Writing Feedback / The line chart informs the quantity of tourists from three different museums in London monthly [3]

Question :
The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart informs the quantity of tourists from three different museums in London monthly, during a period from July to September in 2013. Overall, it can be seen that British Museum was the highest level of visitors during a four month, while the Natural History Museum saw the lowest figure of tourists visited.

To begin with, the British Museum started at 600 visitors in June. However the level had increased slightly by July and September (around 750 and 700 visitors respectively). The figure saw a sparse decrease in August, and finished at just under 700 tourists.

A part from previous comparison, the Natural History Museum stood at 410 tourists, the proportion had decreased noticeably in August (above 400), while the Science Museum stood at 55 tourists, the figure had increased significantly, either the Natural History and Science Museum, both of them saw similar pattern, and by the end of period the figure reached 450 visitors.

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Writing Feedback / e-Commerce of Retail Sectors in Canada - IELTS Task 1 [2]

Question :
The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

The pie charts illustrate the comparison of four different e-commerce retail sectors in Canada, during a 5 year period time from 2005 to 2010. Overall, it is noticeable while meal and drink and video games saw upward trend, others experienced a downward trend.

To begin with, in 2005 the highest proportion was electronics and tools, while diet and drink saw the lowest percentage. However, in 2010 food and beverage had decreased 5% in different year , it was 35% (2005) to 30% (2010). While, households was turned out dramatically from 25% in 2005 and became 15% during a 5 year.

In the other side, food and beverage had increased significantly from 22% (2005) to 32% in 2010. It was followed by video games, in 2005 it was 18% and rised to 23% in 2010. That video game sectors saw a less dramatically change, it just decreased one out of twenty.

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Writing Feedback / Science Qualification in Malaysia and Singapore - IELTS Task 1 [3]

Question :
The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries.

The bar graph informs the qualifications of people who hold a science qualification in Malaysia and Singapore. Overall, it is noticeable that a significantly low proportion of people hold science qualifications, that is Master's and Bachelor's degree in science from universities level studies. The highest percentage in both countries was the people who do not have specialization in science.

A closer looks to the data reveals that in Malaysia, people who does not have qualification in science was the highest percentage around 60 %, while scholars in Master's degree saw the lowest proportion around 3%. Bachelor's degree is the second lowest (10%), and people who leaving school exams in the second highest (35%).

A part from previous comparison, in Singapore 60% people who does not involved in science. People from universities stage in Singapore, that is Master's and Bachelor's degree have low percentage of science qualification, approximately 3% for Master's degree and Bachelor's degree obtained 20%.

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Writing Feedback / The Proportion of Population Aged 65 and over in the United Kingdom - IELTS Task 1 [2]

Question :
The chart below gives information about the UK's ageing population in 1985 and makes predictions for 2035

The bar chart compares the proportion of population aged more than 65 years old in the United Kingdom in 1985 and 2035. Overall, it can be seen that the highest number was in Wales and the smallest was in Northern Ireland. In any case, the percentage in Wales is going to the top in 2035, and Northern Ireland still the lowest.

To begin with in 1985, Wales saw the highest percentage approximately 16%, while England was in the second highest (15%). Interestingly, Scotland and Northern Ireland saw the lowest proportion (14% and 13% respectively).

A part from previous comparison, in 2035 Wales will reach 26%, and still settled in the top. While Scotland is predicted 25%, England and Northern Ireland have similar percentage about 23%. Totally, in the United Kingdom, the number of population over than 65 years old in 1985 was 15%, and will increase roughly 35% in 2035.

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Writing Feedback / Education and lifestyle. Causes and Effects of Overweight Children - IELTS Task 2 [2]

Obesity has become a major problem in the last ten years. Childhood obesity in western has increased there about 20%. This due to two factors, there are education and lifestyle. As we known that overweight has several negative effects for human kind.

There are two main causes that led to obesity. Education is the first cause, people who have insight about food contents, like protein, fat, carbohydrate, calcium, and vitamin. They will avoid food that contains high-fat and has a large amount of calories, such as pizza, burgers, soft-drink, and another food from fast-food restaurants. In reverse, for those who does not have knowledge about good nutrition, they lack of health-awareness, because they do not know the impacts of their body and they do not care about themselves. They just follow their desire to eat, without think wisely. Lifestyle is a second main cause of overweight. These days, a large number of restaurants and markets are selling high-fat food. Currently, many people who consumes food because it follows trend.

Obesity has negative impacts on the individual and country. The most serious problem, that has health risks. Overweight can lead to many diseases, instance heart disease, diabetes, cancer, and hypertension. Furthermore, obesity is also damaging the psychological condition of sufferers. People who suffer overweight it is difficult to move. It can lead to depression, because they can not do their activities like others. The country is also influenced, because unhealthy citizens are less productive.

To sum up, it is clearly that being overweight it caused by lack of education and also lifestyle. Obese children have unsavoury impacts on their health, such as heart disease and hypertension. I would suggest, people should be aware of their health, and the nutrition that they consumes. They also have to avoid unhealthy food, like junk food that contains high-fat. Additionally, the government have to dedicate their citizens education about healthy food and how to maintain healthy body.