Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The number of people detained between 1990 and 1991 [2]

The number of people detained between 1990 and 1991 is revealed in the pie charts, and the rate of motive for most recent detain is displayed in the bar chart. Both were categorised by males and females, and were measured in percent. It is noticeable that the percentage of the males detained was more than the females, and public drinking was motive the highest.

A nearer look at the pie charts presents that the level of the males detained was over three times than the females. The difference between the percentage of the males which was detained and not was by 36%. Next, 83% was the imbalance between the level of females was captured and not.

Public drinking was motive the highest, and both of categories were over of 30% in this motive. Drink driving, breach of order, theft, and other reason were motives which the percentage of the males detained was more than the females. After that, other three clusters were motives which the percentages of the females captured was more than the males.

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  The number of people detained between 1990 and 1991
  

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The percentage of income sources and outlays by a USA charity in a year [3]

A ratio of the percentage of income sources and outlays by a USA charity in a year is displayed in pie charts. As it is noticeable, the amount of income sources and outlays was nearly balanced. What stands out from pie charts presents that the proportion of income sources was higher than expenditures in the last accumulation.

A nearer observation at the pie chart highlights that the percentage of contributed food gave proportion of 86% of all income in one year. The proportion of the financial support of community was the second highest which gave contribution of 10.4% of all charity's income. In addition, the other four sectors of income sources added percentage of 3% in the same year.

Turning to the outlays, the percentage of the program services was spending the highest of 95.8% of all outlays. The fundraising followed at the second biggest which spent to 2.6%. Although the percentage of management and general needed few budgets, it also spent to 1.6%.

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  The percentage of income sources and outlays
  

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The presence of senior high school [NEW]

The table describes a presence of senior high school in a country between 2000 and 2009. Overall, it is immediately apparent that the presence of community schools experienced a significant growth while the presence of other three variance schools decreased.

Turning first to community schools, there was a gradual increase between 2000 and 2009. In 2000, the attendance of community school was 12% of total of all school presence. Surprisingly, the community school rose dramatically almost 3 times in 2005 than the presence in 2000. After that, it experienced again a gradual rise of 58% in 2009.

In stark contrast, the percentage of presence in voluntary-controlled schools was 52% and the highest in four variance schools in 2000. Next, in 2005 and 2009, the presence of voluntary-controlled dropped to 38% and 20% respectively. Following that, specialist and grammar school also witnessed a decrease from 2000 to 2009. In the last period (2009), the presence of both was less than 13%.

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  The presence of senior high school
  

Writing Feedback / The silkworm has the four phases during change which lasts minimal 57 days before became the moth. [3]

The diagram reveals the life cycle of silkworm before became the moth. The silkworm has the four phases and need for minimal 57 days before became the moth. The larva phase is the longest process in the life cycle of silkworm.

First phase, the silkworm will produce eggs on leaf and leave its eggs. Those eggs will be adhered on the leaf for ten days before the second phase. Next, in the second phase, eggs transform to be silkworm larva. Larva consume mulberry leaf and also live there. That phase the longest process require time for minimal 4 weeks and maximal 6 weeks.

After that process, larva enter the next phase. Larva will construct silk thread wrapped up themselves. Constructing of silk thread occur during 3-8 days. While the procedure is finish, larva move into the cocoon stage. In the fourth stage, larva hibernate for 16 days. Having completed it, the cocoon will be opened smoothly, and the moth out of the cocoon.

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  The life cycle of silkworm
  

Writing Feedback / Task 2: Learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films [2]

Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films about it than by actually visiting it.
How true is this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that you cannot learn by watching programmes and films about it?

Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own experience.
Some people believe that they get more knowledge about another country by following television shows and films about it than by directly vacationing it. However, there has situations which people cannot sense except those do not visit directly such as unique traditionalism in another country.

Those who support watching television shows and film about another country believe that these activities will get more knowledge about it and do not need plenty of budgets and time. A wide range of television stations displayed program which the audience were guided to surround a country. For example, the television station has visiting programs which its reporter will surround a country and also guide audience to learn about historic places, special food, traditional dance, and etc. In addition, people also get information about another country by films such as people who want to add knowledge about Japan can buy film DVD which illustrate Japanese character and its buildings.

However, I believe that people cannot get all information by watching television shows and films about the country because there has a situation which is not known except those felt directly. To illustrate, person who wants to investigate about Germany cannot know how to Germany's social atmosphere, people character, and unique traditionalism except it visit there because its senses must feel directly. People will get different experience and surprised sensation although they must take out more budgets.

In conclusion, although person can get more knowledge about another country and do not need a great deal of budgets by following television shows and films, there has a situation which people cannot sense except those do not visit directly. If person likes and want to get more information about another country, it should plan to visit there.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The blueprint of Woodwards University from 1995 to 2015 [NEW]

The map describes changes which occurred in the blueprint of Woodwards University from 1995 to 2015. The most drastically change is a uniting of programme sectors to become one department.

The first glance, there was several major changes to education buildings in the campus. Now, programme buildings as: physics, chemistry, and biology building, which are unified into the same department in the north. That departments are science laboratories and a lecturer theatre. In addition to that, a library was constructed with addition space to a internet technology centre (IT centre), in front of the science laboratories.

On the other side, support facilities also altered in the university. One of two car parks was reformed to be shuttle bus terminal opposite the library and IT centre. In addition, an admin building was displaced from southeast to east side. Road which was usually used to enter in the campus by car was divested and exchanged to be footpaths.

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  Woodwards University
  

Writing Feedback / Television station always have way to entertain its audience (IELTS Task 2) [2]

Televised talent shows have become popular in many societies today.
Are these shows a good method of finding talented people, or are they just entertainment?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Television station always have way to entertain its audience. Based on report, a program of finding aptitude in the television has gotten popularity in a large number of citizens today, but there has been two contradictive opinions which have argued that it is an excellent step to find aptitude people or has just entertained audiences. This writing will argue two opinions which are not harmonious.

Proponents who holds a negative opinion to program of finding talent think that this program is exhibited by a television producer to just entertain citizen because audiences need differently show. For example, a program of talent scout has rating higher than other programs on first year shows, but its rating decline significantly after citizens feel boring. The producer sometimes did not continue the show because it did not give plenty of benefits.

However, I tend to stand at an opinion which declare that the programs of finding aptitude are a brilliant way to give chance people which want to show their talent. Actually, a wide range of people have spectacular talent, but they do not know way and have a considerable amount of budgets to explore their natural ability. To illustrate, a boy who originated of a poor family could become a well-known singer and have a nice job after join on the program of talent scout. Citizens will be inspired by talented people on that program because those think that the success always has ways

All in all, it is clear that the program of talent scout on the television entertain citizen and also become a brilliant method to finding talented people. The show producer should consider penetrations to catch many the talented people and improvise so that it is more attractive.

Writing Feedback / Email and messaging (modern forms of communication) - IELTS TASK 2 [2]

Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives.

To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Development of sophisticated technology sometimes causes human activities to be easier. Electronic message and other messaging are advanced figure of communication which diminished the people's measure of time to gather with their friends. I agree if many people argument that this had a detrimental effect on their social relationship, but I also tend to disagree because it had a considerable amount of benefits such as a worker will be faster to report its result of working to company.

The main dire impact of use e-mail and other various messaging has been less people's time to gather with their friends. The fact, those are more enjoyable to send email or other messaging than meet up together in one place if they want to discuss or share. A case in point, a large number of young adult were more impressive to talk over at Facebook group which was one of social messaging application than join in discussion table. Moreover, their conversation sometimes out of subject of discussion because they are tempted by Facebook features. If people just communicate via email and other messaging, their social relationship will be more distant.

However, I believe that the email and other messaging will give plenty of benefits than dire impact. Firstly, it will help performance of worker in a company because the worker will be effortless to coordinate matter to other worker or the company. For example, a worker who having a job at other city can report its result of working soon to the company. On the other hand, email is tool which can be used to catch information at the cyber world because person must have email to register an account. To illustrate, a student want to collect reference about its school task so that the student must has an email to register at online library. As a result, a wide range of people can finish lighter their several activities.

In conclusion, it is a clear that e-mail and other messaging have dire effect to people but it also has benefits. Society must has an awareness to restrict use email to useless activity.