Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - The rail transport in the UK, the USA, Japan and Italy in 2007 [4]

The rail transport in the UK, the USA, Japan and Italy in 2007 is depicted in the table. Overall, it can be seen that Japan has the highest passengers and the heaviest cargo carried. However, the lowest passengers and cargo carried is the USA.

It is noticeable that in 2007, the UK and Italy possessed nearly similar number of people using the train. In Britain was 5.9 passengers, while in Italy was 5.5. Then, the number passengers of Japan were twenty seven, which is much higher compared to the USA that only 0.3. Moreover, the distance of passengers per head of population between the UK and Italy were slightly different, wherein Italy is 10 KM longer than the UK.

In addition, the weights of cargo carried by Britain, Japan and Italy in 2007 were almost equal. The heaviest cargo was Japan at 23.01 billion tons, and then followed by the UK 22.2 billion and Italy 21.9 billion. However, the weight cargo carried of these three states was extremely far in comparison with the USA that only 2,880 billion tons.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - The sale of foods and drinks on a typical weekday in a coffee shop [3]

The sale of foods and drinks on a typical weekday in a coffee shop in an office building are depicted in the table. Overall, it is noticeable that morning is the highest sales time in all menus, except for the sandwich. Meanwhile, the lowest sales time is in the afternoon, except for the pastry.

It can be seen that coffee is the most favorite drink in the all time, particularly in the morning that sells until 265 cups and in the evening two hundreds cups. Then, the most favorite food is pastry which can be sold out up to 275 for breakfast time. However, people prefer to order sandwich for lunch and dinner.

In addition, the number of tea sale is extremely far different in comparison to the coffee. The highest tea sale is in the morning 110 cups, whereas the lowest is only 35 cups in the afternoon. Moreover, the sale of sandwiches is two hundreds lower in total than the pastry.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - More and more works is done by the machines. [2]

More and more works is done by the machines. What are the impacts on individuals and society? What's your opinion?

Today, machine plays an important role in people's life. This phenomenon leads the impacts towards individuals and society. Nevertheless, I believe that there are advantages and drawbacks of such this issue.

It is unquestionably that technology has facilitated people's work to be done easily. However, this development assumes individuals to be more dependent on using it. A host of sophisticated machines created by scientists has substituted people's power. The human resources become lessen as a consequence of it. This phenomenon triggers a number of problems such as unemployment due to a lack of the job field in many areas. Thus, using machine in today's society should be taken into account, particularly for the private and the public sectors.

The prevalence of machine is indeed very essential in everyday's task. Nevertheless, people are not supposed to be dependent on using it for all purposes. In terms of cleaning the floor for instance, they can do it manually by using a broom or a mop instead of using a vacuum cleaner. Unless, the works cannot be done by people's power such as photocopying. However, it is considerable that using machine needs a lot of energy and triggers global warming. Hence, individuals ought to use their own strength as long as it does not strive for them.

In conclusion, machine has taken part in today's world is undoubtedly true. In my point of view, people have to consider its impacts to the human resources and the environment. Therefore, the government should be wisely in addressing this issue.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - The map illustrates an overview of before and after the construction [2]

The map illustrates an overview of before and after the construction of some amenities in an island. It can be seen that many buildings and access routes have been made after the construction. Meanwhile, the island is only a blank space before being constructed.

After the island is constructed, a pear is built for the cruise puts its passengers ashore. Moreover, the tourist can stay at the accommodations and eat in the restaurant near to the beach. There are ten accommodations in the western area and six accommodations in the eastern area wherein each of them is surrounded by a footpath. However, in the western island, the area is nearer to the beach, it is pointed through the footpath where the tourists can enjoy swimming.

In addition, a reception place is made for welcoming the tourists who have just arrived in the island. Then, the tourists are also can cycle at the vehicle tracks that turn around the reception building. After the construction, the island becomes very an amusement place in compared to before the construction.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - Exposure to international media, e.g. films, TV and magazines [2]

Exposure to international media, e.g. films, TV and magazines, has an impact on the local culture. Please discuss whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Today, the local cultures compete strongly with the emergence of foreign cultures through the media. I believe this development triggers an impact on the existence of local culture. Nevertheless, I will discuss this issue further in this essay.

Media is one of the facilities that publish any information around the world which is accessible for people all ages. Furthermore, media can enrich people's insights through magazine or newspaper they read or TV program they watch. Take for instance a healthy American life style article, it is the way of media to foster the readers in order to adjust their life style. Thus, the local people possess a good life long expectancy.

However, there is evidence that not all media presents beneficial programs or articles particularly for youngsters and children. For example in terms of entertainment, such as girl bands or boy bands and drama films published in TV programs. Generally speaking, these shows influence the student's performance in the school because many students have been addicted to watch them. Nowadays, the emergence of foreign culture presented through media such as apparel style disposes people to ignore domestic products. As a consequence, the local culture will erase by the time if the societies do not aware of it.

To sum up, it is true that media has allowed people to see other cultures that can inspire them. However, this phenomenon has threatened the prevailing local culture wherein as a distinction of a country. Therefore, the government should take into account this issue for preventing the eradication of local culture.