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"I want different and big" - Why is stanford a good place for me? [2]
Stanford is a good place for me because it's everything I've ever dreamed of put into one college; Standford seems to be made for me (and 6,532 other undergraduates).
maybe..??
Stanford is diverse, modern, big, and intellectually simulating
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Stanford; it is perfect; it has everything I have on my
than 10,000 people in total
a football team, and is situated in California
read: "Big campus, more than 10,000 total people, football team, California, Water polo team, intellectually tough classes, ethnically diverse, residential campus, suburban setting, a research school focused on math and the sciences, and most importantly school spirit"
this makes no sense..
for six years, I really want difference
I want be at a big college with more opportunities
After this sentence, I don't think I should correct anymore.
I will tell you what you should do. First, don't use commas to deperate independent clauses. use . or ;
And don't start listing all the good things are about Stanford. Explain, show feelings, use voice!
And do not use contrations. "it is " is fine
Hope I helped.