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Jan 6, 2015
Writing Feedback / The internet has caused a considerable discrepancy between modern life and past life. [2]
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There are obvious capitalization errors in your paper. You need to learn to proof read your work and use the spell checker that comes with all word processing programs. These programs help you limit the grammatical, simple punctuation, and sentence structure errors in your work prior to in-depth editing which we can help you do. The essay talks in great detail about the problem posed by the internet but it only skims over the solutions possible for the problem. You have not properly developed the solutions portion because you only mention a sentence or two about an article that you read about the problem and possible simple solution. There is nothing in the essay that shows you have considered any solutions to the problems based upon your own analysis and conclusion regarding the problem. You need to write the solutions part of the essay as a separate paragraph so that you can better develop the ideas pertaining to the discussions you have presented. Your possible solutions can be based upon research that you conducted or common sense and logic. It is not difficult to figure out workable solutions to the problem that excessive internet usage has presented to our modern society.