Writing Feedback / Functional shift of green large farmland and green area over the 8 decade period in Stokeford area [2]

The maps illustrate the changes on the village of Stokeford over 8 decades beginning in 1930. Overall, it is obvious that there was a functional shift of green large farmland and green area over the period. Meanwhile, the number of villagers' accommodations increased remarkably.

Turning to the agricultural land where people also grew livestock, the north east and the south west area of Stokeford were originally farming land in 1930, but in 2010, half of those area shifted to be residences albeit the rest is just unspoiled land. In addition, a primary school in north east which was small 80 years ago was constructed to become bigger.

The massive rise of population also destructed two shops, stood up in 1930, just beside the post office so that housing and a short new road could be built there. The gardens had totally changed into retirement home whilst road and accommodations constructed immensely there as well as in others part of Stokeford.

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Writing Feedback / Population explosion: the risks and causes. Is it the biggest problem faced by humanity? [3]

To continued rise in the world's population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time.
What are the causes of this continued rise?

Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

The population explosion has been a severe problem faced by mankind in the 24th century life. Several things are revealed as the trigger of this, such as the betterment of life quality, stable state of most countries and the advancement in medical technology. I strongly agree that this continued problem is what we should concern since it might be led to another remarkable trouble.

The global population is progressively risen year by year which is caused by diverse reasons. At first, different with several years before, to fulfil nutritious intake for citizen is not a complicated thing as the technology has increased the farming technique and ease the distribution, whether it is importing or exporting activities, of food at world wide scale. As the result, there is an incline of quality of life which has stimulated the healthiness of adults, particularly parents, to birth many children. Another reason is countries tend to carefully keep the universal peacefulness by avoiding problems with others country. In fact, wars like World War I and II had contributed on control the population as well as the terrible holocaust in Germany by Adolf Hitler. However, it was not as reasonable and logical solution to decrease the number of humankind. At last, the advanced medical treatment techniques and technologies have made people life longer than at the past which decreases the death rate.

Unfortunately, I believe that this world's population rise and uncontrolled birth rate is the greatest obstacle for both people lives and earth since it also trigger more complicated problems. The massive number of people would lead to water and food scarcity when the source of those become limited as the same time that inhabitants need it is in an enormous figure. This overcrowded population also increase the demand of energy when people fully rely on fossil fuels which are not renewable, the land shifted to be housing area also become larger. As the result, we would not possess green area as the lung of earth anymore; the temperature of planet earth would gradually rise as well as the total of population and carbon emission release to the atmosphere, and all of those caused by uncontrolled natality and population rate.

All in all, the population explosion is terrible problem humankind should overcome to avoid more severe problems and conditions which I believe we may need to face at the future.

Writing Feedback / Reuse of rainwater through several treatments [2]

The diagram informs the recycling system of rain water to be hygiene water used domestically in people housing. Rain water is processed through water management systems at a macro and micro scale. Meanwhile the stromwater and wastewater are also having treated to reuse.

Turning to the first stage which is the water saving or collecting in both considerably at the great artificial reservoir and simply through rainwater tank at household scale. Before distribute to the housing, rain water get through water treatment plant to process it being drinkable water whilst the water stored by a small tank installed in the building's surrounding is directly channeled to the house.

Furthermore, the used water from house is not completely throw back to the nature but then having reprocessed at wastewater treatment plant to separate the organic and inorganic substances so it could be used as recycled water and piped back to the house. Besides that, the rain water fallen to the earth, for instance in the river and drainage, underground water and the excess treated water contained such contaminants also utilize after treated on stromwater treatment.

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Writing Feedback / West Park Secondary School construction during 3 decades [2]

The maps illustrate the differences which had occurred in a particular area every 3 decades over a 60-year period. The most noticeable change is the functional shift of housing and farming area to being public facilities, particularly educational institution.

To begin, there were only a school and a playground constructed in the west area of the map, along the main road, in 1950, whilst a half of this land occupied by three residential buildings and a large green farmland. The construction in 1980 had altered the east area to being the part of the school edifice where the previous citizen accommodations became car park and science block. The farm land slightly enlarged for being sports field where the students sport activities taken place.

In 2010, the whole area has exceptionally become public facility as the school zone was greatly built. However, while the size of car park was widened, in contrary, the range of sport fields was cut as well as the playground.

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Writing Feedback / The air flows out and into the house thus causing inefficient consuming energy on heater operating [2]

The diagram informs the ways air flowing out and into the house thus caused inefficient consuming energy on heater operating. The air is wafted to the house from several vents in the first and second storey of the buildings, meanwhile the air keep leaking from the hatch or the top of it.

It is an energy waste to use temperature conditioner since the cold air is spilled through opening gaps around the structure. In the lowest level, it is flowed in via the crawl space and dryer vent. Furthermore, the windows installed in both middle room and kitchen, the door and electrical outlet in the second level are the circulation path for the breeze air into the house.

On the other hand, heat loss occur through the trapdoor and recessed lightnings designed in the top storey. By these, the architecture of the edifice affects the efficiency of power used to control the temperature inside.

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Writing Feedback / To broadcast celebrities news or informations about some ordinary people? [NEW]

The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Live as a celebrity mean no privacy. Famous people lives are a public consumption which aired massively by media. I totally agree that media should report this news most since to report common people lives has no valuable or attractive point meanwhile celebrity's stories are a must published news.

Inappropriate news of general people, broadcasted by media, has less meaning and fascinating for viewers which offered no enjoyment by watching this kind of show. Showing daily activities of citizens albeit they are having merits or spectacular achievements in some fields are not make sense and it would reach a much low rating too since people just look for entertaining show which sensations rather than informative or educating programs. Thus, I believe that media, as the source of information, is most pivotal to broadcast celebrities news.

In addition, well-known people days are always essential and attract inhabitants to watch them. Hot issue of celebrities including artists, sportsmen and singers has been the most popular show which inspiring common people. Viewers have a high curiosity on those extra ordinary figures life which makes them waiting and impatient to access the latest news of them. It also becomes a large issue as the most often discussed and seek out by people. For me, it is stand out that airing celebrities' stories give much benefit not only for the paparazzi or TV channels economically but also the general watchers entertainingly.

All in all, I strongly believe that reporters do not need to balance, or reduce, between the news of ordinary people and famous figures since viewers would find it bored and give less attention to out of favor stories.

Writing Feedback / 'hindrance for national identity'; International fast food replaces traditional foods [NEW]

In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Fast food restaurants have developed immensely in most countries. This is resulting on the increasing number of fast food consumers while a reverse vogue for traditional foods. I would argue that this trend has brought a dire effect in both family and societies.

It is noticeable that the consumption of fast food has a negative effect toward family. It has become a habit of most family to just eat or order varied instant food from restaurant in spite of spend time for preparing traditional home-made food which can strengthened family bond. They choose to enjoy meals which prepare and consume at short time. This lifestyle may reduce the kinship value while eating is no longer family sharing activity and reduce the quality time for them.

Fast food consuming has also brought some negative effects largely on society. This has become unhealthy lifestyle reducing the life quality of citizens and caused them easy to get sick. Fast food is lack of nutrition and it is become worse by the serving techniques resulted on high fat, cholesterol and calories food which is the main cause of obesity. In addition, fast food franchise is a threat for local restaurant where traditional staple served. The power of branding and advertising of fast food effectively persuade people to consume it rather than traditional cuisines which are being an economic issue for locals. Furthermore, fast food has been a hindrance for national identity. Traditional foods are the uniqueness of country as the historical and cultural product of certain country. But, people these days are much consume fast food rather than traditional food in some national yet in traditional events.

To sum up, fast food consumption which replaced traditional food is a serious issue. I strongly believe that it has aroused many problems for family and society.