Writing Feedback / IELTS: Do young people have much greater influence nowadays than it was? [4]

Young people in the modern world seem to have more power and influence than any previous young generation.

Why is this the case?

What impact does this have on the relationship between old and young people?

The modern world made it easier for young people to express their beliefs and thoughts. Advancement of the Internet increased the activity of young people in the life of their community. Hence, it can be said that the youth has a strong influence on the governments and different corporations nowadays. The essay will explain why this practice is the case and show what kind of impact on the relationship between old and young people this situation has.

To begin with, as it was said before, the Internet has opened up certain avenues for young people in terms of political life of the society. Any information or event in one part of the world can easily reach the other, due to the Internet. It seems to make some governments afraid of young net users and accept certain steps to have some control over them. For example, in Turkey, Twitter became very popular among young people who were opposite to the government. This site, as a result, was banned. However, the government of Turkey received some accusations from the EU about human rights abuse. Therefore, it can be said that young people appear to have the power to make them hear.

On the other hand, this influence may affect negatively the relationship between older and younger generations. Young people, because of their nature, tend to express opinions that are not correlated with the hardened views of the older ones. This kind of discrepancy also had a tendency to happen in the past. However, nowadays modern technologies might make this practice more likely to be carried out. Consequently, the gap between the generations may become even wider.

Given the evidence, in the modern world the youth is able to interfere in the public life more freely and affect some events they are not concerned with. Nevertheless, this power has some significant drawbacks.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: The diagram about the evolution of the horse [5]

Please check this essay for mistakes. I appreciate your help!)
The diagram below show the development of the horse over a period of 40 million years
Write a report for a university lecture describing the information shown below
The diagram presents the evolution of the horse from Eohippus to modern kind, with particular significant changes in foot structure, in a 40-million-year period.

Initially, the first species of horse, which is called Eohippus, had a small body and a snout. It had tiny toes that were separate from each other. Eventually, about 10 million years after, an ancestor of the modern horse evolved into Mesohippus, which body enlarged while the tail and snout became longer. At this point, the middle toe of its leg also enlarged.

Once the first two evolution stages finished, it can be seen that equine transformed into Merychippus with muzzle like a modern species of horse, developed thigh and an emerged mane, at about 15 million years ago. At the same time, two basidigital bones reduced, whereas the middle toe became even large, resembling a hoof. Over time, Merychippus evolved into well-known modern horse with developed elbow, ankle joints, long tail and crest. Here, reduced metacarpals turned into fetlock and a present hoof emerged.

As a result, a horse went through different evolutional stages before transforming into contemporary type.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: The Charts show the proportion of the population of two countries [NEW]

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The pie-charts indicate data about citizens of two countries, with different infrastructures, divided by age group in 2000 and expectations for 2050.

It can be seen from the charts that Yemen and Italy have completely different rates at old people and young children indexes.

In 2000, the percentage of 15-59 year-old-people in Italy was 61.6 per cents while, in Yemen, this percentage was less by 15 per cents. The figures for people above 60 years were also higher in Italy (24.1%). Yemen, at the same index had only 3.6 per cents. However, young children, below the age of 14, in Yemen, outnumbered ones in Italy, 50.1 and 14.3 per cents respectively.

In 2050, Yemen is expected to have more residents at the age from 15 to 59 (57.3%) and old people (5.7%). In contrast, Italy is more likely to experience a reduction in the proportion of adolescents, middle aged people (46.2%) and children under 14 years old (11.5%). Nevertheless, the figures for elder people in Italy are predicted to be more by almost 18.3 per cents, whereas the percentage of young children is going to be less by 13 per cents.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: Should a jury know about previous crime records of a defendant? [6]

Hi! This essay is complex for me, I want to know whether I managed to answer?
I think that my 3 para is weak(

Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant's past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused of the crime.

Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that a jury should be given all the past facts before they reach their decision about the case .

Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answers.

Deeds in criminal case have achieved reputation as the most complicated ones. In Britain and Australia this case is even more impeded by the question of acquaintance of a jury by previous criminal actions of a defendant. Some lawyers suggested that jury should be informed of the previous cases. However, the accused person is defended from such kind of practice by the law of those countries. In my opinion, this question requires more careful consideration.

Initially, the practice of informing the jury of the criminal past of the accused prevents objective evaluation of the whole situation. Jury members could begin to think a bit stereotyped. For instance, if person was guilty of killing or maiming, the jury may consider that he or she is able to do this again. However, they may not take into account such facts that the defendant perpetrated this being in an affect or in order to defend himself. Hence, the verdict of the jury seems to be incorrect. However, previous crime records might help jury to identify the features of the person in the bar, and compare them with presented facts.

On the other hand, when the jury is not given the facts of past criminal record, they could not prefigure the whole responsibility of their decision. The accused may be recognized as guiltless. For example, high qualified lawyers are able to use loopholes in the laws to liberate their clients, even if defendant is guilty. Moreover, people who did many offenses in the past may look innocent. Therefore, the jury seems to be misled by the current position.

Given the evidence, the jury should only be given information of the accused person who was brought to trial many times. Therefore, this practice should be used according to the crime situation.

Writing Feedback / People who achieved incredible success in their life seem not to encounter a failure. [8]

"Failure is proof that the desire was not strong enough"
To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer
People who achieved incredible success in their life seem not to encounter a failure. It is claimed that they got what they need without much effort. However, this view, in my opinion is not correct. Failure is something that everyone experiences during the lifetime, but successful people are able to overcome this ordeal. Hence, it can be said that failure is an outcome of a weak desire. This essay agrees with the statement and will show reasons which support this.

To begin with, failure is an obstacle that should be gone through. It tests people's desire and purposefulness. For example, Edwin Barnes, a person whose desire was to become a partner of Thomas Edison, had nothing. He had only an aim and a desire to achieve it. Therefore, it is right to say that Barnes had a misfortune from the beginning. This may be sufficient to discourage many people from their purpose, but Barnes never gave up. This made him one of the most required people in Edison's company.

In addition, one of the most common features of failure is quitting. There are numerous examples of people who stopped on the last step in the way to success because their desire was not strong. Many successful people say that they reach success soon after they faced misfortune. Darby, the most famous insurance salesman, said that his most beneficial sales were made after people had said no. This is evidence that failure is closely linked to success.

On the whole, a strong desire is something with the help of which any aims and purposes can be attained. People should learn to get over misfortune and follow their dreams no matter what happens.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Question about the influence of the media coverage of celebrities [8]

Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Today, celebrities appear to become a spotlight of the mass media. Almost half of the news coverage on television and the Internet is devoted to the celebrity gossip. Not surprisingly, many people are worried that this attention to the famous people has an impact on them, especially on their children. This essay will compare both negative and positive consequences of this effect on infants.

Fame is a great responsibility for public people as their admirers are very sensitive to any acts of their idols. Celebrity scandals and gossips can quickly reach the public which perceive it very negatively. This means that celebrities who received attention for overuse of drugs or alcohol are likely to get public disgrace. Therefore, children may see that this behavior is inexcusable.

On the other hand, too much news coverage to famous people seems to have a negative influence on the choice of children of their future professions. As recent surveys showed, inspired by the fame and wealth, children now prefer more to become an actor/actress or a sports star than it was in the past. Many schools for preparation of so-called stars and various advertisements about famous people may mislead with the fact that this profession is highly required and easy reachable. This may confuse children who should not choose their future job because of the influence of the mass media, but from the basis of their own interests.

In conclusion, parents should be more worried about their children's attitudes to the 'cult of celebrity'. They should teach their children how to distinguish shortcoming stars from truly talented ones and to put right priorities in life.

Writing Feedback / Cultural differences should be welcomed by everyone [6]

Please help me. This essay is a bit confusing for me and I don't think I could to give an appropriate answer...

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others think that the host country should welcome cultural differences
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

In a world with a rich variety of cultures and nationalities it is hard to follow certain rules and customs. Trivial behavior in one society may be seen as inadmissible in another. Some people think that tourists and representatives of other cultures should follow behaviour accepted in a country they visit. However, others consider that the host country should be tolerant to the cultural differences. In this essay, I will discuss both views and give my own opinion.

Every country and every nation has its own specific culture and mode of life that visitors want to see and experience. That is what makes them commit various trips around the world. Therefore, there is an instruction that should be taken into account by travelers: local inhabitants and customs should be respected. For example, in Muslim countries such as Morocco and Egypt, tourists seem not to wear revealing outfits and show their feelings in a public places as this behavior may be reckoned as a disrespect to secular beliefs of natives.

On the other hand, cultural differences may diversify societies. In London, for instance, there are many representatives of multifarious countries and cultures who follow their traditional behavior. Native dwellers can discover a great number of extraordinary things talking to or watching people appurtenant to other culture. This variety may improve relations between countries and nations and increase the world view of native residents as visitors can share their beliefs, customs and lifestyle.

In my opinion, cultural differences should be welcomed by everyone as this has numerous advantages. However, visitors should be aware of customs of the country they visit and respect them.

Writing Feedback / Single career is an old fashion - 'being an expert in one specified sphere' [6]

This essay is written in a 40 minutes, thank you for your help..) I managed to write only 250 words) as I couldn't catch up with time limit.

I tried to follow some tips you have given me in my previous essay
The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life.

Throughout history, people have been satisfied by owning a single profession and being an expert in one specified sphere. Graduating from the university claimed to be sufficient to catch up with life. However, these attitudes seem to become extremely unreasonable in our modern world. Today, life requires having more than one profession and studying during the life of a person. I have to totally agree with this statement. Hence, the essay will give several reasons which support this.

Firstly, economic and political instabilities lead people to situations where changing the place and type of work is necessary. For example, economic recession in 2008-2009 was a cause of many discharges in different fields of work, and people without additional ways of making money were driven into bankruptcy. Political disturbances such as in Ukraine encourage people to immigrate to other countries where they have to find an unusual job for them. Therefore, owning different professions make it easier to find solutions in such situations.

Secondly, extremely developing world gives rise to new technologies and modes of life. For instance, the most significant technological and social progress, the Internet, which is claimed to be a symbol of freedom, have positively reversed the lives of many people in recent decades. Thus, if person wants to be aware of the latest changes, he or she needs to study in a long-term process throughout life.

In summary, nowadays it is common and sometimes necessary for people to be able to adapt for different conditions and variations.

Writing Feedback / Work or travel between high school & university; beneficial or unfavorable year [5]

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and staring university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

In the USA and some European countries, it is common for high school and college graduates to work in a particular job or travel before they can start their study in a university. The interval in studies usually lasts for one year. This year may be beneficial or unfavorable for a student. In this essay, I will compare both advantages and disadvantages of this practice.

Having a job during the interval in study may play a pivotal role in the life of an adolescent. It develops many skills which would be very helpful in the future; this includes experience and developing practical intelligence. For example, working as a waiter or as a shop assistant seems to increase patience and tolerance with other people. Surveys showed that having a good practical rather than an academic intelligence is closely linked to achieving success in life.

In addition, traveling to different cities and countries is also a very helpful experience. For instance, if person travels more, he or she meets many people and sees distinct cultures. This seems to be valuable for sociability, and person feels emotions that he or she would not forget.

On the other hand, this common habit may be seen as a waste of time which would decrease student's study skills gained in schools or colleges. For example, if student would not work by heart or avoid completing his duties during the 'working year'. This attitude would not cause advantageous outcomes.

In summarize, it depends on a person whether working or traveling would be a helpful experience or not. However, it should be known that developing both academic and practical intelligence during the year seems to have the most beneficial effect.

Writing Feedback / Increasing weight, decreasing health; 'can't find absolutely healthy person' [4]

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness is decreasing
What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Today it seems to be impossible to meet a person who is absolutely healthy, everyone has certain diseases, and obesity is the one which most people suffer from. Therefore, it has already become normal for people to have an increased body weight. In this essay, I will outline causes of obesity and try to find measures to prevent such kind of illness

The first thing which decreases health status and increases the risk of obesity is a fixed mode of life in many modern cities such as New York, London and Moscow. Most people there have a job which requires a sedentary activity and working with a computer. These things have a direct impact on people's health and weight levels. However, certain measures can be taken to reduce this kind of impact. For example, governments and heads of companies should decrease the stress which is common in many jobs by limiting working day and providing free tickets to gyms, fitness centers and health resorts. This approach can not only help people to become healthy but make them more competent workers.

The second thing is a fast food nutrition which is a widespread cause of obesity and decreased level of fitness. There are many fast food cafes such as McDonald's and KFC's which are very popular facilities. People are becoming lazier to cook meals at home, that's why they prefer the easiest way of food intake. Thus, the healthy diet and lifestyle should be popularized among people.

In summary, people should pay much more attention to the mode of life they have and increase their interests on health as the health is the most important thing they have.