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Name: Phoowadon Prapruetdee
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Phoowadon   
Aug 20, 2017
Scholarship / Being an Aries Man. Leadership & Influence Letter for Chevening Scholarship [4]

Hi again Moshtaq, I am totally agree with Holt

First of all I have to say thank you to Holt, he (or she?) had reviewed all of my 4 essays before I had decided to submit my application online for the Chevening last season, and guess what? I was shorted list to the final round and was interviewed at the final selection state. Unfortunately, however, I was not selected on that occasion, I guess I have to switch a course that the UK is interested in or doing business with my country. Thus, I will be here, existing more again and would love to share my experience positively to you.

Yes I failed, but I always fall forward, soon or later I will catch my dream.
Phoowadon   
Aug 17, 2017
Scholarship / Being an Aries Man. Leadership & Influence Letter for Chevening Scholarship [4]

Hi, Moshtaq Ahmad

As I was the one who got into the final round for the Chevening interview last year round, the 2017/2018 (but unfortunately did not receive a scholarship).

I would suggest you to

1.Write as much as the word limit to 500 words but not more than that like this 542 - words essay you have written above. If I have no mistake on your whole essay containing 4 paragraphs

2.Focus on some small mistakes you have such as forgetting to add article "a" in singular or did not add "s" in plural (n.), e.g. 3 decade

3. Be more academic style on your writing, try not to select words like "very"or 'about", and use appropriate links between paragraphs rather than phrases.

4. I like your 2nd paragraph but not the 3rd one at all (you have not answer the leadership question outstandingly) you only wrote about yourself in the same tasks like other scholars could do rather than an obvious talent or be an influence among your group.

5.You should state your leadership of what have you done to show your leadership skill ? and why you have done that ? and give examples to allow reviewers imagine a story you are describing, and restate your statement again at the latter of the paragraph.

6. Tell reviewers what will Chevening help you to encourage your leadership and if so, what kind of activity would you do back home after you complete a year in the UK to show your gained leadership skill?

Does my suggestion sound like reflecting something better, have fun and good luck to you.
Phoowadon   
Nov 4, 2016
Writing Feedback / People can't live permanently on Venus for its high atmospheric pressure, lack of water and sunlight [2]

@melissa888

Hi, I am used to IELTS academic writing, not a TOELF one, but I hope my observation would be useful.

... Venus is ninety times higher than the Earth's, (...) where the atmosphere is much thinner , this problem can be solved.
... atmosphere on the surface of Venus is too thick ...

... and oxygen on Venus would have a difficulty for humans to live on it, yet the professor believes that there will be a solution for this challenge . By chemical isolation, people can brew/generate/produce water and oxygen (...) dioxide, which is commonly found in Venus.

All in all, the professor believes that although there ...

All in all, with scientific techniques, the professor believes that there will be a possibility for people to live permanently on Venus.
Phoowadon   
Nov 4, 2016
Scholarship / Networking questions - chevening scholarship - Chartered Accountants in health [6]

@munmar

When I was reading through your essay. I was wondered that whether I took a time machine back through your story or this is just your unique reverse timeline writing style. My personal instruction so far, is that you may upside down your paragraphs by presenting your previous networking skills that supported you to fit Chevening' s interest along with your community first, then you can draw your plan of creating larger-scale networks back home relating to Chevening supports afterwards. And all of these strong networking skills have to reflect your academic background and degree that You will going to complete from the UK.
Phoowadon   
Nov 4, 2016
Scholarship / 'the best part of leadership is seen through legacy' - Chevening - Health Policy development [6]

@munmar
There are not many points and grammar you have been making errors, and you can fixed them by reading over again yourself. And you have made a nice flow for readers to follow your development in this essay.

what I have just observed is that only " This is your essay to make a response to the question, so You may shine a light on how you lead people rather than link and connect them. Well, those connecting organizations and institutes can be the objectives of your relevant examples on how you lead and inspire others.

I hope my view would fillip your interest.
Phoowadon   
Nov 4, 2016
Scholarship / My aim is to make difference in the pharmaceutical industry field. Chevening questions - career plan [6]

@hanadyz
Hi, welcome to an academic community for sharing mutual tuition.

First, you just have got a friend like me who has the same fate, my country does not have any thing that the UK gov. is directly doing in my country related to my area of study. But now onward, you can express your attempt to reach priority in which Chevening please to have bursars whose major displayed on the list, for instance, My case is that, I wish to completed my Msc in animal behavior area but it is not in the priority nor has met any political memorandum of understanding between my country and the UK. So, after I have looked back and think carefully in the priority again, my idea to write then sparked!

For my country, Chevening is pleased to encourage students to develop some 10 issues and interests, I just pick a Climate Change issue, because.

1) It is related to a scientific field and some of biological studies.
2) I am able to apply an impact of Climate change on the welfare and behaviour of animals.
3) I can also estimate animal cruelty rejection from the British which has an increase in numbers, and it is being a controversy online right now.

So do you?

You can do it

Make your pharmacy to be related in one outstanding alongside your interest.

and try to think globally and act locally.

Then your aspect of your essay'S framework would be more effective,

and please note that revising this as soon as possible, the application online is going to be inaccessible in the next 4 1/2 days

so be alert !
Phoowadon   
Nov 3, 2016
Scholarship / Working as environmental researcher at nature conservation sector. Career plan Chevening scholarship [5]

Hi, here are some of my observation

1.where I will put all my new abilities ----- where I will uetterly apply all my effective abilities

2.and boost measures to reduce the potentially harmful environmental effect . potentially ----> this word is simply used in positive way, you might just switch its place. by

and boost measures to potentially reduce the harmful environmental effect. So this would differently sound like this word refers to you not that the the harmful environmental effect

3. Hence, the Chevening award is keeping me away from my peers as a highly energetic man ...

BE CAREFUL of this sentence, by your statement here is quite aggressive to your colleagues , I think that the reviewers wish to see your relationship among others by bringing up a whole team together not only you and left your fellows behind, my suggestion is " by going alone you may go faster, but going together you will exactly go further.

4.my objective is to upgrade become a director of the ... ----my objective is to upgrade and become a director of the regional branch at EEAA

5. that will have essential goals are oversight the pollution in Upper Egypt and will introduce a problem-solving for troubleshooting of the environment

that will have essential goals to oversight the pollution in northern Egypt/northern region of Egypt and will introduce a problem-solving forenvironmental issues

6. it will provide appropriate support for thoseaffected by environmental problems . those??? who ,Have you mentioned to the readers before, they may guess and have no idea who are suffering from environmental issues

7. so as to preserve the public health --------- so asto maintain and protectthe public health

8. Upper Egyptian ------------ if you had have mention their location, so you can use ------- the northern region residents

9. suffer from (is negatives) the caring(is positive) during these years ----- suffer from a lack of sanithationduring these years

10. Egypt is in need of environment without any pollution ...----readers may get confused for its meaning.

--------- You may write -------> Egypt is in need of solutions for environmental issues, resulting in a decrease of pollution for national development.
Phoowadon   
Nov 2, 2016
Scholarship / My last - the reintroduced leadership answer essay. I always strive to improve more. [8]

Most people here get used to this question, This is my second post on this topic, hoping that it is getting more efficient.

I am confident that persisting a keen and enthusiastic behavior for hard working have trained and recruited me as a problems solver, proving that being a leader as I have grown up is my lifestyle.

In 2002, I went to Switzerland as the international agricultural students. There were trainees from more than ten countries stayed and worked together in a huge horticultural farm. After I had settled and get used to a new environment, my leadership skills was honed intensively among fellows. I did not only build a trust by hard working, but also a better relationship to be a good listener, to have more patience, to decrease personal ego, and to be a co - worker. Once a massive salad order was arriving, my peers were looking for a leader for guidance, so I attempted to use this chance to show my intuition by doing a brainstorming to approach a target. Finally, we completed that task on time. It was my pride of being able to inspire my team to reach the same goal though we have had such different backgrounds. This primary experience brought me a bold attempt to take risks which is ever ready for any situation.

During a ten-year-work as an agricultural officer, my leadership has played a vital role in diverse educational events. Rural development for farmers and students was my obvious masterpiece, because it consisted of various skills and techniques inside. Whenever I ran courses for a large number of people in local communities, I always asked students at my campus for volunteering work to challenge such a great experience. To train these volunteers, I had to use as much as communication to generate enthusiasm for a hard work and responsibility for them. At a preparation for an upcoming event, I had formally explained work procedure into each student's role, informing them that every single position is highly important and must have a positive outlook.

As a leader at the training, I showed my confidence on teaching and managing people to my volunteers to instill energy among my staff. But if something went wrong, my commitment was not only allowed my student to take action immediately, but also worked alongside everyone else. By this, I could observe the respect of my followers as a fair leader, in addition, everyone seemed to sacrifice oneself to deliver the peak amount of quality work shortly afterwards.

What a wonderful outcome, lately at a graduation rehearsal day, I met most of my former volunteers who have already been leaders themselves at companies. The leadership by learning has been passed on from generation to generation. It was accomplished that showing my inspiration and motivation could encourage their job prospects and enhance their productivity.

In conclusion, good skilled leaders would certainly have an impact on human resource, result in a quality of life and more professional workforce. Chevening scholarship's opportunity will be my precursor to ensure that I must not settle to what I always strive to improve more.
Phoowadon   
Nov 2, 2016
Scholarship / I always believe in the power of networking. My answer on Chevening "Networking" Essay Question [3]

@Eng Phin

I have read @Holt 's review and I have agreed with him, as well

my supplementation is that
1. in your second paragraph, your first and second sentences seemed going around the bush and waste word counts
2. You repeat the words "I got a chance too much" You can use its synonyms like opportunity, occasion, circumstance, moment and prospect.
3. So, I always participated in Student Body ----> So, I have always participated in Student Body
4. By having friendswho shares the same ambition---> By having friends who share the same ambition
5. I can learn from them and share my experience---> better---> we can learn together and share our experiences
6. I am committed to devote my time to maintain my networking in Chevening---> I am committed to devote my opportunity to maintain my networking with Chevening

7. to share our knowledge and experience to Indonesia young people ----> ... and experience to Indonesian adolescences/youth/teenagers
Phoowadon   
Nov 2, 2016
Scholarship / Leadership is not a gift at birth, leaders are created by hard work, dedication and experience [5]

@ranasaleh

Hi, from my reading at a glance, there are some points I have noticed to be improve, hope this at least would help and allowed you to see your indiscernible view.

Your first and second paragraph can combine into one since you tell the reader a same point

your next paragraph on your teacher assistant job need to explain "what is another way you have found to motivate young people---> explain why and how you choose this way---->give a few relevant examples from your chosen way.

To me, your last body paragraph seems to have the most interesting component inside, as You use very fascinating words, I learned both how to lead and follow , this should have been cut and place in the beginning of this paragraph and extend by explaining why and how you how to lead and follow---->give a few relevant examples from your experience.

The conclusion, You need to restate your previous leadership a bit on how it helps you to suit Chevening and how chevening will rebound your leadership in the future.
Phoowadon   
Nov 2, 2016
Graduate / Hope this would be a fine three courses questions response for the UK study ;-) [3]

@Holt

Please have a time on my revise done again,THANKs

The three courses' profiles below have related to my previous academic background due to my bachelor degree in Animal Production Technology which was mostly studied on farm animals. Nevertheless, there was no subject related to animal behaviour and welfare at all. So I have considered my qualification and research skills were quite limited factors to approach my goal for this complex issue. I have therefore chosen three university courses from my priority.

Firstly, The Applied Animal Behaviour and Welfare at New Castle University, has interesting and compatible modules which would demonstrate the key concepts from legal and ethical frameworks for people working with animals, an animal welfare science such as relationships between animals and people, and interpretation and evaluation of research related to animal behaviour and welfare. These would broaden my experience, with professional staff's specialties including an international reputation for their research into improving knowledge and skills, in addition, facilities like farms and modern laboratories are available. The course is also validated by the association for the study of animal behaviour with around 1,000 members. Moreover, I would have an opportunity to take advantage of a networking by a work experience within the course. Overall, this programme is designed to meet my future plan to utilize my academic skills in further research on farm animals for better food, to study some local animals that suffer from human invasion and climate changes, leading to an effect on wildlife and their habitats.

Secondly, The Applied Animal Behaviour and Animal Welfare at The University of Edinburgh, the first animal welfare MSc in the UK was established here. This course has popular International reputation and is supported by international institutions, so I will meet many academics and experts for the larger networking within the professional community. The course will synthesize sources to help students understand the issues better, including guest lecturers, visits to zoo and labs. I am confident this can be applied for my further research, training, and study.

Thirdly, The Animal Health and Welfare at Nottingham Trent University, is my last preference, but not least important, because this course has difference in contexts that relate to the application of health and welfare science for the use of animals in society. The course consists of a variety of assessment methods, such as case studies, literature reviews and presentations, allowing me to demonstrate understanding skills and the ability to communicate in a scientific style from a mixture of lectures, seminars and practical sessions.

As an agricultural officer, I have studied and trained people a sustainable animal farming which was likely to keep animal well-being itself. My vision is already ahead to establish a social framework for better knowledge relating to animal welfare and their behavour which contributes to develop mankind by education. That is why I look forward to striving for a higher degree overseas by applying the Chevening scholarship. This international opportunity alongside with the outstanding course in the UK, I would be more capable to address local controversial animal rights issues.

Phoowadon   
Nov 2, 2016
Graduate / Hope this would be a fine three courses questions response for the UK study ;-) [3]

In facts, the United Kingdom was the first country in the world to implement laws protecting animals since 1822; this means that I have been on the right path to study where it has a strong emphasis on my interests. I have therefore chosen three university courses from my priority:

Firstly, The Applied Animal Behaviour and Welfare at New Castle University, has interesting and compatible modules which would demonstrate the key concepts from legal and ethical frameworks for people working with animals, an animal welfare science such as relationships between animals and people, and interpretation and evaluation of research related to animal behaviour and welfare. These would broaden my experience, with professional staff's specialties including an international reputation for their research into improving knowledge and skills, in addition, facilities like farms and modern laboratories are available. The course is also validated by the association for the study of animal behaviour with around 1,000 members. Moreover, I would have an opportunity to take advantage of a networking by a work experience within the course. Overall, this programme is designed to meet my future plan.

Secondly, The Applied Animal Behaviour and Animal Welfare at The University of Edinburgh, the first animal welfare MSc in the UK was established here. This course has popular International reputation and is supported by international institutions, so I will meet many academics and experts for the larger networking within the professional community. The course will synthesize sources to help students understand the issues better, including guest lecturers, visits to zoo and labs. I am confident this can be applied for my further research, training, and study.

Thirdly, The Animal Health and Welfare at Nottingham Trent University, is my last preference, but not least important, because this course has difference in contexts that relate to the application of health and welfare science for the use of animals in society. The course consists of a variety of assessment methods, such as case studies, student-led seminars, literature reviews and presentations, allowing me to demonstrate understanding, skills and the ability to communicate in a scientific style.

The three courses' profiles above have related to my previous academic background due to my bachelor degree in Animal Production Technology which was mostly studied on farm animals. Nevertheless, there was no subject related to animal behaviour and welfare at all. So I have considered my qualification and research skills were quite limited factors to approach my goal for this complex issue. As an agricultural officer, during ten years, I have Studied and trained people a sustainable animal farming which were likely to keep animal well-being itself. My vision is already ahead to establish a social framework for the better knowledge relating to animal welfare and their behavour which contributes to develop my skills. That is why I look forward to striving for a higher education overseas by applying the Chevening scholarship. This international opportunity alongside with the outstanding course in the UK, I would be more capable to address local controversial animal rights issues.
Phoowadon   
Nov 2, 2016
Graduate / Personal Statement Speech Language Pathologist [3]

@DaynaM
I observed that You just have done what I did before, your body para graph is very compacted and needs to be separated. To do so, you have to do a brainstorming first the top one will be your thesis statement and convert tobe your introduction which encompasses every thing that are later divided into 2-4 body paragraphs.

your 2- 4 sub ideas from the top ones are your topic sentences, they (what) are then supposed to be place in the prior sentence of any body paragraphs. Then you can expain (why) your thought, and give some examples from your experience where relevant.
Phoowadon   
Nov 2, 2016
Writing Feedback / Nothing in this world is ideal, and my city is not an exception. [6]

@Ashkan123

To be academic some higher level vocabulary and their collocation are necessary placed in your eassay,

However, to do so, is not hard to find sources online like dictionary
and please note that any time you get through any new vocab, you must broaden its collocation to sound more like a native user, and better learn a synonym, as well.

In the first paragraph

There are some patterns that have not met a general introduction essay writing,

Your thesis statement outline about physical appearance of your hometown (beautiful landscape and surrounding, I guess). the TASK ask you a question that only one thing to be addressed ,and you have come in a right path to write what things (as you mentioned, I as well as the reviewers may think that you would come up with a infrastructure or other public surroundings, in contrast, you did not write it). As you put an emphasis on the internet speed is your most dissatisfied issue, since you have referred for your neighborhood. Your first obvious things to describe for your hometown is better to be public utilities and facilities that an authority has provided for community. Then you can claim that within several inconveniences from your point of view, what is the one thing that has caused you to think that it must be urgently changed.

Subsequently, In the first body paragraph, you shall create a topic sentence directly to your one undesired thing (what) and it might be better to link that others in your hometown also agree with your opinion (but do not go too far). And you have to write why you think this is the one thing you would like to change, and give some examples to support your idea just 2 - 3 good ones.

the next paragraph may give readers your solution for it.

For the closed paragraph you just restate your story again, remember that do not repeat to what you have just mention, close your essay nicely by folding your idea together in different way.

Here are just some vocabs you can replace.

... with the kindest people I have ever met. However, nothing in this world is ideal, and ...
There are couples of thing that ...

... with the kindest residents/citizens I have experienced with. However, some facilities fora public ...
... to make an access online , it is the internet speed.
Phoowadon   
Nov 2, 2016
Scholarship / Being a contributing factor in improvement of Xcountry society - career plan essay [3]

@Holt

You are always my adviser here, I have considered my developing writing style which has you as a key person.
You have really filled my gap of a neat essays, Thank you. You just showed that what are my missing points, so far, I have agreed with You

Thank you for your intellect, and hope you would have a nice day.
Phoowadon   
Nov 2, 2016
Scholarship / Being a contributing factor in improvement of Xcountry society - career plan essay [3]

Studying in the United Kingdom will ultimately fulfill my ambition of being a contributing factor in improvement of Xcountry society for animal protection. Fortunately, I have already worked in an educational institution, as an agricultural officer, a job which involved a great deal of training, particularly to educate people. Thus, whether short term or long term of an estimated career plan, my principle is that animal welfare cognition must be developed by education.

Most children have expressed their innocent kindness to animal, afterwards in lives, is there any ethical existence? What we have experienced that some adolescences made mistakes to hurt animals in any situation. My first-year-immediate plans would be achieved by creating possible events and prior activities. At my campus, there are an Animal Science academic people who are skilled lecturers and students or even other animal lovers at my workplace that willing to volunteer as my networks. To take action, we need a symbol for a movement, so I will establish a club associated with World Animal Protection Xcountry for technical supports and guidance. The first job is managing all huge number of stray pets around the community, give them vaccination against rabies, find new homes, and limit their population. Moreover, I would also introduce a task to help animals in disasters, showing that they have the right to be rescued.

By the second and the third year, I will not only run courses for students to ingrain them that animal welfare is a respect, but will also train teachers to inspire children why we should keep moral and treat animals nicely. For farmer groups, I will train these producers a good practice from farms to forks such as cage -free farming and humane slaughter for instance, according to an increase of animal farming for food each year. These courses I have mentioned are collocated with my study as a research to be academically relevant for all subjects. To be ready for my longer term of career, I will propose and study a topic related to climate change and other human activities that have an impact on the animal welfare and behaviour, since it has been a global issue which I have gained from the United Kingdom.

Although, the United Kingdom government has no direct animal welfare policy with Xcountry, in 2014, Xcountry has introduced its first animal welfare law and seemed to be desirable afterward. Yet, there have been many controversial arguments for the plight of wild animals such as tigers and elephants. British news and tourists claiming in various media how they feel so frustrated by Xcountry when they saw wildlife in chains for entertainment purposes. So my five-year-rewarding career plan is to study and research about wildlife and conservation, being a part to reveal unacceptable cruelty associated with the British charities like Animal Welfare Party and Royal Society for the Prevention of Cruelty to Animals. This change in wildlife welfare framework is the most challenging myself and will prepare me well for a PhD study.
Phoowadon   
Nov 2, 2016
Scholarship / I believe in the critical role of effective communication. Requirement of networking skill Chevening [3]

@Hoanganh
Hello, You have written a good essay, here I have a small number of what I can suggest.

1. Not only did we discuss our research ...
----> We did not only discuss our research methodologies and share related scientific articles, but also made contact among Master students with more experience in the field.

2.. Thanks to the introduction, I was given a chance ... This is not an academic form, so.
----->. This introduction allowed me a chance for an interview and resulted in an employment as (a part-time researcher?).

3. ... I started to work for the largest human DNA identification ...

------> reputed or the most famous

4. In terms oftechnical aspects, collaboration between molecular biologists and medical doctors should be established to enhance the applications of biotechnology advances in healthcare.In terms ofsocial interaction,

In terms ofsocial interaction,------> Moreover, by a social interaction,

5. ThisIt will not only provide me withthe opportunities to (...) leaders in my field, Ibut will also be able ...

I hope my observation above would support your goal.
Phoowadon   
Nov 2, 2016
Scholarship / I usually organize professional football matches - Chevening Networking Skills Essay. [5]

@Tariks

Hi, welcome to an academic community online

my instruction are only what I have observed to be able to help, so for your other errors and/or any writing that have not responded to the question may have some better solutions from ant other academic fellows here.

For the introduction
I think that you do not need to express the reviewers back too far to the elementary school, I suggest you to make brief outline at a glance to tell the reviewer an overall story of your leadership and somethings that attracts them to be interesting in your skill by selling yourself academically. moreover no need to definite the word networking by general, striking its meaning alongside with what you have inside to hit the reviewers to read more.

The second paragraph

organize ------> organized

you should separate your football experience out of your academic experience for networking skills, because when readers is following your story smoothly, you just stun them by a quick change of different story in the same paragraph. Perhaps you can decide to extend only one story here or keep them both but in two paragraphs (still meet the maximum word count), if you would like to keep both

The second Para. you can possibly present your teamwork with physical and emotional task to meet your victory in this sport.
And
The third Para. You must cut all a whole academic experience up there in previous paragraph to combine with the paragraph in which you have described your participation in conferences to be more clear and relevant.

The Fourth, your volunteering experience was great, however, you have to show reviewers how could you use your skills to brings people together willingly, write the point----> why----> you have to do that,-----> how you manage that-----> by giving evidences, in addition you can add your own principles and definition here.

and do not forget to link what is/are your future network(s) back home and how can Chevening inspire or support your prospect.

Good luck, and hope we will meet each other in the UK, LOL
Phoowadon   
Oct 29, 2016
Scholarship / Networking, whether formal or informal style, needs to establish cognition... [15]

@Holt

...
How about this newest one
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I believe that I have trained myself this social ability to connect and link people together in order to produce a stronger association in my certain profession.

The most recent task which challenged me to operate networking skill during a full - time job was mainly in research and training. Last year, between May and December 2015, I received a grant from the National Research Council namely a deep - litter pig production system, was one of a well-being pig keeping systems, and aimed to be applicable for schools, pig farmers and rural villagers. I attempted to use my networking skill by inviting together a large group of numerous stakeholders.

Firstly, for a training group 1) I contacted with an educational area district office to seek for a school that looking for my topic, 2) I informed Chumphon Provincial Farmers Council office to ask for pig farmers group that would like to try a new method to improve their skills, and 3) I also visited a deputy chief executive of the sub district administrative organization to open an application for rural villagers whose earnings were estimated lower than the national income. Subsequently after these three target groups had been interested in my project. I realized that it was involved various fields of skills, without cooperation, I would never achieved its excellent results.

Hence, my staffs then were teamed up, secondly, for a research-education-extension group, I made an approach to an expert in the social science field to be responsible for a focus group and analyze trainees' local abilities, resources, and cultural practices to create achievable courses that are compatible with them. The next ones were my colleagues who would take care of relevant documentation and other related activities. And two lecturers, the first one was me who taught the principles of the knowledge from researches, the second one was my on-farm research net-worker to share professional skills via his experience.

Throughout the training, I taught these learners academically along side with giving everyone a chance to speak, allowed this network flexible and informal, plan diverse activities and meetings, and share responsibilities whenever a group working-style has sat up. Later In August, my networking school has won the first place of the national award for the best practice in sustainable agriculture activity. Moreover, with my guidance, the pig farmers and the rural villagers have also achieved a monetary support by the government to extend their deep-litter pig production, resulted in presence of farmer-to-farmer networks themselves.

I am confident that my previous skills would allow me to build larger animal welfare networks with Chevening; members encompass the moral people from diverse profession but one vision that animals have the rights to live well as long as they are alive. This would run by my campus, and has me as a catalyst in animal welfare controversial issues for better understanding leads within my workplace and community. Thus, my role as an alumna is to utilize my skills internationally gained from the United Kingdom.

Many THANKs@Phoowadon
Phoowadon   
Oct 29, 2016
Scholarship / Networking, whether formal or informal style, needs to establish cognition... [15]

@Holt
But Holt, as I am am academic officer who loves to research. I just traveled through your instructions which already helped others and I have found a good one :-)

So far, I am re creating the better one that I hope to response the task more clear.
...
Give me sometime, I will be right back.

Many THANKs
Phoowadon   
Oct 29, 2016
Scholarship / Networking, whether formal or informal style, needs to establish cognition... [15]

Hi, Holt

How about this second revised one

I believe that I have trained myself this social ability to connect and link people together in order to produce a stronger association in my certain profession.

The most recent task which ...

P.S. You shall notice that I have borrowed some of your elaborate clauses here, please excuse me for this.
Phoowadon   
Oct 29, 2016
Scholarship / Networking, whether formal or informal style, needs to establish cognition... [15]

Hi, Holt

Eventually, I have decided to concentrate only on my most recent task with the National Research Council, like you suggested.

Here is my revised essay.---->

Networking needs to establish cognition on how to communicate and build a relationship with others. I believe that I have trained myself this social ability to connect and link people together in order to produce a stronger association.

The most recent task which challenged me to operate networking skill during a full - time job was mainly in research and training. Last year, between May and December 2015, I received a grant from the National Research Council namely a deep - litter pig production system, was one of a well-being pig keeping systems, and aimed to be applicable for schools, pig farmers and rural villagers. I attempted to use my networking skill by inviting together a large group of numerous stakeholders. [...]
Phoowadon   
Oct 28, 2016
Scholarship / Networking, whether formal or informal style, needs to establish cognition... [15]

@HOLT,
I am appreciated for your intellectual instruction above, I have revised it, being concentrated on my networking skill with the National Research Council, so far I have decided to change my job with the National Research Council for my first professional networking skill. .n addition, I would presented my most recent one as my current job, as a secretary of a national academic journal which was established by my university where I have worked. This job is academically involved many academics and experts with the larger networking and consists of 2 issues 1) the science and technology, and 2) the social sciences and humanities. Its purpose is to disseminate research results and academic performance between students, researchers, and academics that will lead to academic progress of the nation. The goal is to develop a national magazine as a reference (Thailand Citation Index; TCI).

Do you think I am on the right path?
Thanks in advance.

@Chikomm,

Yes, it helps

I will have my time to visit your essays,too,
Thanks
Phoowadon   
Oct 19, 2016
Scholarship / Networking, whether formal or informal style, needs to establish cognition... [15]

Hi, moderators and friends,

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Networking, whether formal or informal style, needs to establish cognition on how to communicate and build a relationship with others. I believe that I have trained myself this social ability to connect and link people together in order to produce a stronger association.

The first activity which challenged me to operate networking skill during a junior year at my former university was a volunteer camp to help farmers in a rural territory, held by animal husbandry club. As a club secretary, I had to facilitate the links between the committee, members and outside sponsors to ensure that the camp preparation was still on progress. This role had to be a good communicator, luckily I am personally generous and friendly, and my speaking skill was quite fluent, encouraging me to announce a camp's agenda to members, contact the outside organizations and an authority at the remote area for our arrivals and report the sponsors how we manage their subsidised grant. As a result, the camp was successfully consisted of 100 volunteers, 3 days of an animal production training and livestock house construction. Eventually, this initial networking skill have unconsciously innovated me to socialize people in my recent career.

The most recent networking skill I have associated with people was mainly in research and training. Last year, between May and December 2015, I received a grant from the National Research Council to broaden an international knowledge from my research namely a deep - litter pig production system. My project, was one of projects initiated by His Majesty King, and aimed to be applicable for schools, pig farmers and rural farmers. Firstly, I used my skill by contacting an educational area district office to seek for a school that looking for my topic, informed Chumphon Provincial Farmers Council office to ask for pig farmers group that would like to try a new method, and met a deputy chief executive of the subdistrict administrative organization to open an application for rural farmers whose earnings were estimated lower than the national income. There were totally 100 trainees from those 3 different categories. Throughout the training, I taught these learners the core principles of applied science, sustainable agriculture as well as livestock production by theories and practical disciplines. In August, while my workplace was holding the science fair, my networking school which I have just trained them accepted an invitation and presented their impressive exhibition. My networking school has not only participated in local activities, but also won the first place of the national award for the best practice of sufficient - supplementing program. Moreover, with my guidance, the pig farmers have also achieved a monetary support to extend their environmental - friendly pig production practice which I have planned to invite them as my network for further research and study.

If I become a part of Chievening, I would directly expand a network back in my country with my international association with in UK, especially with an animal welfare principle for more understanding to animals.
Phoowadon   
Oct 19, 2016
Scholarship / Electronics Workshop, GPS watch, ice-cream and photovoltaic system; Chevening 'leadership' question [3]

Hi, Gwiradus
Firstly, I have to inform you that my writing skill is just moderate, but I have tried my best to instruct your essay. Hope you would find this useful

Here I have revised the first paragraph for you

... Electronics Workshop. It required all the knowledge learned ...

----> , which required all the knowledge throughout a career learning, in order to develop a six-month project in groups of fifteen people.

This course was role-based and the first day

----> This was a role-based course, on the first day

It was both an honour and a biggreat responsibility for me ...

I identifiedobserved the strengths and interests of my ...

... as to achieve our goal in(by) the established dates. Fortunately, I hadhave always been supportedofwith my partners as we with our trusted each other . AtBy the end (of what), we have successfully achieved to successfully to build our (...), presenting it inat our university's technical fair, which wasbrought a great triumph ...
Phoowadon   
Oct 18, 2016
Scholarship / Proving that it's me who belongs to the future leaders or influencers - Chevening Scholarship [3]

1.

The more a leader knows various aspects of environment and people,he could be more successful .

I suggest to write The more a leader knows various aspects of environment and people, the more he/she could gain successfully.

2. This part seems confused in what a period of time you are trying to describe, it is mixed up with future, simple continuous and past tense ones. some of them are not following the form that used before.

.People will watch how the leaders are behavingandhow their decisions are unique .
This wasthe intellectual and experiential context that my abilities and capacities are grown.

I suggest to write
People will observe how the leaders would behave and make their unique decisions ( an adj. must come before a Noun)
This are cetainly intellectual and experiential contexts that my personal ability has been grown up obviously.

I will be back and inspect more
Phoowadon   
Oct 16, 2016
Scholarship / 'The leadership stems from several factors' - LEADERSHIP & INFLUENCE Essay for Chevening [2]

LEADERSHIP & INFLUENCE
Please help me to correct and revise the leadership question below, thanks.

1. Chevening is looking for individuals that will be future leader ...

I always believe that an individual is born a leader. Yet the leadership somehow stems from several factors which depends on a good upbringing, a different surrounding, various professions, and leisure in which people usually follow their interests. Fortunately, I am confident that having all of these factors have trained and recruited me as a problems solver, proving that being a leader as I have grown up is my lifestyle.

My family has always instilled positive attitudes during my childhood and supported me to use talents and skills. When I was sixteen, I went to the USA by participating the American Field Service (AFS) scholarship as an exchange student. During a one year - oversea surrounding, where I battle against homesickness and pressure allowed me to present the leadership through a public speech, and most of high school's activities. In 2002, Switzerland was my second abroad, as the international agricultural students. There were trainees from more than ten countries stayed together and worked in a huge horticultural farm. After I had settled and get used to the farm work, my leadership skills was honed intensively among fellows. I did not only build a trust by hard working, but also a relationship in a free time, leading to better level work outputs. Once a massive crop salad order was arriving, my peers were looking at me for guidance, so I attempted to use this chance to show my intuition by doing a brainstorming to approach a target. Finally, we completed that task on time. It was my pride of being able to inspire my team to reach the same goal though we have had such different backgrounds.

A year before getting a full - time job, I worked as a local guide for a travel agency, taking tourists to Koh - Tao islands for trips. Two months before I quitted this job, the travel company had expected me to provide on the job training for new employees in order to get ready to replaces my position. Developing others caused me to build influence effectively, generating enthusiasm for a hard work and responsibility. It was accomplished that showing my commitment was not only to encourage their job prospects, but also to enhance their productivity.

Although some people prefer to sharpen their leadership skills seriously, I as an activist would sometimes spend my leisure to active this skill. A basketball club at a campus where I work has nominated me as a supervisor which I enjoyed it so much because I have played basketball with students daily. I have played an important role for the campus's basketball team as well as my music appreciation which unexpectedly attract a group of good musical skilled - students. Yet they had no idea how to perform outstandingly. This allowed me to form up an acoustic band, and trained them over and over for the best performance. We were subsequently has been well known and employed for wedding ceremonies, in addition, students also received their proudly worthy income.
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