Writing Feedback / It's Not All About Entertainment [2]

Televised talent shows have become popular in many societes today.
Are these shows a good method of finding talented people, or are they just entertainment?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A great number of idol programmes had turned into famous TV presentation virtually the whole countries in the world. The others argue that it is a brilliant way to pick up potential person whereas another argue shout them out that those just for amusing beholder. This essay will discuss both points of view.

With regards to the aims of entertainment, people believe it is caused by several reasons. To begin, producers think that they could attract advertisement and major sponsorship for investing much money to support. Afterwards, they managed properly these shows in order to come more benefit for them. In addition, the idol progammes would deliver new event which had been derived from those. Appearing Reality Show, for exemplify, which based on participants' live, and Behind The Scene episode too. Both of them become famous and interesting to watch. Eventually it would increase their rating due to huge number of voters had to choose their idol.

However, I firmly do not believe these opinion stands up sturdy. The first reason is many rising star had been produced such as One Direction group band and solo singer who spread out in entertainment world stage. While they do perform, the examiner and commentators would observe directly how big potential they are for developing entertainment or music industry few couple years later. Not only this, TV station had big desire to know people's tendency in shows live. It is important for evolving entertainment shows because they must planned and organized properly before present them up.

To conclude, although some argue ability shows on television just only to regale people for aims fun and enjoy, I would argue that is the main approach to emerge fresh and young entertainer and therefore the stakeholder have to create a regulation to minimize silent action which only looking for self or company profit.

Writing Feedback / Safe the Tourism Object [2]

Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to.
How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience

Many individuals utterly argue that tourism industries have several dire effects in the nation where visitors go to. This essay will examine the reason why some demerits is occurring in environments and its customs and then discuss some possible solutions.

First of all, the primary factors which resulting serious is tourism facilities building project. Tourist accommodation was established to support tourism. The tourism industry sometimes had to sacrifice protected areas which actually it was the habitation of animals and plants. Secondly, the number of vacationers was disturbing the habitual of gateway community. For exemplify, in Ubud Bali, where the amount of Balinese temple stand up there. However the tourists know that worship is the daily life of people there, some showed disrespectful to the local culture and do disturb the sanctity and solemnity of pray in the temple.

Nevertheless, at least, there are several things in personal and groups can do to improve the quality of the environment and the host communities. To begin, take Sahabat Forest in National Garden of Gede-Pangrango for example, tourism service launched the program that contains obligation that 'one plant for one tourist'. It would create a sustainable tourism there. In addition, for tourists, they go there and appreciate the existing of local citizens. This action is sort of their obligation to campaigning social-moral responsibility in object tourism. In Ubud-Bali, small communities involves the tourists to interdict all of kind building resort project as too many sacred place and those architectures would interfere the natural architecture of the temple by the resorts and cottages.

To conclude, although the tourist and tourism industry has a significant effect on the gateway communities and its cultures, there are some action which would workable to overcome those damage. If all of us do preserve both of them, continuing of tourism and economic benefits would rise automatically.

Writing Feedback / Great, stylish architecture objects Versus public schools and hospital buildings? ILETS Task 2 [2]

Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Succeed of architecture style in the whole world provides many kind of unusual and great building in some crowded cities. While some individuals think that the superbig, spectacular building is primary for town, I would argue that a lot of money must be consumed for paying out of school and hospital buildings.

First of all, those that support this development argue that grand building is important because they could be used as a landmark city. If people go to see few of beautiful city, they could see that the structure is different each other. It is depends on their value and their progressed on architecture approach. As a result, it will enchant and attract tourists to come there. Secondly, these establishments are invaluable historical evidence of the development of architecture as begin when the ancient time there was so many castle or museum which had been built. And the last, the big catchy structures aims for minimizing land use in cities which is the more time the more congested.

However, I would agree that school and hospital buildings are the indispensable things in all of the area of settlements resident. To begin, unlike the big structures that must be established in city centre, both of them had to be in all of part in countries. Constructions of these structures are necessary priority to be built prior the impressive buildings. The government of countries had to making real that goal because fulfilled the public facilities is their obligation.

To sum up, I utterly argue that despite of the enormous building is needed for the big metropolis as result of its growth, human beings are require more attention from the stakeholder to invest nation budget for school and hospitals.

Writing Feedback / The Vantage of Living in Several Dwelling-Place (IELTS Task 2) [2]

In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around.
They often live in several different places in their lifetime. What are the advantage and disadvantage of both?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant information from your own knowledge and experience.

In long time ago, human decided to extend in the same place as they were live at the moment. Nowadays, there were tendency that individuals spend their life with live in somewhere which is dissimilar regency or countries. In my opinion; however, there were the merits and demerits from both of situation, I believe that live in diverge places have more benefits than the drawbacks.

The major advantages of people live in one dwelling-place that they had much more time to build a small community deeply intensive. They live closed to family members, relatives, and their colleagues. As a result, they had strong relationship between through element in society. In comparison, there was a detriment effect for them to living in one location. They could not feel the local culture and customs except their own communities. As a result, they are became unfamiliar with the differences and sometimes tent to not let the "others" or the "new" brought affect for their lives. For example, indigenous people's lifestyle had a rule that they should not be leave out of community environment.

On the other hand, I would agree that settle in several area along life have many benefits. Firstly, they can experience how to live outside of their hometown. Understand a language other than their mother's language, implementing new value and culture of the others. Secondly, those can learn tolerance and mutual respect between people in there. However, there are drawbacks if people choose keep moving from place to spot. They must be able to adapt quickly to new society. For example, a diplomat staff or head of multinational corporations which is assigned so that they have to move to other country until before the last of their tenure. Those children must struggle to adjust again in new environment including school because they have a culture, tribe, religion, and custom which is totally different to where they lived before.

To conclude, while some people assume that live in a particularly place or many places as long as their lives has benefits and drawbacks of each, I believe that live in lots places have lots positive influence on human life.

Writing Feedback / Tim Berners-Lee launched "WordWideWeb". The Powerful tool. [3]

The Internet is probably the most significant invention of the last 30 years. Without it, our lives would be completely different.
To what extent do you agree or disagree! Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The greatest discovery over the last 30 years was started at the time when the internet was created in the first time by Leonard Kleinrock in 1969. The transformation which is resulted altering a lot of work method and viewpoints of people about knowledge and technology. While humankind it is not absolutely change by the Internet, I utterly agree that it is the most influential invention for human beings until present.

Regarding to the beneficial internet for mankind, there is one point which not fully different even after the powerful of internet: crime. The type that crime as always known as cyber crime shows intensively since the internet. Although security of data is absolutely safe on system, but it still cannot be overcome cyber crime. Nowadays, according to the forecasts, that had been predicted to be the most common crime in worldwide.

In contrast, a great deal of things make human's life so different after the Internet. The key power of the internet is on the network and connections. Especially since Tim Berners-Lee launched "WordWideWeb". To begin, it changes the way people communicate each other. Secondly, it changes all forms of data security data storage in the whole field. In addition, it changes all forms of entertainment. The last point, the Internet can be connecting individuals one another through the wireless network whether that it is learning, work, and research.

To sum up, while so many positive change occur of people's live since the internet, cyber crime also growing up among its progress. Nevertheless, I would argue that the internet is the most incredible creation during the new of millennium.

Writing Feedback / Why We Happy? A proper job brings joy and excitement in human life [2]

Some people say that in order to be happy, you must have a job you love doing. Others say that others factors are more important.

Do you think that people can only be happy if they have a job really enjoy?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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While a greatest number of individuals say that having nice occupation is the best way to be happier, I would argue with others who assume that there are factors which are similarly predominant in human beings.

At least, there are two reasons why occupation provides feels glad and excite in human life. Firstly, if they have a proper job, they can fulfill all needs of their family. For example, those could take a Christmas or New Year's holiday in Europe and other famous tourist destination. Also, if they working accordance with their passion. It is occur with the owners or founders a sort of company. He come work every day with joy and confidence for success in the future. Therefore, because of his perseverance, he would gain financial security that might his life satisfied with happiness.

On the other hand, I believe it is not solely job that makes person can be happy in their life. Every individual was born and raised with different values and experiences. Thus, researchers should measure the happiness with many instruments and variable because this is not always the same perspective as with every individuals and places. In general, there are some factors that human can be happy. To begin, spending time with family and friends would trigger a sense of happiness. Secondly, spend life time with something that is really useful to themselves and many people also make those happy. Finally, happiness is something that relate closely with the spiritual life. For exemplify, the leaders of the major religions are the one of the happy people in the whole world. According to them, bring people to the salvation is the priceless work.

To conclude, do the job that human enjoy is a factor which could make them happy. Not only this, I firmly believe that many factors are probably much more predominant and it's variant for every people such as dedicate to religion and establish a happy family.

Writing Feedback / The ways to achieve an knowledge. Visiting is Always Better Than Watching [4]

Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films about it than by actually visiting it.
How true is this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that you cannot learn by watching programmes and films about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experiences.

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A huge number of people argue that observe television programmes and movies will acquire their knowledge about other countries. Nevertheless, I would argue that visiting those directly would provide more knowledge and amaze experience.

Those that support watching activities opine that these days, worldwide people can easily a great deal of resources about other places to learn from television and films. To begin, the majority of individuals more likely choose one or many from lots of broadcasts in National Geographic or similar channel and its documenter films about places which are they most desired. To illustrate, a student university who was given socio-cultural assignment from their professor. They just spend time to look on some broadcasts to get informations and facts. According to them, those programmes have representative all things which are they want because it was presented completely with social life, scientifial matter, and indeed natural view.

In contrast, I utterly believe that there are things we cannot learn other state only from doing research from visual resources and it means they have to take a trip for acquire their knowledge. First of all, they could learn the culture of society because get directly chance to meet local inhabitants who always implement their values on daily activities. Moreover, they could obtain new lesson and experience due to find some unique and distinctive area in those place which had not been exposed. Those assume that they tend to deliver programmes which is just always contain touristic and interest value.

To conclude, although people could achieve their knowledge by monitoring programmes on film and TV, I would agree that it would be more useful and powerful if they could visit immediately.

Writing Feedback / Social Bond in The High Rise Apartment [2]

Some people say that living in a high-rise apartment block is lonely experience because there is no community spirit. Others say that people who live in high-rise apartments have a much better sense of community than those who live in houses. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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A good deal of people say that living in high-rise apartment is the lonesome experience due to there is no social bond each other. Nonetheless, I would argue that remain there have plenty of togetherness better than living in dwelling-place block.

Regarding to those who espouse the argument that there are reasons the lack of community passion in apartments. First of all, it is depend on the purposes of the construction and its targets. The tenants have trend which are homogeneous, for example, they are full time workers all it once in apartments. Virtually all of the time is spent in the office, so that it reduces the time for community life therein. Moreover, those are not supported by adequate public facilities and more expensive too. In the whole Chenggong China, to exemplify, thousands of apartments are empty because did not affordable by society. As a result, the government decided to split the superblock apartments in order to be more humane with added facilities of the social life and adapted traditional Chinese houses.

On the other hand, I believe that extend in apartment blocks create a lot of chances for togetherness. First, people would are quite familiar and getting to know other families because they are often meet without stopping with each other on the stairs, in the corridors, or in the soup kitchen. Secondly, at the weekend time, they often gathered all together in the park, children's playground, or other facilities which are provided by management apartment. Consequently, they would tend to often share such as experiences, foods, and other things because those were already believe as one community and one family.

To sum up, while individuals assume that high-rise apartment is always offering forlorn impression, I would argue that truthfully those buildings have a good deal of opportunity to build good community among the occupants.

Writing Feedback / Two Methods of Irrigating Field (IELTS Task I) [2]

The diagrams show two mode of picking up the water aim for irrigating. While the first mode using a bamboo basket or leather, the second using two pulleys, two rollers, and a bucket. Overall, while the swing-basket method is more traditional, the rope and bucket method is need simple technology.

Both of the modes are using rope as a main equipment to gather water from its source. For first method, this process is started by binding up two couples of rope that long enough in the opposite side of basket. Then, apply a manual system, the basket is swung into water sources and put in irrigation canal. This manual method is more practical and tend to be used to water sources that close to fields, but it only have a depth one to two meters.

Then, in the second method is only used one couple that related by pullet which is installed in above of water source that which culminated on the backside of carabao. Then, the carabao walked on slope to lift the bucket from well which is connected directly with irrigations channels. This method is used for water sources which is located in hills and has a depth about 50 meters in the ground. Eventually, water is collected in irrigation channels before next to the fields.

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Writing Feedback / The Best Eco-Friendly Form of Mode Transportation [2]

The table shows the percentage of employee which is going to work by four shapes of mode transportation in Houston, Texas; and the line chart experiences the amount of CO2 which is resulted as its residual gas and it is measured by kilogram per person per kilometer.

Car-driver only (48) and train/bus (37) take the first and second higher position in the percentage of travelers. Both of these numbers is almost similarly to the average age of the traveler.

There are two main trends in the number of output CO2 emissions. The first group to be the both of cars. While those have emissions more than 0.05 kilograms, car (driver only) produce over three times more than car (four people). The last group is bus/train and cycle/work. They virtually succeed to create zero emissions.

Overall, while car (driver only) has dominated in the percentage of daily worker in the number of, train/bus becoming stand at the first rank of the average of traveler. It can be seen that, person which is going to work by car-driver only producing the highest CO2 emissions.

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Writing Feedback / The Result of Social Economic Index: A Measurement in Several Represent Regions (IELTS Task 1) [2]

The table reveals the result of four social and economic index in several represent regions, measured and produced by United Nations statistics in 1994. Overall, while Canada and Japan showed the highest mark in all indicators, Peru and Zaire witnessed reverse trend.

Based on the information, Canada (North America) and Japan (Asia) which are known as developed country experienced a huge score in those variables. In Canada, annual income per person to be quite much at 11,000 US$ and in line with Canada, Japan even reached an income at 15,760 US$. Two indicators presented remained same; life expectancy at birth in Canada (76) and Japan (78), and also adult literacy rate at 99 together. Yet, daily calorie requirement per person between them showed difference at 480 calories; this credit for Canada.

On the other hand, Peru (South America) and Zaire (Africa) presented a negative trend than Canada and Japan. Peru and Zaire experienced quite lower score than Canada-Japan in annual income and calorie supply (both them measured by person), roughly ten times less than them. In addition, life expectancy at birth in Peru (51) and 47 for Zaire. It means a half of Canada and Japan's had on it. Eventually, adult literacy rate became the biggest gap in this statistics, which Peru (68%) and Zaire (34%) from total populations each country.

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Writing Feedback / The Percentage of Pupils Appearance in Secondary School (IELTS Task 1) [2]

The table reveals the percentage of students appearance in several kinds of secondary school in three differ years; 2000, 2005, and 2009. Overall, while pupils showed a significant increase in presence appearance in classrooms year by year, three other sorts of intermediate school witnessed a decrease pattern.

According to the information, pupils presence in community school experienced rose generation by generation. It started at 12 percent in 2000, and then grew to 20 percent in 2005. In the end of period, this figures inclined to 58%. In the other words, eventually, the number of students presence increased almost five times rather than at the first time.

This is in stark contrast to specialist schools, grammar schools, and voluntary-controlled schools that revealed a fall trend. Actually, especially in specialist school, the attendee experienced a slight decline where each period only rose by one percent; 2000 (12%), 2005 (11%), and 2009 (10%). Moreover, in 2000, the attendee in grammar school started at 24% and then fell two folds (12%) in the end of period.

Furthermore, voluntary-controlled schools witnessed a dramatic fall on the attendance record in intermediate school. To begin, it began broke the record when in 2000 reached 52 percent of pupils in class. Yet, by time, this number fell to 38 percent in 2005, and ended up the period by hit lower point of 20 percent in 2009.

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Writing Feedback / The Air Exchange: Discards Steam and How Heat Dissappears (IELTS Task 1) [2]

The diagram shows that how heat disappears and discards steam in a house because of air exchange into and out to a house. Overall, while the house delivered spots as air entrance to in it, exit ways is always found by air to go to outside.

The house experiences dryer vent in the first floor, then also kitchen fan vent and electrical outlet in the second floor. In addition, in the ceiling house, there are attic hatch, bathroom fan vent, and plumbing stack vent.

At the first stage shows air getting into the house through the dryer vent and kitchen fan vent all together. Then, air flows to upward and pass through the ventilations which can be found at kitchen and family or private rooms. Also, recessed light in the floor continues to emit heat and energy to the air.

At the last stage witnesses air moving again to storey part in the house to look for the escape way. Attic hatch and bathroom fan vent are the space to flow out. Eventually, air flow and heat flow lead to the plumbing stack vent before reaching to the outside.

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Writing Feedback / Cinema, Theatre, Zoo, Library. Popular Places for Different People in Australia (IELTS TASK I) [2]

A breakdown of the percentage of native residents and immigrants settle in Australia who visit four selected attractive places is presented in the bar graph. Overall, more new migrants born in other nations prefer go to Cinema. Although new migrants born in the English language countries do not keen to have Theatre as popular destination, the locals born in Australia prefer to visit Cinema.

At 70%, the number of fresh migrants born in other countries go to Cinema, but this figure plummeted to 20% for Theatre purposes. However, those people also pose more attract behavior when they go to Zoo as much 40% visitors, and almost 40% migrants visit Library.

Similar with this pattern, new migrants born in English-speaking countries also make Cinema as favorite places at about 65% attendances, and this proportion show at less than three times in Theatre visitors.

In contrast, unlike other type of migrants, Library is the best choice for new migrants born in other countries at 55% visitors, but this figure recorded five times less in Theatre.

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Writing Feedback / Why People Choose Vegetarian Lifestyle? | IELTS Task 2 [3]

Some people choose to eat no meat or fish.
They believe that is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole.
Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, vegetarian lifestyle is viewed as identical as the harmony of life. For this reason, a great deal of people prefer do not consume meat and fish products. This is because those people believe that such behavior profoundly impact not only for healthy life but also for creating better world. While this is true to some extent since it is believed as the only way to acquire balancing with life, I would argue that this unacceptable method because would affect immune system.

Those people who strongly believe vegetarian lifestyle has particular merit contend that the way of their life is the primary method to obtain harmony with world's nature. For example, the followers of vegetarianism who choose to not consume these diets means that it is highly important to leave the creatures to persist in their habitat: nature. As a result, they have strong feeling about nature and always support campaign with regard to overfishing and over hunting action. There is no doubt that this behavior offers sense of belonging with world's fauna.

Having said that, I would argue that, chemically, people require sufficient number of animal protein and fat which come from meals and fish. This is because protein and fat could stabilize and strengthen our immune system towards viral, bacterial, and fungal action. As a result, they become vulnerable to gain ailments. It is evident that people need protein to maintain their health.

To sum up, while such behavior delivers positive development, I would argue that the extreme condition of this way could bring enormous dire effects on health. Therefore, I would suggest that all people should consider about their health before their idealism.

Writing Feedback / The Tendency of Rainfall and Temperature in Brasilia and Recife | IELTS Task 1 [2]

A breakdown of the number of precipitation which include hours of sunshine absorption and days with thunder and the measurement of temperature in Brasilia and Recife are presented in the both bar graphs. Overall, more rainfall in Recife occur from April to August and the rest of month occur in Brasilia. While the warmest city is Recife, the coldest city is Brasilia.

At maximum 250 mm precipitation falls in January for Brasilia. However, this figure decrease dramatically from February to June, with just roughly 10 mm rainfall and 2 wet days. Yet, it figure reveals recovery between August and December at approximately 260 mm rainwater and 16 days with thunder. The number of sunshine hour show a similar trend in a year, which hovers between 4 - 9 days. When it comes to temperature, Brasilia has months with below 10 degree.

A more detailed look at the graph displays that Rainfall average in Recife city shows a reverse trend compare to its counterpart. The city has seven months which is at above 100 mm precipitation, from February to August and 25 wet days. However, this rainfall average is at below 50 mm when January and September onwards, with 10 wet days. Surprisingly, although the least figure for sunshine absorption just 3 hours and for days with thunder is less than one. Moreover, almost the time, the temperature is between the range of 25 and 35 degree.

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