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Posts by naelendra
Name: muhammad naelendra
Joined: Oct 8, 2016
Last Post: Oct 31, 2016
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From: Indonesia
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naelendra   
Oct 31, 2016
Writing Feedback / An appropriate colour can result in comfort and motivation, therefore capacity for work and health [2]

Hi sari I has opinion on the content of your writing
when decorating place ( places) such as office and hospitals
Since the invention of modern technique to produce chemical ( a chemical or the chemical )colour of purple, most patients' room in the hospitals have ( has ) been designed in purple schemes.

In the earlier time of 1990s ( the 1990s), a chemistry study on (...) that many patients in purple-designed ( the purple-designed or a purple-designed)room left (...) faster than those lied ( lived) out in other coloured rooms.

... getting well in shorter ( the shorter ) time than ...
... to decorate their home or work place ( workplace) with many red ornaments...
... has psychological effects on feeling ( the feeling) of most people,

Keep Writing and be IELTS Warrior
naelendra   
Oct 31, 2016
Writing Feedback / Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. [2]

Publics more fascinating if they watching risky Sport . partly public gave opinion to band extreme sport because extreme sport have high risk .i disagree to belt risk sport.

Several community thing sky diving and skiing as interesting sport. they like challenge sport and they like risk sport. Sky diving is Famous sport and it make many people want try this sport. For the beginner they are many requirements that you must do. International organization Skydiving have many regulations and also procedure before athletes started and one of them is safety equipment. To start following the sport athletes must go through several training and preparation like another sport for the instance before you exercise you must warm pool so that nothing undesirable as an example of their muscle cramps. Sky Diving and skiing need equipment and also technology because this sport very risk.

However, I disagree With belt this sport , people have opinion that's sport have risk but if you run sport in accordance with the procedure, they can minimize fail. Sport if done according to the direction. Government can't prohibit this sport because they can decrease interest and achievement athletes. State they can monitor this sport with doing more attention.

In conclusion, it is clear to me government must give more attention and supervisor to make sure this sport run according procedure and regulation. each community has an opinion to determine what kind sport must prohibit and they sport type extreme.
naelendra   
Oct 16, 2016
Writing Feedback / The UK'S Ageing Population In 1985 and Prediction for 2035 [2]

The Bar chart shows the proportion of ageing population In UK in 1985 and cause forecast for 2035. Overall it can be seen despite some disparity, over the period as a whole the level of population by ageing in Great Britannia community in 1985 and prognosis in 2035.

Information from bar chart in Wales 1985 completely occupier's nearly grasped 16% and in two other states England and UK proportion of Residents influence 15 %. In the same time Populace by ageing in Scotland attaining 13 %. Following this population by ageing in Northern Ireland declined sharply to 11 %.

in 2035 the Bart chart give information Wales entire inhabitant's community almost reached 27 % and fewer than Scotland 25%. furthermore in three states England, Northern Ireland and UK equal total population reached 23 % .Finally the section quantity of ageing population in great Britain proliferation from 19985 while waiting for 2035
naelendra   
Oct 16, 2016
Letters / 'Good connection with others' - Write a letter of application to the tourism office [9]

hello I'll give you a little idea
I saw your advertisment (advertisement ) in local newspaper.
... Have a freetime ( free time) at the end of ...
... and have alot ( a lot ) of information about ...
I know some languages such persian,spanish ( Persian, Spanish),...
I have quite experince ( experience) about this kind of work...
naelendra   
Oct 16, 2016
Writing Feedback / Computers can help people save much time and money, but they are not flexible [3]

hello I'll give you a little idea

Postman are ( Postman is or Postmen are )almost nonexistent at present.
Nowaday (nowadays), people prefer sending an ...
... strong development, the taxi coordinator, (If you have placed the subject of your sentence directly next to the verb, it is incorrect to use a comma to separate the subject and verb) will become gradually "extinct".

... the bank machine can not ( cannot) help you.
naelendra   
Oct 16, 2016
Writing Feedback / A difference between tourism now and in the past. [4]

Halo Hogna i will give you my opinion

... local people and see real lanscape ( landscape)

... and they do not have many experience ( Many experiences or much experience) about their adventure.
naelendra   
Oct 16, 2016
Writing Feedback / People's reasons for using the car in city [4]

The Tabel Give Information about percentation of population using car in city by the time. on the strength of table people Using car devided into five part.and the pie chart present type car using citizen to use most of the time.Overall people on the city tend to use private vehicles but there is also using public transportation.

Begin on the pie chart first, most citizen prefer to use of private vehicle in this city. Commute to work 45 % prefer use own car. Public transport second popular for some people.while buses and taxis are the main mean for a part of people.

Representation from the table give detailed information concerning citizen used public transport to work as much as 55 %. Other use for Taking children to school and to Business as much 40 % and 45 %. Only 15 % transportation used for shooping and furthermore for leisure activitis.
naelendra   
Oct 16, 2016
Writing Feedback / Changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000 [2]

The given three pie chart information on the spending of a Homeland school in three different years with the 20 years interval starting from 1980. 1990 and 2000. Overall , from the three priod there is difference calculation annual spending , where there is an increase and a decrease in annual expenditures.

Firstly in 1980 quantity annual expenditures in the field higher education have lowest percentage only reach 35 %. Compared another year in 1990 amount higher education 45% and in 2000 total 40%. Meanwhile in the field K-12 Education in 1980 of the total annual expenditures to the tune of 25% and in 1990 with the smaller amount total 20%. And annual expenditures in 2000 only 18 %. Proportion on transportation in 1980 total annual expenditures 16% and decline in 1990 with total 6 %. In 2000 there is an increased with total 22%. Expenditure on health and human resources in 1990 increase with total 20 % before decreasing to 10% by the end of priode in contrast, Similarly, the cost of environmental services saw a rising trend, growing from only 4% to 9% by 2000. while others decreased from 6% to 1% in 2000.
naelendra   
Oct 13, 2016
Writing Feedback / Every country should develop tourism more, as well as enhance management [3]

Hi Yuh would like to give some opinions about your writing

... may cause the lack of accomodations and good services.
In fact, there are many poss itive things that visitors can do.
Overall, every countriescountry should develop ...
... the adverse impacts of tourist behaviou r

Keep Writing
naelendra   
Oct 13, 2016
Writing Feedback / The Public Transportation and The Fundamental Part of Modern City [2]

Hallo Abdel I want to leave a comment about your article

The fact shows that there areis three of the largest ...

... was made by engineer Marc Brunnel ( Brunei) for the pedestrian way.

Keep writing Guys. and learn grammar in depth Ask your Senior.
naelendra   
Oct 10, 2016
Writing Feedback / The negative effect of illegal logging [3]

hallo Monkey D'Saulo I want to give a bit of feedback about your writing

Theunresponsible ( rresponsible) processing paper industry ...
... North forest of Canada and l (Scandinavia)
... is going to disappear due to ilegal(iillegal)logging.
Felling down the trees disappeare ( disappear) the crucial role ...
naelendra   
Oct 10, 2016
Writing Feedback / Bird Migration to Another place - they manage to accurately travel connecting distant locations [2]

relocation is the accustomed weight bunch of animals involving their propagation land and the areas that they inhabit through the break of the year. journey is an admirable example of how nature has responded To the biological essential for variety to progress and sprawling into all potential ecological niches that can afford the situation compulsory for species to strain and elevate juvenile.

The the majority ordinary appearance of bird voyage involves traveling to advanced latitudes to bread for the period of the temperate season and them recurring to minor latitudes to bread during the warm season and then returning to lower latitudes during the non breeding episode

throughout resettlement the majority bird fly for a partial stage each day. probably concerning six to eight hours.
How bird manage to accurately travel connecting distant locations is one portion that has enthralled observers for centuries. current day researchers have attempted to realize this feat. most studies have establish that traveling birds all have some skill to find the technique and an inborn coerce to travel in a exacting route.
naelendra   
Oct 10, 2016
Writing Feedback / Rainforests are a vital natural supply with widespread biodiversity and inimitable. Logging danger. [5]

Enviromental Impact of Logging

Paper product made from plant, material product prepare by logging industry send by shipping to Logging manufacturer send by shipping to customer. Effect from climate change also change ecosystem and many activity form our earth. Consequence of Logging spread out there just the felling ecosystem they are also terrestrial and aquatic.

With forest still protect soil beneath and lives , damages from illegal logging also take erosion . a lot of example consequence from the damages, excessively factor connection with soil damages a considerable part from development facilities. Another damages from logging is aquatic habitats. With removing plant it make much disadvantages. Rainforest also give oxygen to shield from air pollution..forest also retain from damages ecosystem. Several logging corporations also injury huge territory of forest unbiased to facilitate access to one area a practice that releases level additional carbon dioxide.

Rainforests are a vital natural supply with widespread biodiversity and inimitable. Further accountable logging rehearsal would help guarantee that they are endangered for future compeers.
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