Writing Feedback / Why is sport is important at school? [4]

Schools are regarded as a factory to make professional students to contribute in developing their country .Therefore, Ministries of education have planned to design curriculum to help students to build their cognitive capacities .Thus it is significant to achieve the balance between academic and Athletic classes to support educational process to get perfect outcomes.

First, physical education is mainstay to strengthen student's body and keep their health .Moreover, the role of school develops and enhances student's talent for example, swimming, football or volleyball.

Secondly, A sport is important to improve academic performance through accelerating blood circulation to stimulate the concentration and attention inside class to raise student's understanding.

On the other hand, when students take sequential scientific subject instance, physic, chemistry, math and biology, signs of stress and boring are noted on student, and it reduce the attention and concentration. Thus it reflects negatively on student's understanding.

Last, playing sport at school leads to social benefits. It gives student opportunity to learn beneficial behaviors. When they play together sport such as, football. Therefore they understand the cooperation meaning and enable them to communicate with others. In the other words, it supports student's communication capacities to bridge their society.

In conclusion, Physical education is a cornerstone to create a healthy mental generation and activate the brain to raise the attention and concentration. Therefore, academic outcomes are developed and improved to gain the best educational achievements. In order to governments should provide athletic materials for schools to support and grant a chance to share sport classes.

Writing Feedback / Childhood life is the most important period [2]

The early childhood is formative stage in people's life physically and emotionally . particularly, from birth to twelve years. Therefore, It is significant period to build cognitive and mental abilities .

To begin with ,brain formation is considered the most important in children life , as well as body .So families should take care of their kids and focus on their nutrition to strengthen children physically , and promote their health. Moreover, Increasing effective immune system. Consequence, It reflects on their health in future , because they will have strong immunity against infectious diseases. In addition, Children start learning especially a language and some basic information about their life in this time. So it is necessary to teach them true pronunciation to compose sentences and express about themselves. After that cognitive capacity building. Forthat, primary students learn knowledge and memories information fast. Because they are the first step in their life, and they are white paper, we can paint their future . Furthermore, boys or girls like to emulate their father or mother to gain their behaviors and accept it easily . In order to parents should raise them with values such as honesty, generosity, love other principles. On the other hand, older people who are grown with misbehaviors, it is difficult to change their ethics.

In conclusion, The early age create qualified generation to lead his nation to be better. and contribute to build their countries, and get achievements in all spheres of life. Thus families should look after and develop their talents, and provide them knowledge and offer all educational material to help them to learn more.

Writing Feedback / Do you think that universities should be available for all students and free? [2]

University education is cornerstone of development in all fields of life, medicine, engineering, sciences, and others. For that many countries support higher education to be free, or pay little tuition fees.

To begin with, all students have rights to complete their studying. So governments should give all qualified students chance to enter university. Moreover, when tuition fees are free, especially in significant majors such as, IT, medical studies, and sciences. It encourages students to pursue their studying these subjects. Consequence, graduates will contribute to build and develop their countries. In other words, government will be the first winner.

In additionally, some students are forced to work part-time to save money for paying to university, Therefoe, It affects educational attainment, because they do not have free time to study. as well as , scientific research.

On the other hand, some people think that higher education should not be free, In other words, universities need financial resources to cover expenses. For example, teachers' salaries and administrative expenses. But this problem can be solved, if the government imposes tax to supporting universities. Instance, many countries put tax on companies to fund education . Therefore, many graduates in diverse majors will take part in development these companies and make several achievements .

In conclusion, university education should be available for all students. In particular, critical disciplines. Which are important to gain accomplishment in these fields which are considered lifeblood for all people.

Writing Feedback / Advertisement on USA summer camps jobs - write why you want work there. [2]

.You see this advertisement for a job in the USA.

USA SUMMER CAMPS

People of all ages needed to work in summer camps all over the USA.

If you can speak English and you are cheerful, energetic and hardworking, you are the right person for us. Food and accommodation are provided. You just pay the air fare.

You will:
-look after children aged 8-12
-help organise sports and evening activities
-work in the kitchens

Write telling us about yourself and why you think you would be a suitable person for the job.
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Summer camps are regarded as significant activities to build children's skills and develop their abilities to create good generation in future. So I have be interested in summer camps since I was eight years old .Therefore , my dream is to work in summer camp to reflect my experience and contribute to improve young's skills .Moreover , I am legible to join USA summer camp , and I meet all USA summer requires .

Firstly: my English language is excellent. Speaking , writing , reading and listening. furthermore, I have taken twelve English courses in British council Secondly , I am 20 years old .thus , I feel so active , and I always wake up early to do exercises . As well as I have abilities to work under pressure .for example, I was working as waiter in a restaurant ten hours daily even holidays .

Thirdly, my experience in management summer camps five years. Recently I have worked in Jordanian summer camp for six months as coordinator all activities, sport, social or adventure. In addition, I have attended Management and leadership course for 60 hours.

Because I work as coordinator of organizing summer camps in Ministry of Education for primary schools who their aged between 7 to 13 years old .
Lastly, I live alone in my house . Therefore, it pushes me to depend on myself to do kitchen work, washing dishes, cleaning or cooking.
In conclusion, Really, I am looking forward to join USA summer camps. In order to, offering my experience to serve young students. Moreover, to develop my skills and exchange experiences.

Writing Feedback / What people do with their rubbish and how a town tries to keep the area clean and attractive? [3]

An international organisation has asked you to write a report on how your town or village takes care of the environment. You should include information about what people do with their rubbish and how the town or village tries to keep the area clean and attractive.

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A health is an important part in our life, so our priority in our city is an environment , and people consider keeping our environment and work together to preservation of the environment . Therefore , the municipality The ministry of environment put regulations and instructions to take care of our village . firstly, organizing collecting garbage .for example , red box for medical rubbish , because it is dangerous ,it is toxic materials . yellow box for plastic , white box for glass , and pink box for other trash . This way is to facilitates classification of garbage and transfering each sorts of rubbish to specific place .

Secondly , recycling waste . after collecting it , then transport it to factories to recycle it to useful materials , we can use it again in all aspects in our life .

Lastly , workshops about conservation of environment to increase environmental awareness among people to encourage them to take care of their city , and how they can recycle some rubbish to beneficial objects to exploit it at home .

In addition , many residents in our town have launched initiative which target to clean up our village, and plant many trees on the streets to keep the environment clean and protect our generation from pollution . moreover , to attract tourists to visit us .consequences , jumping number of visitors to our town , and reducing pollution which causes several diseases . furturemore saving cost of treatment because of decreasing number of patients . In conclusion, we look forward to being our village free from pollution and keep our health and enjoy in pure air where our children will grow up .

Writing Feedback / Public transport for health keeping, pollution reducing and environment protection. [3]

There is no future for public transport, because travelling by car is so much more convenient.

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Private cars are considered more comfortable and faster .So people can drive to their work or where would like to go fast in compared public transportation . moreover , they feel comfortable because there are all options in their on cars such as air conditioner and suitable seats .as well as no noisy as compared with bus or train where some passengers annoy others . In addition, some of them break law and smoke inside public transportation . So some people think using own cars are better than public transport .and no future can be seen for buses and trains for preceding reasons .

On the other hand, travelling own cars cause many problems , and affect on our society negatively .
Firstly, many cars on streets led to more pollution. for example , emissions such as smoke and fumes are harmful and quit negative effectives on environment and human . furthermore some diseases like cancer attributed to pollution .

secondary , using private cars contribute to increasing traffic on roads , so travellers will spend great time to reach their work or where go .as well as cars accidents go up and cause massive casualties including deaths and material losses .

lastly , governments need huge amount of money to make maintainace of roads and widen streets or establishing new roads , because of jumping number of cars on street .

In conclusion , it is good future for public transportation to keep our health and reduce pollution to protect an environment to live in pure air .