Writing Feedback / Competition improve students achievements - show research in Indonesia [2]

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operative rather than compete become more useful adults.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, life is becoming more and more competitive. Some people argue that children have to be taught a sense of competition in that it leads them to be more ready facing their future and motivates them to increase their achievement in the school. However, others believe that cooperative learning is more essential than competition method since people are becoming more individualistic than before.

Several people might say that competition brings children to be more prepare for facing their future. For example, they will compete with other people for taking a job or attending university when they adult. As a result, children should be more familiar with the sense of competition.

In addition, competition in the school encourages children for improving their achievement. Result shows that by the implementation of curriculum based competition in Indonesia, there are improvement of students achievement. It thus clear that competition is important.

However, how to be cooperative with other people is the necessary of people as human being in this modern era. As such, it is not uncommon when people prefer to think themselves instead of the social needs, Statistics describe people are becoming more apathetic and individualistic in many countries especially in developed country. They are unlikely to think other people as a result of competition atmosphere that leads them just think about their selves. There is no doubt how to be good member in society and cooperative with other people is more essential to be taught for children.

The aforementioned evidence shows that even though competition encourages children to be more prepare for their future and improving their achievement, cooperative learning is more necessary for children. I personally believe that children have to be taught how to live in the society.

Writing Feedback / Sport facility areas do not have much influences in public health. [2]

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of public facilities. Others, however, argue that this would have a little effect on public health and other measures are required.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Health is very essential for all people. Some people argue that sport facilities exert a significant influence in public health since it can make people to be easy doing some exercise by the appearance of public sports area and it attracts people to do exercise. However, others argue that this would have a little influence on public health, inasmuch as there are many other causes that affect people health. I personally believe that government should be more focus on the hygiene of foods in markets.

Several people might say that the number of sport facilities bring people to be easier accessing the public sport area. For example, by the construction of public football park, people do not have to rent the park for playing. As a result, they tend to do exercise more and more.

In addition, the improvement of public sport infrastructure can appeal people to do exercise such as jogging. Result shows that people who live near the public sport area do more exercise than people far from public sport facilities. It thus clear that it can increase people health as a result of their habit.

However, It just have less effect on public health. This is because there are many other factors that affect people health like foods, air quality, and lifestyle. Statistic reveals that there are no significant differences between people who live in place that has many public sport area and people who live place that has not any. It shows the establishment of public sport facilities do not have much effect on people health. There is no doubt that it is not appropriate way to improve public health.

The aforementioned evidence shows that although public sports area lead people to be easier doing some exercise, it does not have much influences in public health. I personally believe that other measures are needed such as supervising meals in market.

Writing Feedback / Learning how to be a good member in society through the (obligatory?) community service program [3]

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children).

To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Community service learning is very essential for students. Some people believe that it should be to become a compulsory part of high school curriculum so that student can learn how to be a good member in society and it is very helpful for community. However, I personally argue that unpaid community service program should not to be a compulsory subject inasmuch as this is social activity that student can do it everyday.

I would argue that by implementing the unpaid public service, students are more likely to know how to live in society. This is because they learn to service the community necessity. As an obvious example, one of the project on this program is to observe environment issues around the community. As a result, students know how to make environment be better.

In addition, society tend to be happy by the appearance of this subject. For example, bulid some infrastructures or cleaning around public spaces such as park or masjid led society to appreciate in this activities. It is thus clear that unpaid society service is very helpful for community.

On the other hand, this program does not have to be a compulsory subject. As such, student can do this activity everyday and has become on of the major activity in society. Taking Indonesia as an example, teenagers are demanded to join in social activity such as cleaning the road around their home every Sunday. It is becoming a culture in Indonesia where people work together in Sunday morning to clean environment around their live. There is no doubt that it should not to be a compulsory subject.

The aforementioned evidence shows that although this program led student to learn in social life and very useful for society, it should not to be a compulsory subject because it must be done every day. I personally argue that i t depends on individual willing where people should not to be demanded joining the program.

Writing Feedback / This illustrates how much of goods were distributed in the UK from 1974 to 2004 [2]

This line graph illustrates how goods distributed in the UK using four different kinds of transport between 1974 and 2004, measured in million tonnes. Overall, it can be seen that people are more likely to use road transportation to distribute goods. Likewise, the figures of road, water and pipeline transportation record a gradual increase, except the rail transport. If compared to all means of transport, road transportation experiences the highest tonnes in delivering goods during the period.

At a glance, the trend of road transportation use showed a significant rise from 1974 to 1986. On the other hand, 1974 to 1986 witnessed a decrease in the number of goods transported using rail transportation. It was around 40-to-30 million tonnes goods distributed using rail transportation, which was a fall during the first 12-year period. At the same period, statistic described an increase in the number of goods distributed through pipeline and water transportation.

Turning to the data for goods distribution using road transportation increased between 1990 and 2002 and peaked at approximately 95 million tonnes. 1990 to 2002 saw an increase in the number of water transportation use standing at 65 million tonnes. The number of goods distributed using pipeline rose by some 21 million tonnes in the last 16-year period . Interestingly, even though there was a fluctuation in the rail transportation use, there were about 40-to-40 goods distributed over the period (from 1974 to 2002), which means the number remained same in the beginning and the last period.

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Writing Feedback / Eco-hybrid cars project to solve pollution and traffic problems. [2]

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
What other measures do you think might be effective?

Nowadays, congestion and pollution are the main problems in several cities. Some people think that raising price of petrol can be an alternative. This policy can persuade people changing their daily travel from private car to public transport that can reduce heavy vehicle and pollution. Whereas, others believe that it can affect societies' economy. In my point of view, eco-hybrid should be developed to solve these cases.

I would argue that increasing price of petrol can make people tend to use the public transport than private car. This is because they think that traveling by private car might spend much money. As an obvious example, in Indonesia, when the policy was decided, the number of car on the road decreased. As a result, traffic flow and pollution decline caused of the petrol cost improvement.

On the other hand, increasing price of petrol exert an influence in communities' financial since many goods will rise due to the increasing price of petrol. Statistic shows this decision can improve the number of poor people. It is thus clear that it gives drawback for people's economy.

The solution for this problem is eco-hybrid development. As such, it does not need fossil fuel as power source. Result of the research shows that electric car would be an alternative solution for reducing traffic jam and pollution. It can be seen that this invention would change in depending on car and motorcycle. There is no doubt that eco-hybrid is appropriate way in these difficulties.

The aforementioned evidence shows that even though increasing petrol's price can reduce pollution and traffic jam, it brings demetit in financial matter. I personally argue that eco-hybrid project can solve this problem.

Writing Feedback / Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed [NEW]

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer.

What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

Several universities' curriculum provide knowledge and vocational training for student to face job challenge. Some people agree that it can lead students to be more prepare in work place atmosphere. However, I personally believe that university should offer knowledge according to students sake instead of employers' necessity.

I would argue that knowledge and skill are needed for students to be ready for working in companies. For example, social grace, communication, managing people and accounting are essential for school leaver or fresh graduate to find a job. As a result, they have to learn particular skill in the university or school.

In addition, employee become more professional in working. Result shows that 60 % of professional workers have studied in universities that had been acquired the knowledge and skill training. It thus clear that university should offer building skill knowledge in order to make them to be more professional in term of working.

On the other hand, universities do not have to focus on the companies needs. College institution should develop students to be a great future leader. As an obvious example, one of the institution in Indonesia namely LPDP provides scholarships for many students in order to make them to be a pioneer in country development. It gives an opportunity for the next generation studying in the highly education to prepare them to be the next nation's leader. There is no doubt that students are nation's asset, so that university must provide the knowledge for students' sake rather than for companies needs.

The aforementioned evidence shows that although vocational training in universities can make students to be more prepared and professional, it necessary to keep in mind that students should to be thought how to be a leader instead of be follower. I recommend for government to be more concentrate as the students' potential.

Writing Feedback / There are some people in this world who earn a billion dollar per year [2]

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

Sports professionals such as football player can earn a billion dollar per year. Some people think that it is too much for their profession. They also think that their job is easier than other jobs. However, I personally believe that it is suitable for their qualities.

I would argue that many professional players earn greater money than other workers such as professional designer. Take Cristiano Ronaldo as an example, he earns over a billion dollar per year as football player in Spain. It is very unfair where some professional workers such as scientist or designer just earn under a million dollar per year.

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Writing Feedback / I believe that host country must welcome an other behavior of foreign visitors. [NEW]

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences.

Discuss both these views and give you own opinion.

Nowadays, people are more likely to travel in foreign country and experience other cultures. While Some people argue that visitors have to follow and respect to the local customs, I personally believe that host country must welcome with other behavior.

I would argue that tourists should learn and respect the rule of local country. As an obvious example, In Indonesia, There are rules that have to be followed by all people including visitors such as wearing clothes that is not vulgar. The tourist who do not follow the culture will be may get some problems.

In addition, local people should preserve their culture by maintaining from tourists' culture influences. Result shows that people these days tend to assimilate other customs that can lose their local identity. Introducing local culture is better than embrace the other customs.

However, cultural differences among countries is inevitable over recent times. This is because many celebrations that include many countries over the world. For example, World Cup, almost all countries join in this celebration sports. As a result, there will be various cultures group in the competition. Host country must welcome other behavior as visitors tend to be hard to understand indigenous customs. There is no doubt that host country have to be open with other behavior.

The aforementioned evidence shows that although visitors must embrace host culture, welcoming different culture is needed in particular party. I personally be more wise to open difference cultures.

Writing Feedback / Scholar-leavers tend to be less focus on their subject - work or travel for a year between studying? [3]

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Nowadays, many young people decide to work or travel for a year between finishing school and starting study at university. Some people believe that this trend enable young people to earn much money and improve their language skills. However, I personally believe that scholar-leavers tend to be less focus on their subject.

The first merit of students who work before attending at university is that they can earn much money to pay college tuition. For example, they can work as retailers, marketers or waiter to earn a lot of money. It is evident that this trend offer benefit for young people.

In addition, traveling can improve students' language skills. As an obvious example, students who travel to foreign country can learn other language such as English. It is thus clear that this trend improves students' knowledge in some language.

On the other hand, the negative side of this trend leads people to be not focus for their subjects at university that they choose. This is because they are more likely to enjoy their work or travel than to study to prepare their learning at university. Result shows that 85 % of students in Conga are not ready to face in college learning. As a result, they feel difficult to follow learning process. There is no doubt that young people who prefer to take a job or go to foreign country that spend time about a year between school-leaver and student of university tend to be more confuse with their school subject when they were studying at university.

The aforementioned evidence shows that although it can improve their language skills and earn much money, they will not ready to face university learning process. Therefore, I personally believe that young people should study more about subjects that they want

Scholarship / The products sold are not based on community needs - the companies don't care about what people wish [3]

Today, the high sales popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, advertisement plays an important role in persuading people to buy the goods. Several people believe that advertisement influences the high sales due to the attraction of creative advertisement and company's brand. However, I personally argue that it is not the necessity of societies for what they sell.

I would argue that attractive advertisement leads people to purchase the goods. Result shows that there are correlation between the creativity of advertisement and people interest in some products. It is evident to say that advertising is the main factor for high sales of popular consumer.

In addition, brand of product attracts people to select the products. For example, Apple brand as the high popular brand of sophisticated technology has succeeded to appeal people for buying its products even though it is too expensive than other brands. It is thus clear that brand can affect sales rate.

On the other hand, the product that are sold is not real needs of consumers. There are many products produced by popular company which is not consider in people's willing. As an obvious example, Woles company launches new product of ice cream to market over the world. Although advertisement of the product is very interesting, some people think that such ice cream is not really delicious. There is no doubt that several popular companies just focus on the power of advertising.

The aforementioned evidence shows that even though awesome advertisement and well-known brand interest people to shopping, the products sold are not based on community needs. I strongly recommend that companies should more care about people needs instead of intriguing adverts.

Writing Feedback / Expenditure and amount of consumption on fast food in Britain during twenty years (the last century) [2]

The charts illustrate the expenditure on fast food by earning level group in pence per person per week and consumption of fast food in grammes between 1970 to 1990 in Britain. Overall it can be seen that fish and chips are the most popular for people under average level income and the highest proportion that people consume in the beginning of the period. On the other hand Hamburger is extremely trend of rich people and average income and the highest consumption on the end of period.

At first glance it is evident, with the exception of the bar chart, people with the high income spend less money to buy fish and chips than hamburger and pizza. In contrast, people who earn money under average income are more likely to purchase fish and chips. Whilst rich people spend their money about 45 pence per week to buy hamburger, poor person only spend some 15 pence per week. It means people with the high salaries spend money three times as much as poor people to buy hamburger. People tend to spend less money to buy pizza in average and low level income.

Turning to the graph line, in 1990, the most popular on fast food consumption was fish and chips approximately 200 grammes, while hamburger and pizza only be consumed below 100 grammes. However, there was an increase in the amount of fast food consumption of pizza and hamburger over the period. On the other hand, from 1970 to 1990 witnessed a dramatic fall in fish and chips consumption.

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Writing Feedback / Subjects and lesson contents are decided by the authorities or central government [NEW]

Nowadays, subjects and lesson contents are decided by the authorities or central government. Many people suggest that teachers should decide those contents themselves. To what extend do u agree or disagree?

Recently, government has the main role in deciding all education stuff. Some people believe that is their obligation and it is really hard to make national standard unless lesson contents are deciding by authorities. However, I personally argue that teacher is the one who knows what the subject lesson that their students can learn based on the infrastructure which are provided.

The first reason why government should decide the subject contents is because generally they hold full responsibility of the education system. For example, ministry of education in Indonesia is the one who arrange the syllabus and student's books. It is thus clear that all education stuff should be organized by government.

In addition, national examination standard should be relevant to the content of subject. Taking national examination in Indonesia as an example, the questions of this exam have to be related to syllabus that have been made by government. If lesson content is decided by teachers, there will be different contents of learning among the school that make confusion how to make national examination.

On the other hand, there are some factors that make several students cannot understand the content of lesson such as facilities in laboratory, teacher's ability and so on. That is why teacher is the one who has to decide the learning content because not all schools have the infrastructures that support the learning process. For instance, in physics subject, according to the subject content that are arranged by government , students should understand the interference of light process, while some schools do not have the optical instrument as the main matter in the learning. It is the contradiction where teachers are demanded teaching based on the lesson content that had be made by government with the facilities which are provided. There is no doubt that lesson contents should be invaded by teachers.

The aforementioned evidence shows that although deciding subject content is the obligation of authorities and the only one way to implement the national examination, government should not generalize the contents of subject due to the availability of infrastructure in schools is not equal in some countries. I strongly recommended for government to treat alike for all schools before deciding the lesson content.

Writing Feedback / Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. [2]

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.
To what extent do you agree and disagree

Some universities do not have equal proportions of boys and ladies in all major. Several people believe that university must accept the balanced number of female and male school leavers due to the expectation that will be a discrimination among the both sexes and students mentality which are minority will be broken. However, I personally believe that it is very difficult for universities to accept the equal numbers of both sexes because there are different interesting of each gender in some objects.

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Writing Feedback / Lower crime rate and bigger nation's income are the main benefits of employment non working people. [2]

Nowadays, there is an increase in jobless rate in some countries. While some people believe that it can reduce a crime and improve nation's income, others argue that companies cannot pay the employer's payment due to a rise of staff member. I personally believe that it is not good idea.

The first positive of making unemployed take a job is how it can reduce a crime rate. Result shows that almost all criminals are unemployed people in several countries. One of the alternatives that government can take to diminish a crime is by giving them a job.

In addition, workers can improve the nation's income because the more salaries citizens get, the more taxes commonwealths pay. For example, there are few number of unemployed in some rich nations while there are large number of jobless in some poor nations. It is thus clear that there is correlation between the number of unemployed and nation's income.

However, the negative side of making them to take a job is the increasing of labor that make employers should spend much money to pay their salaries. This is because there are many employee just have school leaver level that is not required in companies . Result of Indonesian statistic shows 80 % of unemployed people is not graduate school. It means that they do not have qualification which is needed in several corporations. As a result, they just waste the companies' finance while the quality that they produce is inappropriate with their payment.

The aforementioned evidence shows that although this can minimize the amount of crime, much money that employer must fund for worker paid. I personally believe that jobless have to have a bachelor's degree before register in a company.

Writing Feedback / Young people have a right to choose suitable profession due to their own will [3]

Recently, profession that young people would take is determined by parents. While some people believe that it is because parents tend to have more experience than their children and they have responsibility for their children future, I personally believe that young people have a right to choose their profession due to their willing....

Writing Feedback / Ethic and doing business internationally [2]

Ethic and doing business internationally

There are some different cultures for doing business all over the world. For example, the difference between Japanese and American as saying "no". Japanese business executive rarely say "no", they tend to take a long discussion until their colleagues realize that the answer is truly negative. On the other hand, American would say "no" quickly because they think it is more effective.

Another part of ethical differences is about personal distance that means how closed people stand to each other when they talking especially for negotiation. Japanese and Latin American are more likely standing close together to equate their agreement. In contrast, American do not want to be closed when they are talking about business with other people, American tend to back away when Japanese try to be close.

In addition to the differences area of culture in Japan and America is about business cards. Japanese tend to be more careful in exchanging business card than American tend to collect business card first, then they will check again when arrive in the office. While Japanese need about 15 minutes to study and understanding the card, American just spend two or three seconds to look at the card.

Bribery, as one of the differences culture, has various view in some countries. Bribery in the United states is illegal and people who offer or accept bribery are judged as criminal and can be jailed. Another country such as Spain, most of people believe that bribery as part of business even though they know it is illegal. On the other hand, In Germany, bribe have to pay tax from their income. While bribery is illegal in some countries, bribery is necessary extend for dealing business organization especially for connection between personal and government in Russia.

To handle this ethical issues, companies make some alternatives such as a "code of ethics" in order to eliminate confusion that may are or not acceptable in particular organization. Another one, Whistle-blower, a person who tells someone in authority about something illegal, protects employee from discrimination. In addition, employee training, one of the solution of this problem, educate employee about behavior which is acceptable in particular company. Not only those, operate multicultural is very essential to tackle this problem where people think global, act local.

Writing Feedback / Sophisticated technology and better telecommunication makes people's life more comfortable today [2]

Life now is better than it was 100 years ago.

Nowadays, life has become better than it was one century ago. While some people argue that the appearance of a state-of-the-art technology and telecommunication lead people to be more convenience, I personally believe that atmosphere become hotter than several years ago due to global warming.

I would argue that sophisticated technology makes people these days to be easier doing their work than it was 100 years ago. For instances, the invention of washing machine is very helpful for housewife to do their household activity. As a result, the machine has changed the housewife role that make them have much leisure time.

Another cause that makes life to be better is how telecommunication such as mobile phone handing out easiness for people to keep in touch with their relatives. Result shows that mobile phone is the most popular for communicating over recent years. In the past, people send their massages by using bird that needs very long time.

However, the negative side of this development is about the increase of pollution that is the main factor in global warming. This is because there is a rise in the number of fossil fuel users that produce a much of gas emission. Result shows that the amount of pollution in 2013 was nine times as much as in 1914 caused of gas emission. All of this point out that this case leads global warming that increases in temperature of atmosphere. It is thus clear that global warming makes people becoming more unpleasant due to the high of temperature that can also to be the cause of disaster such as melting of ice at North Pole.

The aforementioned evidence shows that although advance technology and telecommunication make our life to be better than before, atmosphere is becoming hotter than before. I am having doubt that life now is better than it was in nineteenth centuries.