Callie0202
Jan 8, 2013
Writing Feedback / What are some causes of stress among young people and How could this be ameliorated? [7]
In modern life, the standard of living is increasing
In modern life, the standard of living is increasing
Callie0202
Jan 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / TV is most effective; parents should choose which programme is suitable for kids [3]
Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective.
-comics
-books
-radio
-television
- film
- theatre
With the development of technologies, the media for communicating information are no longer limited to books. On the contrast, television and film are attracting an ongoing concern. However, each tool of communication has its upsides and backsides. In the essay, I will analyse the both sides of three media, namely books, television and film, and find out the most effective one.
Firstly, books have its particular advantages. We can read the historical stories through books since they are the only recording tunnel in the ancient time and have been passed down from generation to generation. However, books seem not suitable to the modern lifestyle which demands for convenience and efficience, because books take up more space and cost humanbeings amounts of time to look for wanted words.
Secondly, unlike books, television possesses the advantagese of more chlice and vividness. The diversity of TV programme offer the audience changing channels freely at any time when they do not like the present shows. What is more, the effect of picture and sound enhance individuals understanding to the programme. Neverless, not all the programme diplayed on the screen are health and safe fr children since some of them are violent.
When it comes to film, they offer residents an exciting or happy eperience within a short of time so that the audience can escape from the current lives for a while.On the other hand, since that the showing time is short, the producer can not always tell the stories well or make the scene excellent.
By and large, compared to the other two media, television is the most effective ways of communicating information, and while the parents should choose which programme is suitable for children.
Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective.
-comics
-books
-radio
-television
- film
- theatre
With the development of technologies, the media for communicating information are no longer limited to books. On the contrast, television and film are attracting an ongoing concern. However, each tool of communication has its upsides and backsides. In the essay, I will analyse the both sides of three media, namely books, television and film, and find out the most effective one.
Firstly, books have its particular advantages. We can read the historical stories through books since they are the only recording tunnel in the ancient time and have been passed down from generation to generation. However, books seem not suitable to the modern lifestyle which demands for convenience and efficience, because books take up more space and cost humanbeings amounts of time to look for wanted words.
Secondly, unlike books, television possesses the advantagese of more chlice and vividness. The diversity of TV programme offer the audience changing channels freely at any time when they do not like the present shows. What is more, the effect of picture and sound enhance individuals understanding to the programme. Neverless, not all the programme diplayed on the screen are health and safe fr children since some of them are violent.
When it comes to film, they offer residents an exciting or happy eperience within a short of time so that the audience can escape from the current lives for a while.On the other hand, since that the showing time is short, the producer can not always tell the stories well or make the scene excellent.
By and large, compared to the other two media, television is the most effective ways of communicating information, and while the parents should choose which programme is suitable for children.
Callie0202
Jan 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / Machine translation is slower and less accurate than human translation - IELTS [10]
It is also worth noting that MT frequently gives us the most common meanings of the words.
Maybe you can try: MT can offer individuals only with the most common meanings of the words which is worthless in some certain situation.
Besides, the example was over detailed.
It is also worth noting that MT frequently gives us the most common meanings of the words.
Maybe you can try: MT can offer individuals only with the most common meanings of the words which is worthless in some certain situation.
Besides, the example was over detailed.
Callie0202
Jan 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / TV is most effective; parents should choose which programme is suitable for kids [3]
Thank you for the reply.
About the sentence"Books are the only source that provides us with information about history because this had been the media used for recording historical events that were passed down form generation to generation", I meaned that books was the only option that our ancestors had to record the stories that became the available resource for us to know the history. I am not sure how to express it in English and whether it is supporting the topic of the paragraph.
thanks again
... however, I don't agree with this because now every detail of history is available with electronic medias and with a click @ google you get loads of info.
Thank you for the reply.
About the sentence"Books are the only source that provides us with information about history because this had been the media used for recording historical events that were passed down form generation to generation", I meaned that books was the only option that our ancestors had to record the stories that became the available resource for us to know the history. I am not sure how to express it in English and whether it is supporting the topic of the paragraph.
thanks again
Callie0202
Jan 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) universities should give importance in theoretical or practical educat [5]
Excellent suggestions!
enable your assignment long enough as requested. A good example of this is:
1. Main idea: clear, direct and strong.
2. Reason why you offer that idea.
3. Take an example to support your arguement in sentence 2.
4. Expand your idea by comparing with the past, foreseeing the change / trend in the future.
1. Main idea: clear, direct and strong.
2. Reason why you offer that idea.
3. Take an example to support your arguement in sentence 2.
4. Expand your idea by comparing with the past, foreseeing the change / trend in the future.
Excellent suggestions!
Callie0202
Jan 15, 2013
Writing Feedback / Parents expect children to spend long time studying in and after school -IELTS 2013.1 [7]
In some countries, parents expect children to spend long time studying in and after school and have less free time. Do you think it has the positive or negative effects on children and society that they live in?
Nowadays, it is a widely common opinion among parents that children should not only do well in school but also reinforce acknowledge after school. As a result, sending children to extra training school is not unfamiliar to any of us, which leads to the significant decrease in children's free time. Though there is a belief that press increases motivation, I, however, believe that the over-loaded press will cause negative effects.
At the beginning, long-time sitting in front of computer is harmful to children's health since they do not exercise adequately which was reported very helpful to enhance their physical conditions. The increasing number of fat children is to a certain extent due to the lack of exercise. In the future, these children are very likely to be sub-healthy. Besides, it is not sure that the longer time children study the better outcomes they can get. Low efficiency will result in nothing.
When it comes to the effects on the society, from my understanding, the minus impact overweighs the plus ones. First of all, the whole society looks undynamic since the fresh blood of the society-children-are not activated. Secondly, the building of diversity of the world will slow down for children who are limited to books lack creativity. Lastly, the social relationship will become weaker and weaker because the number of people who care about it is falling down while the opinion of competition will become stronger as a result of the repetitive stress on the success from the adults.
In short, overlong time on studying has negative effects on both children and the society. Children should be released from books after school sh that they will find the wonderful aspects of the society, so that they would like to do some effort to make the world more colorful in the future.
In some countries, parents expect children to spend long time studying in and after school and have less free time. Do you think it has the positive or negative effects on children and society that they live in?
Nowadays, it is a widely common opinion among parents that children should not only do well in school but also reinforce acknowledge after school. As a result, sending children to extra training school is not unfamiliar to any of us, which leads to the significant decrease in children's free time. Though there is a belief that press increases motivation, I, however, believe that the over-loaded press will cause negative effects.
At the beginning, long-time sitting in front of computer is harmful to children's health since they do not exercise adequately which was reported very helpful to enhance their physical conditions. The increasing number of fat children is to a certain extent due to the lack of exercise. In the future, these children are very likely to be sub-healthy. Besides, it is not sure that the longer time children study the better outcomes they can get. Low efficiency will result in nothing.
When it comes to the effects on the society, from my understanding, the minus impact overweighs the plus ones. First of all, the whole society looks undynamic since the fresh blood of the society-children-are not activated. Secondly, the building of diversity of the world will slow down for children who are limited to books lack creativity. Lastly, the social relationship will become weaker and weaker because the number of people who care about it is falling down while the opinion of competition will become stronger as a result of the repetitive stress on the success from the adults.
In short, overlong time on studying has negative effects on both children and the society. Children should be released from books after school sh that they will find the wonderful aspects of the society, so that they would like to do some effort to make the world more colorful in the future.
Callie0202
Jan 15, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY - people are forgetting national celebrations and enjoying on other days. [4]
Overall the arguement are good, while the supports such as examples are somehow weak. I think you need enhance the logical relationship between the topic and the support.
Overall the arguement are good, while the supports such as examples are somehow weak. I think you need enhance the logical relationship between the topic and the support.
Callie0202
Jan 16, 2013
Writing Feedback / Parents expect children to spend long time studying in and after school -IELTS 2013.1 [7]
Thank you! Good point! It is always difficult for me to think of a support idea for my topic.
It might also be an idea for you to say that children studying day in and day out would distance them from whats happening around them. This can be very harmful.
Thank you! Good point! It is always difficult for me to think of a support idea for my topic.
Callie0202
Jan 16, 2013
Writing Feedback / Parents expect children to spend long time studying in and after school -IELTS 2013.1 [7]
Yes, good idea, thank you. I would add it into the 1st paragraph.
Yes, good idea, thank you. I would add it into the 1st paragraph.
Callie0202
Jan 17, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS T-2: Write Pros and Cons of crime prevention in society, give your opinion [10]
I think you need improve your grammar. In the present paper, some error leads to difficulty in understanding.
I think you need improve your grammar. In the present paper, some error leads to difficulty in understanding.
Callie0202
Jan 17, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS T-2: Write Pros and Cons of crime prevention in society, give your opinion [10]
"Those who opposesay good and evil are human instinct"
In this sentence, three verb can be found.
"Those who opposesay good and evil are human instinct"
In this sentence, three verb can be found.
Callie0202
Jan 17, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS T-2: Write Pros and Cons of crime prevention in society, give your opinion [10]
"Those who oppose say good and evil are human instinct"
do you mean " those who oppose say that good and evil are human instinct"? in ielts, ellipsis (such as that, which) and abbreviation (such as can't) are not encouraged.
"Those who oppose say good and evil are human instinct"
do you mean " those who oppose say that good and evil are human instinct"? in ielts, ellipsis (such as that, which) and abbreviation (such as can't) are not encouraged.
Callie0202
Jan 22, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS 2: Living in high apartments : Advantages and Disadvantages [5]
For example, a house woman may need to drop her children at school or go for shopping, but every time she will have to come at ground level before she could start her real task. Consequently, she would avoid going out as much as possible, leading to loneliness
I think the example is over detailed. Maybe you can try:
For example, a house woman would avoid going out as much as possible since she have to come at ground level firstly, leading to loneliness.
Overall, very good.
For example, a house woman may need to drop her children at school or go for shopping, but every time she will have to come at ground level before she could start her real task. Consequently, she would avoid going out as much as possible, leading to loneliness
I think the example is over detailed. Maybe you can try:
For example, a house woman would avoid going out as much as possible since she have to come at ground level firstly, leading to loneliness.
Overall, very good.
Callie0202
Jan 22, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS-Elder people should be looked after by family members or professionals? [7]
overall, very good try.
For young people caring their old relatives in their later lives is an excellent opportunity to show their gratitude to the parents and give them a chance to see this wonderful world in very good manner.
overall, very good try.
Callie0202
Jan 23, 2013
Writing Feedback / Higher petrol price solve growing traffic and pollution problems-- IELTS [2]
Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree and disagree?
What other measures do you think might be effective?
In 1920s, petrol was found, and from then on global industries began to run in a completely new way, accompanied by problems of ongoing traffic and pollution. Some people suggested to increase the price of petrol to solve the problems. Though it is easy for the governors to carry out, I however do not think it is the best way .
At the beginning, it cannot be denied that higher price to some certain extent is helpful to decrease the number of transports and the amount of pollution produced by factories. Nevertheless, it is reported that the limited emission of CO2 is only able to prolong the earth life for another40 years. So the best solution to the issues is to explore new energy resource, such as wind, nuclear, water and electricity, since these types of resource is not associated with carbon and is renewable.
These types of resource have more upsides over petrol. Firstly, they are not working in term of carbon burning, so that there is no yield of polluting gas. Secondly, the size of cars can be cut down, because the room for petrol containing and burning will be saved, as a result, the traffic density is going to fall down. Take a new mini-car drove by electricity as an example. This kind of car is very popular in China at present, while its size is merely one third as large as the common one. Consequently, the traffic pressure in huge cities, such as Shanghai and Guangzhou, was relieved significantly.
By and large, the optimal way to solve the traffic and pollution problems is to develop new alternative energy resource rather than to increase the price of petrol. In the future, I hope the number of wind mill, nuclear station and charging station will rise in the world, so that people's lives will be more comfortable.
Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree and disagree?
What other measures do you think might be effective?
In 1920s, petrol was found, and from then on global industries began to run in a completely new way, accompanied by problems of ongoing traffic and pollution. Some people suggested to increase the price of petrol to solve the problems. Though it is easy for the governors to carry out, I however do not think it is the best way .
At the beginning, it cannot be denied that higher price to some certain extent is helpful to decrease the number of transports and the amount of pollution produced by factories. Nevertheless, it is reported that the limited emission of CO2 is only able to prolong the earth life for another40 years. So the best solution to the issues is to explore new energy resource, such as wind, nuclear, water and electricity, since these types of resource is not associated with carbon and is renewable.
These types of resource have more upsides over petrol. Firstly, they are not working in term of carbon burning, so that there is no yield of polluting gas. Secondly, the size of cars can be cut down, because the room for petrol containing and burning will be saved, as a result, the traffic density is going to fall down. Take a new mini-car drove by electricity as an example. This kind of car is very popular in China at present, while its size is merely one third as large as the common one. Consequently, the traffic pressure in huge cities, such as Shanghai and Guangzhou, was relieved significantly.
By and large, the optimal way to solve the traffic and pollution problems is to develop new alternative energy resource rather than to increase the price of petrol. In the future, I hope the number of wind mill, nuclear station and charging station will rise in the world, so that people's lives will be more comfortable.
Callie0202
Jan 28, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS: all parents should take children training courses [5]
Caring for children is probably the most important thing of the society. It is suggested that all mother and father should be required to take the children training courses. To what extent do you agree and disagree with the statement?
Children are the future and hope of the society. So it is very important to take care of them as well as possible. Some people suggested that all the mother and father should take the children training courses to enhance their abilities on the issue. I however cannot fulfill it completely.
At the beginning, it has to be admitted that children training courses are helpful to some extent to nursing children. Firstly, parents could be more confident since they have been taught how to deal with what will happen. Secondly, they will be more skilled and prepared on the issue. As a result, breeding up children will not become some challenges or difficulties for them.
On the other hand, children training courses probably have negative effects on the society. As many other school, this kind of courses supplies merely the general knowledge of nursing children. Consequently, parents who over rely on the courses will fail to give particular care to the children, since each of them possesses different personality and demands. What is more, it is hard for working-parents to take the courses, while the intermittent access may cause misunderstanding which perhaps leads to harm. Further more, the grandparents are rich in the experience of feeding children, the parents could learn from them regardless of the time and money.
In short, children training courses contribute to nursing children in terms of parents' confidence and skills. However, we cannot require that all the parents take them. There are other resources for parents to study the knowledge of caring children, such as the grandparents.
Caring for children is probably the most important thing of the society. It is suggested that all mother and father should be required to take the children training courses. To what extent do you agree and disagree with the statement?
Children are the future and hope of the society. So it is very important to take care of them as well as possible. Some people suggested that all the mother and father should take the children training courses to enhance their abilities on the issue. I however cannot fulfill it completely.
At the beginning, it has to be admitted that children training courses are helpful to some extent to nursing children. Firstly, parents could be more confident since they have been taught how to deal with what will happen. Secondly, they will be more skilled and prepared on the issue. As a result, breeding up children will not become some challenges or difficulties for them.
On the other hand, children training courses probably have negative effects on the society. As many other school, this kind of courses supplies merely the general knowledge of nursing children. Consequently, parents who over rely on the courses will fail to give particular care to the children, since each of them possesses different personality and demands. What is more, it is hard for working-parents to take the courses, while the intermittent access may cause misunderstanding which perhaps leads to harm. Further more, the grandparents are rich in the experience of feeding children, the parents could learn from them regardless of the time and money.
In short, children training courses contribute to nursing children in terms of parents' confidence and skills. However, we cannot require that all the parents take them. There are other resources for parents to study the knowledge of caring children, such as the grandparents.
Callie0202
Jan 28, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS: all parents should take children training courses [5]
I meaned "well", and I wanted to emphasize it through "as ...as possible".
Much better than mine, thank you.
Great! thank you
what do you mean by "as well as possible"? It sounds confusing :(
I meaned "well", and I wanted to emphasize it through "as ...as possible".
These courses enhance the confidence level of parents as to how they should deal with particular situations in child rearing.
Much better than mine, thank you.
child rearing
Great! thank you
Callie0202
Feb 28, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS Many people think that international travel will decrease in the future. [6]
The topic required to talk about " decrease", however, you are talking about " increase".
The topic required to talk about " decrease", however, you are talking about " increase".
Callie0202
Mar 2, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS: The factors that contribute for happiness [4]
Why is it difficult to define?
What factors are important in achieving happiness?
Nobody does not want to get happiness. However, the definition of happiness varies among individuals. The longly ones want friends, the poors demand wealth, while the fresh graduates expect good jobs. It is just because every person has different demand in his/her life, so diversity of definition of happiness can be found. Then how to achieve happiness? In the paper, I will talk about the issue.
At first, one has to be confident that he/she can get happiness. Nobody was born to be upset. Being upset is only some minimal and short interruption in one's all life. While most of the daily life is just being common or average, so what we should do is enjoying the daily life and find out happiness. Some of colleague are always happy and smile to others even though they live nearly the some lives as others. So, awareness of happiness is an important factor in achieving happiness.
Secondly, having a dream and struggling for the dream is another essential factor in getting happiness. Ones holding dreams know what they want and what they do not want. So they can step towards happiness directly without hesitation. Take me as an example. The day I got a place in a research institute, I achieved my true happiness, since I dreamed to be a scientist from my childhood. The happiness overweighed all the tasty food I ever ate and all the pretty dress I weared. I thought I was the most happy person in the world even though I looked so common.
In conclusion, believing we can achieving happiness and holding a dream is the two main factor for people to get happiness. Other factos, such as good relationship with others, rich materials and good jod, are also associated to happiess. But this does not mean that we cannot get it without these factors.
Happiness is considered very important in life.
Why is it difficult to define?
What factors are important in achieving happiness?
Nobody does not want to get happiness. However, the definition of happiness varies among individuals. The longly ones want friends, the poors demand wealth, while the fresh graduates expect good jobs. It is just because every person has different demand in his/her life, so diversity of definition of happiness can be found. Then how to achieve happiness? In the paper, I will talk about the issue.
At first, one has to be confident that he/she can get happiness. Nobody was born to be upset. Being upset is only some minimal and short interruption in one's all life. While most of the daily life is just being common or average, so what we should do is enjoying the daily life and find out happiness. Some of colleague are always happy and smile to others even though they live nearly the some lives as others. So, awareness of happiness is an important factor in achieving happiness.
Secondly, having a dream and struggling for the dream is another essential factor in getting happiness. Ones holding dreams know what they want and what they do not want. So they can step towards happiness directly without hesitation. Take me as an example. The day I got a place in a research institute, I achieved my true happiness, since I dreamed to be a scientist from my childhood. The happiness overweighed all the tasty food I ever ate and all the pretty dress I weared. I thought I was the most happy person in the world even though I looked so common.
In conclusion, believing we can achieving happiness and holding a dream is the two main factor for people to get happiness. Other factos, such as good relationship with others, rich materials and good jod, are also associated to happiess. But this does not mean that we cannot get it without these factors.