Writing Feedback / 'Medicine, technology, and lifestyle changes' - The 21 century has begun [2]

Every new moment brings new changes with itself. It also depends how much you need this and take advantage of. New things were invented time by time. In my opinion, every century carry vast amount of changes to our lives. In every new age we are witnesses of improvements, almost in technology, medicine and several things that make our lives much easier.

Firstly, I want to bring up the subject with my thoughts about the technology. I am always interested in news and new inventions. I saw inventions such as, flying cars and transparent planes. I also have seen future computers, which will be produced in a few years. It can be used in all places, and will be necessary for everyone. I want to talk about the computers as well, which were produced a few years ago. We could not use computers in our native language, in fact, people who does not know foreign languages could not benefit from them. However, genius persons made it useful for all. They also have made new cell phones, which substitute computers and televisions. Scientists are planning on creating new amusing devices.

The second most improving field is medicine. I think, as in ancient times, new drugs and medicines will be produced. We wish they will be able to find out outlets for the most incurable illnesses. The number of patients will be decreased. All are looking forward of building up new modern hospitals, with much more comfortable wards and well-educated doctors, moreover modern improved devices. New inventions, which refer to the first years of the century, are adequate. Nano technology, 3D, 5D appliances and other creations are involved in this.

Finally, I want to clarify the issues, which make life much easier for us. Less human labor, much more incomes are the most spread expectancies. Gradually, life becomes easier for us. Improved technologies are the main reason of it. They should originate new work places. The quantity of unemployed persons will descend. Life conditions will become peaceful to live.

Thus, no one needs stable lifestyle. Sometimes it takes to spontaneous changes. Furthermore, many useful inventions were created in unintended circumstances. What we do are for our favor. We should not evade innovations.

Writing Feedback / Structure and creators of the Stonehenge - TOEFL writing/ [4]

Please, give your advice and correct my mistakes.Thanks beforehand=))

In this set of materials told about Stonehenge monument. IN the reading section they notify us about structure and creators of the Stonehenge. Contrast in these, the listening passage denies the information about beliefs of creation and supplements additional information about the age of the Stonehenge.

Firstly, I want to talk about the structure of the Stonehenge. This huge structure is located on Salisbury Plain in the south of England. The main structure of Stonehenge consists of 30 upright stones, each weigh 26 tons. These stones are arranged in circle, and there are 30 supplemental six-ton stones sitting on the top of the upright stones. There is a second circle in the inside of main circle. Inner circle of stones is also composed of upright stones with additional stones atop the upright stones. Then, I want to talk about the creation of the Stonehenge which is told in the reading part. The first most commonly held belief about construction of Stonehenge is cliché that persists that it was built by Druids - the high priests of the Celtic culture in England. They have built it for to hold religious ceremonies there. This structure was firstly found by an antiquarian John Aubrey in 17th century. He came across this monument while hunting with some companions. Knowing about the structure, he included a chapter in his giant work Monumenta Britannica to advocate this idea about the creation of Stonehenge. Another antiquarian and scholar Dr. William Stukeley became deeply involved in the study of a possible relationship between Stonehenge and Druids. He agreed with Aubrey`s pretensions that, it was created by the Druids.

However, the listening passage denies the belief of creation by Druids. Scientists have investigated the creation of Stonehenge. The analysis have shown that dates just don`t match up. This problem is not absolutely clear. There are two different outcomes about the counts` arrival in England. The first theory is about their arrival in 1500 B.C. and the second is in 800 B.C. There is a universal agreement about that, they were not in England before 1500 B.C. Secondly, they talk about the age of Stonehenge. Modern Carbon Testing has shown that, it was built in 3 phases. The first is in 3000 B.C., the second in 2800 B.C., and the third is in 2100 B.C. It shows Druids had not yet arrived in England when Stonehenge was built.

Writing Feedback / Which would you prefer? to spend time with a few close friends or a large number or? [2]

Better for less is qualified in every situation. It can be also told about number of friends. I do not actually like broad companions. For some reasons I would prefer to spend time with a few closer friends of mine. In a compact group there might be less diversity of people, friends can easily focus on a decision, and can be formed noiseless entertainment.

Firstly, I want to talk about the advantages of less diversity of people. In small companions it can be easy to define everybody`s intention. Surely, it is not easy every time, but it is much easier than determine among numerous people. In minority it is easy to know what others think of your way of amusing. Variety of people means diversity of characteristics. These characteristics scarcely coincide. It would not be easy to make intercourse among all of your friends.

Secondly, it is easier to focus on a decision. If you chose to entertain with your friends, you should refer all of your friends` desire. It is better to centralize on a common denominator. Different characteristics may carry various wants. It is rather easier to solve it with a few friends, than lots of different-minded people.

Vast amount of people can cause noise. It is not good to disturb others while you are entertaining. With few people it`s much more possible to keep silence. Noisy amusement can cause headache - hence spoils your enjoyment. Anyway calm pastime is better for everyone.

To sum up, if you want to enjoy, it does not mean that you can disturb other`s, or you may go only the way you want, choose the things for your taste. These all are possible with a few friends, rather than with a huge companion.

Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] Which is better: to work for a company or own business? If you're active.. [4]

Quality is more important than quantity in every situation. This is especially true of one`s business. If I had chance, I would prefer to take position in a company, and work for the company rather than going into business for myself. There is no risk, less responsibility, and finally promotion in company work.

You do not invest capital for company work - hence, you are not outweighed by the risks. There is no need to go for a bank to get investment, no extra debt for you. Choosing company work you are almost ensured from misfortunes in business. Organizing successful business is not for everyone. As it is clear, inexperienced person cannot get prosperity, besides this, he cannot abreast of development. All point to the need to be on alert.

Responsibilities are inescapable in private business. You should be responsible for your workers, your company`s incomes and outcomes to save your property, interactions, documentations, etc. If you are not active enough you cannot overcome all these. It also demands responsibility. Company work is full-time job, but if you are a business person you should be active all time and try not to be overshadowed by failures.

My other reason of choosing company work is promotion. You cannot be promoted in your personal business. In my opinion, if you will not be promoted your work condition would be stable, however it prevents you improving. Unless rivalry with your colleagues you will not be able to take lucky steps in your throughout career. Pursuing your prosperities once you will reach the summit.

In brief, if you are not active, experienced and responsible enough, you would better not to create your own business. Last but not least, business life has impact on our lives. Therefore, no effort should be spared for prevention of misfortune.

Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] pieces of advice that you would give visitors coming to your country. [3]

Concern takes us to curious places and makes us learn unexpected information every time. Although their goals are similar, a person who travels a lot knows many things rather than a person who reads a lot. Traveling to an unfamiliar place both can be exciting and frustrating. I would advise visitors coming to our city, learning our language at least a bit, visiting sightseeing places, and taking more money with them.

In my opinion, learning the language of the country that you are going to visit is very important. You almost need a communication with someone. You might have problems, or you need someone`s help. In my country not all the people know foreign languages. You can hardly find a person who understands you. If you are lost, no one can help you. Predicting these, you should be ready for them and try to learn the language beforehand.

If they do not want to be bored in the city I would suggest them to see our sightseeing and the most beautiful places. The most beautiful part of our city is The Old City. Almost all the monuments are there. Its castle walls and stone spread floor portrays our history. Many people buy something from that place during their trips. They can buy the signs of our monuments or national entire. Our beauty monument "The Maiden Tower" is also settled there.

As our country is an expensive place, I would advise them to take much money with them. There are so many beautiful places in our city which expenses much money. There are nice restaurants, cafes, shopping malls etc. in our city. If they wish trying our national cuisine, they should pay much money. Traveling without money you cannot spend your time adequate.

To put it all in a nutshell, planning your trip and asking for advice beforehand is very good for you. If the visitors of our city want to spend their time amusing, they should follow my advice.

Writing Feedback / Should companies use young people for work? - [IELTS ] [2]

At present time majority of companies tend to have young workers in terms of labor effectiveness. Obviously it brings not only benefits, but also creates unemployment. I will try to express my own opinion and show advantages, disadvantages of this type of policy.

From one side it is really beneficial to use young people who have more possibilities in spite of the lack of experience. Moreover it is obvious fact that they are more interested to work in hard conditions with different people and they are more adaptable than old ones. Furthermore there is a fact that now all companies depend on technology, so it is better to employ young person who is ready to work with computer or other technological facilities.

From another side there are problems which are creating by this type of employing. The most important of them is unemployment for people after 40. It is getting hard to get a job for middle age and old people due to young workers. Moreover as it was mentioned before companies need people with experience, what they can not notice in young employees.

To sum up it is something so important to find the way to avoid unemployment and at the same moment increase the number of young employees.

Writing Feedback / Better to use our mind in exchange for computers to translate text [NEW]

computers can tranlate all kinds of languages well.Do our children need to learn more languages in the future?

In contemporary society improved technology tends to cover fragilities of people. Knowledge of languages is one of the most experienced of such problems.

First of all, language is the most significant factor for communication. It increases our opportunity in job market and helps us to obtain high-paid jobs. Meanwhile, during the voyage it is hard to translate every word of guide with electronic equipments. It is considerably fast and easy to interpret by yourself than using programs for this. In addition, when you visit sightseeing places it is loss of time to copy information from the board. Besides these, learning language saves your time rather than using electronic translators. These are not all the advantages of learning languages instead of using computers.

It is proven evidence that, knowing many languages substantially makes our brain better. Apparently, modern technology inventions are the products of brain work; crossing of brain work to the background, especially, in computerized period can prevent such developments in the future. Furthermore, punctuality is one of the most essential advantages. Seemingly, computers are not as punctual as human in translating process.

To sum up it would be better to use our mind in exchange for computers and to provide improvement of technology and elevate condition to new discoveries.