Writing Feedback / TOEFL _ intelligence as the most important characteristic of a student [4]

Intelligence is one of the most important factors for students to be successful, but as I am concerned, it is not the most dominant characteristic assured profound learning and academic achievement. From my vantage point, diligence is as important as smartness. Actually, in many cases working hard can be even more beneficial than any other attitudes; because diligent students can overwhelm many problems of theirs and also they won't be despair and pursue their goals determinedly.

Firstly, I think diligent pupils can always find a way to overcome the problems even if they are not genius. On the other hand, they can solve complicated things thanks to their ability to work hard. Indeed, they can compensate their weaknesses by repetition and persistence. According to an article in the last issue of Education Journal, almost 80 percent of the best students are not among genius ones. They are just determined individuals who try to be the best and do it through working hard.

Secondly, in my opinion, diligence results in making student more optimistic and powerful. Trying students usually are self confident ones who can rely on themselves and never give up. This unique characteristic makes them potent to follow their objects and to reach the highest rate. Being hopeful is the brilliant outcome of this characteristic which has effective role to be prosperous. Indeed, success of most of the famous inventors along the history has been because of their hard trying to achieve their goals. Because of this attitude they never have been disappointed and they have gone on to obtain their goals. Hence, many of the popular scientists have not been among of very smart persons; they have been capable to work hard.

To wrap up, although intelligence can be a considerable factor for being a successful student, it is not the unique secret to triumph. Trying hard is a prominent virtue which makes pupils potent to reach their purpose, as well.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL- increasing professors' salary as an effective factor influencing educational system [5]

Although maybe it seems that increasing the salary of university professors is not a priority for improving educational system and there are other more effective solutions in order to qualify condition of universities, I think it is almost a necessity in current situation. Nowadays, professors' incomes aren't really fare and they cannot afford their life simply. Meanwhile, this condition is really disappointing for them and discourages them from pursue their noble objects. As I am concerned, it is the serious problem which can weaken teaching quality and consequently decrease student's achievements. Increasing the professors' salary let them to focus on the teaching and also encourage them to promote their teaching skills.

Firstly, low salary makes university professors work in other fields to afford their daily life investments. I know numerous professors who are active in various branches of business to provide their family. Actually, this hardship prevents them from being focused on their major duty and undoubtedly totally distracts them. Increasing their salary helps them to give up other subsidiary jobs and just concentrate on what they really should do for the better teaching.

Secondly, low income is really a discouragement which decreases professors' desires to be better and to do their best. It is so obvious that salary is the best stimulus for any worker to improve his/ her quality of work. According to the result of inquiry published in Education Magazine, almost 80% of professors in the country are not satisfied of their incomes and almost third of these dissatisfied people declared that they are completely exhausted and desperate.

To wrap up, I believe that increasing in professors' salaries can be an effective factor for enriching educational system. In other words, this solution can help professors to be more concentrated on their teaching and also encourage them to do their best.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL _ what do you prefer to be? a leader or a member of a group? [3]

Although being a member of a group usually seems much simpler task and maybe most of people prefer not to accept responsibility of being a leader, I have always been eager to be the leader of a group. I am an innovative person who always has a lot of comments for any problem and also I am reliable person and can shoulder heavy responsibilities so well.

Firstly, I never give up and I always find some responsive solutions to any problem. In hardships I have showed my special abilities and I was effective in many situations; because of these characteristics, most of my friends and my family believe in me and refer to me in their difficult situations. I have almost always been handy for them. For example, I could survive my father from a business scandal and I helped one of my friends to solve his deep problems with his family; actually, as he always mentions, I survive him from a serious psychological disaster.

Besides, I am a reliable person who bears important responsibilities. The way in which I grew up makes me a powerful person who can faces different situations and even sacrifices oneself for others. I have had various responsibilities since my childhood and I have proved my capability to be a responsible leader a lot of time. For example, in our school trips I was the unique leader of student group. I was also the most important candidate in the school council. Meanwhile, I am a successful manager in my workplace.

To sum up, I always prefer to be an effective leader instead of being a neutral member. I always have some novel suggestions to overwhelm problems and also I am always ready to accept responsibility; hence, these characteristics deserve me to be an excellent leader.

Writing Feedback / 'I feel much more safe'; Traditional house or a modern apartment building? Toefl [2]

There are many people who prefer a traditional house to a modern apartment because they feel that they can be much more free and independantindependent in a traditional house and also in their view there is nothing beautiful in a modern apartment. But as I am concerned, an apartment has numerous benefits that make nowadays' life much more easier. Actually, I undoubtedly prefer to live in an apartment because I feel more safesaferty in it and I can clean it much easier and because of these reasons I feel much more convenient and relax in it.

Firstly, modern apartment surrounded by many other houses and also crowded urban places. Therefore, Itit seems so difficult and impossible for thieves and gangs to plan for making trouble in apartment buildings. On the other hand, being surrounded by other people gives us good feeling of security. I had this experience personally and I can compare this unconsciousness feeling about being safe in a traditional house and modern apartment. As a matter of fact, I couldn't be alone with myself in my parent's house as a typical traditional house in spite of the fact that we had never violence and criminal event in our neighborhood; but I have lived in my personal apartment alone for years and I have never felt unsafe.

Secondly, modern apartment can be cleaned much easier than a traditional house. Besides modern equipments of modern apartment, I think its compact structure make it so simple to be cleaned it constantly without wasting much time. In my opinion, modern life makes us to prefer this new condition because our modern life iswe are too busy to spend considerable time only for cleaning our house. I remember that cleaning my paternal traditional house was a complicated project. itIt was such a heavy work that my mother couldn't afford it by herself and we had a few servants for this.

To sum up, I think modern apartment, at least for me, is the better choice. Because I feel much more safesafer in it and I can simply clean it in spite of my busy life.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL _ Should high school students be made wear uniform or not? [5]

Determining unique uniform for high school students can make them more concentrated on lessons and prevent them to waste their time for what they wear. However, in my view, to allow high school students to wear what they want is more beneficial. This freedom is necessary for juvenile pupils and also is the opportunity for them to practice to decide for their own life.

Firstly, I believe it is not fair to force juveniles to wear what we choose for them. One of the most important features of people in this period of life is desire to be special and unique in their appearance. Therefore, make them wear similar repetitive uniform can be so annoying for them. According to the researches published in Psychology Journal, based on the vast survey among 70 high schools of America, what to wear is the most important subject for juveniles and it is the main way for them to represent what they really want. When I was a high school student, wearing unique suit was the most unpleasant aspect of school for me. I remember that I and my friends always tried to be different in any way we could and school uniform was a big obstacle.

Secondly, as I am concerned, to decide about our personal clothing is the primary factor in the process of becoming mature and independent. So, we should let juveniles have this experience to practice for making their independent personality. Actually, it can be a chance for them to think about their desires and needs, and to decide by themselves. Even I think students can know themselves better through this right of choice. In addition, thanks to this freedom parents and teachers can understand juveniles much better and deeper. Hence, this can be an indirect way to distinguish real needs of teenagers.

To sum up, I think to permit students to be free in selection of their school suits is essential for high school students and also can be an appropriate chance for them to have an experience to decide by their owns. As a matter of fact, sometimes to let pupils be free can be more effective and instructive for them. In other words, giving students the opportunity to decide about themselves can be a method of instruction.

Writing Feedback / Studying in a group has a lot of advantages that can promote learning process [4]

Although most people prefer to study alone to be more concentrated on lesson topics, I think studying in a group has a lot of advantages that can promote learning process. Therefore, as I am concerned, studying with friends can be much more effective. This way of learning provides some special opportunity for interaction with others and also being corrected.

Firstly, I believe that studying in a group of friends makes it possible to benefit from others' view to comprehend different issues of lessons. To have interaction with people of different abilities is beneficial to promote our understanding and to find better solutions for problems. I remember my last exam on the mathematics examination when I and two of my friends decided to practice for the exam together. The result of the experience was brilliant because any of us could suggest some solutions to solve the equations and problems much sooner and even in a simpler way.

Secondly, another considerable advantage of studying in a group is that we can be informed of our mistakes. When we study alone, we can hardly find out our misunderstandings by ourselves, but in a group we are controlled by others constantly, and it can be unique opportunity to conceive our weaknesses. In addition, in a group we have chances to ask our questions and to solve our problems. Any member of group has some abilities and also inabilities which can be improved by others' guidance. According to the scientific research published in the last issue of Education Journal, almost 80% of our unconscious mistakes can be revealed in a group study.

To sum up, I think having interaction with other member of a study group and also the opportunity to understand our inabilities and mistakes provided by others' guidance are undeniable benefits of studying and practicing as a group. In my opinion, this way of learning helps us to overwhelm our limitations much more easily.