Writing Feedback / Summary : The September 30 Black Moon Explained [7]

Nowadays, people is extremely interesting in all event relating to the moon such as harvest moons, super moons, total eclipses, etc. Because of lunar event draws people attention through photos in internet. On 30 September, people from Western hemisphere experienced another lunar name, black moon, that popularly explained as second new moon in a month. This happens because moon surface that is illuminated by sunlight stay away from the Earth. So, Moon side seen completely black shadow from Earth. Actually, It can not be watched like any other new moon. Black Moon will be seen from Eastern hemisphere on October 30. For people who live in East Asia, Japan, New Zealand, and Australia, could be seen on October 31, appropriate with Spooky day, Hallowen.

Writing Feedback / Suzanne Simard: How trees talk to each other (TED Summary) [4]

Some people consider that forest is plants-covered area. Forest is not only about trees, but there is a intimated network system that connected each other. That statement is appropriate with research discovery by scientist while it present about Pine root could transfer carbon to another Pine root. Suzanne Simard, well-known as forestry researcher, challenged to manifest that theory. She shared her story when she was in Canada to complete her study. She figured that roots and soil are not the main building from the forest. She discovered it with less costly equipment because the sponsors thought that she was mentally ill. Objects in her study were Paper birch, douglas fir, and cedar tree. She found that there were two-way communication with Paper birch and douglas fir, on the other hand, Cedar had their own world so they had not a linkage each other. More specific, she discovered that there were two-way conversation between trees that was not only as competitors but as cooperative partners such as shared carbon, nitrogen, and chemical compound. As an conclusion, she explained about correlation between clear-cutting forest, trees network and climate change, in the end of her speech, she offered her four thought to be friend with climate change.

Writing Feedback / Scientist found that BRCA 1 and 2 are powerful cancer genes markers [3]

Why I won't Get the Genetics Test for Breast Cancer (Summary)

Scientist found that BRCA 1 and 2 are powerful cancer genes markers, most. If those genes mutated, It could increase the possibility breast or ovarian cancer. Both of them had a irritate treatment even though it was very precise. We could amputate our breast or ovaries if we desired to cut off the risk. Of course, it was he worst choice. Because of it came from genes in DNA, It was possible that those genes were decreased for generations. A senior researcher from National Cancer Institute in Maryland, charged the writer's family tree to an online BRCA risk-assesstment tool. The results showed that she had a small risk to affected by breast cancer although her great aunt and her dad's cousin died of breast cancer. Most of women who had a positive result decided to remove their breast or ovaries.

Writing Feedback / The heartbreaking education system condition in a state of India, Hariyana [3]

How to Fix the Broken Education without More Money (TED Summary)

People usually have mindset that it is almost impossible to change the corrupt government. Seema Bassal from India will dispute that perceptions which followed by the unbelievable example. She explained about how heartbreaking education system condition in a state in India, Hariyana, which has 15,000 public schools with 2 millions student and her journey with her team to transform it. The story was started from their struggles to find the best solution. Actually, they already have a great deal of ideas, on the other hand, they must put more effort to discover a concept that could be applied to the whole schools. They decided to determine about Hariayana's education goal and then several idea that supported to achieve the purpose were picked. They figured that broken education might be formed by malfunction of the teacher roles. The important things from teacher roles are to educate the students. Because of the limited budget, they should look for a solution that could be used to all of the school. Finally they found an alternative solution when one of the team member saw a teacher whom used learning object from around the school. On a big scale, they implemented textbook that had guideline to make an interesting lesson so the learning activity was about all of the things in school environment. Nowadays, education in Hariyana is better than in the past and teacher do their jobs as an educator for student even the teacher has a communication group using social media.

Writing Feedback / The Number of Computer Science Students from Native and International Student at a UK University [4]

The bar graph shows the number of both sexiest Computer Science students from native and international student at a UK university since 2010 until 2012

Overall, it can be seen that there were 2 kind of students : British home students and international students. It was noticeable that the number of native students were the highest compare than international student both of female and male during 3 years.

British male students stood at around 40 in 2010 and then plunged to around 25 in 2011. By 2012, the number of students increase to around 40. On the other side, the female students who came from British rose from around 30 to 45 since until 2012.

Between 2010 and 2012, the number of international male students rose from 20 to around 40. During the same period, the females also ascended from 15 to 20. The most of Computer Science students at UK university came from British area to compare with students from overseas over the whole period.

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Writing Feedback / In our daily life, we often meet strangers or our neighbors in the street and we just greet them [5]

Why You Should Talk to Strangers (TED Summary)

In our daily life, we often meet strangers or our neighbors in the street and we greet them with meaningless greeting. Nowadays people have a mindset that strangers is culprit, they can injure us and we should to be wary to them. On the other side, most of them have warmhearted. On top of that, people still think that to be friendly with strangers is weird action. Of course, It can be difficult to make interaction with strangers, however, using that perception is the easier way . The upside that using our senses better than fears is that we can gain intimacy in terms of lead to emotional resonance and meaning. The research shows that people usually feel more enjoy when they are open their inner selves to strangers compared their friend or family. Because it is easy to share story with someone that we never meet again, so it has lack consequences. People also obtain a pleasure experiences when we could tell our whole story. Despite the fact that we need to be kind to strangers, there are some rules depend on where do you live and we must realize when we should be friendly or not.

Writing Feedback / From 1981 to 2007 butter was the most popular spread that was consumed by people [2]

The graph below show the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph presents consumption of margarine, lowfat and reduced spreads, and butter between 1981 and 2007. Overall, it can be seen that butter was the most popular spreads that was consumed by people.

Between 1981 and 1986, butter consumption rose from around 140 to a peak of 160 grams per person per year. The other way,consumption of margarine declined from around 90 to 80 grams per person in the same period.

According to the graph, between 1996 and 2001, margarine consumption declined from around 100 to 80 grams person per year. During the same period, consumption of butter also declined, to nearly 60 grams per person, while the figures for lowfat and reduced spreads rose from around 10 to a peak of 80 grams per person. After that period, all of spreads had declined. By 2007, the most popular of the four types of spreads was lowfat and reduced spread, with figures eventually surpassing margarine and butter. By contrast, there were significant changes in the trends for margarine, lowfat and reduced spreads and butter consumption over the period as a whole.

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