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Posts by Faridadwi18
Name: Farida Dwi Rokhmah
Joined: Aug 10, 2016
Last Post: Oct 27, 2016
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From: Indonesia
School: Brawijaya University

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Faridadwi18   
Aug 12, 2016
Writing Feedback / TED Talks: 10 ways to have a better conversation [4]

Hi Kobayakawa,
In this world, every conversation has potential to be developed into an argument --> do not forget to put an article

showed that we are not listening to each other.

Most teenagers seldom to talk face to face todayToday, most of the teenagers rarely talk face to face.
Your acquaintance's experience is totally different with yours I don't get what do you want to explain in this sentence.

Hope it will help you. thank you.
Faridadwi18   
Aug 12, 2016
Writing Feedback / Pandas Get to Know Their Wild Side [8]

Hi riandi,

The government says that there are several species ...
in 2003, government said that the number of species of Panda in China is 1864.
The workings of this way is to move the giant panda from the zoo ...

Hope it will help. thank you
Faridadwi18   
Aug 11, 2016
Writing Feedback / The Jobs Which Machine Can Do And The One That Can Not In The Future [2]

From a research at Oxford University studied on future work in 2013, the result was one in every two jobs had a high risk made order by a machine. Machine is an artificial tools which was invented by human. In 1990, machine only could do a simple task such as assessed data or shorted mail based on hand writing and character from the zip code then in 2012 computer could do a far more complex data and built algorithm. In 2015, machine could take an image of eyes then gave diagnose to predict the disease like diabetic retinopathy and they could diagnose it with only few minutes.

Machine can handle thing that they did many times before. Human can solve sudden situation. People can handle a situation that they never face before and machine can not compete with human in this matter. In the future machine will be growing smarter and smarter, they may also diagnose many diseases but they will not make a progress to tackle the new situation. Human will create marketing campaign which can make them get many appreciation from others also they will develop business strategy which nobody else do. To achieve that, people need to dare the challenge everyday and there is no giving in. If people do not face it, they will stuck in one place and did not evolve like machine.

Link ted.com/talks/anthony_goldbloom_the_jobs_we_ll_lose_to_machines_and_the_ones_we_won_t#t-247824
Faridadwi18   
Aug 11, 2016
Writing Feedback / A smarter, more precise way to think about public health [4]

Hi Iforsa,
You make a good essay,

Sue had painful experience which lead her carrier career to contrive precision public health
Another studied study study here as a noun so you do not need to change it to studied that he did over the last 5 years ...

Hope it will help you. Thanks
Faridadwi18   
Aug 11, 2016
Writing Feedback / Orangutan learns to mimic human conversation for the first time [5]

Hello Eka,

Adriano Lameria, from the University of Durham, UK and his team found that ..... Adriano Lameria and his team from University of Durham, United Kingdom, found that .....

The procedure of that experiment are by conducted a game is by conducting game .... After by you have to use V ing
Spelling problems :
pupulationspopulations
reaserchers researchers

Hope it will help you.
Faridadwi18   
Aug 11, 2016
Writing Feedback / Between Apathy and Risk About Zika in Florida [2]

Many people in Florida are infected by Zika virus and 22 people get it from local bites. Actually, people should feel worry about the risk but most of them feel no need to be worried about it. Only 43 per cent of people feel afraid about the situation also afraid if it infect them. Person who feels worries is the Governor of florida Rick Scott. He thinks that this is a serious problem which they can not solve by themselves so they asking for help to CDC(Centers of Disease Control and Prevention) and FEMA (Federal Emergency Management Agency).

There are 380 cases in Florida and 60 people are pregnant women. For the normal people Zika will not give severe effect, only mild risk like have a flu and get a rash symptoms. But for pregnant women it can cause severe birth defect microcephaly ( a condition where the baby has smaller size of the head ) which also impact society. Government and CDC hope that people can battle together with them to solve this problem. People need to be aware of a topic which not only applies to them directly but also problem which relates to others.

Link : time/4447110/zika-virus-florida-rick-scott/?xid=homepage
Faridadwi18   
Aug 11, 2016
Writing Feedback / TED Summary, the skill of self confidence from Dr. Ivan Joseph [3]

Hi Ramzi,

What is the important importance of confidence ?
... of confidence on each person, they are not going to will not get anything or we can ...
... Self confidence is theat the first time you use an article, you should use a/an then in the next sentence you can usethe ability to believe in yourself in ...

Other way ways that is suggested by the speaker ...
Faridadwi18   
Aug 10, 2016
Writing Feedback / Do you ever heard about Superfood? [5]

Have a health body is not an easy thing. There are many products which promise to get healthy body without do exercise or consume healthy food namely "superfood". Many people believe with consume superfood can make their body healthier and they think that although they have poor diet and low activities they still get healthy body.

In the Oxford Dictionary superfood means that "a nutrient-rich food considered to be especially beneficial for health and well-being". In the contrary, according to the expert from Canberra University Duane Mellor said that "superfood are marketing gimmicks". Marketing has a big influence to ensure the customer to use their products.They use famous celebrities which already has a slim and healthy body as their brand ambassador. But actually it is not enough to only consume superfood to meet our needs without enough intake from other foods. There are many foods which contains of complex nutrition and we can not change them with a tablet or a capsule which only made from the extract of the food. Superfood can not make people to get healthier body, so it is better to stop consume it.

Here is the links of the article newscientist.com/article/mg23130851-800-superfood-doesnt-mean-anything-so-lets-stop-using-it/
Faridadwi18   
Aug 10, 2016
Writing Feedback / Why photo should be more beautiful? [2]

Your essay is good, but i have some suggestion which you can use :

- In the first time --> At the first time
- she had created --> she created
- that make it yours --> to make it yours
- what you believe people are going to like = it has 2 verb with only 1 subject --> what you believe or what people like

Hope you also give feedback to my essay, thanks.
Faridadwi18   
Aug 10, 2016
Writing Feedback / New Invention Which Gives Hope to Pancreatic Cancer Patient [2]

In the last 40 years there are many researches to help cancer patient especially pancreas to help them survive but the percentage still same, only 3 % of the survivor. The treatment which doctors can help are understand the limitation of their patient and try to find a new solution. Pancreas is located in the middle of our belly and surrounded by many vital organ and the main function is to produce insulin.

The only treatment to extent their live is by doing chaemotherapy. Unfortunately pancreas has very few blood vessel. Because the small number of blood vessel,other organs are toxicated and the drugs can not reach to the organ maximally so only few of them may reach to tumor. New invention comes from a team in MIT(Massachusetts Institute of Technology), they make a small tool wish has circle shape with transparant colour that doctor can implan from the rectum to deliver the drugs to tumor and also controlling metastases. The tool has 12 times more powerful effect to reduce the toxic effect.

To conclude, despite the fact that pancreatic cancer is one of the most deadliest cancer in the world, researchers still could do other researches which may help them in the future to cure the disease or extent the life of the patient.

Links: ted.com/talks/laura_indolfi_good_news_in_the_fight_against_pancreatic_cancer?language=en#t-205749

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