chow95
Nov 25, 2012
Undergraduate / Dream the impossible dream; "Low Income family" [6]
Have you ever dared to dream the impossible dream, to try and reach the unreachable stars?
Should be, Have you ever dared to dream the impossible dream, to try to reach the unreachable stars?
Same for Even though living in a poor community you can be successful, all you need to do is try and not give up.
You should avoid the cliche "born and raised" in your second paragraph.
Have you ever dared to dream the impossible dream, to try and reach the unreachable stars?
Should be, Have you ever dared to dream the impossible dream, to try to reach the unreachable stars?
Same for Even though living in a poor community you can be successful, all you need to do is try and not give up.
You should avoid the cliche "born and raised" in your second paragraph.