Writing Feedback / Computer game destroys traditional game [3]

Nowadays, children play computer games for long hours and they do not play old traditional games.
What do you think is the reason? Do you think this influences children in a good or a bad way?

Technology provided some application such game plays an indispensable part of way people life today. It tends to manipulate children as the primary target for consuming games and declines traditional-game trend due to addictive factor which is obtained from games. While attractive appearance is of magnetism more for young generation, less physical activity causing obesity and abnormal high blood pressure can be negative development.

It is inevitable that games online attracts considerable amount of attention because players who are more likely to complete the games have to concentrate for understanding game pattern. When it comes to traditional games, it has the same role respectively and encourages bored emotion for playing more than once. A 2013 Macquarie study has shown that computer game users in Tokyo, Japan devote their time to toy with computer as the latest trend for more than 10 hours per day and this drives them being isolated in front of their modern toys and far from social relationship in environment, since computer always outlays the latest trend nearly every week. Consequently, young people tend to be addiction for playing computer. It is clear that old traditional as the least trend is going to be left behind.

In positive side, computer games provided visual animation screen may be able to develop their level of imagination and can be done easily without any endeavors. Besides that, it is true that children would not be old-fashioned and up to date with the latest trends. However, it is undeniable that negative development of computer games can neglect social activities and attract to unhealthy lifestyle. It affects a rise of children obesity and hypertension rate in early age due to less exercise. Therefore, it is believed that drawbacks outweigh the benefits for children.

The aforementioned evidence examines that technology games on computer forcing children to play over time can destroy traditional game trends due to outstanding screen. While improving imagination level and trendsetter are going to expand children's brain, addictive and less exercise drive to dire impact for their health. It is imperative that youngsters have to manage their time in term of preventing disease, do some exercise by playing traditional games and socialize with the environment.

Writing Feedback / Students need enough time for adaptation in a new environment abroad [5]

In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunities to study abroad.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

As the world is changing, high school students are more likely to continue their education in international university compared to in the past in which people preferred to study in local campus. While this is completely favorable for young generation, since experiences and facilities in other countries bring positive development, it is undeniable that culture shock in some areas introduces the dire effects.

Youngster studying abroad may able to reach new experiences and better apparatus so as to support their subject easily due to references in the university. A 2010 La Trobe study evidence examines that new backgrounds and great study supports encourage focus more in specific subject area. This is because they are able to obtain a range of insights from new environment and better study material. In consequence, modern students tend to think more flexible supported some sources and this can be the primary advantages of overseas study.

Conversely, this does not mean studying in other countries totally profitable, since culture shock as the primary problem for students. First of all, it is inevitable that language barrier is of communicating in foreign countries. Some of the students have to devote a considerable amount of time to adapt with that language which can interrupt their studies. Also, diet types in each country have different way particularly in western nation tended to consume junk food. Therefore, it is hard for the new comer eating unhealthy food which is unsuitable with their taste.

The aforementioned evidence examines that the change of the way students study from the past to present is caused by education improvement attracting students to study abroad. New adventure and endorsement can be the benefits, whilst language and food might be dangerous problem in the other countries. It is imperative that students have to learn culture and environment of destination before they go to abroad due to preventing long time adaptation.

Writing Feedback / Internet is a good way to communicate or a bad place of information source [2]

It is generally believe that the internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Online communication is the main issue in society these days. As such, it dues to the improvement of modern technology, interaction among people by internet such social media has already remained a remarkable widespread phenomenon. Although it is sometimes argued as an incorrect way to obtain the information, I personally convince that the internet enables to create strong communication in human life and people have to pay much more attention before accepting new information from online media.

It is undeniable that the majority of people particularly young generation in short or long distance is keen on communicating online one another. A research study has examined that nearly 90percent of people who live in Indonesia connect to internet in order to chat with their families or friends every day, and Indonesia is also attracted by figures which are provided by several social Medias beside fast communication. Consequently, online communication enables to treat boring and long distance interaction.

Conversely, many websites and blogs have not been accumulated seriously, what stands out from this case is the information from the internet can be worse for users without knowing the truth. An obvious example that could be taken for this case is the university students who are creating their thesis, they sometimes have to rewrite their paper due to copying inaccurate data from the internet. The reason why it could be happened is that the internet is open-source system in which worldwide people are of capability to post their own opinions which are not checked scientifically. So, their graduations, ironically, may be able to be delayed a year or over. As a result, the internet may have no beneficial effect in information at all.

The aforementioned evidence examines that online communication can be the best place of connecting people one another. However, people should not achieve the information directly, they have to examine the data by searching other references such books.

Writing Feedback / Air leaks and heat loss in houses [3]

The diagram gives information the way how air leaks into and out of the house, causing loss of heat and waste of energy. At first glance, it is important to note that due to the circulation of air which changes in several rooms, a considerable amount of heat and energy are lost and wasted.

In house, a great deal of air comes out through the ceiling on the first floor, followed by turning out into the space of roof. Air escapes through attic hatch on entrance in the middle room and also through two recessed lights which are located above kitchen and bathroom.

Moving to a more detailed analysis, entire of air into the house is from several parts. It comes through windows and doors into rooms in the house. Subsequently, it comes through the vents which have been installed in several part such as kitchen vent and dryer vent.

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Writing Feedback / Responsibility for helping poorer nations should also cover education of their society [3]

Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas.

To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Over the last few decades, nearly all countries in the earth are separated from two different types, rich and poor. Poorer nations have short of education, malnutrition and weak commerce, whereas developed countries don't have. Some individuals, however, believe that poor countries should be supported by rich countries due to humanity. Personally, I agree with this opinion in order to wane of crisis rates and develop those countries even though this, sometimes, renders a big negative effect.

To begin with, wealthy countries have obligation to aid less fortune countries, it is not about morality but how to build togetherness in this world in which everyone has the same position as the others. Subsequently, richer nations should not only assist good that are finished easily but they should also educate them how to maintain their own problems. As such, both inexperienced and corrupt administrations, the main cause of poor countries, will disappear and the donations may be able to be received by society. In turn, developed country's hands are really needed to less fortune countries.

On the other hand, support from developed countries can be negative influence in weak countries due this encourages the poor ones addictive. So, when the assistances are stopped, they will go down once again. For a pragmatic instance, in 1969, Indonesia received a help from Economic Hit Men (EHM), organization in richer nations. Over a 15-year period, EHM dismissed the aids to Indonesia followed by becoming less fortune countries for the second time. This show the helps are not useful anymore. As a consequence, support from developed countries is not permanent in poorer nations.

To sum up, even though aids from richer nations play an indispensable role in assisting poor countries. Sometimes, this cause addicted for countries that are assisted. In my perspective, I assume that poorer nations should be helped continuously for dealing with their problems, but it should consist of educating the society with regards to keeping their countries.

Writing Feedback / The graph presents how wind turbine work and where are the appropriate positions for it [2]

The picture presents how wind turbine work and where the appropriate positions for it in order to produce electricity. At first glance, it is important to note that the power of electricity generated by turbine depends on three different locations.

To begin with, the process of turbine which is made by steel begins when the turbine blades, wood or fiberglass, is intersected by wind. Then, wind sensor as the controller manages the speed and direction, and sends this information to the main server in the house near by the turbine location. As a consequence, to support this process, the turbine is provided by generator which produces 1.5 megawatts of electricity.

The turbine is placed in three different positions. The first tower is located in the higher level of the ground which acquires the maximum of wind strengths. Compared to this turbine, one in the lower level of the sea obtains less electricity since landscape is not spoiled. Interestingly, the turbine located in domestic area generates at only 100 kilowatts of electricity.

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Writing Feedback / IELST TASK 2 : living in small community creates a wide range communication [3]

In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area.

what do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

These days, some people live in big cities where they have just a little communication with others, whilst in the past, people who lived in the small villages communicated with every person in their area. Therefore, I would argue that the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks.

On the positive side, people living in small community are easy to remember each other. This is because the number of people is not as much as in big cities, so they may be able to interact well with everyone in their regions. For instance, when there is a disaster in the village, the chief can recognize the citizens to be evacuated from one area to another area by checking his inhabitant lists. Therefore, the small community creates people to be solid one another. In addition, citizens can have a good cooperation with others such cleaning village together.

However, a negative side in the small community is that the citizens will keep away from the other people outside their community. For example, when there is a visitor comes to their area, the local people usually prevent to make an interaction because visitors may be able to bring different culture from other regions, so the genuine culture in the small community decreases gradually. Consequently, it is hard for the people to update their information such as technology communication, medicine when it comes to living in the countryside.

To sum up, although there is a drawback of living in small community, it is evident that people are closer one another by having a good cooperation and kinship relationship in the same area.