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Posts by Michele9
Name: Michele Evangelista
Joined: Jul 7, 2015
Last Post: Jul 21, 2015
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Michele9   
Jul 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / I can gain more by travelling inside my country - it has still so many things to discover. [2]

Travelling is one of the most powerful activity that has the capability to improve ourselves. By travelling we not only take a vacation from our routine and a break from our ordinary (and sometimes boring) life, but we also get the opportunity to break new ground, to broaden our horizons and to change our points of view. However I think that we may get more advantages when we travel inside our country rather than when we go outside it. Below I am going to give reasons and examples to strengthen my opinion.

First of all, when I go around the regions of my country I discover many aspect, features and facet of it that I did not image. In my country each part has diverse traditions and cultures and people approach to each other in different ways. For example in the north people are more serious and earnest, they care a lot about working and keep themselves busy. In the common thinking, in the north people pay more attention to money and wealth and a bit less attention to human relationships. Instead in the south people are generically lazier and easy-going, they do not struggle for money because they believe that happiness is in the small things. Therefore I like more travelling around the cities of my country because it allows me to better know its identity, to discover qualities and flaws that I could not image it had.

Second, my country is Italy and in Italy people have plenty of things to see. Here people stand the chance to follow whichever passion they have. In fact in Italy people can go to the mountain if they like snow and cold places. They can go swimming in beaches if they are fond of the sea. They can visit tons of important historical cities if they are passionate of history, art and culture. In Italy there are also many places to relax. For example we have forests, farms and so on, where people can take it easy and rest without any disturbing noise.

In conclusion I have good reasons for saying that I can gain more benefits by travelling inside my country. One general reason is that it is just my country and I can get the chance to better know it. A second particular reason is that fortunately my country has so many things to discover and appreciate that I would not have any reason to go abroad.
Michele9   
Jul 9, 2015
Writing Feedback / Some people argue using a cleaner energy to protect the environment [4]

Although current technology might be notmight not be advance enough to switch completely, it is preferpreferable to use high quality energy materials that with less harmful impact on environments.

During last century, industrial developments bringhave brought prosperity worldwide.

However, people more than one country suffered from the consequence from environmental pollution caused by factories.

You'd better say:
However, people from more than one country have suffered the consequences of the environmental pollution caused by factories.

exept some mistakes, the essay is well written and your theme is supported by good ideas and examples. Also the vocabulary is pretty rich ;)
Michele9   
Jul 9, 2015
Writing Feedback / "Is it necessary for people to combine their efforts .." SAT March 2015 [4]

is the only healcure for such an uprooted evil.

politicians and activists owe their success to the mass of a compact citizens

by athanks to a collaboration of intellectuals and labor forces he defeated the, so-called, invincible Germany

So, a strong united human capital is the key ingredient to guide a nation from dark to light.

In fact, "The Bill Of Rights" written in the late 1600s was a giant a stride for the U.S in the road of Democracy, liberalism and freedom.
Michele9   
Jul 9, 2015
Writing Feedback / There are times when it is acceptable not to tell the truth. [4]

Often in our lives we found ourselves in awkward situations in which we have something to hide. It could be an information or an emotion or just a feeling. I am that kind of person that is not able to lie at all and that believes that we should live without secrets and lies. Now I am going to strengthen my opinion by giving reasons and examples.

First of all, I deem that secrets and lies can consume ourselves from inside because we are human beings and we cannot live without sharing feelings, emotions and thoughst with each other. Once I watched a wonderful movie titled "Into the wild". A quote from this movie says that "happiness is real only if shared". Well, I think that not telling the truth may bring people to the unhappiness and the sadness. We need to tell the truth because often the truth deal with our doubts and fears and we might come to a solution only by telling what we think and looking for help.

Furthermore, from my experience I can say that with the time the truth always comes to the surface. Sometimes it took days, other times months and other times years, but at the end the truth has always been revealed and the consequences have been even worse. For example when I made mistakes in my childhood I tended not to talk about them to my parents. With the time the mistakes were getting bigger and I was not capable of handling them. If I had said the truth to my parents from the beginning, I would have solved the problem easly and right away.

Lastly, I would not have any relationship in which I may hide something. My best friend knows everything about me. But once happened that I dated a girl who he liked. I could not do anything else but tell him the truth. We haven't seen each other awhile but by now we have faced our divergences and we are best friends again.

In conclusion, I disagree with the statement because I think that telling the truth is the best way to build every type of relationship and because I could not behave differently.
Michele9   
Jul 10, 2015
Writing Feedback / There are times when it is acceptable not to tell the truth. [4]

@justivy03 thanks for your help again. Sure, life is complicated and maybe sometimes not telling the truth is the only solution. I just hope I won't ever find myself in that kind of situation :)
Michele9   
Jul 10, 2015
Writing Feedback / Single-sex or mixed school? [3]

this environment reduces distraction among students

rather than get stuck in undeveloped emotional relationshipsthat give rise to adversarial influences on their new future behavior.

In addition, not only do they do not only have significant opportunities in which need deserve consideration, but also they have a chance to choose subjects freely without any gender inequality

The research which is conducted by concordconcordant universityies reveals that a higher proportion of girls show interest in social modules

different types of experience

they could been successful

since the advantages of mixed school overweightyou may sayovercome its disadvantages

be careful to third person singular and the use of plural ;)
Michele9   
Jul 19, 2015
Writing Feedback / Youngsters freed from parents as soon as possible. How to judge this? [3]

Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a long time. Which of those situations do you think is better?

Many young adults like living with their parents for longer times. There are several and comprehensible reasons for that. They are spoiled by the mom who keeps on washing their clothes, preparing the meals for them, arranging their bed and so on. Furthermore by continuing to live with their parents, many young adults stand the chance to save money or, anyways, spending them to have fun, go to parties or go on vaction. However, even though this point of view may seem enviable, I would not keep living with my parents any further than passible. And now I am going to tell you why.

First of all, many young adults do not get along with their parents that much. Surely every parent loves his/her son/daughter but if they spend too much time together, they will certainly end up discussing about something. For example I have a friend of mine who since he was a child he has had trouble with his parents. In fact they always wanted him to be the best student in class or the best player in the soccer team. They often put him under pressure and this caused negative consequences on him. For example for a period of time he decided not to come to school and refuted to join any sportive activity. He felt frustrated and he escaped from his house. I am sure that everybody in the situation would not keep living with that kind of parents as a young adult.

Secondly, I personally prefer to live alone. In fact when I lived with my parents I had to respect their house rules. I had to have meals at the hours they wanted, to come back home whenever they wanted and to run daily errands for them that I did want to. In fact the first time I lived alone it was awesome. I lived my life the way I wanted it to be. For instance almost onece a week I organized parties in my apartament regardless of anybody's permission. I felt free and with no strings attached.

Lastly I think that living alone is a good way to grow and become responsible. In fact you have to take care of yourself and of your economies. For example you learn to manage you money and handle difficulties yourself.

In conclusion I think that living alone has more benefits than living with your parents.
Michele9   
Jul 20, 2015
Writing Feedback / Education as a firm foundation of prosperous and functional person? IELTS [3]

subjects should be follow some rules from the authority with standards

I think you'd better say:

subjects should follow rules and standards the authority releases

Almost knowledge at the school is almost immutable

there are enormous historic events that they do not know where they ought to start.

it does not mean that the authority needs to write and print books

types of books

the teacher can choose material to teach from a variety of books and they do not have to follow any particular books
you started this sentence with the third person singular
Michele9   
Jul 20, 2015
Writing Feedback / Are countries with a long average working time more economically successful? [4]

Lengthening the duration of hours per employee is not necessarily improveing the productivity rate of labour.

People who work long hours are vulnerable to illness.
surely you can avoid "who" but if you put it you'll make you sentence more formal

you already received good feedbacks, I wish I helped you a bit
Michele9   
Jul 20, 2015
Writing Feedback / It's more important to work at a job you enjoy , even if the salary is low. [4]

TOPIC: It's more important to work at a job you enjoy , even if the salary is low, than it is to have a high-paying job that you do not enjoy.

We all dream, when we become adults, to obtain the job we have always desired and that would be also rewarding with a high salary. However most of the times this dream does not come true. Life is complicated and we may end up having the job we wanted but not well paid or, on the other hand, working on something that we do not enjoy at all but that allows to lead a high standard of living. In my view it is better having a job you love but with a low salary rather than being well paid but for something you will be likely to hate.

To begin with, I think that the key for the happiness is doing what you love in life or, in other words, following you passions. In fact the job covers most of the day and most of the life. Therefore, by the end of the month, when you receive a remarkable salary, you have already spent a month in a place that probably you do not like, dealing with tasks you consider uninteresting and boring. Moreover, even though at the end of your career you gather a considerable amount of money, you will be too old and tired to enjoy your money. And this is not a life that it is worthy living.

In addition, there is a song of John Lennon which recites "life is what happens to you while you are busy making other plans". I always keep in mind this quote and I think that it perfectly fits this topic. In fact if you do what you like to do, you choose to live your life as you planned it to be. Whereas if you pick a job with a high wage but you do not feel it to be properly yours, well you are going to live someone else life. I can say this based on my personal experience. In fact last year I was hired by a company for an internship. I did not like the job and I think that on account of this reason I was not that good at doing it. I felt like what I was working on did not belong to me. Although I earned some money, I was frustrated and with no sense of achievement. After the end of the internship I refused to keep on working in that company because I did not want my life to take the direction.

In conclusion I deem that between having a well-paid job you do not like and a not-paid job you like, it is better the first one because life is too important to be busy doing things you do not enjoy.
Michele9   
Jul 21, 2015
Writing Feedback / WHY DO YOUNG PEOPLE LIKE TO LIVE IN BIG CITIES? IELTS ESSAY [3]

Rather than saying "over the poverty" you may write "overcome the poverty"

It is with the fast development of industrialization and modernization that creates countless employment opportunities for society

employees living in big cities are always paidalways perceive (or receive) a higher wage than the ones who live in countrysides
try to avoid passive form (are always paid)

My friend named Duc Anh is a good example for this case, withby doing the same workload he is paid earns 300 dollars in city centre but only 200 dollars in his hometown.

I wish I helped you a bit. Good luck!

it's not a hill, it's a mountain when you start out the climb
Michele9   
Jul 21, 2015
Writing Feedback / Elderly people can't enjoy their life enough due to lack of strength, energy and confidence [2]

People experience different aspects of life according to their sex, attitudes and, above all, age. When people age, things change and they cannot live the situations the same way they did as young adults. I affirm this on account of several reasons and now I am going to explain my opinion.

First of all, by the time people are old they have already lost many opportunities. In fact I think some experiences and circumstances are possible only during specific periods of the life and when someone overcomes one of these phases, the related situations will never come back again. In this regard I often keep in mind a quote from an ancient greek poet who used to say: "if you lose an opportunity, well that opportunity is lost forever". For example a friend of mine after graduation decided to enroll in the Law School of the university of my city, in spite of the fact that writing was his true passion. He picked that faculty as his parents pressured him for they wanted him to be a lawyer. However by now, even though he has already graduated in Law, he regrets that choice. He has not lived the time of the university as a light-hearted and serene period and now it is too late to go back and live the university the way he wanted it to be.

Secondly, when people grow older they become less instinctive and they overthink before acting. This attitude impedes to fully live the life. Indeed, people become more responsible. One example is when someone becomes parent. In that case he or she begins to think that he/she should be more careful because his/her actions or choices might have consequences also on his/her children.

Lastly, older people are often more scared and I think that living in the fear corresponds to not to live at all. As far I am concerned, sometimes the experience and previous mistakes bring people to take less risks. For instance, after I had a car crash I have always avoided to drive the car when I could because the incident shocked me too much.

In conclusion, I deem that young people live the life more than old prople do because they possess the strength, the energy and the confidence to get involved in every kinds of situations the life presents to them.
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