Writing Feedback / IELTS: 'all processes occur in the water' - Live cycle of a frog [3]

The diagram explains the life cycle of a frog.

Generally, adult frog comes from eggs and realizes several steps.

To begin, entire group process starts from eggs of a frog changed become embryo and become tadpoles that are having three sizes (short, middle and long). Then, it changed to be front legs break through before it starts to become of pulmonary breathing. All of these processes occur in the water.

After it undergo the process in the water, a frog is going to land and it realize process to become tadpole frog before it changed become adult frog. After that, we can be seen many frogs can live in the land.

To summary, the life cycle of a frog is very unique because it realizes cycle in two situations. There about in the water and in the land. In any case, this cycle will be continuing for life of a frog.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: The process of apple how to be canned; 'apple tree' [6]

The diagram shows the process of apple how to be canned.

Generally, there are many steps of apple to be canned. It is start from hand picking process until dispatch process.

To begin, the apple comes from the apple tree which is hand picking by farmer. Then, the apples are brought by large truck to fabric. In fabric, the apple washed and it is chosen where is a good quality and bad quality. Next, the apple is saved in cold storing so that the quality always to be guarded.

After in cold storing, the apple weighing and peeling. Then, it is corning before it get canning process. Next, the apple is sealing and cooking or sterilizing for keeping this product quickly expired. Then, this product is labeling and is saving in storage before dispatch.

To summary, the process canned of apple is not easy because must be realize more process.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. [6]

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map shows the town of Garlsdon. Program of this town is building a new supermarket (S). The supermarkets have two potentially located.

In general, located for build new supermarkets are crossed over by railway and main roads. It has a few cities which is of 65,000 population appears in the map.

The located of S1 is in the countryside. It is more restful because it has long distance from industrial areas. Because of this area placed in suburbs between railway and highway to Hindon (12 km with 10,000 population), there is easier to people visited by transportation.

Moreover, the recommended location of S2 for supermarket is in the town center. In the map, there are two housing area in north side and south side. The highway is also to connect from Cransdon (25 km with 29,000 population) to Bransdon (16 km with 15,000 population). Although this area is industrial area, there is no traffic-zone in here.

Overall, both of two areas are able to build supermarket and people could use transportation to this area.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: Changes in one city spending patterns in 1966. [8]

The graphs show changes in one city spending patterns in 1966 (a) and 1966 (b) for seven things.

Generally, the city has been the highest spending that caused by food in a graph (a) and by cars in a graph (b). Even though, the lowest spending factor in a graph (a) was by computers and in a graph (b) was by books.

To begin with, food and cars were the highest spending in both of them. Food has number 44% of spending in 1996 (a), but declined dramatically until 14% in 1996 (b). However, spending on cars, it was rose sharply, from 23% until 45%.

Moreover, some areas to show an upward trend, and others to show a downward trend, in 1966 (a) to 1966 (b). Spending on eating in outdoor had increase from 7% until 14%. For computers, it was increasing of 1% to 10%. All the same, spending on books to undergo a decline, from 6% to be 1%.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: Underground railway systems; 'London has been the oldest' [6]

The table shows three categories data of the underground railway systems in six cities.

In generally, London has been the oldest building and the highest number of kilometers of route, while the most new was belonged to Los Angeles.

Although London's subway has been built before, the high numbers of passengers per year is Tokyo. Tokyo has had the busiest underground line contrasted with other five cities, followed by Paris, London, Washington DC, Los Angeles, and Kyoto.

On the other hand, there are two various cities like Kyoto and Los Angles in where the system has been built, difference compared to other four cities. Despite Los Angles was being more marked rather than Kyoto, both of them has had reasonable passengers

Overall, London has the older underground railway system, the most which has had a sharp rise of passengers was Paris. Then, the older is the railway system, the longer is the route of the railway system.

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Writing Feedback / Many teachers assign homework to students every day. 'Valuable exercise' [9]

Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Homework is exercises that are familiar for students. By homework, students will repeat a subject at home. But, some people believe that homework has not functioned for students. I agree with daily homework that is important for students. I will explain my opinion in this essay.

Homework will bring many functions for students. It can help students to more understand about a subject. Then, it will support students to study by themselves. It is able for training students about responsibility with solve it. For example, teacher gives homework for students to evaluate understanding about matter that already finished in the class. So, teachers examine students with giving homework. Moreover, by homework, students can improve times of management. They practice to divide time to study, time to play, or time to help parents. So, they can finish the exercise on time. Besides, when students often make homework, it can increase result of students.

Nevertheless, giving homework for students is not always right. It is because teachers cannot control the students, they make it alone or others. An example, a student finished to do their homework with cheating from his friend by reason of study together. Otherwise, giving much homework is also not good. I think, better the teacher gives homework that proper with competency that they are to desire achieved.

To conclude, the teacher better gives daily homework for students. It is because brings many advantages for pupils. It is not only bringing many advantages for student's lives, but also has disadvantages too.

Writing Feedback / Museum is a place that retain of history object; Visiting museums during travel. [3]

Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Museum is a place that retain of history object. A lot of people like vacation to new places and going to the museum in there. There are many reasons to people do that such as to get knowledge, to get new experiences, and others want to refresh.

Museum has function to save and to display historical remains, art, science, and antique things. It becomes pulling power of some people when they travel to new places. For people that like historical tourisms, museum is a great places. By visiting to the museum, they will see many collections of artifact historical and collections things that invaluable. Besides, they will know with detail about things collection. It has reference about things collection that writing by a specialist.

Moreover, person visit to museum because they want to learn and to get new experience in the museum. For example, when people want to know about history of geology, they will go to Museum Geology in Bandung, West Java. It provides information and knowledge about the geology or earth science in a way that is interesting. In this museum, visitors will see a variety of geological materials in the form of stones, fossils, or minerals that are found in various parts of Indonesia. In addition, some people visits to museum for refreshing.

In conclusions, museums are a great place of people visited when they are traveling to new places. People will get education and adventure of the museum. Besides, other people are visiting to museum for having fun.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Some people enjoy change, new experiences. Changing our habits is making us better [7]

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Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approach do you prefer? Explain why.

Human live is different between somebody and others. Many people have desirability for they them selves. Some people like to live and stay at the same place, and their usual habits. But, others enjoy change and they look forward to new experiences. I prefer with the statement; others enjoy change because many benefit such as to get new experience and new knowledge.

From the other side, changes in one lives giving new experience. We will find good condition. It's great when boring becomes. I always try to make changes, for example. However, when my feel not good I cannot focus to do anything in my life. Thereby, changes our habits is important to make people better. Moreover, people get new knowledge when change they live. When I am bored as an, I am going to new place to get good idea. Except like that, I did not something. It is make my time always wasted away.

Additionally, each of people needs changes. This is make u stronger, more self confidence, and more patient. I believe that people who like changes will be giving the best for our live.

In conclusion, I think people must change to catch every opportunity to learn more knowledge and experience. So, people will be feeling better in their live.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Some people like to do only what they already do well. [10]

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Some people like to do only what they already do well. Other people prefer to try new things and take risks. Which do prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

Personally, I prefer to try new things and take risks. I think that all people want to success in life. They must work hard and gain knowledge and experience. Moreover, when people do things they already do well, they must improve their knowledge.. I base my statement on the following points.

Some of people who want to be success must constant to improve their knowledge and get good experience. Furthermore, they must try to do the best at their job. Therefore, they need to try new things, take risks sometimes and work hard. It is impossible to live without trying new things. For example, I want to drive motorcycle but I cannot to do it. So, I must learn methods of use motorcycle and must now about driving rules.

Additionally, I people need changes make our lives more beautiful and exiting. We find out new things, learn new things and dream to know other things. People need challenges because can make to become stronger.

To sum up, I believe that people is aspiration for learning new things. It is the main reason the way we live now. People make many discoveries and inventions that make our lives easier, happier and longer.

Writing Feedback / food from restaurants or from home - it doesn't matter; food just must have good nutrition [6]

Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

As we know, many food stands or restaurants in our country. It is because habitually of society that likes fast food. They do not want to busy. But, other people prefer to prefer and eat food at home. In the following paragraphs I will give reasons about my statement.

To begin with fresher, when people eat food at home. It is better than people eat at food stands or restaurants. For example, when I am eating at home, ingredient of food always fresher because I know about that. From the other sides, sometimes I want to cook foods together at my home. Cooking together is enjoyable for me. Moreover, when I am cooking with my sister, for example. So, I can do everything I want at this moment.

Additionally, eating at home is a great way to save my money. I should not to pay about tax when I am eating at home. Different when people want to eat at restaurant.

Nevertheless, occasionally I want to eat at food stands or restaurants. It is because I like to attempt new foods. In our country, has many kinds of food. So, I think, I must try about the taste. Because of foods in my country have delicious taste. Besides, when I have party with my friends, sometimes we are eating together at restaurant.

To sum up, I think not matter when we want to eat at other places. Most important is the foods must have good nutrition. So that, we can care for health.