Writing Feedback / Pupils' Behavior Cause Several Problems to Schools [NEW]

In many countries, schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Pupils' behaviour become one of several problem which has to be faced by schools in many countries. However, I believe that schools and parents can cooperate to tackle this issue together as there are lots of factors which cause this issue.

Diversity of students in school indeed cause positive effect to themselves, but it become problems for schools. Background distinction become the main factor as pupils who has different family and culture also have different behaviour. For example, broken family has influenced pupils' behaviour in school as they don't get sufficient care from their parent. As a result, they will do ridiculous things to attract their friends and parents though sometimes it annoyed for them. Considering the example, there is no doubt that difference of background has pivotal role for students' behaviour.

However, parents and schools are able to tackle this problem by cooperating together as students spend much time both in school and home, so this issue cannot be solve by single actor. Schools have to know their students' family background by asking to the parents while they should support this effort as it is for their own child future. As a consequence, schools can look for different method to face the diversity of students' behaviour. Besides that, parents can also teach their kids about how to behave not only in schools but also anywhere outside the house. It is clear that both schools and parents have important role to solve this issue.

Therefore, the distinction of students' behaviour which cause problems to schools can be solved by cooperation between schools and parents. I personally believe, that government also can help them to solve this problem by giving consultation services for students and family.

Writing Feedback / Infrastructure improvement in Stockford during 1930 until 2010 [3]

The changes of the village of Stokeford over eight decades which is began in 1930 and ended in 2010 is presented by maps. The most noticeable change was the replacement of farmland with houses area.

To begin, there were lots of farmland in Stokeford in 1930. It was located in the East of River Stoke and in the East of houses and primary school. Besides that, Gardens were located in the South of primary school, while large house in the East of gardens. There was road infrastructure run through in the middle of Stokeford. In addition, in the West of primary school, there was shops and post office which also located between houses area. Afterward, in the North of houses area, there was bridge.

In 2010, there were many changes in Stokeford. There was no longer farmlands since it was replaced by housing area which also located along side of the road. The shops were also replaced by housing area, and after that, half of the gardens experienced the same thing with shops too. There were two new large houses in the east of primary school. Besides that, a development was occurred in the previous large house and it changed becoming retirement home.

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Writing Feedback / Does the increasing of human population become the worst problem? [2]

The continued rise in the world's population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time.
What are the causes of this continued rise?
Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

These days, human kind has a serious problem due to the global population increasing. I strongly believe that this is the most dangerous problem which human ever faced as lots of factors cause this issue.

The increasing of birth rate has a great contribution for human population exploding as at the present time, lots of juveniles or young people have married although they have not reach the ideal age for having family. It is different than the past time, although most inhabitants had more than three child, their children would not get marriage before their age reached the ideal age, and it was about 25 until 28 year. As a result, these days, a new family will have new member when the mother still a teenager. Undoubtedly that the increasing of birth rate cause human population exploding.

Furthermore, the drop of war frequency and number of virus outbreak give a lot of effects on the human population. For instance, in the past many countries established war to get better land for agriculture or mining. So that great deal of inhabitant became victims for this war. Moreover, at present, the development of technology cause decreasing of virus outbreak, so then inhabitants get more healthy life than in the past. Those have influenced human death rate. Considering the example, it is clear that both decreasing of war frequency and virus outbreak have increased human population.

Uncontrolled human population become the worst problem that ever human faced as it can influence the future of human kind. The government of each countries have to cooperate to tackle this problem.

Writing Feedback / Water Cycle Base on The Location Where It is Dropped [2]

The diagram shows how rainwater is reused.

The water cycle process is displayed in the diagram where it start as rainwater until it come back to the river after several usage. According to diagram, it can be seen that though there are three different processes depend on the rainwater dropped, but all of them are bringing back the water into the river.

The first process is begun when rain water drop in the reservoir such as Dam, and it flows toward Water Treatment Plant where the rainwater will be treated by several process before it is ready to be consumed by human. The second process is started when rain water drop directly around houses. It will be kept in rain water tank and used for human activities. The wastewater then will be streamed toward Wastewater Treatment Plant where the water will also get several process here.

After this process, there are two possibility of the water usage. First, the recycled water will be used by human for several activities, exclude consumption, and the second, it will be flowed directly to the river. Besides that, there is also Stormwater Treatment where the rainwater has not been used by human, but it streams toward the river immediately after it dropped on the Earth. Moreover, the process is repeated again.

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Writing Feedback / Land usage differences over the time of period in the West Park Secondary School [2]

The diagrams show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its contraction in 1950.

The changing of West Park Secondary School area between 1950 and 2010 is shown by the map and it is explained for every three decade. The most noticeable change is the existence of houses and catchment area such as farmland which is replaced by parking area.

Land usage for several facilities remain balance in the beginning of the period. Main road location is opposite of the school and houses. Moreover, farmland is located in the south of houses, while in the south east of it, there is playground. In 1980, there is an obvious change on land usage where houses is replaced by car park and science block, which is part of school development. It is located in the west of school's main building. Besides that, farmland is change into sports field.

In the following three decade, the school does not experience any changing, but there is an immense change on the parking area as it replace all of sports field. But, sports field are moved to the west of playground area, and it takes about a third of the area.

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Writing Feedback / Air Circulation Inside The House Can Waste Energy and Cause Heat Loss. [2]

The diagram below shows how heat is lost and energy wasted in a house because of air getting into and out of the house.

The air circulation, such as air leaking into and out of the house, is presented in the diagram. Interestingly, although the house has three level, all of the air leaking out of the building is passing through the highest level of the building.

First of all, on the lowest level, basement, crawl space and dryer vent are used by the air to get into the building. Furthermore, in the ground level, a great number of air come into the house by using several spot. Kitchen fan vent and window are used by air to come inside the kitchen. Besides that, air get into it by using window and main door in the living room, while it pass through electrical outlet in the bathroom.

According to science, air move from the high pressure to the low pressure area. So that all of air move from the ground level to attic by using recessed light in the kitchen and bathroom, and using attic hatch in the living room. Moreover, bathroom fan vent and plumbing fan vent are used by air to get out of the building.

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Writing Feedback / Negative Effect of Fast Food Domination [5]

In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Global fast foods have replaced traditional diets in some countries and it can influence both families and communities in negative way. I extremely believe that this developing is harmful for inhabitants who consume it.

Fast food can affect traditional foods' sustainability as it can be served rapidly, so it is very suitable for busy society, and it have great taste also. Office worker who have short of time will tend to choose fast foods rather than traditional foods. In addition, they will provide their children with it too as they don't have much time to cook for them. As a result, it become habit for adult to consume fast diets, and kids who always be served it by their parents will be addicted as it has great taste and unique appearance also. It is evidence that traditional diets sustainability is threated by fast foods as people barely consume the traditional one.

Furthermore, people have unhealthy lifestyle as they consume fast foods frequently. Fast diets are made by less fresh material and also contain huge number of salt which can bind fat and cause hypertension. Moreover, unhealthy cook method can cause many negative substance inside the diets. Also, besides the material, those are made by less fresh oil. As a consequence, many health problem can be affected by those to consumers such as obesity, and heart attack since it contains lots of cholesterol. It is clear that fast foods cause many health problem to inhabitants.

To conclude, people will have many dangerous illness as they often consume fast foods. However, it will not cause problem to consumers' health only, but also traditional culinary existence since people tend to choose instant diets than the traditional.