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ajit88rai   
Jan 16, 2011
Writing Feedback / Job satisfaction: factors, element of well-being [5]

TOPIC
As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing.
What factors contribute to job satisfaction?
How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

Answer

Workplace is a location where most people spend a major part of their life, after their student life. What makes a workplace suitable for an individual is the job he/she does. Job satisfaction is the driving force which derives maximum productivity and efficiency out of an individual.

In the modern world, industrialisation has resulted in a mammoth workforce. Job satisfaction inspires this workforce to work honestly and efficiently. Job satisfaction means how contented an individual feels at his workplace. Job satisfaction is presently a concern which is taken care by Industrial psychologists in an industry. It is the duty of an industrial psychologist to look after the mental health of the workers and to solve their dissatisfaction.

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Job satisfaction is subjected to many factors which play a part in an individual's performance. First and foremost, requirements and needs of an individual is an important factor. According to Abraham Maslow's hierarchial needs, an individual has five main needs during his life- Food and shelter, social acceptance, recognition, finances and self actualisation. Second very important factor is financial security. A person can have peace of mind only if he has finances to meet his needs.

Thirdly, job security is very important. No employee can work efficiently and be contented , if he has the fear of being kicked out any time. Fourth most important factor is recognition and social acceptance. When an individual is encouraged for his good work, he/she will try to work more harder next time and would feel satisfied with the job. Fifth, job suitability is a prerequisite to job satisfaction. For instance, if an engineer is given the work of an accountant, errors are bound to occur. The field of interest of an individual should be kept in mind. The above mentioned factors are few most important factors contributing to job satisfaction.

However, how suitable an individual is to expect any thing, whether materialistic or abstract, can only be measured by an expert in this field. Industrial psychologists and industrial sociologists are hired by many companies to look after such problems, arising due to job dissatisfaction.

Thus, job satisfaction is a quintessential requirement for an employee to work efficiently in an organisation. An individual who is not satisfied will surely commit errors and it might even harm the organisation.
ajit88rai   
Jan 16, 2011
Graduate / "Stay Hungry, Stay Foolish" - SOP for Masters degree in MIS [6]

Hi Lokesh,
I don't know much about SOPs and these english tests.Right now I am planning to give IELTS for the first time in less than 25 days. Would you please see my essay and notify me if any corrections or omissions have to be done????

thanks
ajit88rai   
Jan 16, 2011
Writing Feedback / Job satisfaction: factors, element of well-being [5]

what about this essay??? ..i am trying hard to improve and get my ideas flowing in essay writing...

question- Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime.Other, however,argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

answer-

Crime is always punishable. Retribution is the measure to counter criminals in a society. Countries across the world use different measures to deal with crimes-some have stringent fixed laws while some believe in giving a second chance for improving.

Fixed stringent punishments versus flexible correcting measures have been a controversial issue. A fixed punishment gives a message to all other prospective criminal minds what they should expect from the courts. Effectively , this prevents the criminals from committing crimes.

For instance, cold blooded murderers are given capital punishments or life imprisonment in many countries, which is justified because they are a threat to the society.

However, many times, a circumstances marred person is forced to commit a crime. In life, sometimes, certain unavoidable situations come up, which force a person to commit a crime. There are many convicts imprisoned, without their circumstances and motivating factors being considered.

The main objective of any judicial system is to safeguard the human rights. If an innocent person commits a crime by mistake, and is given a severe punishment, it will solely defeat the objective of the judicial system. It will incite hatred in that individual against the society. Such victims of circumstances should be given a proper counselling to improve and rehabilitate.

For instance, killing someone in self defense is not a crime. When an individual's life is threatened, it is obvious he/she will try to protect himself/herself. Such so called criminals, should be dealt softly at the hands of law.

Everyone deserves a second chance. Fixed punishments do restrain anti-social elements from committing crimes. However, a little degree of flexibility is essentially needed. Fixed punishments are only justified for history sheeters and hardcore criminals.

I strongly believe that the judicial systems should take into account the inciting factors of an individual who committed a crime. Redressal and retribution is a better approach as compared to fixed stringent punishments, which don't consider circumstantial factors.
ajit88rai   
Jan 17, 2011
Writing Feedback / Job satisfaction: factors, element of well-being [5]

thanks a tonne lokesh...well its really nice to get guidance and opinions ...please do give me your reviews about the new essay i posted today on university educational approach.!!!! thanks a lot
ajit88rai   
Jan 17, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS ACADEMIC WRITING ABOUT GOVERNMENT FUNDING ART. [3]

hi ,
-personally i feel there is a lack of cohesion in the first line of introduction. Improvement in living standards does not really implies to investment of art.

-From an individual standview, more estabilishment<establishment> <of> artistic places such as museums <,> gallery and opera have provided people <,> especially those working undr <under> high pressure in this high-speed modern society <,> more convenient and available ways to relax spiritually < spiritually? are you sure about that? I think artistic places give more peace of mind and entertainment as compared to spirituality. Spirituality is to discover essence of one's own being> as well as making up for their monotorous < monotonous> life.

- you can also add that artistic investment encourages to conserve the cultural heritage of a region.

-Obviously, those who advocate the artistic appreciation more likely rest on the more affluent group of people rather than the poor <,> who have to worry about the allocation of their low income <,> which constiutes considerable proportion of health and education.expenditures.

-THIS SENTENCE NEEDS TO BE RE-FRAMED. "From a business point, imagine how many residents would go to the local gallery and opera which are built in the area of slums before their basic needs are still a problem. ".... YOU CAN WRITE ," From a business point, imagine how many residents would to the local gallery and opera, from slum areas where the basic needs are a problem in itself"

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-Accordingly, welfare service and artistic projections should both be subsidized due to their individual and social benefits. Which ( you are forming a new sentence in the middle of a sentence) should be valued more, though, mainly lie on the economic situaions < situations> in the area invested as well as the source of funds.

-try to get more ideas. this is not a very easy topic to get the ideas flowing, so try to read some essays on similar topics.
ajit88rai   
Jan 17, 2011
Writing Feedback / "The true function of a university" - IELTS -education approach of universities. [5]

Topic-
Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Other think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer

What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

answer-

A University is a place where one aggregates knowledge in a specific field , for a brighter and prosperous future life. Everyone dreams to study in top universities because they provide the best skills and opportunities to an individual.

Should a university provide industry specific knowledge or just random knowledge is a debatable issue. Some people believe that university education should be centered towards knowledge, no matter if that course is in demand by the employers or not. However , this is not a practical approach in the current scenario.

For instance, if an individual's choice of course is not in demand by employers, what would that individual do? He will not have any employment, which would result in a dark future only. This might also lead the individual to indulge in wrong activities.

Knowledge is not useless. However, knowledge which is useful to an individual and is in the interest of his future should be given. In today's world, unemployability is a bigger problem than unemployment. A knowledge which can't provide an individual with a good future is useless.

For example, if there is a demand for engineers in the job market, and the market is flooded with only lawyers, an imbalance would be developed.

Universities should maintain a balance among all professions. It should be left on an individual , what he/she wants to choose. Teaching courses which are not in demand by the employers would only create instability. Doctors, engineers, lawyers, journalists and all professions are equally important. A course which is not useful to employers would only create a crowd of jobless aspirants, who might be an expert in their course, but are useless in the world.

I strongly believe that the universities should provide a choice for many types of courses. It should be the personal choice of an individual to choose their field of interest. Courses which are not in demand by the employers should be left only to a student to choose. If a student wants to take the risk of the future prospects of their course, it should be their discretion. Knowledge is useful, but only when it is focussed in a right direction.
ajit88rai   
Jan 17, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS-Money spent on different forms of entertainment (WT1) [8]

@ARIA

-As the charts shows the US leads the first place for spending the money for entertainment follow<followed> by Europe and the <then> Asia at <in >the third place.

-what i have learnt, when the numbers in the data given are less, you need to cover most of them...you haven't covered cinema, video and publishing at all....try to cover all the mentioned things.
ajit88rai   
Jan 17, 2011
Writing Feedback / How money was spent in different entertainment- IELTS task [4]

@ARIA

-As the charts shows the US leads the first place for spending the money for entertainment follow <followed> by Europe and
the <then> Asia at <in>the third place.

-what i have learnt, when the numbers in the data given are less, you need to cover most of them...you haven't covered cinema, video and publishing at all....try to cover all the mentioned things
ajit88rai   
Jan 18, 2011
Writing Feedback / "The true function of a university" - IELTS -education approach of universities. [5]

hi khushi, well actually since the term employer was given, i thought maybe i should use employment prospects, demand,in demand professions n field of interest of an individual as my central theme...i would try to be more specific from next time...thanks for your feedback...
ajit88rai   
Jan 18, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS-fatherhood ,motherhood or both? [2]

please read my essay all of you and give your honest opinion. THANKS

TOPIC
"Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up."

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

MY ANSWER:

Parenting is a very complicated process. Perfection in this process is dependent on a lot of factors. Both mother and father play a vital role in raising a kid and it is the responsibility of both of them to cater the needs of a kid.

Some orthodox people believe that it is solely the duty of a mother for raising their offspring. However, this has now changed in the current scenario. Such an obsolete approach is useless in the modern society. Just because giving birth is the discretion of a woman does not mean that the father is allowed to relax and not look after the child.

The current world talks about women empowerment and children welfare. How will a child have a good upbringing when his mother is busy trying to maintain a balance between the home and the duties of a father? According to the social setup, it is the duty of a father to provide for the basic needs and financial security of the family. In addition to this, a father is also responsible for looking after the child.

For example , it is believed that a family in which a patriarch is absent, often results in their children being spoilt. This is supposedly true.

A mother is to give love, affection and proper manners to a child. On the other hand, a father should share the duty of inculcating discipline and etiquettes in a child. None of these duties can be actually categorised to a mother or a father. They both are equally responsible for raising a child.

I strongly believe that thrusting all the responsibilities on a mother , just because she has given birth , is a very narrow thinking and is void. A family needs a balance. Father and mother , both act as a fulcrum on which a child's future is built. They both are equally important and fatherhood should be emphasised as much as motherhood.
ajit88rai   
Jan 18, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL- Should young people take several jobs before they take a long-term one? [5]

hi, don't you feel buddy that an employer would love to hire a stable and more loyal worker who has shown consistency over a period of time????? after all, after spending so much amount of money on training an individual, a company would not like to lose that candidate....

-moreover, won't you call a person confused, who even after graduating in finance (as in your example) doesn't know what actually his field of interest is...

-I really liked your expressions, but I think supporting to other option would have been better. Consistency is the demand of the job market. A rolling stone gathers no moss.
ajit88rai   
Jan 18, 2011
Writing Feedback / People care too much about their appearance than before. Do you agree? [6]

Hi Chim,
Maybe you can also add PEER PRESSURE factor which forces people to look the best and be fashionable...Moreover , maybe you can write the conclusion in another paragraph summarizing what you have mentioned in the introduction and the main body...Its quite a good essay and you have covered very good points.

cheers and good luck :)
ajit88rai   
Jan 18, 2011
Writing Feedback / How money was spent in different entertainment- IELTS task [4]

cool....I think this time it was quite precise and related to the shown graph.
cheers and good luck.please do review my essays and give your opinions.
cheers and good luck
all the best
:)
ajit88rai   
Jan 18, 2011
Writing Feedback / Essay about work hours Long or short work hours - feedback [2]

rephrase this sentence....it is not having a good structure i feel
"Long-standing and till nowadays; we have been living in the age of aggressive materialism, and it is an obvious fact that financial aspects and monetary have become a major, and a part and parcel of daily life.".

-However, working longer hours may not necessarily <result in a > higher output.
-More working hours can mean < result in > increasing fatigue rather than increasing productivity and could negatively influence work life balance <the balance of personal and professional life>, which means less <lesser> family meetings, personal life(you have alreadysaid about work-life balance) <socialization > and even leisure.

- avoid using "work life balance " term...its a bit confusing...like whether u want to say "work life" or "work-life"...professional-personal life balance would be better!!!!!

- rest i felt your essay was quite good. You can add job satisfaction also ....and maybe you can even write that -In the long run, excessive burden would result in frustration and fatigue due to long work hours might also cause industrial accidents.

cheers and good luck!!! :)
ajit88rai   
Jan 19, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS- sporting events and their need for easing international tension [3]

TOPIC
Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

answer-

Time and again, nations across the globe are in a rat race to prove their world dominance and to claim territorial supremacy. The whole world is running blindly to amass arms and ammunition. This has resulted in a lot of tension among nations. Steps to ease this tension are very necessary. Sporting events have played a significant role to ease this tension.

Sporting events play a pivotal role in uniting the common public on one single platform. Lack of communication between people is also responsible for the tension. Winston Churchill once said ," There is no such thing as public opinion. there is only published opinion". The common people only say what they hear, which results in tension. However, these sporting events brings the hearts of the people together. People can meet and understand the ground realities of each other's nations during these sporting extravaganzas. People show the support for their countries in a more dignified and sporting manner in such events.

International events in the field of sports, also helps to renew bilateral ties between nations who are supposedly foes. It can result in a small, yet significant step for renewal of ties among nations and to promote cultural exchange and sporting tours.

For instance, international events like football World Cup , Olympics, Commonwealth games etc., bring all the nations together on a single platform, forgetting their enmity. Nations like , India-Pakistan, USA-Russia, North and South Korea participate in these events together to promote peace, sportsmanship and improve ties.

But these sporting events need a lot of investment , which is not easy for any country. However , considering the promotion of peace and releasing tension , this is a very small price to pay. In addition, sometimes during these sporting events, brawls and fights also occur. This should be dealt strictly to preserve the sporting spirit.

I firmly support for the promotion of these sporting events. Although they are not a complete solution to the tension, yet they have a significant effect. Step by step only a herculean task can be achieved and this is a very peaceful step.
ajit88rai   
Jan 23, 2011
Writing Feedback / Toefl: knowledge gain from experience or book [2]

hey buddy,
-i really feel that this line needs re-framing, especially the latter part.
" Some people would like to gain knowledge through reading books;while, other people prefer gain knowledge from experience which one face dilemma and take effective method to solve them."

-i feel buddy, that the 2nd n 3rd paragraphs are giving the same reason-that life is different, books have limited number of possible situations which one can encounter.

-write ur fourth paragraph as the third one. u have given a really good reason in the fourth para-book study is a lil boring, practical study is more adventurous n keeps a student focussed to learn. this can be given as a second reason...

-conclusion is a little weak and confusing...the strong reasons u have given in the main body, make them the base for ur summary...rest ur two points r really good...all the best and good luck...do review my essays too....together we all can erase our weaknesses and capitalize on our strengths!!!!

-one more thing...i feel u need to work on ur tenses....and also agreement of the verb with the subject....the latter part, i was never able to understand in my whole school life, however do pay attention to the tenses...if u r writing in simple present tense...keep it that way...
ajit88rai   
Jan 23, 2011
Writing Feedback / Bringing and grown up a child could be a challenging work, which demand attending of both parents [5]

-aria-u really need to check the grammar. u can rephrase the above para as:
" Raising a child can be a challenging work which demands attention from both parents.Parenting as the sole responsibility of a mother is an old fashioned approach which has been now rejected.(but with this line, u wud b taking a stand too quick...try to write more line about parenting). Since both the parents bring the child in this world, it should be the duty of both to nourish and raise the child properly.

this much is enough to write in an intro para...dont get too deep in the intro itself ...u might not have any have any matter left in the next paras.

-u have already written these lines in the intro itself.-"Today we live in a society which both parents have the same rights and commitment for their life. An old fashion belief, which might put the responsibility of kids on the mother's shoulders do not have value anymore."- do not repeat the lines. its useless...i have read that ielts examiners will just cut ur repeated lines..it can also affect ur word count.

-masculine skills. -this word is a little biased...leadership is not a masculine thing anymore ...dont use terms or sentences which can be interpreted as being judgmental, biased or racial...never do that...

-dont start ur concluding para with the word " in conclusion" . we all know we write conclusion at the end of an essay... just write a real effective lines or a quote...which can summarize ur stand and also state ur opinion.

- btw, u really need to work on ur grammar my frnd, its really very hard to understand the sentences. try re-reading what u have written.

all the best...i would say u should love this constructive criticism. it will help us all in the longer run!!!! good luck and cheers...all the best
ajit88rai   
Jan 23, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS-do ads make us to buy more or is it a need? [4]

I haven't really done good work on this essay. Still all reviews are welcome.
question-

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

answer-

All Humans desire to live an easy and smooth life, not having to do too much of hard work. Scientific and technological developments have resulted in creation of highly advanced equipments and better commodities. Media has played a very important role in promotion of these consumer goods like T.V., refrigerators, shampoos , computers ,soaps and so on. However , it is the human desires which has resulted in the high sales of these goods , irrespective of their prices and advertising.

Advertisements play an important role in promotion of any product. Media has reached every corner of the world. Right from a villager to a top industrialist , everyone knows the power of media. The advertisements give a real good kick start for launching any product. However, spending on advertising is not a guarantee for the success of a product. A product will be successful only if it meets the required standards.

The high sales of consumer goods is because it has become a necessity in life. Goods like T.V. , refrigerators, computers, etc., provide us with sophistication and convenience. The popular consumer goods were once considered as luxury, but now it has become a necessity. It is the need of the people which has promoted the sale of these goods. For instance, can we really imagine a world without television, computers, toiletries etc? These are the basic needs , one requires no guidance to know if they really need it or not.

Consumer goods are in high demand also because they are time saving and meet high standards. With more people doing jobs, it is very important to save time. Sophisticated devices save a lot of time and are easy to use. These consumer goods have become the heart of the modern society.

However, these developments have resulted in over-dependence on these goods. People rely too much on them and don't want to do any effort. But everything has its pros and cons. The amount of ease and facilities these goods give, surely over-shadows their disadvantages.

Thus , its the real need and desires of the people which has resulted in high sales of products. Advertisements can give initial advantage only, but can never make a low quality good successful in the long run. Modern lifestyle has resulted in making the consumer goods a necessity and people really need them.
ajit88rai   
Jan 23, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS-do ads make us to buy more or is it a need? [4]

hello aria, to be true, i wasnt really comfortable writing this essay.my mind was elsewhere... Anyways i will try writing it again today, n i will choose other argument as my opinion... N btw yes i do keep a check for the time limit. I think 40 mins is enough..i spend the first ten mins for making outlines- then 25 mins for writing- then last 5 mins for reading my essay again...but if u cant limit urself within the time limit initially, then do not worry.once ur grammar and ur concepts start flowing smoothly, time limit wont matter to u... N thanks for ur review.i myself didnt feel that it was a good essay written by me. Will try to improve it.thanks n cheers.when r u planning to tk ielts?did u ever take it before?or toefl?
ajit88rai   
Jan 24, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS-do ads make us to buy more or is it a need? [4]

thankx khushi, i got it right in third try...lol....but no matter how many attempts i take right now...it will surely help develop new ideas when i appear for the exam...thanks a tonne!!!!
ajit88rai   
Jan 24, 2011
Writing Feedback / emergency money; spend your earned money immediately or save it for future ? [10]

hi sabrina, i think u have few spelling and grammatical mistakes.pls do review all ur sentences again n see what u wanna say n what u wrote...secondly, maybe u should give another reason instead of increasing bank balance...some sort of practical example wud b good... Rest i felt u need to work on spellings n grammar... Maybe u can add the quote-' a penny saved is a penny earned' ..or something like that...all the best n good luck...cheers...
ajit88rai   
Jan 24, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS-good news/bad news? whats the best? [2]

QUESTION:
News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it he better if more good news was reported?

ANSWER:

The development of science and technology has immensely helped keeping people updated about the world they live in. The credit of this awareness goes to the power of media. News has become a quintessential part of the routine and has a significant effect on the mass it connects to. Everyone wants to know what is going around the world.

However, the news shown daily is a sensitive task which needs meticulous efforts. Both electronic and print media have editors to make the final call. News editor's decision for showing a news depends on a lot of factors. The editor has to keep in mind the profit maximisation. The circulation and the TRP of a news is the most important factor. Also , the mass of people a news will connect to is also important. For instance, the news of Tom Cruise signing for Mission Impossible 4 flick is irrelevant for a villager. Thus every news targets a certain strata of the society.

Some wise man once said, "Evening news is one where they begin with 'Good Evening' , and then proceed to tell you why it isn't". As soon as one watches a news channel its always full of terrible things happening around. News channels show these bad news as they are very sensational and thrilling. Bad news keeps everyone interested and hence increases the circulation and TRP. However, too much of bad news makes us sceptical and paranoid. To create spicy news, paparrazzi intrude people's lives and also sometimes defame them. This kind of approach is not justified. People are becoming used to bad news because of all these sensational news.

Winston Churchill once said , " There is nothing as public opinion, there is only published opinion". The media can use their power to good effect. Good news creates optimism and peace and harmony. It can be used for social awareness and also for knowledge enhancement. However, in today's scenario , good news might not be very successful. It is not thrilling all the time. Good news gives inspiration but can not keep people, who seek spicy news, interested.

Thus, its the duty of the editor to keep a check on what they publish. News can misguide and inspire both, depending on what is published. The world is not a perfect place to live, bad things are ought to happen. But the media should take the responsibility of creating awareness for fighting the evils , and not spice up or manipulate the facts for their selfish purposes. The sole objective of media is social awareness and supporting the truth, this principle should be followed by every news channel or newspaper.
ajit88rai   
Jan 24, 2011
Writing Feedback / emergency money; spend your earned money immediately or save it for future ? [10]

-google the quotes my friend...there are plenty. you search one quote every time you write an essay and you will then have a collection of quotes for various ideas....

-Grammar is something which comes automatically by practice and more practice. just try to read novels or any newspaper and it will surely help you. i would suggest you a good book for english-

english grammar-by wren n martin
word power made easy- norman lewis..

these two books are awesome and once u master any of them, i bet your english will improve exponentially..

all the best and cheers :)
ajit88rai   
Jan 25, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS-visitor/host? who should adapt for cultural differences [10]

topic-

SOME PEOPLE believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

answer-

Tourism industry has taken a big leap in the last few years. People visit different countries during vacations and also for official purposes. When an individual visits another country, sometimes cultural differences arise between them and the localites. It is said that the visitor must respect the local customs, while others debate that the host country should have some tolerance for cultural differences. However, its the moral duty of a visitor to change themselves according to the territory and culture they are visiting.

Host country most of the times welcome their guests with a big smile. Sometimes a foreign national might not be acquainted with the local customs and can make mistakes. When a host country welcomes any guest, they should also have the guts to forgive unintentional mistakes. For example, a lot of tourists come to visit the Golden Temple (India). It is a custom to cover the head inside the premises. If by chance, a foreigner doesn't covers his/her's , the local people should not feel offended and instead, should tell that foreigner the importance of covering the head. A host should show the required hospitality and enlighten the visitors about their customs and traditions.

However, the responsibility of the visitors should be greater than that of the host. When visitors go in foreign countries, they should adapt themselves according to the needs. They should be prepared , beforehand, not to hurt the sentiments of the locals. A country welcomes guests to promote cultural exchange, not to be insulted or having their culture polluted. When a visitor is visiting a country, they should read about the customs, traditions and other rules of that country and be prepared . For instance, some tourists go to western countries and throw their garbage anywhere on the streets or spit anywhere. This kind of behaviour is unacceptable. A visitor has no right to break the rules of a host country.

Unfortunately, the cultural differences result in clashes sometimes. It is the responsibility of both, hosts and visitors, to adapt themselves. However, a host might not be aware of the origin of the visitors. On the other hand, when a visitor can do the effort to go abroad, they should also do a little effort to learn about the region they are going. Nowadays, all the information is available on the internet. If a visitor is confused, they should humbly ask for guidance from the locals and should not behave rudely, which would hurt anyone.

Thus, I strongly believe that its the duty of a visitor to camouflage with the region. A host can tolerate minor mistakes, but intentional, disrespecting behaviours isn't acceptable.Tourism is to promote cultures and make others aware of the integrity and tradition of one's own country, not to get their cultures and sentiments , insulted and spoiled. Visitors must respect the cultures and behaviour of the host country.
ajit88rai   
Jan 25, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS-visitor/host? who should adapt for cultural differences [10]

my dear friend, them and themself is different. I have consulted this essay with a university professor from USA..he didn't mention that problem.In fact he said I used three or four wrong words which I should have avoided. I don't know how can I help you, but I would be glad if I am able to help you in any way...all the best and cheers.
ajit88rai   
Jan 25, 2011
Writing Feedback / How to deal with a gift of money ? [4]

-Sabrina, u have a lot of punctual mistakes accompanied by ur grammatical ones. I think you should read a sentence and translate it in ur native language..n see what u wrote...i started like that only...translate evry sentence in ur native language when u write n then see if it makes any sense or not...

- u have stated financial security in ur essay.u can also add another very strong point that u cn spend it buying ur books or use it for anything which would be helpful for ur career....that wud b also a good point i feel...

-rest sentence structure is not up to the mark..keep trying to improve it...Tense, agreement of the verb with the subject, n other parts of speech...do read them what they actually mean n see if u can understand them.
ajit88rai   
Jan 26, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS-is change required or not? [6]

TOPIC:-
Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

answer-

Life is full of changes.Right from the birth to attaining old age, the only thing which remains constant is - a change. Some prefer to remain in a shell and do the same things repeatedly, while others support the view that change is essential.In fact, the worst thing in life is monotony. A change is quintessential and a necessity for an individual.

Right from our school days,one thing we learn is -practice makes a man perfect. This approach is excellent for attaining expertise in a field.Consistency is a trait desired by many.For instance-Curie couples would had never found radium , if they were not consistent and focussed to extract a small possible quantity from a high magnitude of pitch blende. But what after one attains expertise or reaches the goal? Everyone need to move on and find a new goal, a change to live the life.

A wise man once said, "Not all people live the life, mostly just exist". A change is important to keep people interested, excited and focussed. The mind will get bored and saturated if one keeps doing the same things repeatedly. Change is really important to keep the brain working and interested. When one gets bored, any task seems like a burden. A burden is never desired by anyone and hence, mistakes are bound to occur.

Nevertheless, change is really important to learn about life and to respond to different situations.In life, an individual will not face the same situations, again and again. If a student is taught same book of history repeatedly,throughout the school life, will he/she learn anything new? No.Change helps to enhance knowledge. Without a change, one's ability will be very limited , which would be a disadvantage in this modern world. For example, modern companies wish to hire an individual who is a MBA with an engineering degree. This approach will add versatility and the individual would be able to do the work of both, a manager and a technician.

A common belief is that, ' a rolling stone gathers no moss'. This is true for people who don't want to work and look for easier alternatives.Frequent changes don't help in the long run. A change is necessary, but only at it's optimum time.

Thus , I personally believe that life is all about exploring new horizons and experiencing new things. Monotonous life becomes a burden. In life, change is essential for facing new challenges and not lagging behind due to fear.
ajit88rai   
Jan 26, 2011
Writing Feedback / emergency money; spend your earned money immediately or save it for future ? [10]

-Hey Sabrina, try to finish Norman Lewis book. It has all you need to have an excellent grammar. Just take one step at a time. This book will help you immensely for increasing your vocabulary and understand sentence structures.

-By the way, I have posted a new essay. Do give your reviews.

Thanks and cheers,
all the best.
Ajit
ajit88rai   
Jan 26, 2011
Writing Feedback / How to deal with a gift of money ? [4]

SPELLING MISTAKES-
Imaging - IMAGINING (both spellings are write, but imaging is a wrong usage here. )
jewelry, jewerly-JEWELLERY
unexpctted- UNEXPECTED
knowlegable- KNOWLEDGEABLE
affort- AFFORD

PUNCTUATION MISTAKES-
-First of all. my mother always tell me that don't spend your money frivolously, so the first thing I want to do is to put aside a percentage of it in bank

(First of all, my mother always tells me that don't spend your money frivolously, so the first thing I want to do is to put aside a percentage of it in the bank)

-saving moneyguarantees (saving money guarantees)

-For example, When disaster strikes, like a sudden illness occurs in the family, having money in hands can mean the difference between life and death.(Dont start a word with capital letter after a comma, as u did in ur sentence -For example, When....)

-I would prefer to go hiking in a mountain small village or a small unknown town which has different living custom from the city where I lived.-----TO long sentence. dont write like that. sentence structure is ruined because of this.

- SENTENCE STRUCTURE
the number of mistakes in sentence structure is a little more than expected from you my friend.A small mistake can be neglected, but there are a lot of them here.re-read the whole essay and translate it in your native language.

- CONCEPT OF ESSAY
dont give excessive examples. there are way too many examples in your essay. moreover , maybe u shud write ur topic/question of the essay here. that would make it easy for anyone to understand what is asked n how have u replied to it.

PRACTICE the book i told u about,,,,,,i m sure u will be able to understand what i exactly mean to tell u.

enjoy, cheers n keep working....
all the best
Ajit
ajit88rai   
Jan 26, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS-is change required or not? [6]

- Well Sabrina, I know example needs to be given, but there is also a limit. I cant keep giving examples for all the points states...else it wud become a thesis instead of an essay...my word count for this essay is already 418...which is 168 words more than the minimum limit...

-thanks for praising that line. I hope u liked the essay and any further advices would be great...since u r online right now..u can contact me on my chat ids/email to get anymore help.This website is really great and helps a lot, but I think we both can exchange our essays daily n give ideas...i already mail my essays to 5 more frnds who are also preparing for this.

- feel free to ask anytime for any help related to this. i am always working on my writing skills online....thanks and enjoy
ajit88rai   
Jan 26, 2011
Research Papers / The death penalty serve as a deterrent to crime? - research paper guideline [8]

have a look at this essay Deana..u will get a rough idea.Moreover do research about death penalties in Saudi arabia n other middle east countries where there are strict rules for such thing...n also look about nations which dont support death penalty...u will get ample material on google.
ajit88rai   
Jan 28, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS-should universities accept equal number of males/females or not? [4]

topic-
Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Education is important for the development of the world. Its a debatable issue whether universities should accept equal number of males and females in a course or not. However, since both genders are equally important, both must be given equal opportunities. Universities must admit both in equal numbers, depending on their choices.

Right to education is a basic human right of both, males and females. The whole world aims for women empowerment, and to achieve this, females should be given equal opportunities as males. When universities will accept them in equal number, both genders will be able to nurture their talent and a healthy competitive environment will develop.

Co-education helps both genders to gel well with each other. It helps them how to behave and cooperate and work together. For example, students studying in boy's colleges do not generally know how to talk to a female or behave in front of them. On the other hand, females studying in girl's colleges are too shy to face boys. Co-education will help to eradicate this kind of demerit in both. Universities giving both genders equal opportunities, will prepare then for future challenges and will help in the long run.

Unfortunately, some male chauvinists think that women are incapable in particular fields, like maths, mechanical engineering, defence etc. This kind of gender biased approach is detrimental for the development of the society. Time and again, women have proved their mettle in every field. Women like Margaret Thatcher, Indira Gandhi, Mari Curie etc., are symbols of women's intelligence and skills.

Thus, I firmly believe that both genders have equal rights and universities should accept them in equal numbers. Equality in education will help in development of the society.Both genders are the fulcrum of the society and none of them is superior or inferior. Choice of course should be the discretion of the student and their merit, irrespective of the gender. Educational rights must be given to both genders.
ajit88rai   
Jan 28, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS-is change required or not? [6]

thanks Raj...i will keep this thing in mind...pls do review my other essays...only 14 days left in my exam.
ajit88rai   
Jan 28, 2011
Writing Feedback / Does advertising encourages us to buy products that we really do need? [6]

-personally, i think that you need to give more strong points.In conclusion , u havent given any particular opinion.u are supporting both the views in conclusion too...i have also written an essay on the same topic n every argumentative essay asks u to take one stand-either for or against.

- In the intro para, u really dont need to right the last line.write lines which have an impact on ur essay.dont try to cover the word count with unnecessary essay...and dont be too judgmental...like u said-stupid and useless products...well the product which u think is stupid might be very useful to some other person.

-have a look at this essay i wrote. any suggestion to make it better is welcome.

REMOVED
ajit88rai   
Jan 28, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS-computers..use,future prospects and over-dependence. [5]

question-
We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

answer-

Computer-a device which has given a whole new dimension to the human life. Ever since Charles Babbage (know as "Father of computers") invented computers, its development never had a pause. The whole world is dependent on computers, without which, the world will go back hundreds of years.

In the modern world, computers are used everywhere. Right from flying planes to sending a small document, computers are needed. They are used in space programmes , wars, hospitals, schools and so on. Computers have made human life more easy, convenient and lightning fast. For example, in earlier days , if one had to send a message to someone in other country, it used to take months. But today, it can be sent in few minutes by typing a email and few clicks. Computers provide speed, increase efficiency, accuracy, precision, help to increase productivity and other countless benefits are provided by it.

Moreover, future prospects of computers are very bright. From a computer as big as a room, it has now been minimized to the size of a palm. Nanotechnology is working to make computers to the order of microscopic levels. Research on making computerised drone soldiers (unmanned computer controlled) is going on. There is no end to the evolution of computers.

However, everything has pros and cons. Computers have made humans over-dependent. Virus programs, privacy breach, leak of confidential documents, cyber attacks, identity theft, frauds etc. are some of its demerits, from a countless list. Computers expose children to vulgar materials. They have even invaded mental health of humans, for example , FAD (Facebook Addiction Disorder- excessive use of social networking website Facebook). Computers have intruded our lives to the effect that a satellite can peep into our homes and privates lives. The recent case of Wikileaks , leaking confidential data is an example of how computers are harmful.

Nevertheless, with all the mentioned demerits, computers have provided security and sophistication too. Thus, dependence on computers is not a bad thing. However, one needs to be aware of all the pros and cons and beware of malicious things. Computer was invented for the benefit of mankind and it has fulfilled its objective. Human life today can't be imagined without computers, so not depending on them is out of question.
ajit88rai   
Jan 28, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS-is a break good or bad after high school for students? [4]

topic-

In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

answer-

Studies are an essential part of life.Some countries permit students to take a break from studies between high school and university studies, while in some countries, it is considered as waste of time. However, a break of one year is good for young people after finishing their high school.

In most education systems, a child studies continously from the age of 5 till 16 years of age. A relaxation of one year to young minds will give them a quintessential change. A continous study pressure for over 10 years makes the mind saturated and like a robot, to follow instructions. Personally, a break will give students some time to refresh their systems, by travelling or following their hobbies. Importantly, when students start their university studies after a break, they will feel fresh and full of energy to take the new challenge.

Nevertheless, during high school, many students face a dilemma to decide which stream should they major in. Working or travelling for some time, after high school, can help them to find their field of interest. It will also help them to learn professional setup by working. Financially,students can save a little money to support their university education by doing a job. Some students even utilise this time for preparation of their desired university course.

However, there are also disadvantages. A break can disturb the focus of students and prove detrimental. When students work during these breaks, the feel of money gives them an illusion that such salary is enough for them and they go in a utopia. For instance, my cousin started working in a customer care centre after high school and got distracted. When he started his university studies, he failed miserably. Students can also indulge in smoking or drinking during this time. But , the break should be an optional thing. It varies from individual to individual, how they utilise that period. A break gives students more benefits than harms.

Importantly, the sole purpose of education is to nurture a young mind and not thrust studies on them. Thus, a break should be necessarily allowed to young minds between their high school and university studies. Countries, like India, where such a break is considered a blot, should understand that young minds are delicate and they face a cut-throat competition. One year break can help young people to prepare for the challenges of life.

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