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Name: maria sultana
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mariasultana   
Jun 12, 2014
Writing Feedback / People are able to work or study from home, no need to travel to work or college [NEW]

In some countries, with the widespread use of the internet, people are able to work or study from home, instead of having to travel to work or college. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Discuss and state your own opinion.

Internet Harassment



Revolution in information and telecommunication changed the world wide into global village; people can do their jobs anytime, anywhere in the world easily. Everything has advantages and disadvantages, similarly there are also numerous merits and demerits of internet.

Now internet has become essential, it is using in each and every field of life. Huge amount of information is available for each topic; people can search about their interested topic. Thousands of sites such as Wikipedia, Ask, Yahoo answer, are great sources of information by using these sites students can get data and study easily just at home.

Similarly, people can do their jobs at home they do not need to travel to far places to earn money. Many companies offer online jobs, interested people can get these works by just uploading their CVs. As well as freelance sites, as Fiverr, Freelancer, and Elance, also available, people get jobs by using their extra ordinary skills. In the same way people can purchase goods online just by one click of mouse, lot of shopping stores provide free home delivery service.

In contrary, no one can deny the disadvantages of internet. Now students prefer to do work at home as compared to go to colleges, it is devastating situation because man appearance is necessary to learn. Teachers are best to guide students what is better for them, students are losing teacher's guide and honor. Many children do not know what they want to search on internet, they start surf and it might be possible they search sites which are dangerous for their spiritual health. Internet is the source to hack personal information, when users enter their personal data hackers can fetch this and can use this for illegal purposes. As well as some jobs giving sites deceive people, they take money from users and then dodge them.

In conclusion, people must use the internet with safety measurements to save themselves the harassment of internet. In fact, advantages overweigh the disadvantages, just we need healthy protection.
mariasultana   
Mar 7, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Solving the issues of growing traffic and pollution - Increase petrol price? [6]

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree and disagree?
What other measures do you think might be effective?


Government are taking intensive steps to reduce the intensity of pollution in the environment. Price of petrol is the controversial issue, nowadays. Petrol's price is at peak in the world market, and the purpose is to decrease the air pollution and traffic. It is the one solution to control this extreme problem, but this is not an everlasting solution. I disagree to this statement; governments should manipulate this problem by taking other effective measurements.

First and foremost, establish the strong network of public transport in the country. Nowadays, people argue that they cannot complete their work specific time due to lack of public transport. It is the responsibility of government, however, to move anywhere in the town, transport must be available at any time within twenty four hours. As well as, public transport fares should be reasonable, so that everyone take advantage of this facility. For example, Mexico City has strong public transport network, and pollution is under control within this city.

Secondly, create awareness among people about pollution and its' dangerous effects. Government should educate people through media and advertisements. Media is becoming popular, nowadays, it must play vital role in the society to realize how to control pollution.

Lastly, governments take other certain steps, high sale price of cars, reduce the production of private transport and import must be declined, to control these problems. As well as, by reducing import of cars economy of country will be established. Similarly, due to high prices of cars, people will use public transport, and this is another factor to grow economy.

To sum up, governments must take these above mentioned measurements against those severe problems. Although, price of petrol is not enough solution.
mariasultana   
Mar 4, 2014
Writing Feedback / Some are born with talents and others not; Discuss! [5]

It is generally believe that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport and music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

God gifted abilities are strength for a child. However, it is also sparked a heated debate that a child who is not born with in-built talents, can achieve these talents? People argue that children can build these aptitudes by using some techniques, such as special classes and training.

A child can achieve success after a little struggle, who born with certain talents, such as sports and music. He/she also needs some training to refine his/her talent. Similarly, some children have genetic talents. As, if their parent have special aptitudes of sports and music, then these talents can be transfer to the children. For instance, Muhammad Ali was born with God gifted talent of sports, he earned name in the field of boxing. Due to genetic talent, his daughter was born this talent, and she is also good boxer.

On the other hand, who have not talent about anything can achieve this. Nowadays, many special classes and training centres are available in all over the world. People can join these classes related to their interested ability. Certainly, they become successful sportsmen and musicians. Although, it is the responsibility of parents examine the specific talent of their children and encourage them. As well as, boost them to join training centres to nourish that talent. For example, nowadays many big platforms are available for music, such as American idol, Indian idol and Pakistan idol. Children go there and learn about their voice ability, and try to improve this ability. As well as, these platforms build the confidence and improve patience.

To sum up, children who born with talents can achieve success. After much training other children can achieve success, although and become successful in the future.
mariasultana   
Feb 28, 2014
Writing Feedback / Relationship between HIGH SALES & POWER OF ADVERTISING [6]

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.

Today is the age of technology; media has deep influence on the life of men. Nowadays, almost every products company use media advertisements to expand their products. These advertisements attract people to buy goods; even they have no need of those things. Now it is the spark debated that advertisements are changing the lifestyle of man through many aspects. However, it depends on the man think first to purchase anything.

Nowadays, products makers hire big advertising companies to promote their merchandise. However, these advertising companies organise advertisements in such a pretty way that attract people, specially adults to purchase those goods without need of that. Now, companies use actors and film stars to play a role in advertisements to offer merchandise in an attractive way. In this way, adults want to buy those things which are presented by their favourite celebrities. Similarly, food and toys' companies are producing advertisements based on music and thrill. In this way, they target children to buy these goods. For example, nowadays lots of mobile advertisements are presented by famous film stars, this thing attract the youngsters to buy these products.

On the other hand, these advertisements have negative impacts on society to some extent. Advertisements motivate adults to buy unnecessary things and in some situations it is difficult for parents to fulfil their desires. Similarly, many people can afford these unnecessary things and show off their things. In addition, it has negatively affected others mind. However, it is the responsibility of people realise the things which are necessary for them.

It is concluded that it is the man dependence to purchase things and advertisements have no effects. However, in the case of children it is difficult for parents to control them. It is the duty of government to ban such advertisements which exploit the society.
mariasultana   
Feb 28, 2014
Writing Feedback / Parents are the best teachers ? It's a controversial issue [9]

Introduction is not good.
Parents had been standing beside their sons and daughters day by day. What do you mean by it?
They helped us learn how to stand, how to walk. Furthermore, they helped their children how to speak the first voices.
I rewrote this as; They help their children to learn the basics of childhood such as how to walk and how to speak.

There is lots of such errors and coherence problem.
mariasultana   
Feb 27, 2014
Writing Feedback / International sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions [2]

Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.

Due to some political issues and agendas between different countries international problems and tensions are increasing dramatically. Similarly, fans of the homeland are more conscious about their nations. In this situation, international sporting events such as Olympic and FIFA are playing important role to relax people mentally and reduce international tensions and nationalist feelings.

The most important thing about these sporting events that people from different parts of the world relating different cultures and religions, come together. In this way, they communicate in friendly environment and know each other. This is the best way to decrease tensions and patriotic feelings. Nations come close and solve their problems. For instance, in ICC world cup matches 2011, although Pakistanis do not like Sri Lanka but in that match Pakistanis were cheering for Sri Lanka.

Similarly, athletes are possessive about their countries and want to win for the fame of the country. They try their best to fulfil hope of their country fellows and people encourage their athletes in the same way. On the other hand, if the athletes cannot win, they do not show jealousy element for other athletes. They meet them with open heart and congratulates for their win. Fans of the athletes follow them and congratulates to the other countrymen out of the political issues.

In conclusion, sporting occasions are necessary for ease problems and brings the different nations come close. Countries solve their political problems to reduce international tensions and try to peace in the world.
mariasultana   
Feb 26, 2014
Writing Feedback / "Prevention is better than cure". Out of a country's health budget, [9]

In conclusion, it is the duty of governments that they provide better health services as well as educate their public. So government should specified specific budget for both of these rather than transfer the health budget to other preventative measurements.

This is the remaining part of the above essay "Prevention is better than cure".
mariasultana   
Feb 25, 2014
Writing Feedback / Paid work must be appreciated but it must be good for children's health and mind [5]

In many countries children are engaged in different kinds of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion?

Paid work is hard, but sometimes it is attractive and sometimes it is essential for people. But, for children it depends on the areas and types of the work. Voluntary works are important and refine characters of the children. On the other hand, labour works are proved to be hard for child's health and mind. My idea is that it totally depends on the type of works.

In many under developed countries, poverty is the big problem and people cannot afford basic needs of life such as food, medicine and education. In this situation, people are ready to do any kind of work for some money. These people are used to send their children for doing paid work and they do not consider which type of work it is. These children are doing work in different factories such as cement, acid, and soap factories and in these factories their owners misbehaved with them and order them to do such works that are not suitable for children and affect their health badly. For instance, in India many children are engaged in such labour work and now many NGOs are against it. These organizations are running many movements to stop labour child.

On contrast, works such as voluntary and organizing are popular in schools, colleges as well as in universities. Now in most of the countries these works are promoted in universities and students take part in these activities to show their skills. These activities are important for every adult because such things improve the capabilities of children and polish their skills. In this way, they earn more as compared to other works to support their families, as well as these works develop confidence and teach the students how to be a good member of society and introduce their country in world as a best country.

In conclusion, paid work must be appreciated but it must be good for children's health and mind. So, voluntary works must be promoted in all over the world. It is helpful for the children as well as their families and country.
mariasultana   
Feb 24, 2014
Writing Feedback / "Prevention is better than cure". Out of a country's health budget, [9]

In many countries children are engaged in different kinds of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion?

No doubt, paid work is important for everyone. But, for children it depends on the areas and types of the work. Some works are important and refine characters of the children. On the other hand, some works are proved to be hard for child's health. My idea is that it totally depends on the type of works.

In many under developed countries, where poverty is the big problem of people and they cannot afford even basics of life as food, medicine and education, such people are doing any kind of work for some money. These people are used to send their children for doing paid work and they do not consider which type of work it is. These children are doing work in different factories such as cement, acid, and soap factories and in these factories their owners misbehaved with them and order them to do such works that are not suitable for children and affect their health badly. For instance, in India many children are engaged in such labour work and now many organizations are against it. These organizations are running many movements to stop child labour.

On contrast, works such as volunteers and organizers are popular in schools, colleges as well as in universities. Now in most of the countries these works are promoted in universities and students take part in these activities to show their skills. These activities are important for every adult because such things improve the capabilities of children and polish their skills. In this way, they earn more as compared to other works to support their families, as well as, these works develop confidence and teach the students how to be a good member of society and introduce their country in world as a best country.

In conclusion, paid work must be appreciated but it must be good for children's health and mind. So, voluntary works must be promoted in all over the world. It is helpful for the children as well as their families and country.