Writing Feedback / people living longer nowadays. Is it good or bad? [7]

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People nowadays live longer than they used to. What caused this situation? Is it a negative or positive development?

Time is running and we are keeping our pace so as to chase it but in doing so our style of living life has also been changing from traditional and conventional to modern sophisticated luxurious form. As a result, we are consuming healthier balanced diet and using less physical force in performing jobs which is soaring our life expectancy a bit longer than we used to live in the past. By contrast, it is highly contentious as some are in favor of this ideas and others are antagonistic to this.

To begin with potential merits, as we are stepping on this modern era of world which is driven by advanced form of technologies and lots of other advancement everybody has strong proclivity for living life with fullest use of these development. Thus, we are avoiding muscle demanding work but intensively using machinery aides. Similarly, our way of nutrition intake has been changed to proper form and in scheduled way. From dusk to dawn we are so prudent and wise in assimilating balanced diet, keeping body fit by visiting gymnasium, saving loss of calories and time by using automobiles for transportation etc. Moreover, most of people nowadays are well educated and conscious of their own health. Therefore, this is putting our life span bit longer compared to the past which I partially believe is advantageous to us.I see two fundamental reasoning in favor of this.Firstly, most of us want to live longer to taste the advancement of future world and share our expertise to upcoming generation.Secondly, all families want to live their beloved for longer time. To exemplify, this is more evident in hospital where we can always observe that the family of patient whose life is almost at end is yelling for bit longer life. To illustrate more, a early demise of veteran professional is great loss for this world as it will cost much penny to raise another individual to bring up to this professional level.

On the other hand,others in against with living longer life might argue that this is absolutely not good as it might be a problem for maintaining ecosystem to this Earth and leads to unbalanced population of flora and fauna. Furthermore,it is highly pejorative to live longer because people will have to fight for opportunities such as jobs,food and shelters as well as transportation as many octogenarian people still occupy the position which is anticipated to be filled by new comers in this Earth. Therefore,according to Charles Darwin-'Struggle for existence' will be observed which in turn result deleterious effect like kidnapping, extortion and vandalism for their survival. Besides this, weaker will always remain weaker and similarly does the richer. Moreover, increasing population will have to deforest jungle in order to build their home and for making food which will slowly put the Earth deficit in resources.Consequently, extreme scarce in trees will stop precipitation level but increase in greenhouse gases like CO2 which is very harmful in depleting ozone layer thus by bringing global increment in temperature.

To conclude, though people want to live longer its disadvantages easily outweighs advantages. Therefore, I wholeheartedly suggest it is not good idea as we have to give equal opportunities to upcoming generation and play parental role towards them and take care of our ever best natural abode-The Earth.

Writing Feedback / Tobacco and alcohol are drugs. Should made legal or illegal? [4]

Gone are the days,People rarely drink alcohol and consume tobacco but today, most of people they even can not imagine their life without alcohol and drugs.Simultaneously, some are remain themselves as an abstemious.Both these products are never been good for health. However, people are consuming these to give company to their friends, bodily comfort, relaxation and as well as to live luxurious life. I personally believe these should not be legal as it can put people's health at extreme risk.

First of all, Tobacco contains thousands of slow poison chemicals which will slowly decay our physiological and biological body process. For example, A person who regularly takes tobacco from age 18 to his 70 might collect almost one kilogram of tar in his lungs which is enough to block further respiration process. Similarly, Alcohol also if taken regularly enhances liver to malfunction and helps to develop cirrhosis,a fatal chronic disease.

Some people on the other hand might argue that these products should be legal as it helping to boost employment from farmer to factory level but I don't see any good reasoning over this argument because we cannot put our body at risk of health to increase economic condition of country and to beef up employment level. Another obvious concern is,throngs of teenagers nowadays are indulging into these kinds of products and helping them to be addicted more and more and we all know that,Drug addiction is big problem in today's generation.Thus, if such products are made legal then more younger people will get encouraged and finally will get addicted too.Consequently, there will be more health problems along with skills problem and economical problem as people will start wasting time on consuming such products.

Finally, Tobacco and alcohol are discovered in a way to provide more comfortable life. Which if consumed in controlled manner is somehow okay but consumption has already gone berserk and intolerable too.Therefore,without any further ado, these products should be made illegal.

Writing Feedback / COMPUTERS Vs TEACHERS; What would happen in the future? [3]

Hi Guys, This is my one more attempt for IELTS Task II. Can you please kindly leave comments and suggestions? I appreciate your time for considering me.

There is no doubt in future that technology will take over most of our daily activities. Definitely our life can not go smoothly without being touched in any way of electronic devices in coming days. whatever the system of education, we are so fervour in using computers in our every moment of life specially in education.

Computers is the most important and advanced technology ever invented by human in this century and our education system has always been firmly attached with these electronic devices. Moreever, students of this twenty-first century world are totally dependent on computers. For example, hand-written assignments are replacing with typed work in MS-Word, Search engines like Google, Bing etc are being used as encyclopedia for research works. More specifically, computers are replacing monotonous and repeated work for teachers like checking students work for plagiarism, marking of assignments and exam answers.

On top of above, most of lecture rooms are replaced with automated computer system to check entrance of relevant student, delivering lecture, putting recorded lecture on online system, guiding students on exercising assignments etc. I see two fundamental benefits over this reasoning: firstly, computer delivered education is always accurate and fairer to all level of students. secondly, it can provided more resource to students in real time which is almost impossible by manpower. Hence, I personally suggest that all education system should be amended and intensively use computer devices so as to provide more accurate, real time, broad area of information to students.

Finally, Education without assistance of computer in coming future is impossible and its advantages outweighs its disadvantages and its performance goes on increasing everyday. which in used in proper way helps to understand diverse nature of world by connecting globally through internet.

Writing Feedback / Credit Cards do good to people ? Agree/ Disagree [7]

We are already indulged into advance form of e-payment system .Credit card is unquestionably popular since from its introduction. Everyday millions of people are applying for it and increasing their credit limit. Not only it has helped enormously in our urgent needs but also has assisted in reducing monetary crime. Huge amount of financial transaction nowadays occurs with simple electronic chip card.However, some unwilling throat might say this is intimidating trouble when unable to compensate for the big gulp of value consumed.

Every individual who has made good reputation with bank can easily apply for credit card. Though it depends upon one's financial capacity how much credit limit he/she will get ,One will get easily this electronic card which we can use for our daily purchase of goods. In my opinion, Having credit card with you is almost solving your immediate financial problem for the moment. Furthermore, credit card can help to sort out urgent need of money. For example, if you are need to pay your tuition fee for college but it is already census date and you don't have enough money to pay for it then you can just simply pay with credit card without borrowing any cash money from your friend. On the other hand, it has also helped in abating monetary crime like looting, robbery , pick-pocketing etc . In fact, credit card is solving big problem of risk associated with carrying cash in your pocket. Morever, Since it is associated with online payment it also directly solving currency problem and exchange rate issues.

Perhaps, Some people might argue that this is just a bigger problem when individual is unable to pay debt but this depends upon people's way of using this card. People must be aware of his/own credit limit and way of spending money. Rampant use of it might lead to financial debt and he/she will be in great financial burden and possibility of not getting enough credit limit next time. In addition, he/she will not be eligible to have credit card unless pays debt on time.Therefore, I don't think it is a problem experienced rather it is just a problem created by individual himself.

Admittedly, immense use of credit card these days once again reminds us that it is great technological achievement which is one step forward solution for monetary crime. However, it should be granted only to a person with good credit history. Its use should be carefully monitored and regulated according to financial act.

Writing Feedback / Today, man is master and machine is slave but tomorrow, machine will be master and man wil [6]

This is twenty-first century, almost and every aspects of our life is assisted with technological inventions. It's advancement and upgradation is augmenting in every minutes and so do our working style. Money is being extravagantly used in new research like making robots more intelligent, weapons more effective and destructive, more reliable drugs etc which in turn making scientists to focus more on new inventions even without considering their personal life. Some people think these inventions are good but on the other hand, other say these are just an augury of bad future.

Even though,Science has always been a part of our daily life I personally believe that
machine will surely takeover human control in future and which might result in extinction of human being from Earth. Which can be alluded from the evidence that scientists are performing vast research on how to make machine similar like human in terms of cognitive thinking, manipulating and using past experience by using bio-chips. Since the inventions of computer, it is being made more and more powerful and intelligent and all great countries are being more spendthrift on spending huge amount of money on assisting such studies. Artificial intelligent is more likely to corresponding to human inteligent. For example, Honda robots are being used by individuals to assist their daily activities by firing servants in house, manufacturing companies are 90% controlled by robots, all space exploration is under control of intelligent robots. More the scientists are achieving success in their artificial intelligent technology more is chance of robots taking control over human in future.Furthermore, people are losing their mental and physical activities and languishing in every aspect as they are always been dependant on machines even in smaller deeds which is our Achilles heel.

In other words, Seventh generation computers if successful will be more thoughtful than we assume ourselves in this current era. Which means we are more likely to be controlled by machines in future as they will have bio - chips implemented processor so they will have enough skills to create their own clone so as to increase their number. More interestingly, machines will give birth to new machine in near future and those machines will be highly destructive and violent so much so we will be unable to sustain their fierce and furious control and finally we have to extinct from this Earth.

In a nutshell, Till this lapse of time machines are being signalled by human and serving as per our will but if more progressive research is performed definitely scientific robots will over take our voluntary actions and will be able to control our physical and mental activities. So I believe rampant research on robots and weapons should be demolished and stops further inventions to continue our generations on this scenic Earth.