and treat them as members of their family. In my view, these relationships are good for two important reasons.

First of all, love for animals helps us increase humanity. When we raise and take good care of our pets as our members of our family, it means that we possess a kind heart. The more we love our pets, the better we tend to treat other people. For example, I have a next-door warm-hearted neighbor named John . He has a big dog and spends most of his spare time playing with and taking care of it. He keeps it at home, walk it to the park after he is back from work and lets it sleep with him in bed every night. Especially, he is the most generous and helpful guy I have ever known. He often helps the other neighbors fix the sink, repair the roof and so on. He is always there for help. Indeed, good relationships with our pets help us become nicer and more warm-hearted individuals.

Secondly, good relationships with pets help release tension in daily life . It is fun and relaxing to have them as our close friends and play with them after a hard day at work or at school. For instances, I remember looking after a kitty when I was in high school. She was very cute and had an attractive soft fur. Every time I was home from school, it right jumped into my lap to greet me. I enjoyed embracing it and stroking its fur. My stress at school disappeared altogether when I was with my lovely cat. This loving experience taught me that having pets as your close friends is a way of relieving stress and enhancing your life.

In sum, it is beneficial to maintain good relationships with our pets and treat them as members of our family. Not only does this help us develop more love for the surrounding people but also help us easily have a relaxing life. People should raise a pet in the house to find the life beautiful and worth living.

Writing Feedback / What you have learned about a country from its movies - 'culture & attractions' [6]

Please give your comment on my essay. Every feedback is highly appreciated!

The country plays a crucial role in everybody's lives. It's where we are born and spend the most of our lives. It is said that films tell us a lot about the country where they are made. In my view, culture and tourist attractions are two things I have learned most about a country after I watch its movies.

First of all, I gain the understanding of the culture of a country from its motion pictures. When we watch any films, we will be exposed to the way the residents of that country dress, the lifestyle which is prevalent in the country. For example, I often enjoy American films at home with my friends on weekends . The film stars always wear the most fashionable apparel. People in the US also love casual clothes such as jeans and T-shirt. The actors and actresses in the films often have guns for the purpose of self-defense at home and sometimes carry guns with them. They even shoot one another immediately every time they have conflict. Moreover, I am often exposed to the sex scene in the American films. They have sex after they just meet the first time in the bar or club. American films give me the overriding impression that America is the country that promotes violence and free sex life. As you can see, the more movies from a country I watch, the more I learn about the culture of the country.

The breathtaking attractions of a country is also what I have learned about that country after I watch its films. The film makers often choose the most beautiful places of the country to put in the film, which attracts more audience to some extent. For instance, I remember I watched some romantic American films. I especially love the scene of the autumn leaves in the film. When I watched the films and saw that scenes, I think that American is a peaceful and romantic country with numerous autumn leaves over the street. After watching some of its movies, I learn that Boston in particular and the Eastern States in general are where the fall is the most breathtaking across the nation. I also learn that Eastern States have harsher weather than Western States. In addition to, the Golden Bridge and Statue of Liberty are what often appears in the film. They convey freedom and beauty of the construction. Also, they are widely regarded as the symbols of the US and the must-visit tourist attractions. Indeed, thanks to watching American films, I know the specific places in the US I should visit and spend time enjoying the beauty and atmosphere.

In sum, I learn more about the culture and the attractions of a country when I watch its movies. They gradually make me desire to visit the country to experience the lifestyle and enjoy the beauty in person. Everyone should watch the movies of their desired country if they want to gain more knowledge of the country or want to travel without arriving at the country thanks to its films

Writing Feedback / Studying alone is a best fit for my life. It allows me to freely choose the convenient time to study [6]

Studying is an integral part of our lives, especially students' ones. It helps broaden our knowledge about our surrounding world and increase our wisdom as well. No one living on earth doesn't get invoIved in studying activity. Although some students love studying in a group of people because they can benefit considerably from exchanging ideas, others favor studying alone. In my view, studying alone is very suitable for me for 2 important reasons.

First, studying by myself allows me to actively choose the most convenient moment in the day to study. I can go to work to support myself or hang out with my friends and study at my convenience at the rest of the day if I manage the time effectively. In other words, studying alone helps me kill 2 birds with one stone. For example, when I studied for the Toefl last year, I had a very busy schedule. I had to go to work full time at Mc Donald's. I worked the afternoon shift from 11am to 7pm, which meant I only could study in the morning and the night after work. Every day, I woke up at 6am and spent my waking time on practicing listening for exactly 2 hours. Then I went to work at 11pm. After back home from work at 7pm, I had dinner and started studying again from 9pm to 11pm. Although the employer sometimes changed the working schedule every week, I still found the spare time to study because my studying time was flexible. As you can see, studying alone facilitates my hectic lifestyle.

The second reason why studying alone is my preference is that I can avoid the possible conflict of ideas which takes time to resolve when I study in a group. When studying by myself, I don't waste any precious time on arguments . So, I have more time to lead my busy life. For instance, I remembered when I was in high school in 2009, I had to work on a project along with 3 friends in a biology class taught by the teacher Lee. We had to write a report about the frog's body. We had so many different ideas and didn't finish the report until the last minute. We spent 2 days doing the research, reviewing the lesson, discussing together and finally reached a consensus in time . If I had done the project by myself, I would have been done with the report sooner. This experience taught me that studying alone will save me time and free me from conflict.

In a nutshell, studying alone is a best fit for my life. It allows me to freely choose the convenient time to study. Moreover, it helps me not get involved in any possible conflict of ideas which is time-consuming to resolve. I think people should choose the studying method which is the most suitable for them to achieve the best results both at school and in life.