Writing Feedback / Although we cannot emit automobiles from our world, they work destructive for our quality of life [4]

Hello dear, this is my TOEFL essay, please help me to improve my writing.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
The automobile is the destroying our quality of life
I am of the personal opinion that one should the automobile is the destroying our quality of life, and such an opinion is based on the reasons elaborated below.

I believe that exhaust gases, which come from the cars pipe system automobiles cause of air pollution, which I suppose can be best illustrated by gases coming out of the cars contain of a lot of dangerous gases such as carbon monoxide, nitrogen oxide, they were threatening humans and fauna (animals). Moreover, I think I make a bit lazy in my life by automobiles, as in the case of when I was going shopping to close my house, do not walk on foot. I habit to go anywhere by automobile even near the place, so It is very bad for health and maybe I was suffering from heart disease in old age. Another point worth considering is the fact that one of the dangerous effect of cars, numerous accident which happened in every year, for instance researches show that yearly, in my country the number of deaths by automobile accidents are more than diseases, this deal is odd 70 percent. I would also like to point out that although automobiles cause of saver time, but in large city traffic congestion have more negative impacts, for example, wasting time for passengers; delays, which result in late arrival for employment and education, resulting in lost business and block traffic can affect emergency vehicles where, they are urgently need.

In order to wrap up I would like to reiterate that I think the automobile is the destroying our quality of life should agree with the statement, despite of we cannot emit automobiles in my life.

Writing Feedback / All high school students should be required to have three years of studying a foreign language. [NEW]

Here is my TOEFL essay, please comment and grade it. And if possible, please leave comments on my grammar and word using because I think they are very important to have a perfect essay. I am glad to read any words about your opinion and check my grammar

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
All high school students should be required to have three years of studying a foreign language.
I am of the personal opinion is based that one should all high school students should be required to have three years of studying a foreign language, and such an opinion is based on the reasons elaborated below.

I believe that a student for continuing education in other countries needs a foreign language, which I suppose can be best illustrated by a student with continuous studying in high school could be improve his foreign language such as English. Moreover, I think one has a second language can be for communications exchange with the student in thorough of the world, as in the case of when a student have at this course in high school he could send mail for others and solved his problem in his course. Another point worth considering is the fact that students that dominant a foreign language have a better opportunity into access suitable work, for instance, in my country the bilingual people who were easy to find an occupation which was related to his education. Next, people who learns a new language could be business with less wrong with foreign people and he gets their experiments. I would also like to point out that a high student achieves society skill in a foreign language class, for example, he was in contact with some people in his class and debated on all of field. Finally, I would like to say that I think learning a new language is a necessity for all students, especially high school students because they could to read database on the internet.

In order to wrap up I would like to reiterate that I think all high school students should be required to have three years of studying a foreign language should be a better way for their scientific life.

Writing Feedback / Contributions of scientists and engineers are more important than the contributions of artists..... [2]

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Here is my TOEFL essay, please comment and grade it. And if possible, please leave comments on my grammar and word using because I think they are very important to have a perfect essay. I am glad to read any words about your opinion. Thank you in advance

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In any society, the contributions of scientists and engineers are more important than the contributions of artists and writers.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

I am of the personal opinion that one should the contributions of scientists and engineers are more important than the contributions of artists and writers, it does not mean the contributions of artists and writers are less important and such an opinion is based on the reasons elaborated below.

I believe that the scientists and engineers are advanced countries are based on spread the science and knowledge, which I suppose can be best illustrated by in today's world the criterion to choose advance countries are the contribution of scientists and engineers that showed In 2014, the ten largest advanced economies the criteria for evaluating the degree of economic were the United States, Japan, Germany, France, the United Kingdom, Italy, Canada, Australia, South Korea and Spain. The reason of advancement these countries are the contribution of scientists and engineers in economic fields. Moreover, I think the contribution of scientists and engineers are always the high esteem (valid) in their countries, as in the case when I was studying the history of countries numerous of scientists and engineers have a good mental in my mind. Another point worth considering is the fact that powerful society is related to the contribution of scientists and engineers, for instance the countries that have a high contact between scientists and engineers have successful in the military such as the united states, Russia and china. Finally, I would like to say that I think the societies of rich to contain the contribution of scientists and engineers, like I could mention China, in this country got 60 percent of revenue by business which they were the result of contribution of scientists and engineers.

In order to wrap up I would like to reiterate that I think in any society, the contributions of scientists and engineers are more important than the contributions of artists and writers should be agree with the statement.

Writing Feedback / We should pay attention to the opinions of famous people. [4]

Here is my TOEFL essay, please comment and grade it. And if possible, please leave comments on my grammar and word using because I think they are very important to have a perfect essay. I am glad to read any words about your opinion. Thank you in advance

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
We should pay attention to the opinions of famous people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

I am of the personal opinion that people should pay attention to the opinions of famous people, and such an opinion is based on the reasons elaborated below.

I believe that the statement of famous people is valuable because they are based on a lot of study in various fields, which I suppose can be best illustrated by some actors and actress were playing in different roles in movies which they could to guided me for watch the best movie in cinema; another example is, they were considered on pattern myself. Moreover, I think the opinions of famous people full of the great experience; therefore, I could cite to them, as in the case of when famous people saw a lot of different races of people in many countries, so the statements about the life of people were acceptable for the ones. Another point worth considering is the fact that famous people are successful in their lifetime thus maybe the opinions of famous people who are benefits than of common people, for instance they were known in between people and respectable in over of world. I would also like to point out that famous people have good at convincing the ones which people confided to them what were famous people to the ideas, for example, At this moment in time I hear a lot of advises and ways to improve my life, but I could not do all of them according to the background of people that they were famous people or scientists I could choose their ideas or opinions next personally I counsel to famous people that know in the industry and I started business work.

In order to wrap up I would like to reiterate that I think should pay attention to the opinions of famous people should be prefer their opinion because famous people are popular.

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Writing Feedback / A student must like a teacher in order to learn from the teacher. [4]

I am going to ready for the TOEFL exam.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
A student must like a teacher in order to learn from the teacher.

I am of the personal opinion that one should a student must like a teacher in order to learn from the teacher, and such an opinion is based on the reasons elaborated below.

I believe that a student in good relationship with his teacher has the high motivated to learn, which I suppose can be best illustrated by when a student loved his teacher, he called to question from his teacher and in addition, especially primary school, the students who are the first experience of presence in school they have the good memorize from their teacher. Moreover, I think the impression of the teacher has a positive role to increase performance a student, as in the case of I have a math teacher in the high school that he was very kind and friendly with me and she effect to process of learning for me and I could get a top score in the class. Another point worth considering is the fact that a teacher can be to provide a calm environment for students, for instance, in a pacific situation a student has the deep relation to their teacher that could be solved a lot of problems about their course. I would also like to point out that a student who is to like his teacher can be more regular than other students that do not like their teacher, for example, when I was going to school I like my teacher this is because, I did not absent in his class. Finally, I would like to say that I think the kind teacher is as a friend for their student, like a student could be to say his the problems to his teacher that happened in his the life of private also this student did not concern about anything the busy his mind and he could more succeed in school.

In order to wrap up I would like to reiterate that I think a student must like a teacher in order to learn from the teacher should be undeniable and students that feel relax to their teacher have a better learning.

Writing Feedback / Living for today is better than living for tomorrow [3]

I am ready to TOEFL examination, I need you help me.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Living for today is better than living for tomorrow.

The maxim "living for today is better than living for tomorrow" I believe, has an inherent truth in itself, in as such that it refers to as a means living today, stop living in the past and do not worry about tomorrow because I cannot change them. I live for today that thing has happening in these days not for the future; which I consider as being universal in scape.

Personally, I believe that such a maxim can be applied in situations in which opposite attitude to have in times of stress for the future. This I suppose can be best illustrated by I do not take the chance to alive forever that I could love other, helped to someone and do things today in case there is no tomorrow. Another point worth mentioning is I live with people that I very like them, as in the case of maybe I or they do not lives for a long time; in addition, I missed the chance for live tougher by peace and calm and this regrettable me. What's more, I think In hope to be happy about something in the future, instead of happy for now, I am missing out, like when I often want more time, more money for that new acquire, a better job, better health and the list may be long time. Finally, I would like to wrap up by saying that this maxim is applicable in situations where I do not worry about things that do not have information, for example, I am only sure of today and do not back on past I just look at it without change.

It is based on the above mentioned reasons that I would like to reiterate that I believe the maxim living for today is better than living for tomorrow to be universally true.

Writing Feedback / Inherent Truth - something that you do is more important than what you say to people [NEW]

Do u agree or disagree with the following statement?
Actions speak louder than words.

The maxim actions speak louder than words, I believe has an inherent truth in itself, in as such that it refers to something that you do is more important than what you say to people which I consider as being universal in scape.

Personally, I believe that such a maxim can be applied in situations in which one person has the freedom to say whatever, so it is not going to believe all of own words. This I suppose can be best illustrated by when someone is going to preside or want choice by people, he says device for getting the votes of the people; whereas he does not act all of his words. Another point worth mentioning is that my speaking is much different from my action in real world, as in the case of I imagine doing anything; hence, I do not have enough tools and assistance for this situation. What's more, I think words do not have an effect on the people than actions they do, like when I promise to my friend maybe she did not confide in me; however, I was shown with act she could see my goodwill, because in this world people heard a lot of speak and say about the others and the government that they did not act their promise. Finally, I would like to wrap up by saying that this maxim is applicable in situations where actions are method to convince people that for accept owner says in many fields such as politic, economic, sport, culture and daily life.

It is based on the above mentioned reasons that I would like to reiterate that I believe the maxim actions speak louder than words to be universally true.

Writing Feedback / Grades help motivate or discourage students to learn? [3]

Some students feel that grades help motivate student to learn. Others feel that grades can discourage students from learning.
I am of the personal opinion that grades help motivate students to learn has far better benefits than learn students without grades, and such an opinion is based on the reasons elaborated on below.

Basically, I believe grades help students in progress, which I suppose can be best illustrated by the student could be right competitive together, it has helped them for higher ability to learn. Another point to consider is, some students have shameful and may be spreading themselves from others. This I suppose can be exemplified by when they were place in the low level from top students then they could not adapt to their friends. Whats more, it has been said that professors could be easily teach them based on their ability, and I cannot but agree with such a statement, a typical instance being all of students do not have same level, so students with top levels was faster learn than low levels students with this information the teachers might be better teach to them.

However, I can also see the merits of use of the grade for students. Frist the of all I think divide students to different group could be best way for correct education to them, as in the case of improve learning, high self-confidence and high efficiency were result this method. In addition, I believe grades might be gives students a sense of accomplishment, for instance they were had more try and more motivate for get upper level or stay in their level.

To sum up many argument, and based on the reasons elaborated, above I would like to reiterate that I believe some students feel that grades help motivate for learning to have for better advantages than education without given grades.

Writing Feedback / A friend in need is a friend indeed. [3]

The maxim a friend in need is a friend indeed, I believe has an inherent truth in itself, in as such that it refers to this means that a friend who helps you when you really need help, he is a true friend which I consider as being universal in scape.

Personally, I believe that such a maxim can be applied in situations in which one friend who can share the happy moment with together. This I suppose can be best illustrated by when I was worry about my problems in life and I completely disappointed my friend help me that named by hero. Another point worth mentioning is a real friend should be trust, as in the case of I did not like enter to relationship that with started by lay, because the person who lied invaluable for friendship. Whatsmore, I think a good friend that I believe them and feel safe to share information, like when became friend each other, did not speak badly behind me back. Finally, I would like to wrap up by saying that this maxim is applicable in situations where a true friend should be understands me and the mirror of me, for example when I fight and disgruntle with others she made me calm and advised me for right folk, in consequently, she told me which speech was false.

It is based on the above mentioned reasons that I would like to reiterate that I believe that the maxim a friend in need is a friend indeed to be universally true, because characterization real friend are honesty, dedication, integrity and in my idea, they are attribute of the perfect friend for me.