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Need help SOP - architecture [5]
[/b]The reason why I choose to study abroad is to extend my horizons, especially
in ways that will
be benificialfor my chosen major. In my opinion, Europe has
got beautiful cities with fantastic environment
s.
---This sentence is somewhat confusing---
A good management in its environment acts as a leading point in mantaining its problems integratedly.
---Do you mean a good "manager?" In this case the manager would be the "leading
person" instead of point. A manager would
deal with problems instead of maintaining them. Also what do you mean by "integratedly"? Perhaps revise this sentence to say something like this:
"A good manager acts as the leading person in dealing with problems that arise and maintaining a suitable environment."
---Maybe you should just cut this sentence out or totally rewrite it because I still don't understand how it relates to the essay---
Several cities in Malaysia have
a similar geographic
characteristics, for example Kuching and Rotterdam
are both located
near a delta
area ,
Therefor theythathave a lot of water from the river banks and
have to deal with the sea flood. Despite its geographical condition,
theNetherlandsalso has a huge
population, a problem that also occurs in Malaysia. I have never been to
the Netherlands, but a lot of people
think that
it is a good example of a country
that is capable in solving
it's own problems. I want to learn the
systems of management in
the Netherlands and Europe, including
knowing about their regional
characteristics, so when I
come back to Malaysia,
they could be implemented in my country.