Undergraduate / "Mr. James, English teacher" - University of Texas- influential person [2]

Throughout my life, I have met diverse people in various places. From those relationships what I have made with people affected me a lot. Although I have known about a million people, Mr. James' impact takes precedence over the others influence in my life.

It was three years ago when I met Mr. James for the first time. He was English teacher in my middle school. The first class with him was somewhat of weird. You may distinguish difference easily between two sentences, J.S.

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Undergraduate / "Qatar: The different environment produced different influences," why chicago? [2]

One can apparently make 12,148 paper swans from one piece of A4 paper. Though I have often tried to imagine how this was possible, it was figures such as these that first piqued my interest in origami. At the age of six, I learned about Origami for the first time. My father had to hide his documents every single day or else run the risk of seeing them turned into ducks or swans. When I started school, I was able to dazzle my friends, and sometimes even my teachers, with the skills of my craft.

My abilities extend beyond origami however and in the course of my life, I have been lucky enough to experience many different cultures and traditions. Through my travels to places, I have been able to use my experience to gain an appreciation for how lucky I am to be in a position to go to university and get a degree. Many of the children I encountered in these countries will not get such opportunities and I am thankful that my situation allows me to pursue a career that I want.

Three years ago, I came to Qatar, and enrolled in a school in Doha. After a class allocation test, I was assigned to the science section which concentrates more on major sciences. Since then, I started to learn more about physics. I was excited by all the new opportunities given to me in my new surroundings. The different environment exerted varied influences, thus prompting me to think deeply about my future and myself.

As I became junior, I started to look for the university that I would spend my four years of university life. Since I began to search for colleges that offer programs which I want to major in, I found Toronto's engineering program is the one that inspired me the most. I have heard that engineering major in University of Toronto known for its great system. Above all, I have done assisting teacher in physics and mechanics since two years ago and have expanded my interest of physics by sharing my information with others. In addition, my father, who works with General Electric, supported me to keep my dream of becoming the world best engineer. I used to visit his construction field to see more that motivated me a lot. I believe University of Toronto will not only keep, but also promote my interest and my talent in engineering.

Above all, in school, my friends are from Arab countries, believe in same religion, live in similar environment, and speak the same language. I always wondered to see bigger world and new people with outlandish experience. University of Toronto throws out the way I can find solution. While I looked up for it, I could know University of Toronto provides students best chance to learn more. In addition, large number of undergraduate programs will enable me to interact with many more. Moreover, huge and diverse student body, which consisted of many interesting things, increased my interest in University of Toronto.

My time in Qatar has given me an insight into a completely different culture and experience. The first year in Qatar was a baptism of fire for me. I was the only Korean at my school, and for a while, I relied almost solely on gestures. I had to come to terms with the English language as well as a new culture. The climate also presented many challenges for me and at times I longed for the rainy seasons of my home in Changwon, Korea. I was waiting in the wings, hoping that to be better without seeing any tears or hear of any complaining from myself.

However, I have made progress. Years later they started to call me fast learner and I was the very one who share information to the others. Despite these difficulties, I have managed to be accepted by my classmates and teachers as a productive member of the school. I am recognized as someone who is not afraid of hard work and perseverance. I have even used my skills in origami to good effect and I am lucky to have such wonderful friends and colleagues.

Besides, over the past two years, I have done shadow teach in my school. This occurs when teachers in certain subjects are absent and I volunteer as a shadow teacher in subjects such as economics, business, and physics. Two years of being a shadow teacher has instilled many qualities in me. Firstly, it has given me confidence. I have learned how to speak in front of a crowd without becoming nervous thanks to having the opportunity of sharing information with my classmates. Secondly, the benefits have been academic. Preparation has solidified my own understanding and appreciation of the material. Thirdly, I could improve my relationship with the others. I would like to share my knowledge and passion with others, and shadow teaching helps me not only stay closer with friends, but also with teachers by interacting with them. I have experienced sacrifice, hardship and success through this activity.

I have considered some university that can help me to achieve my dream, no other university has intrigued me as much as the University of Toronto. My time in Qatar has taught me that patience and hard work bear fruit. I will strive to apply what I have learned from my experiences to my college life and beyond. At the University of Toronto, I will experience and witness advancement in myself, but I will also clarify my goals. I believe that I can develop, improve, and expand my own goals by studying at University of Toronto.

Undergraduate / "I realized realized there is no Santa Claus" - Find x, university of chicago [2]

I know it is quite long, but still i need to fix it
Grammer is killing me and my essay,,, please help.

Santa vs. Christmas

With a red coat, a three-cornered hat, and a thick waist belt Santa Claus the symbol of Christmas. Most kids want to find him as an X. However, why Santa wears red coat? This is because, in 1931, Coca-Cola Company dressed him a red coat which reminds the image of Coca-Cola since decreasing in sale of cokes during the winter.

Only a few people remember the exact date that they realized there is no Santa Claus, and I am in that few of them. If my memories are correct, it was 1999, December 20th, snowy night of winter. As a seven-year-old boy, who has few months ahead to enter an elementary school, I was trained by my mom to be a good boy with the emphasized statement, 'Santa will give present only to good boys.'

The origin of an affair came from television. While my family sat watched a show program, the MC asked to a singer, "When did you grasp a truth about inexistence of Santa?" I still don't get the psychology of the MC why does he ask such questions in the show program for whole family member. What he is really driving at? Why does he just gabble boisterously that there is Santa in one side, and ask such question in another side. Following answer shot a finishing blow. "I did not know what Santa is when I was young but my children still believe Santa Claus because of Christmas present."

Instantaneously, the strain overspread in living room, and I could feel my parents' prick gazing to read my face. I instinctively closed my eyes, and made up my mind; rather being a 'smart boy' who deny Santa and lead a gloomy Christmas without presents than pretending a 'pure boy' who believe Santa with a wonderful Christmas. I successfully digested my role. I still subscribe a verse, 'The child is father of the man,' in completely different meaning of William Wordsworth's.

It is impossible to know exactly when the folklore started that Santa distributes presents in Christmas. However, from historical record, St. Nicholas is real figure who lived from 245 to middle of 300s. At that time, the world people believed wasn't that big, population wasn't that large, and number of children was much lesser. They might think it was possible to give present to children in whole world in one night.

However, in 21st century, the world fully fills up the surface of earth and the population is already over 6 billion. Nowadays, the story of Santa is mostly for kids. But, if you calculate once at least once what Santa supposed to do in Christmas Eve, you cannot but esteem him. Besides you will comprehend that he is a saint, as well as a 'superman.'

From UNICEF, there are 2.1 billion young under 18. Among them, except children who believe in Islam, Hinduism, Buddhism, and Judaism, 400 million children would be customers. Even if we assume one good boy in each home, Santa would suffer from crammed schedule visiting 160 million houses.

The time given to Santa is only one day, Christmas Eve. Although we consider rotation of earth, the maximum hours can be used are 31 hours. It indicates that call on 160 million houses in 31 hours, shifting 1,434 houses in a second. Now you will know Santa parks his sledge, go into the house through chimney to give present, and come back and move to other homes in 0.00007s.

Moving between houses also needs astronomical velocity. The area of earth is 150000000km^2. Hence, 29% of surface is ground, we can say that the distance between houses is about 1km. To cover 160 million houses without break, his Rudolf should travel with the speed of 1,434km/s, i.e. Mach 4,218. I even did not count the time taken to move through chimney with his potbellied stomach. However, if the sledge scuds much faster than sonic, it creates thunder-like sound called 'sonic boom,' and we would not sleep.

Those assumptions menace the existence of Santa in physically way. To get that speed in 0.0001 second, Santa exposed the force which 1.4 billion times greater than the force of gravity. The weight of present is not a matter to be slighted. 1kg for each kid becomes 1600000kg for all. A normal reindeer can carry about 150kg, so for 1600000kg, Santa necessitate 1.06 million reindeers. How benevolent he is!

Santa cannot help considering the shortest way to travel all over world. This is the issue what has concerned from scientist, traveling salesman problem. With five cities, it does not take too much time because there are only 120 possible ways. However, with ten cities, it augments to 3,628,800 ways. It is not bad. However, when we see 25 cities, the story is different. It takes 48 times more than the age of earth. Then it is unnecessary to say how it would take to calculate for 160 million houses' possibility.

Since when I have lied myself on the bed in Christmas Eve, I again remind Santa. I wondered what I would get in this Christmas or until when should I pretend to believe Santa. With neither expectation nor agony, I draw the image of Santa-the image that load 1600000kg of bale on the 1.06 million numbers of reindeers and flying in the twinkling of an eye.

After few years, I may have children who will smile and happy with the present from Santa Claus. Although I finished finding my Christmas's X in too early age, I want to keep my children's X as long as I can. And I hope to explain how the present from Santa is 'precious and valuable' after they find out their X in their way.

Undergraduate / "to become a good business leader" - Boston [2]

Essay #1: Given what you know about Boston University, what do you hope to accomplish as an undergraduate here? Please respond in an essay of no more than 500 words.

Three years ago, I came to Qatar, and enrolled in a school in Doha. I was excited by all the new opportunities given to me in my new surroundings. The different environment exerted varied influences, thus prompting me to think deeply about my future and myself.

Since I began to search for colleges that offer programs which I want to major in, I found Boston University's business program is the one that inspired me the most. I have heard that the business college in Boston University is known for its great system. In addition, the fact that some of faculties in BU are Novelist surprised and encouraged me to apply Boston University. Above all, I have done assisting teacher in economics and business since two years ago and have expanded my interest of studying business and sharing my information with others. I believe Boston University will not only keep, but also promote my interest and my talent in business.

Mostly, good business leader gets in touch with lots of people that could help each other when they encounter hardship. I hope to be a good business leader; Boston University greatly attracted me because of several reasons. First, while I looked up for BU, I could know many interesting things. I heard that more than 80% of students live in campus and it makes university life much liveliness. Above all, about 13% of students are from more than a hundred countries since BU encourage 'Diversity' in its campus.

Second, I have known how hard the life in new surroundings and the BU's 'The international students & scholars office (ISSO)' could give me a hand to adapt well in new place. In the website, it helps students not only in education, but also in interview for jobs.

Last but not least, Boston University is composed of 17 schools and colleges that including more than 250 programs which mean over 16000 students. Also, many communities in the campus will enable me to interact with the others easier. As I lived 3 years in Qatar, which is really small country, I always wanted to see bigger world and experience different people.

Now I am ready for the next challenge as I apply to the Boston University. I know that I can overcome cultural differences, adapt to my surroundings, and bring my experience to bear on university life. I will do my best with those things, and I will prepare myself to become a good business leader.

Undergraduate / "shadow teaching and commerce" - Virginia supplement [NEW]

plz edit it

In 1999, financial crisis hit East Asia that is called 'period of IMF.' Fortunately, I did not have any shortage but still I could feel it whenever I watched news. Over 30 percent of employees were fired as the country failed to default on dollar to the International Monetary Fund (IMF).

However, although the hardship frustrated the Koreans, we broke the back of the work by gold-raising campaign to pay back our nation's debts. People collected gold that sleeping in their furniture. My family partook and sold about 80g; we overcame. After we pulled ourselves out of the slump, crisis was gone but it left a deep impression that an individual can influence economy on my mind.

I moved to Qatar three years ago and I have started to study about economics and business. Since then, I have gotten great interest in Economics. Miss Kathy, economics and business teacher, implanted me how amazing subject is commerce does. In addition, participating in shadow teaching intrigued me to embody my ambition to be an economist. While I searched for the university, I finally could find the very school that I have been looking for. The University of Virginia has achieved worldwide fame and enhanced its reputation by unique system that reduces the students who commit faults such as cheating. The commerce major is nothing but admiration.

The impression that I keep made me consider the university that can help me to achieve my dream, and no other university intrigued me as much as University of Virginia. In U.Va, I will experience and witnessing advanced me, but I will also clarify my goals. I believe that I can develop, improve, and expand my own goals by achieving chance to study in University of Virginia.

Undergraduate / Texas A&M university in Qatar: patience and hard work, - personal statement [2]

Hi, this is my personal statement. please edit it :D

One can apparently make 12,148 paper swans from one piece of A4 paper. Though I have often tried to imagine how this was possible, it was figures such as these that first piqued my interest in origami. At the age of six, I learned about Origami for the first time. My father had to hide his documents every single day or else run the risk of seeing them turned into ducks or swans. When I started school, I was able to dazzle my friends, and sometimes even my teachers, with the skills of my craft.

My abilities extend beyond origami however and in the course of my life, I have been lucky enough to experience many different cultures and traditions. Through my travels to places, I have been able to use my experience to gain an appreciation for how lucky I am to be in a position to go to university and get a degree. Many of the children I encountered in these countries will not get such opportunities and I am thankful that my situation allows me to pursue a career that I want.

I still remember the kid who I met in Thailand. It has nearly similar culture, tradition and customs compared with the countries I have been before. But I can still remember a huge difference between Thailand and those countries. As I had taken the first step on Thailand, the only English I could hear was "One dollar." Desperate parents in Thailand often teach their children how to say "One dollar" even before they teach their children how to say "Mamma" and "Papa." Foreigners are taught to resist their gut reactions and not give even the smallest sum to children begging on the street. Nevertheless, I could not pretend not to see little baby begging me money in the street. Even if I refused to give 'One dollar' to her, she was smiling with a rose.

Three years ago, I moved to Qatar and this has given me an insight into a completely different culture and experience. The first year in Qatar was a baptism of fire for me. I was the only Korean at my school, and for a while, I relied almost solely on gestures. I had to come to terms with the English language as well as a new culture. The climate also presented many challenges for me and at times I longed for the rainy seasons of my home in Changwon, Korea. I was waiting in the wings, hoping that to be better without seeing any tears or hear of any complaining from myself.

Years later they started to call me fast learner and I was the very one who share information to the others. Despite these difficulties, I have managed to be accepted by my classmates and teachers as a productive member of the school. I am recognized as someone who is not afraid of hard work and perseverance. I have even used my skills in origami to good effect and I am lucky to have such wonderful friends and colleagues.

My time in Qatar has taught me that patience and hard work bear fruit. I will strive to apply what I have learned from my experiences to my college life and beyond. I hope that this will lead to a rich and rewarding career.

Undergraduate / "'A little lie is useful in some cases?' - an ethical dilemma that you encountered [2]

Maximum is 200, Thank you

The saying goes, 'A little lie is useful in some cases.' But it is not always true. Sometimes even a small lie could make the problem worse. Although people use white lie for good reason, I would believe telling a truth is better than telling a lie.

When I was in grade 11, I met my new Student Life Organization (SLO) teacher for the first time. The time that I met her was somewhat weird. I saw a big woman who tried to go inside of SLO office hardly, while playing basketball.

One day, as I went into SLO office, I could hear raised voice of SLO teacher. After she found me out, she asked me that whether she was big woman or not. I didn't get the point of asking, and I was so confused. So I just said that she was normal. I believed that, in this case, was better to tell a lie than tell a truth not to hurt her feeling. But she knew that she was big, and she was angry about a lie.

Since then, in every single case, I started to keep the very quote in mind before say something, 'Circumstances alter cases.'