Unanswered [0]
     DrAfT!

All Threads [72373] - page 22 of 2413

Mind Chatter (Common App)

3 - I think the story line is good especially the metaphoric interface but it's too abrupt...

UndergraduateTakataka - Nov 25, 2024Blahblah222222 - Nov 26, 2024
Varsity basketball team (responding to a problem) - UBC SAUDER SCHOOL OF BUSINESS

2 - This is a very interesting presentation. This is one of the few times that I have come across this...

Undergraduatesugarcookie - Nov 25, 2024Holt - Nov 26, 2024
Entrepreneurial aspirations - Keio PEARL 2025 Admission : Academic and Future Plans

2 - These are 2 separate essays that should be submitted to the system. You should not be combining them...

Undergraduatekkpia1234 - Nov 25, 2024Holt - Nov 26, 2024
How family courts are failing domestic violence survivors and their families.

2 - Wow! You are opening with a very strong argumentative opinion here. You obviously feel so strongly about the topic...

Writing Feedbackellie1234 - Nov 25, 2024Holt - Nov 26, 2024
UBC Personal Profile - who you are. "I care deeply"

2 - For the first part of this response essay, you should avoid using the first person pronoun in the discussion....

Undergraduateplantpreyer - Nov 25, 2024Holt - Nov 26, 2024
Hardworking, motivated and caring - University of BC Personal Profile

3 - Interesting essay but I think that this could be more engaging with some changes. First, I think that starting...

Undergraduateproco101 - Nov 11, 2024sugarcookie - Nov 25, 2024
USC Graduate Interactive Media Personal Statement - Why interactive media?

4 - Thank you @Holt @woodg for the feedback! I removed the premed info and rewrote the gaps. Thanks again!...

Graduatepotatotush - Nov 9, 2024potatotush - Nov 25, 2024
surprised by how much you learned - UOFT ONE IDEA ESSAY ARCHITCTURE

2 - The first paragraph needs to be heavily tweaked. Since you are referencing how you developed a love for ocean...

UndergraduateJszyuan - Nov 24, 2024Holt - Nov 25, 2024
People would always choose a life without work rather than working most of the time. Agree/ disagree

2 - The prompt restatement is confusing. You seem to have suddenly changed the information presentation in the first sentence. Almost...

Writing FeedbackJohn Pham - Nov 24, 2024Holt - Nov 25, 2024
Free theme narrative story (Grim of the schools)

2 - The dialogue is wooden in nature. It is not natural sounding nor does it come across as everyday discussion...

Writing FeedbackEdukid2309 - Nov 24, 2024Holt - Nov 25, 2024
Legal Abortion with Limits: Balancing Choice and Responsibility

2 - The essay needs to have a more interesting backgrounder. The issue of abortion must be presented from both sides...

Research Papersmichelesull - Nov 24, 2024Holt - Nov 25, 2024
University of Toronto Computer Science Supplemental Question

3 - I agree with Holt, you should restructure the essay for more clarity. It comes off a bit as confusing...

Undergraduatewoodg - Nov 9, 2024sarcasticswarley - Nov 24, 2024
Smiles After Tears - common app essay

4 - I really like the style and one of voice of this essay however, I found myslef needing to reread...

UndergraduateBlahblah222222 - Nov 23, 2024sarcasticswarley - Nov 24, 2024
Research Paper Families with Disabilities Support

2 - Since there are several forms of disability that exist among children, the essay should do one of two...

Research PapersAVS05 - Nov 24, 2024Holt - Nov 24, 2024
"Strumming: My Journey in Music" - Common App Personal Essay

3 - Hi Holt thank you so much for responding. My prompt chosen was "Share an essay on any topic of...

Undergraduatejeremynolol06 - Nov 22, 2024jeremynolol06 - Nov 22, 2024
PERSONAL STATEMENT REVIEW: Keio University's PEARL program 2025 Fall Admission

3 - @Holt Hi I've checked the PEARL's admission handbook and theres 2 essays: 1 introduction essay with 250 word limit...

Undergraduateanniechu06 - Nov 20, 2024anniechu06 - Nov 21, 2024
IELTS Writing task 2 : Many people feel it is a waste of money to try to save endangered animals

4 - @Heidi_han Thanks for your suggestion!...

Writing Feedbacksylvie813 - Nov 11, 2024sylvie813 - Nov 21, 2024
Effects of High Prescription drug Prices in the U.S.

2 - Too much space in the paper was dedicated to the history of the high cost of prescription drugs. While...

Research Papersnadia123 - Nov 21, 2024Holt - Nov 21, 2024
Mindset for IELTS 1 (Describing maps, p.34)

2 - The summary overview is a little bit inaccurate. The map shows that the 2 versions represent the layout from...

Writing Feedbackchuduythuc - Nov 21, 2024Holt - Nov 21, 2024
IELTS 1 - Bar Chart (Weekly Income Change Over Time)

3 - You can try to expand the comparison range, which involves comparing not just the spending in both years in...

Writing FeedbackTaldi - Nov 19, 2024Edukid2309 - Nov 20, 2024
Improve my Motivation Letter for Masters in Environmental Engineering

2 - The reviewer reads over a thousand applications that have students claiming to have experienced one thing or another....

LettersAbeershaykh - Nov 19, 2024Holt - Nov 20, 2024
STATEMENT OF PURPOSE - MASTER IN LOGISTICS AND SUPPLY CHAIN MANAGEMENT

4 - The response sounds like you are still focused on academic development over a period of 5 years when you...

GraduateHeidi_han - Nov 14, 2024Holt - Nov 19, 2024
Civil Engineering - Motivation Letter for ETH Zurich Master's Application

2 - The weakness of this essay lies in how you do not really portray your strengths as a researcher and...

Lettersarjit - Nov 18, 2024Holt - Nov 19, 2024
Review my PhD motivation letter for aligned LLM companions

2 - Since you were part of a research and development team, you cannot claim to be the single developer...

Lettersvishalk - Nov 18, 2024Holt - Nov 19, 2024
Free theme narrative story (THE RED JUICE)

2 - A narrative story is usually written from a personal perspective and uses the first person pronoun for the most...

Writing FeedbackEdukid2309 - Nov 17, 2024Holt - Nov 17, 2024
Personal Statement Review : Masters in Accounting and Finance

2 - These references to childhood influences should be used only for college Accounting major applications. You must go...

Graduatehelloitisme - Nov 16, 2024Holt - Nov 17, 2024
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems. What are those problems?

2 - This is your personal opinion as the writer of the opinion paper. Therefore, it cannot be mixed into...

Writing FeedbackNaomie - Nov 16, 2024Holt - Nov 17, 2024
Physical Education should remain in schools

2 - Since you are dabbling in the history of Physical Education, you should go to the start of the...

Writing Feedbackmartinezalex1649 - Nov 16, 2024Holt - Nov 17, 2024
Motivation Letter for MSc Human Computer Interaction in Universität Siegen

6 - Maybe you can say "With all aspects and desires stated" instead of "With everything said"...

Lettersmariegold - Nov 10, 2024Edukid2309 - Nov 17, 2024
SOP review for masters in data science at CMU

2 - This is actually a negative statement in the eyes of the reviewer. This is not something you would...

Graduateyeshwanthg - Nov 15, 2024Holt - Nov 15, 2024
ⓘ Need academic writing help? 100% custom and human!
✖
Fill out one of these forms for professional help:

Best Writing Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳